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rank  Editors Pick
word count 60907
date submitted 14.03.2012
date updated 31.08.2012
genres: Fiction, Literary Fiction, Thriller...
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Bloodstones

Casimir Greenfield

Death, lust and infidelity on a summer’s day. Lives will change forever in the idyllic Cotswold countryside deep in the heart of the Bloodstones.

 

Summer has arrived in a Cotswold village at the edge of the Severn Plain. Olivia Lowell is an unassuming person in her early fifties preparing for an exhibition of her watercolours in the local church during the village fete. Her newest work is a departure in style, an exorcism of her creative past. Her acute sense of detail coupled with her changing physical state alters her perception of her ordered life and the lives of those around her.

Her husband, Gerald, is involved with a young girl. Olivia suspects nothing at first, but is uneasy about the changes within her and in the changes she notices in Gerald. During the fete, a body is discovered in the woods above the village. With a murder investigation in progress, the village is in turmoil. Gerald is missing, and Olivia's world is turned upside down.

In the days following the murder, Olivia re-evaluates her safe and secure existence and discovers a person within herself of whom she had lost sight.

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In a Cotswold village, Olivia Lowell works on a selection of watercolours while her husband, Gerald, is having an affair with a younger woman. Immediately within this simple premise we have the tension and drama necessary for a strong story. The setting too, is great, and fits with a current trend of setting crime/thriller narratives within quaint and supposedly secure surroundings.

The story is tagged as a thriller/literary fiction, but problematically at present, for the ‘thriller aspect’ there is little sense of anything leading anywhere. Similarly, the ‘literary’ side of the novel isn’t quite polished enough to justify a slow plot. The opening chapters offer very little in indicating any sort of tone that is likely to emerge later in the book. Little bits of plot and story start to spring out, but for a large majority of the first act, the story consists of characters seemingly going about their day to day lives. A slow starting book is not necessarily a problem as long as it is writer well. Unfortunately, quite a lot of the writing here is a little too simplistic. Almost every sentence describing a character and their actions is "She did...", "She is...", "She thought..." etc. This style of writing becomes hard to read in a flowing manner after a few chapters, adding a sense of distance between the reader and the universe the story is occupying.

However, there are moments of good writing that suddenly come up in the text, which indicate the author has the capacity to write very well. For instance, the line “she was trapped in the succulent memories that gave her back something of herself” is very evocative. However, it is paired with more forced writing, that is jarring to read, such as the memories themselves: “Oh, those childhood tastes that came flooding back so easily” etc. The repeated use of “oh” here, feels strained and unrealistic, even given Olivia’s melodramatic character.

This brings me on to the characterisation itself, which needs developing, not only on a personality level, but physically: we are given no real indication behind what the central characters look like, or how old they are – key things to help us engage with them, and care about their narratives. The use of local diction is appreciated, and generally works well, but on its own this trope is not enough to really give a three-dimensional shape to the key figures.

I think the main issue that needs to be addressed before this novel would reach a publishable level, would be to work on the writing style, which is somewhat repetitive at present and has a general lack of momentum. Elegant and polished writing can counter balance a less than riveting plot. That said, you do still need something to up the pace – I found myself switching off as I read this. I needed to be engaged by at least one thing out of the pace, characters, writing style.

This could be a good light thriller, but the tone is a little too ‘warm, hazy afternoon’ at the moment. The author needs to bring in a bit more of the tension suggested by the premise. I’d suggest revealing darker sides to each of the central character – mysterious aspects, deeper than simply "he's having an affair". At the moment, the characters don't feel like real people at all, but if they were given more depth, this could be an enjoyable read.

Jacqueline Malcolm wrote 651 days ago

Hey Casimir - I've read the first chapter and I absolutely LOVE your use of the descriptive prose. You're immediately in Madge's head and beginning to feel all of her varying emotions. Gerald comes across quite harsh in contrast and I'm excited to see how much more we learn about both of them as couple and what got them to this point in their lives where the distance between them seems impenetrable. I love this book, will def back it and put it on my bookshelf - it deserves to be published and snapped up by the masses!!!! Very very enjoyable and captivating read - Jac :)

Michael Johnson wrote 685 days ago

Hello, Casimir.

I’ve just finished reading Bloodstones. I can’t at this moment think of any way in which you could seriously improve it, but let me tell you why I enjoyed it and what there is about it that impresses me.

I read it initially as a genre novel: a long build up to a crime which would then have to be solved. The quality of the prose hits the reader immediately. This is unexpected in crime fiction, but some crime writers have succeeded in forging their own kind of lyrical narrative. Yours is different in that the frequency of metaphor, often complex, the richness of descriptive vocabulary, especially visual, and the tight control of sentence length and structure are as characteristic of poetry as they are of prose. Nevertheless, I continued to read it as a genre novel. But then the images began to recur, to become thematic, and then, finally, they achieved the depth of symbolism. There is the valley, you seem to say, where the ultimate forces are those of the drive to create and the drive to compete and to kill. You see in this a kind of spiritual connectivity in the worlds of humans, animals, even of the inanimate. It’s something that’s very difficult to render into clear, simple prose. Am I anywhere near the mark?
I find your account of Madge’s inner life sensitive and convincing. Of course, I say that as a man, but I did find it a powerful portrait. Gerald is similarly portrayed, the victim of desires he can’t control and racked by guilt. A tragic determinism seems to pervade the book. It certainly applies to your main villain, Vic. Not much that’s good is said about Vic in the story. To a certain extent he is redeemed by his friendship with Bob, but that relationship is relatively subdued. Nevertheless, the character is convincing, because his behaviour is in many ways rooted in reality.
The basic storyline is relatively straightforward, but you use the watch to generate some useful narrative tension in terms of its potency as twofold evidence against Gerald. Your manipulation of events and your description of characters’ feelings, and the well maintained tension of the narrative prose, combine to draw the reader on. The need to heighten emotion in relation to Gerald’s accident and his reconciliation with Madge presents a challenge as a result of this unremitting tension. As it happens, there is, I found, just a slight brush with melodrama at this point. However, melodrama would not necessarily endanger the views that you are putting across.
There is comedy inherent in many of the characters: an incorrigible self-indulgence in Vic, Dawn and Mrs. Mayo; a level of virility in the men that I can only envy; the vicar’s bumbling unworldliness. You don’t greatly develop this aspect of the novel, but for your purposes it isn’t too important.
Minor errors include orthographical mistakes and occasional signs of a struggle with syntax. These are fewer than average.
So, in conclusion, you’ve either done something very unusual with crime fiction, or you’ve found an unusual vehicle for a spiritual philosophy. Perhaps both. I very rarely give full marks but that’s exactly what I’m going to do here, plus some backing, naturally.
I wish you the very best of luck.
Michael.

Scott Toney wrote 757 days ago

{Bloodstones}

Casimir,

Rapt... I read and am rapt in your book. You write with a fantastic descriptive pen and yet manage a great raw style as well. I have never seen this combo in a work before and am glad to have come across it here. You also have a strong premise and Madge's mind is both artistically beautiful and strong. I already dispise Gerald for doing what he's doing. This book has great potential, with it's unique style and strong story, and I look forward to reading more soon. I would love to have this on my home bookshelf someday as well.

Have a great day and thank you for your support of The Ark of Humanity!

- Scott

K J Anderson wrote 708 days ago

Lovely descriptions of people and place coupled with a dexterous interweaving of back story and present-time narrative make this a very enjoyable read. At times I was reminded of Laurie Lee, especially in the way you handle the physical world. Like Lee, you have a painterly as well as a poetic eye for landscape and I found that to be the most captivating aspect of your writing. I've only read the first four chapters and will read on, but you are clearly a talented writer and have obviously been at this game for a while. Your expertise shows. Five stars and, of course, backed.

Oh, one glaring typo in chapter two I think: 'an kiss' should read 'a kiss.'

MarkAM wrote 685 days ago

Hello, Casimir,

I just finished reading your book and I cannot begin to tell you how much I am in awe of your literary and artistic abilities! Your obvious knowledge of the visual arts and your skillful talent of painting with words as though from an artist's pallet is quite inspiring. Colorful descriptions of the countryside, the people, the settings all contribute to this masterful drama. You're right up there with the Classic British Mystery/Detective Drama writers and I feel that you should seriously consider securing an agent who also works with the British film makers of this genre. Thank you so much for a thoroughly engrossing read. - Mark

Scott Toney wrote 565 days ago

Casimir,

Bloodstones is one on my favorite reads on the site! I'm not sure where this reviewer is coming from but I wouldn't stress it too much. I am a HUGE fan of your work! Please let me know when it is available in print, either in paperback or Kindle! I will rush to get it!

Have a wonderful day!

Scott, Eden Legacy

stoatsnest wrote 565 days ago

I find it very discouraging that someone who criticizes someone else's style makes obvious mistakes.What is 'as long as it is writer well'? ,"before this book would reach publishable level','up the pace','one thing out of the pace','counter balance'(counterbalance)?
I would be more inclined to value the words of someone who does not make obvious errors, or at least reads the passage over before publishing it.

Bob D'Costa wrote 574 days ago

Cas, allow me to say that there's something in your style that speaks out from the ordinary... Your language is taut, your rhythmic pace is matured... I had some time to put into chapt. 1...
congrats, you'll go a long way... Keep up the excellent work :)

TaraDevi wrote 587 days ago

Cas,
You write well and it keeps the reader 'snagged'. The only thing I could think to share (bearing in mind that I don't know this genre well) is that I did get a bit lost initially in the first chapter. But after that, it was fine. I felt it jumped a bit too much with not enough linkage... perhaps I am just a lazy reader. I shall have to read it again in order to give you more. Really pleased that you got on the Editor's desk and very well deserved.

Tara

Clive Ashman wrote 588 days ago

'Homicide with Rosie' - Laurie Lee with a painterly eye (for landscape/the stages of life) and murderous intent.
Excellent!

stearn37 wrote 591 days ago

Hi
Well done getting to the editors desk :-)
From
John stearn
Author of Derilium

Sara Stinson wrote 592 days ago

Congratulations!
Sara

Little Gypsy wrote 592 days ago

Congratulations!

Little Gypsy wrote 592 days ago

Congratulations!

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 592 days ago

Hi Casimir,

I very much enjoyed chapters 1-3. (Hope to read some more soon.)

Highly starred and backed with pleasure.

Best, M

Weekend Chimney Sweep or Happy New Year

Sabina Frost wrote 594 days ago

Your language flows beautifully. There is something lyrical about it and you have a great knack of writing vivid descriptions of landscapes.
I have a few pointers, though:
I think this could shape up nicely if you improved the technical aspects. I was a bit confused when you had no mention of who is speaking in your dialogue, and you're over-using the ellipsis (the three dots). The text would improve with regular use of commas and full stops, as well as semi-colons, if you know how and when to use them. It would make the dialogue so much neater.

Other than the technical aspects, you have created a vivid world, with well-developed characters, and it's a good start to build upon.

Sabina

Venenum wrote 594 days ago

Bloodstones is a sensational read. Casimir, your narration of this is lucidly remarkable. From the opening of Olivia and Gerald - your writing is beautifully done and executed faultlessly. It's an easy read with a constant flow, and your characters are well developed.
There is an enchanting pulse in your writing voice. From the start it's graceful and equally powerful. The way you have escalated Gerald’s infidelity into an unmanageable, dirty tryst is stunning and illustrates your talent as a writer. This is greatly worthy of recognition to the editor’s desk and publication.

JC Whitfield, The Misery Jar

Shelby Z. wrote 594 days ago

Finally read part of Bloodstone.
It is totally not my sort of book plot, but you write very well.
Things develop and form.
The pace keep the reader reading through your story.
Nice work.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

P.S. Please take a look at my pirate adventure Driving Winds.

Rob Lawrence wrote 595 days ago

Cas, I have to take my hat off to you; this is a huge improvement upon your first posting, seemingly a lifetime ago.
Given our history, I was slightly sceptical at your message but I'm very glad I took the time to read. You know my views on the holy grail of the ED but I won't let that stand in the way of giving you six stars and the last place on my shelf until you achieve your ambition. Your book now is an excellent piece of writing so it is there on merit: not for any other reason.
Well done.
Rob Lawrence.

Marlon Blood wrote 596 days ago

I read the first chapter, and will certainly be reading the rest when I can... The characters so far are intriguing and the language used, although a little 'rude' in parts, is fantastic. Good job, I hope to see this published :)

Marlon Blood wrote 596 days ago

I read the first chapter, and will certainly be reading the rest when I can... The characters so far are intriguing and the language used, although a little 'rude' in parts, is fantastic. Good job, I hope to see this published :)

Mushiegirl wrote 596 days ago

Goodness what an amazing first couple chapters...the description is simply stunning, and the brief introduction to Olivia and Gerald - questions rose in my mind about them and how they got to be where they are.

This kind of reminds of a show I loved to watch called Midsomer. Have you heard of it?

Mushie

Jessicaw wrote 596 days ago

Hello,
I've read the first 2 1/2 chapters. As everyone else has said, your writing is beautiful and poetic. I really hope you manage to stay in the top 5 (can't see why you wouldn't). I've got a few typos and minor comments, which of course you are more than welcome to ignore! :)

Chapter 1: Paragraph starting ‘She moved on…’ ‘her scented armpits moisten’. I just thought this read a bit strangely, and would have preferred something plainer to do with her getting warm/sweaty.

Do you really need the two exclamations of ‘damn!’? I didn't think they added anything, and they interrupted your lovely writing.

In chapter 1, you write ‘clock radio’, and in chapter 3, it’s ‘clock-radio’.

Chapter 3: Paragraph starting ‘Alf had been…’ Part of the last sentence missing here? Or at least, a full stop is missing.

Paragraph starting ‘Noon. As Gerald approached…’ Just thought you could delete ‘carrier’ for the bags the girl is carrying. Since you’ve just used the word ‘carrying’, it feels like a repetition.

A few lines down: ‘He remained in the car, he remained belted in’. Repetition again, perhaps on purpose? I thought it may read better slightly re-written.

Paragraph starting ‘Olivia looked for the house…’ ‘Again the sun betrayed her and flew In… - no need for a capital I.

Paragraph starting ‘His rummaging…’ the ‘i’ is missing from ‘in the glove compartment’

Jessica

Stark Silvercoin wrote 597 days ago

Bloodstones is a beautifully written story that perfectly captures the tranquil setting and atmosphere of the Cotswold countryside. At first readers are lulled into a beautiful sense of tranquility and peacefulness, which mirrors the attitude of the main character Madge Lowell. But this is a trap carefully woven by author Casimir Greenfield, who hides a murder mystery and thriller just below the surface.

The extremes are striking, made all the more so by the skill of the author. Readers will feel a bit unbalanced by the rapid changes introduced as the story unfolds, which will help them identify with Madge. She’s a finely crafted character cut from a seemingly ordinary cloth, and described so well that readers could recognize her should they see her walking down the street. When she is thrust into more desperate circumstances, readers will not only identify with her, but root for her as well.

Greenfield proves that he’s a master storyteller with Bloodstones. Although the novel doesn’t follow a prescribed style, it should have little trouble gathering a following based on the skill of the author alone. The fact that he chooses to tell a unique and exciting story is just icing on the cake. This will be a popular book once published. Of that there can be little doubt.

John Breeden II
Old Number Seven

Pam B wrote 597 days ago

WOW!

I don't say that much on this site, but in this case it is definitely true. Your descriptions are evocative, your word play a pleasure, characterisation is perfect and the story is intriguing, enticing the reader to discover more.

Having said that, this is not the genre that I normally read (because I'm trying to immerse myself in the genre I'm writing in) so I have only read one chapter. From that very short acquaintance with your work I am amazed that you have not yet been published, find a literary agent, don't wait for Authonomy!

All the best
Pam Balsdon
The King's Blessing

jimcoso wrote 597 days ago

Hi Casimir,

You are an interesting guy with an amazing writing. Very descriptive and interesting characters. I very much hope to see this gracing the shelves of book stores in the future.

Jim Coso, Passing Clouds

hwf1942 wrote 599 days ago

HI Casimir, I've just had the opportunity to enjoy the first two chapters of Bloodstone. Through the interplay of your detailed descriptions and Madge's thoughts and feelings you managed to create a forward momentum and anticipation. As for the imagery, I particularly liked the last sentence of chapter 2: "They slept their fitful sleep, an inch apart, at the beginning and end of the earth's circumference." Well done.
Best of luck,
HW Freedman
http://www.authonomy.com/books/46331/irina-s-eye/

ria727272 wrote 599 days ago

crime, mystery thriller lust ect etc. are subject of this book! im gonna read it for sure dear Casimir..Ciao!

scoz512 wrote 599 days ago

Although literary fiction is not always my first choice in reads, I felt compelled to tell you that after reading the first few chapters, you write beautifully. Very believable and compelling. I will have to come back for more later when I can get a good read in. Will put it on my watchlist for now,

Sara
War of the Wastelands

KMac23 wrote 601 days ago

Casimir, This was very good! I can't believe it took me this long to get to it. On top of having the art theme integrated into your story, your words also felt artistic. I love the descriptions and dialect of the characters, and the story really pulls you in and keeps you reading with interest. Madge was living her life in a routine with her husband and yet begins to see hints of things that seem out of place and there are subtle changes in her thinking as to what might be happening until she puts pieces together. I like how you didn't rush that part, and we get to see the her thoughts unfold in a realistic way. Then we also see George struggling with his guilt and emotions in the same way. The plot took some unexpected turns and was very dramatic. I gave you 6 stars for this, and wish you the best!

Kara
A Gate Called Beautiful

Elarian wrote 601 days ago

I'm putting this on my WL after reading the first chapter. You write beautifully and with a great deal of description. It's an easy read and your characters are well developed. I'll be coming back to read more when I have time!

High ratings :)

-Gail
'Root'

Kristen_Undead wrote 601 days ago

I feel bad for Madge! I feel like she has so many regrets in life, and that is why Gerald is cheating on her with that horrible Dawn. I was only able to get through a little bit of the book last night, I'm having trouble with my internet connection. But from what I can see you use beautiful imagery and you deserve your shot on the editor's desk! Keep us all posted what happens!

Kristen
Immortal Dilemma

faith rose wrote 602 days ago

Dear Casimir,

What amazing writing! I am truly sad to just be finding this masterpiece so late in the game. I would've loved to support this all the way to the ED, and I am convinced it deserves to be there. Your descriptions are beautiful, and there is such a lovely cadence in your language. This is highly deserving of recognition and publication. I am giving you all 6 stars!

All the very best,
Faith Rose
Now To Him

ShazzyLouLou wrote 602 days ago

Great first chapter - I lived in the west country for a time so I can picture all of it so clearly - even the girls coarse accent made me smile. Well done.

ShazzyLouLou wrote 602 days ago

Great first chapter - I lived in the west country for a time so I can picture all of it so clearly - even the girls coarse accent made me smile. Well done.

funnyantfarm wrote 602 days ago

Hi,

You have a nice style and good vocabulary. Your characters are three-dimensional and believable.

I noticed a few things to improve: loam and damp earth in chapter 1 sounds redundant in the same sentence; when Madge sits down the first time we see her go to the wall to paint, it would make more sense to say she spread the plastic bag before sinking to the ground; the sentence "his hardness every..." in chapter 3 seems to be incomplete; in chapter 5, I believe, the word Impaled is capitalized in the middle of the sentence; Gerald is written Gerals in chapter 5, I think.

I found the use of slang a little hard to follow, but I live in North America and am unfamiliar with many colloquial British expressions.

Good luck with the top five!

Greg

Kristen_Undead wrote 602 days ago

I will be reading this shortly, as you've been on my watchlist for some time. I saw that you slipped out of the top five and I was like oh hell no....so hopefully my backing and comments will help get you back up there!!

Kristen

RickardoW wrote 602 days ago

Awesome book I love it and will be reading hopefully to the end. I love when a book hooks me in the first chapter and yours has done that for sure.

Emmalena Louisa Ellis wrote 602 days ago

It is so rare for a crime/thriller book to drive a reader into the story so quickly with an increasing danger of repeating cliches of existing authors and television serials work. However, with Bloodstones by Casimir Greenfield, the reader is immersed into a beautiful vivid country location filled with both remoteness and closeness of the village, secrets, lies and deception. I instantly warmed to Madge as a character not least due to her situation but the reality of how starkly she develops from a naive secure woman to one more mature and rediscovering herself. In this way Casimir goes beyond the murder mystery and turns this story into a hooking psychological evaluation that leads the reader through each page of wonderful imagery to whether she or the community will ever be the same again. Five Stars, and all the best. Emmalena Louisa Ellis, Ginsterpigs

Geddy25 wrote 603 days ago

I just read the first few chapters of this and was getting lost in your story.
You have given the view that these two people have such a mundane lifestyle that only one seems to like.
I like the way you have built up Gerald's affair into a lusty liaison where he is not fully in control of what happens.
Your descriptive writing is wonderful and paints a fantastic picture, particularly of the scene Madge is in turn painting.
I found a couple of typos - in the 3rd chapter. The other chapters I read seem immaculate.
"Alf's modest carving skills had fast been noticed by the Gaffer;'s wife..." You have a semicolon there for some reason.
"God works In mysterious ways" - don't need capital for "In".
"Bloody carpenter with a few blokes working for him, that('s) all he was..." - Needs apostrophe s.
"....past the cover of the trees to run headlong into the oncoming sunlight,." - Need to delete the comma.
"...past the Roman hill forts and into the second of the graveled laybys..." - gravelled.
"...her legs free of the early morning stockings, the warmth to fierce..." - should be "too fierce".
I hope they're a help for you. I also noticed some other words (after the "In mysterious ways" bit) starting with capitals that I thought didn't need them.
All in all, a great read - very believable characters and plot.
Cheers,
Mike.
(Way Back To Devil's Mountain)

Chancelet wrote 606 days ago

Sorry, Casimir, I forgot to return to your second book. I've read the first chapter. The language and voice of the story is willowy, yet effective. Weaving between Madge and her husband's affair is written in a way that has you asking what their motives in life are, what's the truth of their relationship, and whether Madge is stuck in denial and if so for how long. This isn't my usual type of read, but it is done well.

N. LaRonda Johnson
http://www.authonomy.com/books/45790/anticipation-of-the-penitent/


SallyXB wrote 606 days ago

Hi Casimir, well done! This is a fabulous piece of writing. I have read a lot of stuff on Authonomy that is pretty good, but it was clear within the first paragraph that you are head and shoulders above many others. Brilliant attention to detail, dialogue and plot. Backed.
Sally

Odette67 wrote 606 days ago

Hi Casimir,
what a wonderful first chapter. i love it. i have added it to my watch list and i will carry on reading it tomorrow.

if you have a moment and want to swap books please let me know

Kate

Off the rails

back to you

Stuart J Roberts wrote 607 days ago

Hi Cas...done! On the shelf. Hope it helps get you there.

FRAN MACILVEY wrote 608 days ago

Dear Casimir

I come to "Bloodstones" late, having first read and loved, "Slow Poison" which has long been one of my favourites on the site.

Now I have just read the first two chapters of "Bloodstones". Here you use the same descriptive style, careful, minimalist and atmospheric, which so suits a mystery. All the details mean something, and add to the overall impression, so that reading must be taken slowly. This I very much appreciate and enjoy.

I felt that your opening paragraphs could just occasionally have done with an injection of something more ordinary. Your phrasing was, on occasion, perhaps a little too light, somehow. Almost as if, being anxious to set your own, as opposed to Madge's, creative credentials, you take some pains to emphasise your creative and beautiful writing. You don't need to worry. I am sure that Madge has her down to earth moments too!

Beginnings are always difficult. I tentatively suggest that a little more solidity at the start might help with setting down the tale. Hard to put into words, somehow....Re-reading your opening paragraphs, it took me some time to bed down the meaning, and to set off to explore your story.

It comes to me that you are setting up a contrast in the characters of Madge and Dawn. This you do well, not so obviously that it grates, and the style of your writing makes it clear of the difference, so there is never any confusion there. But you have lived a long time with your tale, so you appreciate all the finer meanings which might escape the reader, when we are learning about Madge. Of course, this is what makes good literature rewarding. Reading a book several times, each time we see something new. But ambiguities and details that are just too finely observed, can confuse.....

All the best with this, and with all your writing. Yours is a talent that I rejoice in, being so careful, clean and wonderfully expressed.

Fran XX :-))

Cliff Popkey wrote 609 days ago

Very descriptive and interesting characters. Very good. not sure why it hasn't been picked up, but then publishing is mostly opinion. i felt it was like tjhe literature of the ,mid twentith century and maybe the publishers are afraidd it won't appeal a wide csection of the reading public. I don't know but I think yoiu'll draw plenty reads and buyers

Pete Nicho wrote 611 days ago

This is the first book I have started reading on here and I wasn't interested in all this backing business but after I have seen you drop in the ranks I think it only right that I lend my support to such a talented author. I feel fortunate that such good work is available on here gratis. Thank you.

DavidRBarr wrote 612 days ago

This is excellent. I don't know what else to say. As soon as I started to read I was caught up by your prose and metaphors displaying the distance between Madge and Gerald and the memories of the past. It really draws the reader in and indeed the phrases used stretch and capture the reader. I will continue to read on but just to say the picture you paint (both as a narrative thread and as an author) is excellent. Really deserved to be in top three.

God bless,

David

mat012 wrote 620 days ago

Casimir,

Firstly, congratulations on having and holding the top spot. It is deserved and I hope very much that you can maintain it and make your way to the editors desk. Your writing style is precise and well organized. Your use of description is well placed and not overwhelming allowing the readers to picture the scene without sacrificing the movement of the plot. Your characters have depth and are easily identifiable. It flows well, each section leading to the next easily with no forced leaps or connections.
In short, well done. I very much hope to see this gracing the shelves of book stores in the future.
Meagan
The Green Eyed Girl

Cicely Moreton wrote 620 days ago

I am new to the site, so I thought I would start at the top. I have not been disappointed in what I have read so far. Indeed I was enchanted by your descriptive talent. The exchanges between characters was handled very smoothly. Thank you.

Abby Vandiver wrote 620 days ago

Your descriptions are very good. Excellent in fact, however, your writing lends to vagueness in the story. It was hard to follow what was happening.What she was thinking. What she saw. Although, I enjoyed the little dialogue very much, and wished for more. I think the descriptions should tell more. I think that the flow is compromised my the mystery of it all. Makes you have to think too hard. The story though, is good.

Mr Silly wrote 621 days ago

Oh it is so clear why you are number one!!! Counting down the days until you get your review!!!!

Maureenaries wrote 621 days ago

Dear Casimir, I have read the first chapter and enjoyed the elegant poetic prose. Poor madge. I enjoyed what I read and see you are deservedly on the editors list.

Casimir Greenfield wrote 621 days ago

Adrienne - thank you so much for letting me know. I'd love to read your thoughts on the rest of the book. Keep in touch, all the best, Cas

Hi Casimir

Love the style! The first chapter had me really interested! Good luck with it!

Adrienne

Adrienne Silcock wrote 621 days ago

Hi Casimir

Love the style! The first chapter had me really interested! Good luck with it!

Adrienne