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rank 5849
word count 30615
date submitted 23.03.2012
date updated 24.03.2012
genres: Fiction, Science Fiction, Fantasy, ...
classification: universal
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The Rescue of Lucy Fer

Andrew Vecsey

A single father and his son risk life and death to rescue the lady of their life out of a prison called Hell.

 

Joe and his son Chris are in heaven. They have everything they want, except Joe lost his wife a Chris lost his mother. She is locked up in prison for life. Realizing that the only way to get her back is to break her out, they decide to try. But it`s no ordinary jail and it`s not your ordinary life sentence. She is locked up in Hell for eternity. Joe and Chris, disguised as a black poodle and a green parrot from heaven manage to rescue Lucy, but at quite the price. This short book is a satirical fantasy about technology and religion and stands them face to face.

 
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Chrissy

Chapter 6 Chrissy
 

 
Soon after Chrissy was born, Mary died. Mary`s mother claimed Tweeter was too much of a dreamer to make a good father and she went to court to claim custody of Chrissy. A kind and empathetic social worker who delivered the court orders advised Tweeter just to fly away with his son and not to risk losing him to his mother-in-law. So he flew very far away and raised Chrissy as a single father. Chrissy, as a child was a clown. He even looked funny. He used to be called “feather and bones”. He came up with crazy wild ideas and was able to convince or dare his friends to carry them out, stepping into the background when the ideas got the group into trouble.
 

 
Chrissy, right from an early age, became obsessed with Dr. Joe Ova, the man who designed new-man. He asked Tweeter many questions about him.
 

 
“Where did Joe Ova come from?”
 

 
He came from another universe, a universe where our heaven is located.” Tweeter answered like he was a teacher or like the priest he was.
 

 
“Who created his race?”.
 

 
“Man evolved from atoms which evolved into molecules that were given the breath of life from heaven”. Tweeter informed. “it is all written down in a book called “A Short History of a Long Future”. The book was written by Dr Ova especially for us. It is his guide book to us so that we can feed on knowledge from man and grow to reach achievements greater than the his. “
 

 
As soon as Chrissy learned to read, Tweeter gave him the book to read.
 

 
According to the book, the machines made of plastics who called themselves immortal were at one time mortals made of flesh and bones just like new-man was. “Brains achieved immortality by exchanging their living bodies for machines, just like new-man achieves everlasting life by exchanging their life for death. According to the book, the immortal brains designed new-man giving him powers, abilities and skills that were beyond what nature could design.
 

 
New-man`s skills were much lower than that of man`s who could fly much faster, and hear, see, taste and smell much better than they could. But new-man had one skill that man was totally lacking in, especial after 4000 years of immortality; the skill to talk with the dead.”  
 

 
How were you able to convince Joe to go on the expedition to find heaven?” asked Chrissy one day.  
 

 
“I was able to communicate with his dead grandmother.” Tweeter replied, just like you can as well. “His grandmother told me she used to call him “Joska madàrkàm” privately. When I told that to Joe, he nearly fell off his seat. He told me that beside him and his grandmother, no one knew that 4000 year old private trivia that he himself had forgotten.”  That was enough to convince him that his dead grandmother was alive somewhere to be able to communicate with me. When I told him where she was, he believed in me and had faith because he wanted so much to find her.
 

 
“How did they ever find heaven?” wondered Chrissy.
 

 
“Joe went back with Lucy thru the black hole, back into the universe he came from and followed the edge treying to be guided more by intuition than by rational thought.” Tweeter said.
 

 
“Being so close to the edge, how did they avoid not falling out of the universe?” wondered Chrissy.
 

 
“Leaving the universe from its edge was not possible. The closer they got to the edge, the thicker space got until space seemed to get so thick that they could no longer move in it. Joe described it as being encased in snow. He had to be pulled out by Lucy a few times.” Tweeter laughed.
 

 
The laws of inertia stopped outside the universe. The space got thicker and thicker as they got to the edge blocking them from going further out.
 

 
“They eventually found a narrowing that looked like the universe was emptying into a river. They went up the river and it turned into a canyon becoming a tunnel with a blinding light at the end like a beacon that beckoned them to follow. As they entered this new open space they saw that it had a size that they could easily map. They  were looking into a universe 100 billion km across and looking back towards their universe was like looking into a body, while looking ahead was like looking into a brain.
 

 
Chrissy wanted to hear more.
 

 
“They were affectionately greeted by their relatives dressed in white who explained to them how how heaven worked. They were taken to their mansion with a list of names, places and dates of all past lifetimes.” Tweeter said.
 

 
Heaven had many neighborhoods. Famous artists and entertainers tended to be grouped together, just like famous scientists did. It was like a university campus. Joe and Lucy toured thru heaven like walking thru a cemetery looking for famous people. Some places were lively neighborhoods with many souls leaving and entering the mansions. It was like there was a party in each mansion. Many mansions had “AWAY” signs indicating where the souls were - in which world, and in which new born brain. This was to encourage resident souls to watch and guide them during their life trip. Unfortunately this was very difficult to do after brains reached adulthood as their expanding rational minds gradually overpowered their intuition. Growing knowledge overshadows faith. It is only thru man's intuition and faith that he could be guided.
 
 

Each soul had a space in heaven where they could publicly display their accumulated life experiences. Much like a library of a book collector or a museum of an art collector. There were souls whose main aim in reincarnation was to acquire famous art pieces. They reincarnated into sons of successful art thieves or into daughters of successful art collectors. Other souls had other needs and wants. Many souls had accumulated over 10,000 lifetimes and their place in heaven was proportionately large.

 

When he asked a soul “why so many lifetimes?”, the soul replied.

 

“We are so greedy and we have so much time that we end up striving to try everything there is to try.”

 

Heaven was a busy place with souls leaving everything behind to pursue their dreams. Much like falling asleep to dream. Most are happy once they die and come back home. Like waking up from a nightmare.  For many, playing life is addictive, like gambling. When they come back winners they eagerly play the game again. When they come back losers they get desperate to regain our winnings and do not know when to stop.

 

Resident souls not away on reincarnation rest, contemplate, and remotely watch life being played out on the various stages. Live programs are sponsored by the many reincarnation agencies. Souls watch these programs like reality shows. They watch them to help decide where they want or need to reincarnate to. They have interactive control of the programs being able to tune in and focus on any person in any of the worlds. They use the morality channel connecting people to heaven to send out intuitive thoughts that are frustratingly ignored most of the time. Resident souls have the ability to rewind events in the past to review anything they might have missed. Much like rewinding a film to see its beginning again.

 

According to Joe, “new-man" is one of the most popular programs watched in Heaven. Featuring children being raised up with mothers, fathers, sisters, brothers, aunts, uncles, nieces, nephews, cousins and grandparents in extended families. It offers the celebration of births, the joy of families, and the mourning of death. It features new-man living in peace with nature and its animals.

 

The program”immortal man“, also popular, features couples with autistic children that are institutionalized while they are still children. The couples have pets, hobbies and careers. They work and have long vacations. They try their best to enjoy their immortal life by gourmet eating and drinking, passionate sex, gambling, watching and playing sports and studying and learning new interests and skills.


 
Chrissy talked to many scientists who were observing and studying new-man. They asked him many questions. Many were questions regarding new-man`s religion, based on faith which claimed that death is the only door to everlasting life in a place called Heaven that man claimed was only imaginary. Man`s heaven, Heaven Inc. they proudly claimed was not based on faith, but rather on technology. And it offered immortality not in an imaginary place, but in a physical one.  
 
 

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Christian Frey wrote 354 days ago

Hi Andrew, I read the pitch and the first couple of paragraphs. I like your cover image and the title - that's what drew me in. The pitch was not quite as strong, concept seems 'done' but the black poodle and green parrot are an intriguing angle. I'm not sure the 'life or death' aspect seems too pressing if they're already in the afterlife though, LOL.

What I really noticed about the first couple of paragraphs of writing, is that you may want to see if you can do some word-smithing to remove some of the he, him, his. For example, instead of: "Gabriel looked in the mirror. He had a white shirt with an open collar unbuttoned to reveal his black hairy chest and his thick black suspenders." You could do something like, "Gabriel looked in the mirror. His white shirt and open collar revealed a hairy black chest and thick black suspenders." (is he wearing suspenders under his shirt?)

Anyway, hope that's not coming across too harsh, sorry for the critique and I hope it's taken in the kind spirit in which it was intended. Cheers!

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