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word count 135564
date submitted 03.04.2012
date updated 13.05.2012
genres: Non-fiction, Harper True Life
classification: universal
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A Collection of Chaos

Danielle Marie

Jessica's absent father returns, ruining her current state of serenity, she finds herself beginning an extensive journey to regain control over her life.

 

When an unwanted individual from her past return, Jessica is forced to take on the responsibility of her alcoholic father, while struggling to recover from her own addiction problems. She struggles as the reality of a first heartbreak smacks her in the face, as she is simply just trying to find her own place in this world. She fearlessly takes on the complexity of learning the obstacles that borderline personality disorder conveys mixed with the ups and downs of bipolar disorder. As she finds her self walking down memory lane, demanding to discover her forgotten past, she accepts the necessary challenge to tame the chaos within.

 
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abortion, addiction, alcoholism, bipolar disorder, borderline personality disorder, family, mental illness, suffering, therapy

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Room 243

Chapter 1: Room 243

 

He sat outside, alone in the motel gazebo. He looked worn out in his old green hooded sweatshirt and dirty shorts, like life had turned on him. His face was scruffy, as if he had forgotten to shave the past couple days; or maybe he didn’t forget—maybe he just didn’t care. I slowly approached him in his white wooden shelter. He looked at me confused, with his greenish hazel eyes; the same color eyes that I always wished I would have gotten from him, the same eyes that looked at me proudly at my high school graduation.

He was searching my eyes and his mind dumbly for something. Anything. In slow motion, he pulled the blue and silver Busch Light beer can to his mouth, tilted his head back, and started to chug. Flowing like a river, Toxic Liquid rushed down into his body. I watched as the current washed away any sober memories that might still be lingering around. 

And finally he asked, “Do I know you?”

At first I thought that he was just trying to be a jerk. I didn’t bother to call him on Father’s Day, or his birthday, which was only a month ago. But then I realized that he looked disturbed. He was upset, yet at the same time, bothered that this unfamiliar young girl had interrupted his escape from reality. I realized he really had no idea who I was.

That man is my father, and he has a disease--he’s an alcoholic. He tried to beat it, but it always comes back. Like a good friend, never leaving his side. It has followed him through three marriages, three children, and endless jobs; it is the same reason my brother and sister do not call him on Father’s Day either.

Alcoholism is a chronic, life-long disease that is indicated by a progressive addiction toward the intake of alcohol, despite the negative consequences. It is an addiction. My father is an addict, even if he only drinks beer. He has never tried another drug, or so he says, and won’t even drink liquor: Just Beer. Beer to him is like water to anyone else. He has to have it. He needs it to function. But it also makes him not function.

In most cases, a disease is diagnosed by a doctor, someone with credentials. But at age seven, I had diagnosed both my parents. Maybe I should have gone to medical school. Now, fourteen years later, after seeing my father attempting to drink himself to death, to the point where he didn’t even recognize his own daughter, I made the decision to force him to get help.

He was confused at why I was still sitting there, since I was a stranger to him. He continued to discuss how it was all over and in a couple days it would be done for good. He had planned to drink himself to death. I tried to act as the stranger he thought I was and ask questions:

“What about your family?”

“I don't have any family”

“Well what about kids? Don't you have children?” And the hurtful words came out of his mouth, “No I don't, once I did, but I don't anymore.” I tried to bring up the names of my brother and sister, but he looked at me with so much disgust and confusion, like I was this stranger who had all this secret information on his life that he never wanted to be reminded of.

Intervention

Since he didn’t even know who I was, it wasn’t easy starting the intervention. The hospital across the street seemed convenient. I walked back inside the motel and stomped all the way back up to the front desk. Each and every step that brought me closer, only made me feel like I was a child throwing a temper tantrum. I rolled my eyes as I informed the motel attendee that he needed to call an ambulance along with the cops. “He won't go willingly” I said.

Five police cars pulled up to the front of the hotel, but I really only needed one. Six cops stood around, listening to me put in plain words the situation as I puffed on my cigarette. In my anger, sarcastically and bitchy, I added, “Oh and there’s a warrant out for his arrest.”  Their reactions were all different: some confused some in disbelief, and some concerned. This probably didn’t happen too often, I thought. As they were walking to approach his room, one tall officer stopped me. “You stay here…let us check out the situation first.” Frustrated. I knew he was trying to protect me from any more emotional damage. But he didn’t realize the truth. This was normal to me. This was all I’d ever known.  This was my whole life.

Although this was all second nature to me, it was sad that my father wasn’t even willing to walk forty feet with his own daughter, his youngest biological child. To him he would be walking forty feet with a complete stranger who interrupted his one man pity party in the gazebo. The reason why five police cars surrounded his motel. The reason six cops knocked on 243, his room number, the door to his new home. The reason he was forced to end his party before the booze even ran out, only to take a trip to a place called reality.

Detoxification

This is a time when an alcoholic is in a supervised setting, allowing the addict to withdraw. Across the street at the hospital, my father lay in the hospital bed. He cried. He yelled. “Six cops Jessica, really? SIX?!”

To ease the tension in the room, the nurse pulled me outside to talk privately. She informed me that he had come in a couple weeks before. He had fallen, banged his head pretty bad, and his alcohol level was high, but he told her he was planning to go to detox. I began to think, he did go to detox, on his own, without anyone helping him. And at that moment, I was proud. Proud as if your child just learned to tie his shoes, all on their own. A sense of relief came over me: He did want help.

Rehabilitation

I didn't have a relationship with my father, yet I still helped him. He had no one else. I didn’t have time to debate in my head what I should do. I automatically acted, as if my body was on autopilot. The painful fact that I had no one three years ago when he kicked me out of his house, didn’t run across my mind until I finally had a chance to breathe and think about the situation. I could have just left, continued on with my own life. My brother and sister might not have gone to the same extreme that I did. Sometimes people just need a reality check, that’s what my father needed. And plus, I really didn’t want to deal with death anytime soon. I thought forcing him to go to rehab, was me doing something great. That plan was quickly crushed. He doesn’t have to.

Forcing someone to go to rehab is nearly impossible. You cannot do it. Some might like to say that nothing’s impossible, but they must have never tried to force someone to go to rehab. If an alcoholic doesn’t want to go, legally they don’t have to. They have the right to continue to drink themselves to death and ruin the lives of all those around them.

What could I do, let him go back to his new home, room 243, just so he could re-start his pity party? Calling my siblings for help seemed pointless. Their relationship with him was similar to mine—nonexistent. Not only hadn’t they called him on Father’s Day, I didn’t know the last time they had even called him at all. I couldn’t call my mom; I don’t even really talk to her either. Since they divorced when I was three, the two of them acquired a deep hatred for each other. She would get to much satisfaction out of his weakness.

I couldn’t call my stepmother, either. She was the reason why room 243 was his new home. My father had been kicked out of the house after she had found someone new, at least that was his story.

The hospital, the doctors, the police—none of them could do anything.

They released him.

I drove him across the street back to his motel room. Although it was his new home, he hadn’t brought much with him: only some clothes, toiletries, the ticket from his DWI, and an AA meeting schedule.  I searched the room for his stash of beer, which was not hard to find. Sure enough his best friend, Alcohol, didn’t leave once the party was busted by the cops.

Alcohol was his best buddy, like family. Even years ago, when I asked him to choose: alcohol or your daughter, he made the wrong decision. His buddy held all the perfect qualities.  It never left his side. It was always dependable no matter what the time or place. It never disappointed him. It was always there to help him get away from the real world.

Seven silver and blue beer cans had been waiting for my father’s return, hoping to pick up where they had left off.

They didn’t realize that their hopes of more bonding time with my father would soon be interrupted. I poured all seven cans of beer down the drain. And to think, if I was doing this in my apartment at college with my roommates right now, we would be saying that this was alcohol abuse.

I made him promise that he wouldn’t drink anymore that night, and that he would call me in the morning when he woke up. I realized that’s all I could do. Take it one step at a time.

He crawled into bed to finally go to sleep, and as I tucked him in, all that I could think about was how my whole life I wished my father had been there to tuck me into bed, and now I was tucking him in. Like a concerned parent, I waited till he fell asleep. He looked like a child, sleeping there helpless, curled up in pain. I knew, realistically, I couldn’t do anything. All I could do was watch this child, who was my father, Worrying. My whole childhood, I always wondered if he ever worried about me; now I was the one who was worrying about him.

I searched the room one more time to see if I might have missed any of his silver-blue friends who might still be hanging around, waiting for him to wake up. I shut off the light, and closed the door. I stood outside the motel room, just staring at the closed door. Room 243. I just kept reading it over and over again. Room 243. I’m not even sure why, it is not like it’s a hard thing to remember, and I know I’ll never forget it. Room 243.

I stared at it and wondered—did I do enough?

 

 

 

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leedromey wrote 393 days ago

Hey

I think this is going to be a great eye-opener for people to see how the closest are effected, not just in childhood, but impacting on their entire life. You speak directly from your heart, and this shows well. The first chapter is great, drawing the reader to exactly where you were, and showing gradual glimpses of the extent of damage done. I particularly like,"I watched as the current washed away any remaining sober memories, which may still be lingering around."
I think this will be very good, have rated you and will keep reading, and letting you know.

All the best, Lee

mhebler wrote 397 days ago

Needless to say (but I will anyway) alcoholism, as with any addiction, is a devastating subject to read, especially when it is presented in non-fiction. Although you keep the story moving at a steady pace, as a reader reading a non-fiction piece on the subject, I couldn't help but sense that you might be holding back. Since the novel is written in first person, there seems to be some deeper and tougher thoughts that did not make it to the page. Just one example would be why YOU, and nobody else - not your other siblings, etc. - felt so obligated to help your father. Answers like these would not only make your story more personal, interesting, and "not-put-downable". As I only read the first couple of chapters, you could very well explain this soon, but maybe you shouldn't wait or at least tease the reader as to why before a bigger reveal. With a subject like this, there is no shortage of inciting incedents.

This is a good start. Good luck!

Michael Hebler - "Night of the Chupacabra"

Ruth2904 wrote 401 days ago

Danielle, It must be awful experiencing someone you love drowning in this ocean of alcoholism. You describe the inner feelings so well but a little 'showing' would perfect this further. This is my downfall when I write and am still mastering it. But you're doing a grand job and A Collection of Chaos deserves recognition. Well done.

Ruth2904
To Dream Again

muntsy wrote 401 days ago

Danielle,I have read the first three chapters... you have a very good story to tell and are brave in doing so.. You write with such raw emotion that a lot of people lack and that is awesome...but remember you are the narrator of this story and need to control it, so now that the emotion is on the pages, just clean it up a little.,,,Caitlin Avery has a very good review with some good points on chapter two, the one I would like you to bring to life is when she asks you to show some of your emotions....You have a unique style of writing, and that's a good thing to have, but a writer masters their style when they can show the reader what the character is doing rather than say it...This is a good exercise, For example us writers say "I was so nervous I spoke fast."...Now try to show the reader how or why he was nervous. "The cop had his light shining on me. My heart started racing through my chest that I spit out the words faster than I could hear what I was saying."...do you see the difference?... I hope you don't feel I am being negative, it wasn't my intention, I don't stick my neck out this far usually, but I believe you have a story people need to read and I want to see it become reality...Good Luck.

Caitlin Avery wrote 401 days ago

I read the second chapter, no problem finding it this time. I really like your openness and how to the point you are in describing your crazy family. I feel like I can relate to you so much in your strife at that age; our situations may have been different but the feelings were certainly similar. I wonder if a little bit of straying from the facts, to add a little more description of the surroundings, and the color of your world, and your emotions. It feels a little bit text book right now. But I think you have a powerful story to tell, and I know it would help people facing a similar situation feel like they are not alone. Keep up the good work! And kudos to your courage. I give this high stars and wish you a ton of luck!! Caitlin Avery

FRAN MACILVEY wrote 402 days ago

Dear Danielle

I have looked at the first two chapters of your memoir, "A Collection of Chaos". What a sorry tale you tell, of your life long encounter with the habitual drinking and alcoholism of your father. That you had to tolerate this alone from the age of about seven comes across very clearly in the way you describe reacting around your father, the way you worked with his moods, his unkindness, his habits.

I find it hard to read this without getting angry, because it seems clear to me that growing up around paranoid drunks with whom you have to be so polite and tiptoe around, is so unfair. A way of coping with a warped adult. Of course, he was sick, addicted, but alcohol is so widely accepted, that the sickness that grows from dependence is laughed off. Except, of course, by those living at close quarters with stinginess, unkindness and thoughtlessness that comes from drinking all the time.

I commend you for writing your story so honestly. I plan to read a few more chapters. Meantime, I wish you well. You might like to comb your MS for grammar and typo nits, but that is something we all have to do!

Take care. All the best

Fran Macilvey, "Trapped" xx :)

Caitlin Avery wrote 402 days ago

Wow! I dig this first chapter. I'll read more and then comment, but you've certainly piqued my interest. Caitlin Avery

Greenleaf wrote 403 days ago

I've read the first three chapters so far. This is very good, Danielle. I felt sorry for Jessica and her father in the first chapter. So sad that he was in such bad shape, and that she has to take care of him like that when she has her own life and studies to worry about. I got a little confused when I went on to the second and third chapters but figured out that those things happened before the opening scene. I'll be back to read more very soon. I'll leave more comments, too.

Very good writing. Good pacing and characterizations.

Susan/Greenleaf (Chameleon)

Jannypeacock wrote 407 days ago

Hi Danielle,

I read your first chapter and it’s so poignant and emotional it’s very obvious your heart and soul have gone into the story. You use some excellent imagery that, if I’m honest, had me close to tears. How very sad that any father could destroy his mind so badly with alcohol that he fails to recognise his own daughter. There are some points where the writing really very strong.

I love the at first you seem like you forgot his father’s day card but then go on to explain that he’s an alcoholic followed by it being the reason your siblings don’t send a card either. These kinds of connections really weave your story tightly together and make it highly readable.

Perhaps because you are so connected with the story you can on occasion almost lecture the reader. For example when you explain what alcoholism is; while, yes, it is obvious from your emotion that you hate the disease it almost seems like a dictionary definition of the illness. Perhaps if the reader saw how the beer made your father act like the definition then we could empathise even more with the character.

I do think this memoir if full of emotion (understandably) and as addiction in many forms is such a huge problem for a lot of families I imagine your story would have massive appeal.

It certainly touched me. Best of look on the road to publication.

Janny

strachan gordon wrote 408 days ago

Hello ,I was very touched by the scene where the father does not recognise the daughter , how sad , how sad also that you seem to know so much about this terrible affliction at such a young age , it should not be that you can have so much direct experience of it , but ,of course , you can because that is what can happen in life ,regardless of whether it should or not. I don't know whether later you consider this aspect - but do you have any theories as to why he was an alcoholic , did it run in the family? did he have a lot of bad luck? I personally would prefer to focus on this aspect , rather than to regard it as a disease , which makes you a completely helpless victim - but - sorry - excuse me - what do I know?(meant sincerely) I wonder if you would have the time to look at the first chapter of my novel ' A Buccaneer' , which is set amongst Pirates in the 17th century , watchlisted and starred , with best wishes from Strachan Gordon

alison woodward wrote 408 days ago

Only read the first chapyer at the mo, but it is very good, i will be back to read more later tonight.
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