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rank 859
word count 187070
date submitted 15.06.2012
date updated 07.03.2014
genres: Fiction, Science Fiction
classification: moderate
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The God String

Montgomery Thompson

Rand is alone on Earth until he discovers another survivor. But she's in orbit. Now they must work together to survive and restore humanity.

 

In a fraction of a second, the world can change. For Rand Carter a fraction of a second is long enough to leave him as the only human being on earth, struggling to survive for months until he stumbles upon another: Astronaut Elsie Clay. Stranded on the International Space Station Elsie has only days to live, but getting her back to Earth is only the beginning of their challenges.

As they build a new home in a world without people, they discover the cause of their predicament: a secret government program in time travel that has been running since the fifties. Using the massive device they attempt to reconnect with their time, but end up in nineteen forty nine. They search for the man who invented the machine, Dr. Remmel and try to keep him from falling into the hands of the Russians, but Remmel’s devout Nazi wife has other ideas.

 
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Ida Luther wrote 32 days ago

I like the prologue, very intriguing, it made me to want to continue reading. I will comment later when I read more. Five stars and backed

William Holt wrote 39 days ago

First chapter notes:

This is unusually clean text. Typically, because of long years teaching composition classes, I see a fair number of mechanical and syntactic problems, but In two readings I saw none except an unnecessary comma.between large and steel in paragraph 2, a missing "to" in the later phrase "wanted make Belfast," and "It" used for I in the phrase "It had no idea."

Time travel is a tricky thing to manage, and I'm always curious about how much disbelief I'll have to suspend to get into the story. My first question here: why is Rand impervious to the universal vanishing? No doubt something that connects him with Elsie.

Another question relates to the title. Is the reader going to get a bit of an education in string theory here? And can it be adequately presented without too much mathematics?

Such questions aside, this looks to be an entertaining, well written novel.

I like the descriptions of the suddenly abandoned vehicles.

Bill

Lindsay Cross wrote 39 days ago

Just finished reading up to chapter 5. Wow! Even though there is only one character - and a dog - you blend in his life with his surroundings very well. I followed the story faithfully and wasn't bored at all. I was too caught up to notice. There are lots of what? but how do you cover all of the emotions and discoveries and wonderings(and wanderings) of this kind of story in one little book? For me, you have done a great job! And then - the end of chapter 5. Let's see where all this takes us - we are left to wonder?
Spattering of words left out.

Am immensely enjoying.

Lindsay Cross

Lindsay Cross wrote 41 days ago

I read up to chapter 2. Nice start, full of tension and drama. Really like the story so far. Kind of like the rapture foretold in the Bible, but there would be people left behind other than one person. So, was God fed up with everyone other that one person, and why would he have to be America? even one living in Ireland. LOL
Though done before, you captured me from the start. The character is believable but could use a bit more"oh my God" tension in his finding out he could be the only - or one of - person left in the world, maybe wondering why him. If faced with that reality? As he raced about.
Also a spattering of words left out in sentences.

Love it so far and will read on.
Lindsay Cross

vee8 wrote 44 days ago

Right, as promised, a more in-depth review.
A very lyrical and poetic opening, not at all like the premise of a doomsday scenario. Some great turns of phrase here. What do we have? A dream within a dream? A dream BEYOND a dream? Curiosity has well and truly hooked me.

Chap.1
Someone knows their tech! Airlines, oil tankers and dog kennels! Research into the finer details of a novel's background are what sets out the great from the good, and this is excellent work.
The opening para's and the characters. I found this particularly impressive. In a nice economy of words you have none-the-less caused the reader to invest in these characters, the airline crew, the ship's captain, meaning when they vanish, we feel their loss all the more keenly. They may only be incidental, but we feel pity for them. Nicely done.
Rand's hangover! Oh yes, been there, done that! More research?!
Okay, so far this is one seriously freakin' mystery. I'm feeling Rand's confusion, but loved the way he yelled out in frustration that he wasn't in a movie!
'With the power is down' typo.
What is his obsession with zombies?!
Switched on his headlamp? Where did that come from? I think you need to introduce it, or readers will, like me, wonder what it is and how he got it.
Spang is the perfect counter, the ideal companion and boy, do I love his attitude! I know how difficult it can be to write at length with the MC alone with his thoughts. Either he talks to himself, or he thinks aloud. Here, the MC is alone for the whole opening of the book, but Spang gives the MC someone-or something- to bounce conversation off.

Reading further on, particularly Rand's searching through the police station, I'm reminded of a Discovery Channel TV series, 'Life after People.' Have you seen it? Eerily familiar.
I think vaporised is a bit over-used, IMO.

Okay, general thoughts. Fantastic plot, similar to, but different enough from several recent movies. Dialoge, such as it is, is well drafted, witty when it needs to be and empathic when dealing with lost ones. I have spotted a fair few minor typos, and a good handful of punctuation errors, but nothing that distracted me from the story. this has great potentiol, just needs a good read through to polish up those errors. I am well pleased I chose this to have a read through, though the problem now is I have to read ALL of it, meaning I'll have less time to review other books! High stars. Now, get busy on the forum side of this site, and review other members books. Do everything you can to draw people to this work, and hopefully you'll get your just reward.

Vee8
Daughter of Chronos.

vee8 wrote 50 days ago

I've only had the briefest glimpse, and intend to make a full review later this weekend, but I like what I've seen so far, enough to back it. Being a Sci-Fi nut myself, with a particular love of time-travel, how could I not?!

Angelwood wrote 69 days ago

This is a great book, the story is just captivating. I like the way it ties itself to certain conspiracy theories, your characters are wonderful loved it x Pauline.

Monte Thompson wrote 77 days ago

I came to this as I saw Marj had backed it. Not bad at all and now I'm itching for more.


Thank you so much for backing The God String. I can't to leave a reader without a read so I'll be uploading more chapters today. Thanks again!

Monte Thompson wrote 77 days ago

My comment is only from a ampling from several chapters, so not a detailed read. But a survival story is always fascinating and it is well written. I think it was in the prologue, but 'reviled' is incorrectly used, so that struck a wrong note. But all over, a great effort, which I expect will do well. Backed.



Thanks for the great feedback. i looked up "reviled" and wow, were you right! I guess words are like some people... just when you think you know them they turn out to be very different than you thought. ~Serves me right for trusting MS Word's dictionary. Thanks so much for the read and for backing my book!

Spilota wrote 77 days ago

I came to this as I saw Marj had backed it. Not bad at all and now I'm itching for more.

M. A. McRae. wrote 77 days ago

My comment is only from a ampling from several chapters, so not a detailed read. But a survival story is always fascinating and it is well written. I think it was in the prologue, but 'reviled' is incorrectly used, so that struck a wrong note. But all over, a great effort, which I expect will do well. Backed.

Andrea Taylor wrote 465 days ago

I've always wondered what I would do if this happened to me. So glad it hasn't; athough sometimes I think it would be nice if the world just went away. But then I'd get bored and lonely, especially as I like to talk (its the old ancient Irish ancestry I expect). I digress. Loved this. Amusing, well written and an interesting premise.
Andrea
The de Amerley Affair

Monte Thompson wrote 477 days ago

The book was great ..well until the end...I feel like there should be more..you could keep going for a few more chapters at least...What happened???



Thanks for the read! The book is the first in a series, hence the cliffhanger. The second book is coming soon.

Catsssss4 wrote 477 days ago

The book was great ..well until the end...I feel like there should be more..you could keep going for a few more chapters at least...What happened???

Neville wrote 620 days ago

The God String.
By Montgomery Thompson.


Well what can I say? This is a great Sci-Fi mystery right from the very first page.
You have given the reader some vivid detail as Rand wakes to find his girlfriend, Moira missing.
The usual check around the house brings up nothing, it appears that she’s not been gone long though, she can’t be far surely.
A quick look out of the window tells him there’s been an accident outside, could she be hurt?
Vehicles strewn across the street, horns blaring out here and there, tell him something different—there’s no-one about...anywhere.
You paint a good picture of the deserted streets as Rand tries to find Moira.
I could feel the tension and worry as he checks upon the local hospital and comes up zero.
The phones are all dead so there’s no chance of getting any questions answered.
I think this is a brilliant read, right up my street, so to speak.
I can see from your profile that you’ve introduced some of your own background into the book...nothing wrong with that...it’s great.
I’ve not finished reading it yet, but I can say safely that I will do, it’s to my liking.
Many stars and best wishes with this, Monte.
Well done!!

Best regards,

Neville. The Secrets of the Forest – The Time Zone.

Kerrie Price wrote 653 days ago

Hi Monte,

I got to your book rather sooner than planned. The Preface is sweet - melt-in-your-mouth stuff - like fairyfloss. A whisper of teasing words full of meaning, yet whisked away in a breath. I like it.

I've only read the first chapter, but it was quite captivating. I like the way you write and the pace suits the plot. Six stars and I look forward to reading more.

Kerrie Price
THE GOD PLEASERS 40 day Study Guide

Monte Thompson wrote 671 days ago

Bob, thank you so very much for not only reading the whole story but giving detailed corrections. I will definitely make those changes.
The story gets a comb through once after it's written. Then it goes for a read to my gf, dad, brother and sister-in-law. They usualy come up with most of the corrections thatI I miss and come up with continuity. Then I wait a month or two and give it one more scrubbing.
It's funny you mention Life AFter People. I watched the whole series and made notes as I went. I only used a few things because most of the information I needed was centered around plot locations.
The internet also has a lot of information regarding apocalyptic subjects that was extremely useful. How the heck did writers do their research before Wikipedia? Hard to fathom.
A very helpful part of the process was geting the story fact checked. The man who fact checked the flight information was the test pilot for Boeing's new Dreamliner. Again, lucked out on that one!
It's very difficult, as you know, to get someone to read the whole story and give feedback so again, thank you so much! The One True Bank is next on my list!

Dadoo wrote 671 days ago

Well, I haven't said this very often in all the time I have been here on Authonomy...

But I have read every word you posted, in one sitting.

Truth be told, you caught me at a good time, I am stuck on my arse, recovering from an unfortunate encounter with a horse ( http://www.authonomy.com/forums/threads/99337/dadoo/ ) , so unusually I have the time to give this book proper consideration.

I do believe story is king, and you have a very good story here. Enough of a story, to keep me reading until the end. I do admit, I'm a bit of a sucker for "survival" type stories, and I like the way that your main character made potentially fatal mistakes on occasion. Obviously he couldn't think of everything, and those mistakes balance out his usual thoughtfulness.

Have you seen any of the tv series " life after people" the documentaries have a similar premis to your book, in that people suddenly and inexplicably disappear, then follows the consequences in the hours, days, months and years. Everything from feral dogs to nuclear meltdowns. The show is very meticulous in showing the consequences and timeline of what might be working or not after the people who maintain it suddenly disappear.

If you haven't seen it, I would suggest you watch it, only in that it is carefully researched, and may give you some more ideas on situations which might increase the tension in parts of your book.

This is not to say that your book isn't tense as is. Some people may prefer more action in some parts of the book, although I thought it was just fine.

I dearly hope you have spent many hours editing, and correcting the inevitable mistakes that creep In when quickly writing a novel.

If you have not, then you are a bastard and I hate you forever :-)

Not really of course, but while I was reading for pure enjoyment, I must say that very few actual errors jumped out at me. Here are my notes. I am offering them, not in a nitpicky critical way, but honestly to help you quickly fix a few things that drew me out of the story. They are not critically important, but they may be of some assistance. I always appreciate when an extra pair of eyes spots things I missed in my manuscript...

Chapter two, when your mc decides he needs to learn how to fly a helicopter...

  Rand had flown in small aircraft several times growing up in Montana. He had a doctor friend that used to call and invite his ( should probably be him ) to fly. He would let Rand take the controls and go through training maneuvers. This had piqued Rand’s interest in flying and though he couldn’t afford to get his license he had spent a lot

Chapter six, right after the mention of " miracle day"

    Rand slept in the hospital bed next to Elsie’s. She woke him up several times during the night for help getting into the wheelchair so she could go to the bathroom. Her color had vastly. (vastly what? Improved?)

Chapter seven, in the ikea lunchroom.

‘Because you’re saying things to give me an open door to get away from you ( for clarity, I would put a comma here, I had to re read this sentence a few times before I 'got' it ) like you will do something that will make me leave anyway. You think you did something to make him have an affair.’

Chapter nine, just before they leave on the black ops mission...

He looked (at?) her.


That's it. If you write that well on the fly, you have a brilliant future ahead of you ( and you are a bastard :-)

The best compliment I can give you is that I enjoyed the story very much. It took my mind off the pain for a whole afternoon, and for that I thank you. When you have more that you are willing to post, please let me know. I would gladly read more.

Bob




Monte Thompson wrote 672 days ago

Pat thank you for much needed and appreciated feedback!

Monte Thompson wrote 672 days ago

Thanks for the add. Good observations all, here's the answers: The reason for Rand's inability to wake is one of the prevailing myteries of the series and is foreshadowed in the preface. More is revealed later in the book and in the series. I wantd the realization of the changes to his world to be slow and sleepy, again the reasons have to do with what was ahappenning befoe he awoke. The soccer vs. vollyball reference is more to do with his state of mind. I can remember my mother getting upset at me as a kid and calling me by the names of my siblings, sometimes all three before she got mine right. I do the same thing when my mind is going to fast for my mouth. All nouns become 'thing' and people are 'that guy'. It seems I should have spent more time making it clear that his slip was caused by his state of mind.
All things to work on. Thank you so much for the observations and the read!

Wanttobeawriter wrote 672 days ago

GOD STRING
This is a book based on an interesting concept and what all of us sometimes wish would happen: what would the world be like if everyone but yourself disappeared? Rand is a good main character; he’s likable and sympathetic and puzzled. A small thing: if all the cars crashed into each other and the alarms went off, wouldn’t Rand have awoken to those sounds rather than just the chirping of birds (and wouldn’t that make an even more dramatic beginning?) And a small thing, but wasn’t Tom Hanks talking to a volleyball? Either way, this is a good read. Highly starred and added to my shelf. Wanttobewriter: Who Killed the President?

Tod Schneider wrote 673 days ago

Welcome to Authonomy. This is phenomenal, considering you knocked it out in a few weeks. So nice when the muse strikes! I think the writing and the story concept are strong; your descriptions are solid and your main character interesting. (Hey, he sounds a lot like you! Probably a coincidence.) If I was to tinker, I might introduce the dog early on and bring him along on the walk to give your main character someone to talk to and break up the monologue a bit. But that's just my humble opinion. I think you're off and running. Good luck with this!
Tod
If you have any interest in Kids' literature, please have a look at the Lost Wink. http://authonomy.com/books/40646/the-lost-wink/

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