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word count 62014
date submitted 29.07.2012
date updated 05.08.2012
genres: Fiction, Fantasy, Horror, Young Adu...
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Knight of the Night

Azura Light

Mason has died and gone to Hell. Can he discover the truth about his death and escape his fate?

 

The mystery of Mason's death surrounds him as he traverses through the 9 levels of Hell. He doesn't have any memory of how he died or any idea why he was sent to Hell. He does know that he has a trial to complete and a terrible price to pay if he fails it. In Hell Mason is forced to forge friendships to survive but when one of his new friends is sent to Level 9, a place full of mystery, he rushes off to save him. But it may be too late. An unknown destiny hovers just over Mason's head. The jaws of oblivion are closing and Mason might not make it out.

 
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Chapter 9: Plan B

   The next day came without change and Mason could hardly believe it.  The red streaks disappeared from the sky and a lone butterfly flew over camp. Casting its blue glow over his small world.

   There was only one thing Mason could do now. He had no other option. He had to get information from the Intelligence Order.

   A hulk of a man guarded the door to their headquarters.

   "No one may pass without permission,” he stated loud and clear.

   "What do I need to get permission?" Mason asked.

   "Complete a simple task."

   "What kind of task?"

   "You have to retrieve a fang from a saber demon."

   "Where would I find saber demons?"

   "In the Desert of Trials there is an oasis beyond the sea of doors. A group of saber demons live there, but be warned these demons are not like the ones you have encountered here. They lost their mind long ago and have gone completely feral, even our demons avoid them."

   Mason left the guard station and headed out into the desert once again. The only possession he brought with him was the dagger. He walked slowly through its dunes of sand. He trudged onward over its hills of rocks and dead remains. He passed the sea of doors and he passed the Scribe's library. He thought briefly about entering the building, but quickly dismissed it when he saw a few hellhounds sniffing around the perimeter. After he climbed an unusually steep mountain of sand Mason saw a tiny lake at the edge of the desert. He squinted to make out the prowling shapes of the sabers. From this distance he could make out three of the beasts. 

   He walked toward them confidently. Ever since Shards was taken Mason no longer felt fear, he no longer felt any emotions. He pulled the dagger out from his pocket. The first saber snarled at him revealing its long yellowed teeth. Similar to any saber the top canines were vastly longer than the rest. The cat's tawny pelt was ragged and marked with scars.

   The cat lowered to the ground settling into a pounce position. It sprang from the back legs and launched toward him. All Mason had to do was hold the dagger straight and the saber did the rest. He barely felt remorse at his first kill. In his mind everything was clouded.

   The other two sabers looked up in surprise and charged Mason. He dispatched them just as quickly as he had the first. He had never been a killer and he still wasn't one, but neither was he the innocent man from his past life. It wasn't just luck that helped him kill this demon's quickly. Even if he didn't know it then Mason had a knack for taking a creature's life.

   He used the serrated edges of the dagger to hack off the six fangs.  Three pairs for one trip not bad Mason mused. He returned to camp slowly watching the sky flare up with red.  He stopped once to watch a delicate flower unfurl its soft white petals. It was the first flower he had seen in Hell.

   The guard was shocked to see three pairs of saber fangs dripping with blood in Mason's hands. "I can't believe you killed three saber demons and you didn't even get a scratch.  Our founders must have been correct when they told me to keep an eye on you. Welcome brother. Please come on in."

   The double doors opened soundlessly on its hinges. The headquarters resembled an ancient cathedral. The hallway was open and airy with pillars as support beams. Mythological murals were painted on every wall. The ceiling was painted to resemble tiny cherubs handing a bloody sword to Hades.

   He heard voices echo down the hallway from an open door. He pushed it open and saw Shuriken, Syphon, and unexpectedly Peony discussing newly received information. 

   Peony looked up in shock, "Mason what are you doing here?"

   "I passed the entrance exam and I need help I can only get from the Intelligence Order. Why are you here?"

   "Peony here has just completed her trial." Shuriken intervened. "And Mason here just passed my test with flying colors."

   "You already passed your trial?! Congrats." Mason said.

   "Yes we were all pleasantly surprised. She has the fastest time completing her trial.  Most fiends take nine days to complete it. I myself needed seven, but Peony finished in a record of five days and three hours." Shuriken answered. "Now she has just joined our ranks. So Mason what can I help you with?"

   "Well I need any information you have on how to get to the other levels."

   "You mean besides failing the trial." This time it was Syphon who spoke.

   "Yes."

   "We know there are many entrances to the levels, but we only know the exact location of two. One of them is the hole the River of Lost Dreams flows into, the other is in the basement of the Chop Shop." said Shuriken.

   "Mason why do you need to get into the lower levels?" Peony asked.

   "I have to save Shards and the key to solving my trial is on a lower level. Where do they judge the fiends?"

   "A courthouse adjacent to the Chop Shop. Why do you ask?"

   "I need to find out what level they sent Shards to. Don't they keep records of that?"

   "Yes the demons keep very meticulous files. We can take you to the courthouse, but no further than that."

   "I will go with you into the lower levels Knight." Peony took his hand in hers and gave it a light squeeze. Mason didn't let go. "Maybe we can save Shards together."

   Frantic running could be heard in the halls. A young fiend burst through the door.  "I have just received word from one of the scouts that Aneira has returned."

   Shuriken slammed her fists onto the hardwood table, "The leader of Division X?"

   "The one and only, boss."

   "Damn it she never returns this quickly from missions.  What is her hurry?"

   "Him." he pointed at Mason. "You better run she is coming for you." The scout peered directly into his eyes.

   "No," he answered in a tight voice, "I am tired of running.  Now is the time for me to fight back."

   "Is he for real?" the messenger asked.

   "No he is more than just real, he might be our savior." She motioned to the messenger and he left in a hurry.

   "Tell me where Aneira will need to go."

   "First she will report to Level 9 and then she will report to her headquarters where she will check in with her first officer. After that she will report to the courthouse to make sure all fiends are heading the correct levels. Unfortunately we have no idea where her HQ is."

   "Is there a chance we could break into the courtroom's archives before her?"

   "It might be possible. She likes to arrive at daybreak. Which is lucky for us because most of the demon's leave at night to scavenge the waste land. So I estimate we have about four hours in Hell time before she would get there.  Let's move out."

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Searcher wrote 289 days ago

Hi Azura, For your short pitch what about? Dead, Mason searches Hell for the truth about his death. Can he escape his fate?

You've started quite a few sentences in your story with "He". It might be a good idea to mix it up a bit. I'm on my way out now but if you'd be interested in a read/swap let me know!

Jane Lawry
The Genealogists: On Holy Ground
http://www.authonomy.com/books/44825/the-genealogists-on-holy-ground/

Debbie R wrote 291 days ago

This is certainly an imaginative piece of writing.
I like that the Prologue opens with Mason in his mundane office job, feeling totally fed up. Your description of him leaving the office, travelling home and looking up at the stars was well-written.
I like the character of Aneira and her tone 'Do we have to be so serious?' Although she only appears for a short time here she is well perceived. I did feel that Mason seemed very calm, considering the stranger who is bleeding in his appartment. You do explain this is some degree after he meets her by saying he always wanted to be remembered as a hero. Perhaps if you put this in before he gets back to his appartment it won't seem quite so odd that he doesn't panic when he sees the stranger. (Just my thoughts, of course).
Chapter one opens with a good description of the cell Mason finds himself in and the demons he can see in the corridor.
I spotted a typo here, '... demons no less, some with tall with distorted limbs' I think the second 'with' needs taking out.
I liked the image of Mason walking on the clouds - a nice touch.

You write with a good pace and the story flows well. I think fantasy loves will really enjoy this world you have created.

High stars and wishing you well.
Debbie
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RMAWriteNow wrote 293 days ago

Hi Azura; here for the read as promised. Okay, where to start? I have read your prologue and first two chapters. Firstly, you must be commended for your imagination. Mason's average, boring day, transforms into a marvellous journey to hell and many other wonders from your mind. Your descriptions are vivid and somehow feel very right within the context of your writing. The floating court and Egg moons, particularly good. This is definitely aimed at the right age group and certainly holds enough wonders to capture the imagination of most people.
If I were to help you in anyway, it would be to put a little more emphasis on all the marvels that are happening. I think Mason takes it all a little too much in his stride. The seeds are there from the bleeding woman onwards but I think Mason should be a little more flabbergasted by it all. The reference to 'The Inferno,' one of my own favourite books, is apt but Danté made all his work devastatingly scary. A little of this would just finish off your book nicely.
I hope this helps as you have a good flow to the story and are very talented. I think with a bit more emphasis and the odd edit, you could really be onto a winner. Keep up the good work.
Good luck and high stars.
RMA
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scargirl wrote 300 days ago

"Mason has died and gone to Hell. Can he discover the truth about his death and escape Hell?" I would say it more like this, "Mason has died and gone to Hell. Can he discover the truth about his death and escape this grim sentencing?" or something like that. It is stronger and avoids word over-usage...
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