Anathema

Fabulous story with an interesting plot which left me feeling so sorry for Reychel!
I like your writing style and everything seemed to flow beautifully.
Highly starred, looking forward to reading more.
regards
Claire C Riley
author of Limerence

ANATHEMA
This is an interesting young adult novel. You have a good main character in Reychel. She’s likable because she’s such a good friend to Ivy. Sympathetic because it’s her fifteenth birthday. The way Ivy was kidnapped with the strange coin left in her place introduces a good mystery: is there a band of former slaves out there, waiting to seek revenge? Or was she sold into prostitution? I think you’ll find a wide young adult audience for this as teenagers will readily identify with Reychel (they feel like slaves themselves every time they’re asked to clean up their room or follow a house rule). I think they’ll also appreciate there’s a little magic in the story (Ranee’s gift) but it’s not the whole story as in Harry Potter. Makes this so much easier to believe. An overall good read, I’m starring this and adding it to my shelf. Mark/Wanttobeawriter: Who Killed the President?

Marvelous book! I'm making a record of it's link and will, when I've some free time, go there to read the rest of it. Your writing is outstanding and I spotted no errors nor need for correction. Very professionally written book by a very talented author!

Reychel is facing the worst day of her life, her 15th birthday and branding, and to make it even worse, her dearest friend, Ivy is missing. In Ivy's place, Reychel finds a token with an emblem of a baby on it that winks at her and blows her kisses - lovely.

Kendek's appreciation for Reychel seems a bit of a cover-up and this reader suspects that he knows her stories are not stories but prophecies and so he becomes violently angry when Reychel tells the story of her escape. But Reychel does escape, rescued by Tania in a clock that seems to have some magical ability to stop time

Once rescued, Reychel greets her friend Ivy and they are both disguised and sent by Tania and her husband, Jon, to Keree where they will meet Johna. At this point, your uploaded chapters end and I most certainly hope to read the rest of your lovely book some day soon.

Even though fantasy is not my preferred genre, this story entirely captivated me. Your characters are well drawn and your dialogue is excellent: natural and authentic for the situation. Your plot is most outstanding, singular and unique and I was totally enthralled by your story Outstanding work and you have my very best wishes for the success of your lovely book on amazon!

Sincerely, Patricia Laster
"Breaking Free"

This is outstanding! Empathy with your heroine is established immediately, you've put her in dire circumstances that only get worse, your wordsmithing is fantastic... I've got nothing but admiration for this. Welcome to authonomy! Six stars! I'll have to get you on my "backed" shelf when I get some room. (We're only allowed five at a time.)
Best of luck with this! And if you are up for some middle-grade, tongue-in-cheek adventuring, please do come visit the Lost Wink. (I know you like winks.)
Thanks!
Tod
http://authonomy.com/books/40646/the-lost-wink/

Hi Megg; I have just read your first chapter.
This is good, really good. Such a very simple first chapter in essence, but beautiful in highlighting the salient points. Reychel's waking to the missing Ivy has the reader wondering as much as her. The token, and story for it being left in the bed, is well thought out. It really makes you wish for Ivy to have been taken to a better place. This is further strengthened later by the head branding (very unpleasant.) I liked the way Ella is introduced to the story, especially the reference to her having to shave her own head with having no friends yet.
I found this to be a proper read and could easily imagine myself sat reading the whole thing which isn't always the case here.
Top marks, Megg. I shall also watchlist this and hope to return to it.
RMA
The Snow Lily

Hi Megg,

The story you’ve written here is truly impressive. As I read through your chapters, I found myself hooked on every word. I didn't see anything awkward or out of place, or any areas I felt like skimming past. You have an amazing ability to tell a really fascinating story, and your characters are so very well developed. I felt myself right in the story with Reychel, the capable slave girl, outwardly tough, dreading her branding. Her friend Ivy's disappearance made me wonder, and also the token left behind was a mystery. It seemed to contain some type of magical qualities. I had an almost “Hunger Games” feel as I was reading this story, and yet the two are so very different in plot. I think with the appeal for this type of book at present, you will very easily have a large audience.

I think you are very talented and have given you 6 stars for this. I've been told that it will only show up as 4 stars for the first person starring for anonymity sake. Best wishes on the site and in your future publishing endeavors.

Kara
A Gate Called Beautiful