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rank 4341
word count 92594
date submitted 18.01.2009
date updated 15.02.2009
genres: Romance, Non-fiction, Harper True L...
classification: adult
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Einstein's Shutter

Vincent Yanez

Could being a caught in 9/11, finding my best friend dead and my relationship collapsing have all been avoided if I had stolen one shutter?

 

It was a Sunday, in August, 2001. I never really thought about the shutter after that day.

A month later the towers fell, eight months after that Ben died, ten months after my relationship came crashing down.

I know it’s an idiot notion that something as ridiculous, something as unimportant as my committing property theft has some sort of profound effect on how the world works. What it did make me realize though, is that day, that afternoon of contemplating taking Einstein’s shutter, signified the last thing I could remember being both upsetting and unimportant. It had made me think that life was somehow unfair, but in a subtle and somehow frivolous way. The next few years showed me what true humility and pain really was.

The shutter was most likely tossed aside without so much as a thought of whose house it once adorned. Einstein’s shutter would eventually make its way to a landfill, slowly disintegrating to become part of the earth again. Perhaps that was best for everyone.

Perhaps...

 
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Clare Wiltshire wrote 1915 days ago

I have read the first couple of chapters of this and I must say that it is excellent writing. The whole way through I can imagine everything you are describing in my head which is great. It is both funny & moving.

I only noticed one typo which was actually in the sentence that made me laugh the most: 'I shaved it off once and I looked amazingly (like) what my twin sister the lesbian would look like, if I had a twin sister who was a lesbian'! Great sentence - although I think it need the 'like' that I put in brackets.

The part when you write about just after the towers have fallen gave me a strange feeling in my stomach. It was written really well and that fact that I know this is a true story made it really moving - great writing!

I was going to put this on my watch list - but I have decided it is going straight to my bookshelf. Good luck with it. Clare

hjsplawn wrote 931 days ago

Your writing is great. Your descriptions made me feel like i was in the story and kept me reading more. What a great read. I read through the first couple of chapter and will be back to read more and let you know what I think.

I hope you can get a chance to look at Menopause. A dark comedy about a menopausal serial killer who kills all the “bad” people she has known throughout her life in order to make the world a better place.

I would love to hear your thoughts on it.

Thanks. Helen

mskea wrote 1886 days ago

Vincent,
I was immediately into your 'voice' here. Laughed out loud at 'as if shutter carting were a normal, natural, everyday kind of thing' was moved by 'maybe things would have been different, somehow, maybe.'
I am definitely interested and want to read on.
Ch2 opening good - 'besides its lack of windows, heat and ambiance,it was home for a bit.'
Wasn't sure about the 'can't afford to hire a moving truck..' -wouldn't it be cheaper than replacing all the furniture? - It would be in Britain, in my experience. - maybe there was a more convincing reason for leaving it all?
Laughed again at '...he'd hacve to go and find the defibulator..'
Finally moved again by the description of folk walking home after the Twin Towers collapsed. - 'It is silence except for the shuffling of feet.'
Thank you for the read,
This is going on my shelf.
Margaret
PS I'd value reaction / comment to Munro's Choice., thanks, M.

sestius wrote 1910 days ago

Hi Vincent - glad I stumbled across this looking through the comedy charts. Great stuff. First off, love the title. Pissed off that Treharne mentioned Salinger in his crit, because I was going to say how your title smacked of some of the greats, like 'Catcher in the Rye'. I don't know why, but the title just *works*. Your section-break titles are also very effective. Chpt titles often irritate me, because they can often seem so forced and contrived. Yours seemed apposite and thoughtful - deftly done. Particularly liked the 'That Day in September' one. By carefully referencing 9/11 earlier on, you set this up nicely, without being obvious. That makes it far more poignant. Two minor points that leapt out:

- "ambiance": my dictionary doesn't suggest this as an American variant of 'ambience', but perhaps it is out of touch;
- the last line of your chpt 1: "maybe things would have been different somehow, maybe." A very personal opinion (and forgive me for suggesting it), but have you considered turning that last comma into a full stop? To my mind it would read more punchily. See what you think.

Great stuff, Vincent. You shall have a moment on my shelf. Best of luck with it - sestius

Vincent Yanez wrote 1911 days ago

Wow....thank you....I don't think I could have written a better comment myself. =) Thank you, that really is inspiring to hear such praise.
Vince

Clare Wiltshire wrote 1915 days ago

I have read the first couple of chapters of this and I must say that it is excellent writing. The whole way through I can imagine everything you are describing in my head which is great. It is both funny & moving.

I only noticed one typo which was actually in the sentence that made me laugh the most: 'I shaved it off once and I looked amazingly (like) what my twin sister the lesbian would look like, if I had a twin sister who was a lesbian'! Great sentence - although I think it need the 'like' that I put in brackets.

The part when you write about just after the towers have fallen gave me a strange feeling in my stomach. It was written really well and that fact that I know this is a true story made it really moving - great writing!

I was going to put this on my watch list - but I have decided it is going straight to my bookshelf. Good luck with it. Clare

oldcurmudgeon wrote 1915 days ago

This is funny. I like your voice. I'm putting it on my watchlist and shall return.

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