The Scarlet Lady

Hi, not really my thing, but I agree with the comments about needing a cover up to make this stand out. One query about dialogue - someone who would say 'dammit' and 'afraid not', would be unlikely to then use the more formal 'does not have' rather than doesn't have. I know its picky, but keeping dialogue in the voice of the speaker is really important, rather than using correct grammar etc. Try reading it out loud (without the infills) as if you are the character and see if it flows off the tongue - I find that really helps me to get 'voices' right.

P.s. Come Back!!! :)

Hi Julie. I was wondering if you might spare the time to take a look at my book “The Ark of Humanity”? Here’s the pitch; God flooded the earth to annihilate humanity's sins. What if that sinful race didn't die when floodwaters covered them but instead adapted to breathe water? I will return any reads/backings.

Thanks and have a great day!
Scott Toney

Actually, come to think of it I do have one quibble. The title. It sounds like historical romance. And yup, like the others said, get a cover up....just to make it stand out more.

This is fantastic. Truly. I don't often gush but I just love your writing, love the premise, love the way it flows. You jump straight into the story and there is so much wild stuff going on that the brain reels, but it's believable. If there is any justice whatsoever this will go straight to the top and get a deal. Just like that. Off to make room on my shelf.
No quibbles. Huge well done. Jane

Hi Julie

I wasn't sure what to expect, but certainly got much more than usual! A fresh angle, a hunt in the dark, a sexy man....boy, oh, boy, this one has a long way to go. I'd buy this. Now, if you could put a really good pic on to draw more readers...you'll do well!

Good luck and SHELVED!
Elaina

Hi Julie,

Just had to watchlist this based on your sales blurb...quickly get a front cover for your book though!!!!

What a compelling start i must say...love the way you use the dramatic start coupled with Layla looking in the closet 'new panties and thick cotton socks'.......everyone loves that feeling of putting on new pants and mythological creatures are no exception.

Might be an idea to mention an old television show or dvd......it would seem to fit in with the imagery that you have started with.....again refering back to the battle and the trying clothes on in the closet.

But i´m notpicking. What i really and truly want to say is that i would genuinely pay to read this book...not that we are in this game for the money...ahem!

But a fantastic book...on my shelf.

Ed Quinn (Donkeys kill more people)

Hi Julie

As you will see I’m also a fan of a similar theme - ancient Egyptian characters set in the modern world. I have read your first chapter where the action sets up is racy and intrigues me enough to find out who she is running from and more of her relationship with Frank the magician, to shelve your book.

Go well and good luck on Authonomy.

Pedr (Fields of Yaru)

highly intriguing summary and enjoyable first chapter...will read on and come back with more comments...good luck