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date submitted 15.05.2009
date updated 11.11.2010
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Who's Your Paddy?

Linda Lee

Annie Zwick wants to be a famous reporter. Tapped to write a St. Patrick's day feature, she finds more fame than she seeks.

 

In an Irish pub called The Harp and Piper, Annie discovers a ragtag group of Irish immigrants who band together to protect one of their own: her main source, Liam Murphy.

Annie must befriend him to get her story, but Liam has other ideas. Charismatic and irresistible, she finds herself falling for him. That isn't all she finds. A guarded history, an aversion to the press, and an idyllic home in Dublin that sits empty. It's only when Annie makes her way to Ireland that she gets her answers. But she also discovers the consequences of becoming part of her own story.

Who's Your Paddy? is a tale of love and redemption where success is no longer measured by getting the headlines, but with finding a way to survive them.

 
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Linda Lee wrote 1347 days ago

This is a great addition to the genre of chick lit and I am certain that it is going to have a surge up the listings. You have that special quality of writing that pushes this to the higher end of the spectrum.

BACKED



Thank you Andrew!

Jenni_James wrote 1740 days ago

Ack! I must stop... I must pull myself away. This is incredible! I love it! It's so fun and flirtatious and light and perfect. Perfect dialogue, perfect tone, perfect pitch, perfect supporting characters... but most importantly, perfect hero. Who can deny a man with a sexy accent, sexy smile and a wink too? Not to mention the zings and fizzles just his touch creates! Hehehe! I love it! I'm a sucker for romantical stories and this one hits the spot!
Well done!
Shelved.
Jenni James
The Northanger Affect

Pierre Van Rooyen wrote 1786 days ago



Dear Linda,



Are those four leaf clovers? Never seen so many. Usually one or two in an unkempt lawn. I examined yours with a magnifying glass. Sherlock Holmes. Why I got so excited, is in my own work, I have a seven year old girl searching for them and indeed finding a few.

I have heard of desk research and have done a lot myself. Bar barstool research really takes the cake. Nice work. I can see a mischievous author really going to town on this.

Reading now and can’t fault the writing. Skilled, reasonably tight, easy to read. Straight into the action and largely character driven. The dialogue reads well. Especially sans ‘he said’.

Somehow, I keep on thinking we’re in Ireland. But we are in Boston.

Ogling your dialogue. Can’t believe it.

I’m looking for flaws to whack you with but find only good things to comment on. This time it’s the short, easy-to-hurdle paragraphs. The story flies.

Reading chapter two and discovering you’re keeping it up. Accolades. Tiny bits of editing, like a single word here and there. But I’m not going to tell you for fear of getting kicked on the shins. My own stuff has worse.

Pretty tight writing. Not a lot of stuff on Authonomy as good as this.

Just a query. The Americans say ‘a person that’. But I was taught that only things are ‘that’. People are ‘who’. Therefore ‘a person who’.

Might be worth checking. Perhaps usage has made ‘that’ acceptable.

OK, Who’s Your Paddy? Is on my bookshelf.

Among the best.

Wishing you well with your work.


Kind regards,



Pierre

The Little Girl in the Fig Tree

Jeff Blackmer wrote 1791 days ago

Linda,
What a great story. Just as everyone says, on St. Patricks day, that they're Irish, I found myself saying the same thing as I recalled the bit of Irish heritage I have. You make us want to be Irish!
Seriously, well done. Annie has a great sense of humor, and tells her story in a way that is fun and interesting to follow. The only things I would recommend you change: I think Harvey wall bange should be Harvey Wallbanger. Not much of a drinker, so I don't know for sure, but it probably should be capitalized. Also, the generic Authonomy cover does nothing for your good book. I've seen this one several times and it doesn't really fit either. An original cover would make you stand out and get more reads.
Shelved, and good luck with "Who's Your Paddy".
Jeff

LJ Rutledge wrote 1106 days ago

Hi Linda,

I really like the way this story commences. Annie is clearly eager to make good impressions, but, has a bit of awkwardness that impede her exact intentions. Yet, in spite of it, she comes through and is very likable. Your dialog is spot on and flows beautifully. Some of the narrative descriptions of the scene(s) are fabulous! I liked it when Mick told Annie she was going to "burn a hole in that arse", and the description of her cheeks sizzling with a high octane blush is fantastic. Mick is sharp and I find it amusing that he seems able to read Annie's mind. Then, there's Liam, very smooth and attentive from the very beginning.

I like this story and plan to come back to it for a deeper read when I have more time and fewer obligations. I had it on my shelf for a time, and plan to put it back later when it is beneficial to you.

Best wishes,
LJ Rutledge, Shadow Puppet

Linda Lee wrote 1227 days ago

Hi Linda,

I find I discover some very interesting reads when I venture to check out the works of those who claim on their bio page that rate swapping is not their objective. We spend so much time admiring those who have highly rated books (a result of backscratching) that we do not take the time to read "real" gems like this one.

My first thought was instant.....you captured the essence of the bartender's character by adding the accent to his dialect. I knew there would be more precise narrative descriptions to come. I was right. Your dialogue is convincing and with it comes properly timed / described action / thought (of your protag).

I have read only the first chapter, which I found to be one of the best I have read on here. It is fitting however, as I strive to locate those who use dialogue cleverly (such as you) so as to learn. I am a novice and truly appreciate it when I run across a rare find such as this. I certainly hope you are querying this book heavily as I would suspect it would impress the harshest of critics.

I am w-listing this so as to read more later. I really liked it. My best of luck to you with this and the further ones you plan to write.

Sincerely,

Emmett
(E M Delaney)
-- THE VIRUS

Coming Soon:
MIRACLE IN THE SWAMP



Emmett, thank you so much for the kind words, they are much appreciated. I've just finished the third round of intense editing and will be shopping this novel in earnest soon. Comments like yours are what makes it all worthwhile. Thank you.

LeeAnn
(Linda Lee)

EMDelaney wrote 1227 days ago

Hi Linda,

I find I discover some very interesting reads when I venture to check out the works of those who claim on their bio page that rate swapping is not their objective. We spend so much time admiring those who have highly rated books (a result of backscratching) that we do not take the time to read "real" gems like this one.

My first thought was instant.....you captured the essence of the bartender's character by adding the accent to his dialect. I knew there would be more precise narrative descriptions to come. I was right. Your dialogue is convincing and with it comes properly timed / described action / thought (of your protag).

I have read only the first chapter, which I found to be one of the best I have read on here. It is fitting however, as I strive to locate those who use dialogue cleverly (such as you) so as to learn. I am a novice and truly appreciate it when I run across a rare find such as this. I certainly hope you are querying this book heavily as I would suspect it would impress the harshest of critics.

I am w-listing this so as to read more later. I really liked it. My best of luck to you with this and the further ones you plan to write.

Sincerely,

Emmett
(E M Delaney)
-- THE VIRUS

Coming Soon:
MIRACLE IN THE SWAMP

Craig Ellis wrote 1252 days ago

Hi
I am areader on this site and share an account with my partner Craig Ellis. This book is incredible. I liked the fact you begin with a bang with grat dialogue and you sucked me into the story immediately. I do not see very many great writers on this site. And, you got it all going on. I read chapter one and will carry on...in the meantime could you take alook at the Sun and the Saber, my partner's book?
Till later.
Vi

Ammari Sky wrote 1338 days ago

I have read almost the entire thing I think on another site and I still love it! Glad to see you here! Thanks for backing my books.

Autumn Rosen

paperbat wrote 1338 days ago

Linda. Apologies but I have been told my comments from yesterday did not get loaded - glitch in my computer? So Iam resending it, and RE-BACKING your book as before.
I would be pleased if you could critisize/comment or back my childrens book ; Paperbat Adventures.
Jerry - paperbat

Walden Carrington wrote 1344 days ago

Linda,
Who's Your Paddy? is an original and enthralling romance novel with a gripping plot. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans wrote 1344 days ago

You have crafted a most interesting and compelling storyline. I do like your choice to use the first person narrative voice and this coupled with your use of short paragraphs and crisp, realistic dialogue keeps the pace of your story flowing well. Your story is character rich and I especially like your character development of Annie. All of this together with your descriptive writing makes your work a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The beginning

yasmin esack wrote 1344 days ago

Linda, this is very well written and your thoughts come across very clear.

Should altering be alerting in line4?

Backed

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 1344 days ago

Dear Linda,
You are definitely the queen of dialog! Realistic, modern, fun, fast, and witty - really great!

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

Linda Lee wrote 1347 days ago

HELLO LINDA LOU 'WHO'S YOUR PADDY'

A COVER dressed up for the Irish -American market, looks great, well done, Bord Failte will commend you for this and invite you over for the St Patrck's Day parade. i like it, what irish man would not?
the pitch well written and again pulls you in further to read what is is all about
it's written with a very edgy and pacy edge to it , a real page turner. great fun and games good read for an aeroplane trip. this book will do well , and top of the morning to ye Linda, Slan leat.
backed
TOM BYE 'FROM HUGS TO KISSES'
please read mine, which is set in the Dublin of the 40s and you might find interesting, hopefully and back thanks



Thank you Tom!

Linda Lee wrote 1347 days ago

This is a great addition to the genre of chick lit and I am certain that it is going to have a surge up the listings. You have that special quality of writing that pushes this to the higher end of the spectrum.

BACKED



Thank you Andrew!

Linda Lee wrote 1347 days ago

Linda - I really like this so far. Annie is a great character, and an Irish musician... can't go wrong there! ;-) I was confused in the first chapter when Annie just assumed that she was assigned "The Irish feature" and started researching it before she knew for sure what she was going to be writing about. But that could just be me, and is also easily fixed.

The dialogue moves right along and is generally spot-on, I think - it's realistic, for the most part. The bartender named "Mick" put me off for a second, as "mick" is derogatory slang for an Irishman... not sure if that was intentional on your part, or not!

Overall I think this has great promise and I'll be reading more! Backed.



Thank you for reading, I appreciate it. I'm not sure why you were confused though, she didn't assume. It says pretty clearly she was awarded 'Reporter of the Month' and given a feature. The assignment folder had the details in it, which she started researching. Mick is a very common Irish name, it's usually short for Michael.

NancyV wrote 1347 days ago

Linda - I really like this so far. Annie is a great character, and an Irish musician... can't go wrong there! ;-) I was confused in the first chapter when Annie just assumed that she was assigned "The Irish feature" and started researching it before she knew for sure what she was going to be writing about. But that could just be me, and is also easily fixed.

The dialogue moves right along and is generally spot-on, I think - it's realistic, for the most part. The bartender named "Mick" put me off for a second, as "mick" is derogatory slang for an Irishman... not sure if that was intentional on your part, or not!

Overall I think this has great promise and I'll be reading more! Backed.

Tom Bye wrote 1348 days ago

HELLO LINDA LOU 'WHO'S YOUR PADDY'

A COVER dressed up for the Irish -American market, looks great, well done, Bord Failte will commend you for this and invite you over for the St Patrck's Day parade. i like it, what irish man would not?
the pitch well written and again pulls you in further to read what is is all about
it's written with a very edgy and pacy edge to it , a real page turner. great fun and games good read for an aeroplane trip. this book will do well , and top of the morning to ye Linda, Slan leat.
backed
TOM BYE 'FROM HUGS TO KISSES'
please read mine, which is set in the Dublin of the 40s and you might find interesting, hopefully and back thanks

thebobster wrote 1349 days ago

Great story!

Bob/ Rob/ Bobby/ whatever

andrew skaife wrote 1349 days ago

This is a great addition to the genre of chick lit and I am certain that it is going to have a surge up the listings. You have that special quality of writing that pushes this to the higher end of the spectrum.

BACKED

Burgio wrote 1411 days ago

WHO’S YOUR PADDY?
What could be more fun than spending an evening in an Irish bar? Why, reading a story that takes place in one, of course. The Harp and Piper makes a wonderful background. You have good characters in both Annie and Liam. Before you begin reading this, you should clear away distractions for the whole afternoon because it’s the kind of book in which you can become ao totally engrossed you miss everyday things like preparing dinner. I’m adding it to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Barry Wenlock wrote 1413 days ago

Hi Linda, I really enjoyed reading your work and thought that it was a weel written story with lots of good characters. Backed with pleasure, Barry

Lesley Bonney wrote 1588 days ago

Hi Linda, The story gets straight into it rather than a waffle at the beginning - so it grips you immediately. Surprised it's not higher up in the ratings.

Good luck with it anyway, Lesley Bonney - Kangaroo Land

backed.

Freddie Omm wrote 1649 days ago

great teasing intro – love the short punchy sentence “he was drop dead gorgeous” – and then “he looked straight at me as if he knew exactly who I was” captures her attraction to liam (and later, we find, his to her) with perfect succinctness


you do dialogue particularly well, each conversation doing exactly what it should – advancing plot and developing character... the bartender and his wife are vivid and wonderfully irish


premise is appealing – reporter on the rise, almost reluctantly undertaking the job in hand, yet it leading to fortuitous meeting with liam... haven’t read enough to see where things go beyond the lustful bathroom scene in chp 5, but from the pitch it seems their love affair will be a bumpy ride resplendent with more of the rich characters you draw so well


this is great and i’m putting it on my shelf for a spin

freddie
("honour")

Bradley Wind wrote 1650 days ago

Linda.
You already have me wishing I had a way to go to Ireland...of course I'd need a nanny to accompany.
I received the same ring story from my good friend after she'd gotten engaged.
I'm off to send my sister over to read this one.
I have no nits for this...smooth and sure to entertain.
Best of luck with it!
-=Bradley

Steve Ward wrote 1697 days ago

Linda
Wow, this is great writing. Annie is quite a character. Good mix of narrative and dialogue and well edited. As an editor I couldn't see anything to criticize. You have lot of talent and a great writer's voice. Fun read. Good luck with it.
Steve Ward
Test Pilot's Daughter: Revenge

msm0202 wrote 1697 days ago

Linda,
I'm not Irish, but I've spent enough time in Irish bars in New York City to know this has a wonderful ring of truth to it. And as a former journalist, I can also say that I can't think of a better place to do a bit of reporting than an Irish pub—though you do tend to feel it the next morning, as Annie does here.

Great stuff. The email from Liam in chapter three is a nice touch, too. Annie is a very compelling character, and I love the cast of characters around her in The Harp.
Easily shelved.
Mark

JohnRL1029 wrote 1699 days ago

Lots of Irish tales on this site. Your dialogue is snappy and fun. Your characters vivid and sharp. Shelved.

Lisa Blue Eyes wrote 1700 days ago

Dialogue is excellent. Liam would prove a weakness to me for sure. Beautiful storytelling. Shelved.

Valentina wrote 1718 days ago

This is great! You're created a character all of us here on Authonomy can relate to, being a writer!
Annie is very 3D and a believable, well rounded character - this is essential in an MC. You do well to insert comedy...particularly in the dialogue. The first person narrative works very well. You protray it well when she gets all gooey eyed for the handsome guy i know how that feel - I do it all the time! Love the irish inserts too, the last line of ch 1 is hilarious.
Best of luck! x

JANVIER wrote 1733 days ago

Hello Linda,

You have a compelling story here told in the first person. Expressive and engaging, this well-written story has all the right elements of characterization, setting, plot, pacing, dialogue and narrative. Ireland comes out as a brand that holds a great deal of appeal. Rightly shelved.

All the best.

Janvier (Flash of the Sun)

Graviola wrote 1738 days ago

I've just readed it... you left us hanging! I like the plot a lot, it's a breath of fresh air after so many I-hate-you-but-I-really-love-you plots. You writing is fluid and easy... butI think you need to build a bit the beggining, the characters appeared a bit too quickly... maybe to construct their world a bit before they show up? And her friend, Paul, I guess he acts a bit too effeminate? I'm sorry but my guy friends act a bit differently you know? They are playfull and downright crazy sometimes, but there are small differences between them and my girl friends that I didn't feel when reading Paul. Well, I loved the story and I'm waiting for the next chapter..I've just discovered authonomy so sorry if I did something not usually done around here.

The Bevster wrote 1739 days ago

Hi Linda,

I really like this, the useof mostly dialogue makes it fast flowing and very easy to get involved in.

You have a grerat character in Annie, she's a down to earth likeable girl ;o)

I like all the bits of Irish heritage you give us... for instance the claddagh ring, what a beautiful saying "With my hands I give you my heart and crown it with my love." (I know if some Irish rugby playing hottie said that to me I'd melt!!) Also like how you wear it a certain way to show if oyu're available or not. It's those little bits of attention to detail that made the story come alive for me.

Just off to pop you on the shelf!

Love Bev, x

Thicker Than Water

Ayrich wrote 1739 days ago

I am sorry it took me so long to return the read. I dont know how I missed it. I love the phrase Sensible panties. its like a shock of cold water to the face. woke me up and brought me right back into the story.
Shelved.

JD Revene wrote 1739 days ago

Linda,

Krista (Riley's Game) recommended your work to me, so I thought I'd take a look.

Great pitch (and a good cover), love the last sentence, which makes me want to dive straight into reading.

I love the opening, action from the get go, and the dropping of the hand is the second paragraph is great. My only quibble with the first paragraph is that I don't think you need the word "bright"--it's evident from the action.

For me chick-lit is to a great extent about voice and MC, who has to be engaging. You've got voice, in that first scene, first person narration suggesting a down-to-earth woman, with a poetic tendency.

The second scene begins to reveal the character, and from go there are the endearing imperfections and foibles that are needed to make an MC engaging.

Minor nit-pick but in your second line of dialogue, after George said, you have a comma where I think you need a full-stop (or period). Similarly a little later you have Paul deliver the line: Fuck 'em. Flaunt it[,] Annie, you earned it." where I think you need a comma before Annie (direct address).

The dialogue by the way is very good, when I read it out loud it sounds real. You use elipses nicely to indicate rythmns of speach and make good use of action beats too. On elipses though, once you use one where I think an em dash would be more appropriate, indicating interuption rather than pause. In the same place you have Annie's reactions associated with her sister's words. To illustrated what you have is:

"Yeah, great actually. Was just thinking about home."

"Well you chose to..." Before she could launch into her usual tirade about my choice to follow my ex-boyfriend to Arizona, I quickly took command of the conversation.

"Linds, I've just been awarded a feature story. I'm looking for an angle."

I'd recast this as:

"Yeah, great actually. Was just thinking about home."

"Well you chose to--"

"Linds." Before she could launch into her tirade about my choice to follow an ex-boyfriend to Arizona, I took command. "I've been awarded a feature story. I'm looking for an angle."


Apart from illustrating the two points I mentioned I've tried to show how some words could be lost from the beat. I hope this isn't presumptous, sometimes I can't help myself.

Then in the pub there's just the odd word here or there to give a hint of Irishness (Jayses or missus) well handled.

Great ending to the chapter, picking up on the beginning and making me want to read on to find out.

Now she spills that drink . . . as promised in the pitch . . . and with it contact with Liam, this charming, roguish Irish musician.

The awkward dialogue between the two of them is very well observed.

This is a great story. I love Liam as well as Annie, and I've found it all to easy to read.

I'm giving this a quick spin on my shelf.

John Harold McCoy wrote 1739 days ago

Hi, Linda. This could be a fun book. Love your style. Great dialog, character very believable and colorful. From the pitch, I didn't get anything that really hooked me. 'There was a suggestion of something happening but I don't think it was enough. I would consider making it a little more intriguing. But, it's the writing I think should be appreciated so I'll give it shelf time. Good luck with it.

Jenni_James wrote 1740 days ago

Ack! I must stop... I must pull myself away. This is incredible! I love it! It's so fun and flirtatious and light and perfect. Perfect dialogue, perfect tone, perfect pitch, perfect supporting characters... but most importantly, perfect hero. Who can deny a man with a sexy accent, sexy smile and a wink too? Not to mention the zings and fizzles just his touch creates! Hehehe! I love it! I'm a sucker for romantical stories and this one hits the spot!
Well done!
Shelved.
Jenni James
The Northanger Affect

marion wrote 1741 days ago

I do hope he is Irish! I read the first chapter of the story and thoroughy enjoyed the developing plot As a young report er in what seems like a prestigious newspaper I was caught up with the thrill of getting a proper story to write about. You sense a mystery about her Irish history and background. - I loved the 'dainty one finger salute ' phrase, Annie is such a likeable character that you want her to do well. I will read on... been backed for a few days... good luck and a green trefoil to go with it.!

maitreyi wrote 1742 days ago

i felt this had a sticky start. several words chosen not quite the right ones (preceded, struggled, belied) and a dodgy pitch. HOWEVER, enjoyed it very much once it got going. great dialogue and fun to read.

i'm shelving this but i would look again at the pitch and the opening paras if i were you.
xx
maitreyi
BLOGSPOT

maitreyi wrote 1742 days ago

your pitch has typos and several changes of tense.

aislingb wrote 1743 days ago

First off, I'm Irish so I was a little worried about your title. I really don't like 'oirishness'. Loved your opening paragraph. Love how you equate February 29th with her life changing. Very funny romp. Two things. Its Claddagh ring. And look at the dialogue of some of the Irish characters. I can assure you, I wouldn't talk like a lot of them. Some things I might say include 'What's the craic?' (what's going on, craic is fun), insults, 'You Muppet!' )idiot, 'You Bowsie', (brat, bad person etc). Overall I'm going to shelve this as it made me laugh.

Krista Darrach wrote 1745 days ago

Who's your paddy?---
Linda,
This is charming, and made me happy to be Irish...it flows so very well.
And funny! You've got some talent lady.
Loved it.
Shelved!
Krista Darrach
~Rileys Gift (I picked an Irish name on purpose! Riley Baker) Check it out if you'd like...I'd love your opinion.

Paolito wrote 1746 days ago

Who's Your Paddy?...

My ancestors are Irish...the practical joke in c.2 is sooooo Irish.

Finished your partial and I'm having so much fun. This is very shelved.

Cheers,
Sheryl (In All The Wrong Places)

Paolito wrote 1746 days ago

Who's Your Paddy?...

C. 2 is every bit as engaging as c.1 and you're developing your MC really well. You know how to weave in backstory seamlessly, and how to end a scene with a bang, not a whimper.

Reading on...

Paolito wrote 1746 days ago

Who's Your Paddy?...

Love your pitch and loved c.1, especially the last line. LOL

Reading on...

noyzcrkit wrote 1760 days ago

Wow. I'm completely hooked. I'd love to see more. This is the first book on my shelf.

R.A. Battles wrote 1763 days ago

Hi Linda,

I came for the cover, stayed after the pitch, and shelved for the writing. Good luck!

Rodney
Saturdays At Margie's Beauty Salon

Elaina wrote 1765 days ago

Hi Linda

Had to laugh at Pierre's comment about four-leaf clovers! My nephew once spent the whole holiday with us...searching for one! And found it, too! Had to take photographs! Anyway, onto your story. Really like it, polished, great dialogue. Smooth and flowing.

Definitely giving you a whirl on my shelf.
Elaina

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 1769 days ago

The Irish, always a recipe for a smooth read laced with subtle humour. Very well written and thoroughly engaging. On my shelf. Patrick Barrett (Shakespeares Cuthbert)

Alecia Stone wrote 1783 days ago

Hi Linda,

Great writing; no flaws there. The story is interesting and it pulled me in right away.

Wonderful characterization and credible dialogue. Loved Annie’s humour. Good pacing, it ran along smoothly and I felt it was easy to read.

Well done.

Shelved!

Shinzy :)

wainwright& priestley wrote 1786 days ago

Being Irish, you engaged my interest straight off, anyway. So far, I think this is polished, with very good use of dialogue and a cracking pace. Will back it

Pierre Van Rooyen wrote 1786 days ago



Dear Linda,



Are those four leaf clovers? Never seen so many. Usually one or two in an unkempt lawn. I examined yours with a magnifying glass. Sherlock Holmes. Why I got so excited, is in my own work, I have a seven year old girl searching for them and indeed finding a few.

I have heard of desk research and have done a lot myself. Bar barstool research really takes the cake. Nice work. I can see a mischievous author really going to town on this.

Reading now and can’t fault the writing. Skilled, reasonably tight, easy to read. Straight into the action and largely character driven. The dialogue reads well. Especially sans ‘he said’.

Somehow, I keep on thinking we’re in Ireland. But we are in Boston.

Ogling your dialogue. Can’t believe it.

I’m looking for flaws to whack you with but find only good things to comment on. This time it’s the short, easy-to-hurdle paragraphs. The story flies.

Reading chapter two and discovering you’re keeping it up. Accolades. Tiny bits of editing, like a single word here and there. But I’m not going to tell you for fear of getting kicked on the shins. My own stuff has worse.

Pretty tight writing. Not a lot of stuff on Authonomy as good as this.

Just a query. The Americans say ‘a person that’. But I was taught that only things are ‘that’. People are ‘who’. Therefore ‘a person who’.

Might be worth checking. Perhaps usage has made ‘that’ acceptable.

OK, Who’s Your Paddy? Is on my bookshelf.

Among the best.

Wishing you well with your work.


Kind regards,



Pierre

The Little Girl in the Fig Tree

SHRous wrote 1786 days ago

Very good story. The characters are believable and interesting. I do wonder why Roisin went from being rather rude and haughty to being so friendly with Annie. At first, I thought it was because of Liam, but Roisin then seemed to encourage Annie to go after him.

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