I have already left a comment - not very positive I'm afraid - but just read through all the other comments. I was shocked at the lack of critique and amount of gushing! I sincerely hope this is not an example of reciprocal hype. A couple of over-the-top positive comments appear to be fishing for feedback on their own work. What is the point of that. The person who gave his full and honest opinion was 'Monkeyfeet' who for his troubles is disrespected by another member of this site.
Sorry but in my view the first para is a turn-off. 'Heavy stain on my nostril'!! Canvas shoes and heavy footfall does not work. Shoes 'soaking up a puddle'!! Afraid the rest of the text is full of laboured metaphors and similes.Overall, does not do it for me