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written 469 days ago
cherry

Neville, I’ve put together a Quantitative Critique Score Sheet to respond to your story from a contest perspective. I hope you find this informative and helpful. (Max 10x10 pts)

Title: [Cosmos 501]
Author: [Neville Kent]

Wow Factor (Read Speed/Enjoyment)
[10] Speed (Easy/Fast)
[09] Enjoyment (your writing is responsible for that)
[09] Interest (very good scenes)

Literacy (Editing/Proofing/Structure)
[07] Free of (obvious) Spelling Errors (easy fix)
[07] Free of (obvious) Contextual Grammar Errors (easy edit)
[10] Free of Distracting Dialog

Story
[09] Coherent / Order
[10] Character/Subject Development

Marketing
[10] Cover Design
[09] Pitch (Consider having stronger teasers. For example, say the Keeper might explain some exciting secrets without saying what they are.

TOTAL
[90/100]

Comments: I enjoyed the story. Characters and plot were compelling. I recommend it.

E L Russell
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written 469 days ago
cherry

Jo Lynn, I’ve put together a Quantitative Critique Score Sheet to respond to your story from a contest perspective. I hope you find this informative and helpful. (Max 10x10 pts)

Title: [Who Killed The President?]
Author: [Jo Lynn]

Wow Factor (Read Speed/Enjoyment)
[10] Speed (Easy/Fast)
[09] Enjoyment
[09] Interest

Literacy (Editing/Proofing/Structure)
[10] Free of (obvious) Spelling Errors
[10] Free of (obvious) Contextual Grammar Errors
[09] Free of Distracting Dialog

Story
[09] Coherent / Order
[10] Character/Subject Development

Marketing
[10] Cover Design
[09] Pitch (a bit short – consider a stronger teaser)

TOTAL
[95 /100]

Comments: I enjoyed the story. Characters and plot were realistic. I highly recommend it.

E L Russell

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written 469 days ago
cherry

AG, I’ve put together a Quantitative Critique Score Sheet to respond to your story from a contest perspective. I hope you find this informative and helpful. (Max 10x10 pts)

Title: [Shining Dawn]
Author: [A.G.Chaudhuri]

Wow Factor (Read Speed/Enjoyment)
[09] Speed (Easy/Fast)
[09] Enjoyment
[10] Interest

Literacy (Editing/Proofing/Structure)
[10] Free of (obvious) Spelling Errors
[10] Free of (obvious) Contextual Grammar Errors
[10] Free of Distracting Dialog

Story
[10] Coherent / Order
[09] Character/Subject Development

Marketing
[10] Cover Design
[09] Pitch (a bit long with minor plot give away)

TOTAL
[96 /100]

Comments: This is a story I very much enjoyed and appreciated. I look forward to purchasing the book for my real bookshelf.

E L Russell

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written 528 days ago
cherry

I am a long-time reader of science fiction and I must say I really enjoyed the immersion into this universe you’ve created. The in-depth descriptions of place and people satisfied a hunger I have had for some time. True, there are a few gaps – places where I would have preferred to linger and listened more. As one who has also done research on cognition I like the inclusion selective memory loss into your plot. The only downside I see is the descriptor “Incomplete”. Please don’t leave me hanging out here. Good story! view book

written 543 days ago
cherry

Bob, thanks for bringing your book to my attention. I like what you had to share. If I had the story in book form I would keep it on the stand by my bed to read. Will reminds me of a few students I have had over the years. Good job!

E L Russell view book

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