Hi Christine,I was assigned 'Maximus' as a reading review on another website just a week or two ago - I loved it then and love it now. Great writing altogether. All the very best with it! ...I've stuck it on my shelf!Jacqueline Flynn
I became absolutely engrossed in this story, so much so my heart was beating faster - I gasped when MeiLing gave birth to the second child! I cant remember the last time I read something that made me feel like this.... I certainly dont remember being so entrenched in any story so early on. I'ts an exceptionally intriguing tale - very believable. It's well written and your use of dialgue, even though it was fairly sparse, was authentic. I'm kind of struggling to find something constructive to say and am scratching the bottom of the barrel, but here goes; Kwun Tak was involved in his fathers business in Nanjing but had to move with the threat of war - but why have you made this point? Was business good, and they had to give up a lot in the move? Had their luck turned since leaving? Or was the threat of war simply enough to firghten them into going? If so, I think explaining or elaborating slightly more on this would help.Other than that, there's little more I can add - it's a riviting read... and it's the first book I've added to my shelf! Best of luck!
Jacqueline. This caught my attention by the great title. Hope you will soon get an appropriate cover for it that should attract more readers. My only critique at the moment is the length of the first chapter. I'm sure you could find a suitable place to split it so readers would be encouraged to continue. At the moment a reader may find it a bit daunting. On my shelf. Good Luck.
Thanks so much - that really is helpful. I did have a shorter chapter initially but lengthened it to suit agents etc. I'll redress that and also look to getting a cover done.Can I just ask though, is this a subject that would appeal to people in the wider world? I'm from Belfast and all my life ate, drank and slept the 'Troubles' - I just dont know if other people would be interested in hearing about them??