This is a good exercise for writers who need practice with pitching and also learning how to follow guidelines when they submit to an agent. All you need to do is post your logline-- a one-sentence summary of your novel-- in this here thread. If I like it, I'll pop over and take a look at your book. If I don't, I'll tell you why and you can resubmit for another shot.
If you don't know how to write a logline, here is a really great resource to help you out: http://querytracker.blogspot.com/2009/02/writing-loglinethe-one-sentence-pitch.html
Even if you don't care for a crit, this is still a good opportunity for those of you who struggle with putting together a short pitch. So what are you waiting for? Post!
Okay, so it seems that a lot of people don't actually know how to write a logline. If you're one of those, click on the link-- it's really helpful. Most of you won't, since you think you know how to write one. Recognizing that, I decided I'd post a list of what I'm looking for:
1. Character: who is the MC? I don't care about the supporting characters much; mention them in passing if you have to, but don't go dropping a bunch of names because that will confuse the reader. I only really need to know who the MC is.
2. Conflict: What problem does your character have to overcome?
3. Stakes: What are the consequences if your character fails?
Specifically for number three, these don't have to be spelled out completely. Sometimes it's not necessary to do so; the reader will draw his own conclusions as to what will happen. As with anything, the rules are flexible. The important thing is knowing when they work and when you need a bit more wiggle room. But seeing as how most of the log lines I've seen are super vague, it's best to be as specific as possible.
Here's one log line that passed muster on the second submission, if you want an example:
"In Restoration London an ambitious writer pursues the truth behind a Catholic terror plot, but in doing so leaves his young wife vulnerable to blackmail and forced to become a spy in her own home."
Now, don't be shy. Post! Posted: 06/05/2012 22:08:09Last Edit: 25/05/2012 10:00:00 by Textual Ribbons
Hey now. Don't come rushing all at once! Posted: 06/05/2012 22:26:17
Well, I've got writing to do, folks. Feel free to post your loglines while I'm gone, and I'll look at them when I come back. Posted: 06/05/2012 22:34:42
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Nickolas is an alien who crashed on earth, he suffers genetic manipulation, torture, and finally highschool. Posted: 06/05/2012 22:36:24
37 days ago
Time-travelled transcripts turn tomorrow's tech to today's. Posted: 06/05/2012 22:38:40
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Okay, following the logline formula...
A twenty-six year-old widow plays Forfeit, the ultimate game of dares, and gambles with money, morals and the man of her dreams.
http://www.authonomy.com/books/31179/forfeit/ Posted: 06/05/2012 22:50:24Last Edit: 06/05/2012 22:52:25 by DaisyFitz
Nickolas is an alien who crashed on earth, he suffers genetic manipulation, torture, and finally highschool. Hmm... sorry, no. This isn't an effective hook, though it looks like it could be with some reworking. It's one of those things that should be interesting, but isn't because the conflict isn't clear. Give us a clear picture of the stakes here. I'd check out the link I posted-- it'll give you the tools to take this from 'no' to 'go'. Posted: 06/05/2012 22:53:32
Nickolas is an alien who crashed on earth, he suffers genetic manipulation, torture, and finally highschool.
Time-travelled transcripts turn tomorrow's tech to today's. No. This sounds like a sales pitch for a futuristic gadget. Who are the characters, and where is the conflict? Stakes? What you've given us is the idea that spawned your story, not the story itself. Posted: 06/05/2012 22:55:50
Time-travelled transcripts turn tomorrow's tech to today's.
admit it, though. you clicked my cartoon face. Posted: 06/05/2012 22:56:52
admit it, though. you clicked my cartoon face. @DaisyFitz Yes! That's a good one, Caro. I've already read, critted and backed your book multiple times in the past though. Dunno if you want/need me to do it again. Posted: 06/05/2012 22:58:17
admit it, though. you clicked my cartoon face.
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