Me, I have a one track mind. So put your sex scenes here and I'll tell what I think of it. A good sex scene for me shows the character's feelings and thoughts. I'm less so interested in titillation or gushy feelings.

If you want to take a stab as critiquing the excerpts, please feel free to do so. I don't aim to be a one-man shop here.

Posted: 15/06/2012 15:32:39
Last Edit: 16/06/2012 00:31:36 by olefish

I can't. These forums are open to all ages. My sex scenes are about sex.

Posted: 15/06/2012 15:52:06

I can't. These forums are open to all ages. My sex scenes are about sex.

My sex scenes tend to be fairly short.

This is from one of my short stories.

And then they did it.

I decided to edit it back from the original which was a bit too extended.

And then they... you know... did it.

I always think when writing sex scenes that a lot of the allure is in what you don't describe and leave to the reader's imagination, so the edited version is, in its way, more graphic.



Posted: 15/06/2012 16:15:45
Last Edit: 15/06/2012 16:17:06 by Pete Marchetto

I can't. These forums are open to all ages. My sex scenes are about sex.

My sex scenes tend to be fairly short.

This is from one of my short stories.

And then they did it.

I decided to edit it back from the original which was a bit too extended.

And then they... you know... did it.

I always think when writing sex scenes that a lot of the allure is in what you don't describe and leave to the reader's imagination, so the edited version is, in its way, more graphic.

Authonomy is supposed to be for adults only. If the young ones are about, it's certainly not my problem but the parent's.

It depends on the tone of your narrative. The edited version gives a comical feel to it. So I would hope the rest of the story matches the comical feel.

Authonomy is supposed to be for adults only. If the young ones are about, it's certainly not my problem but the parent's.

Comical?