Hi Ho, Al! How are you doing? Well, I hope!
I'm looking for some help if you have some free time. I'm finally at a point where I'm not sure what to do with my rewritten first three chapters of Existence, and feel I need some help. I just posted them --
HC (and others, including you, I believe!) suggested losing a lot of my narrative and exposition and moving some of it into dialogue/action, which I've tried to do. But the back story I had in chapters one and two won't work in dialogue with anyone in those chapters. That information might fit into dialogue when Alex is in the psych hospital, but she doesn't really become involved in hospital life until chapter five. I'm concerned that without that back story, my MC might not be particularly interesting or readers may not really care about her enough to keep reading.
If you have any time to have a look, or have any friends on Authonomy who might have a look, I'd really like some eyes other than my own on this. I can't tell if the rewrite is any good or if it's boring, or if it assumes the reader knows more than I've actually given them. It's surprisingly complicated to do a rewrite! It's not at all like running through and editing here and there!
Anyway, just if you have time. I hope all is well and spring is on its way.... (Pouring rain here for the past two days, our back yard is a swamp, but at least the wind's died down - don't need any uprooted trees!)
Thanks for any help, if you have time!