Hi Karen, Thanks for your kind words and taking time to review my book. Sorry I have taken so long to reply. I appreciate your feedback, it has taken a while to create this and I have undertaken meany edits, I am new at this and still learning.
I struggled with the chronology if I am honest, I created the story as real life would unfold, but readers suggested the story lacked punch at the start, and when several people asked how the main character met the assistant helper, I seized the idea to start with the flashback. One reason I was looking forward to a Harper Collins review was to see what they thought about it's structure. I will take your suggestion on board, thanks.
Thanks for your suggestion, I read loudly before, but it might be a good idea to do it again, as a polish. I have struggled with long sentences and grammar, I was hoping to get scrutiny by a very good editor. I am open to suggestions about names, I was trying to use names I didn't work or learn from, with so it was hard to be neutral. I think there is enough difference between the manes, e.g. Rich is a first name Mitch is a surname for it to be easy to follow.
Ch 1 - Thanks I took another look and actioned your suggestions.
Ch 2 - It was interesting what you picked up about the background characters. I intend to use them in sequels, so it was important to establish their personalities and characteristics swiftly so I could move on to the story. Many people have picked up on my descriptions and connected with my characters even if they didn't like them. I will review the HC feedback and may take your suggestions on board.
Ch 3 - Thanks I have actioned your suggestion.
Thank you very much for taking time and supporting me, good luck with your book.
Kindest Regards and Best Wishes