Thank you! I will get to reading this evening:))

Hello. How are you? I would appreciate to switch comments and feedback with you! Would you be able to do the same? If you want to read the rest of the book....it is finished and on Kindle and paperback on Amazon.com. Proceeds are going to mental health facilities and burn survivors. Would you support? I am so blessed to be able to help others with my story. I hope I will be able to stop even just one person from doing something drastic like I did. I will put your book on my wl and comment:)God bless!Bethany.

Hi Karen, Thanks for your kind words and taking time to review my book. Sorry I have taken so long to reply. I appreciate your feedback, it has taken a while to create this and I have undertaken meany edits, I am new at this and still learning.

I struggled with the chronology if I am honest, I created the story as real life would unfold, but readers suggested the story lacked punch at the start, and when several people asked how the main character met the assistant helper, I seized the idea to start with the flashback. One reason I was looking forward to a Harper Collins review was to see what they thought about it's structure. I will take your suggestion on board, thanks.

Thanks for your suggestion, I read loudly before, but it might be a good idea to do it again, as a polish. I have struggled with long sentences and grammar, I was hoping to get scrutiny by a very good editor. I am open to suggestions about names, I was trying to use names I didn't work or learn from, with so it was hard to be neutral. I think there is enough difference between the manes, e.g. Rich is a first name Mitch is a surname for it to be easy to follow.

Ch 1 - Thanks I took another look and actioned your suggestions.
Ch 2 - It was interesting what you picked up about the background characters. I intend to use them in sequels, so it was important to establish their personalities and characteristics swiftly so I could move on to the story. Many people have picked up on my descriptions and connected with my characters even if they didn't like them. I will review the HC feedback and may take your suggestions on board.
Ch 3 - Thanks I have actioned your suggestion.
Thank you very much for taking time and supporting me, good luck with your book.
Kindest Regards and Best Wishes
Lenny

That can be the problem with sites like this - too many cooks and all that :)
I can see why people say to keep chapters short and punchy, its the Dan Brown approach (which has been very succesful for him) but it was more when they occurred, rather than their length.

Hi Karen, why don't you put the problem out on one of the sci-fi forums, they're bound to have loads of good ideas on TV/film/AV/Video etc

Si

I don't know why I assumed this, but I was wondering if you had a YA short story in you. Here's the link to the details of the three very different current projects:

http://pankhearst.wordpress.com/submissions/

If you want a fresh pair of eyes to look at Endurance for you before you start, I'd be happy to.

Karen

Thanks so much for the kind and encouraging words on Last Girl. I totally get that it's nothing like Starshy but I am delighted you like it all the same. Did you ever see the first book I had up on Awfo, Puta? That was very different again.

(In case there is any confusion, the book was called Puta. I wasn't be personal!)

How are things going with you? And Endurance? I'm v fond of that story.

In other news, did I already ask you about maybe submitting to one of the current Pankhearst projects?

Thanks again

Evie

Hey,
Its Evie's book. Last Girl. Fab read. She is very talented. I don't often change my shelf except for exceptional reads, so feel honoured I'm not shoving you off without good reason. And of course I'll put it back up again. I love your writing. And do get on with getting it published, I love owning books from friends on here. Be sure to let me know how you go, Cheers J

Karen,
You might want to click on www.scribd.com/dloganw whereby David Welch interviews me regarding the North Korean situation in "Nuts in the North." This could be a good venue for your book to get Twitter exposure.

Kenneth

Hi Karen,
I hope you don't mind, but I thought I'd take Endurance off my shelf for a lttle bit. I have another book, and the person is wanting to get an ed review and its very good, so I don't take your book off lightly. I fully intend to put it back though. When are you getting it published anyway, I'd much rather own a copy???

Dear Karen,

Thank you for your enlightening review of Doghouse Blues and for adding the satire to your bookshelf. I am indebted to you for your generous support.

Very best regards,

Clive

Hi Karen, I am finally getting through my backlist of reading and will shortly take a look at one of your books, but which one would you like me to look at?

All the best

Simon
Touched

Dear Supporter,
Thank you for any comments, any encouragement and for supporting my book by shelving it. Having never written a novel, when I uploaded it onto Authonomy I had no idea it would even climb the ratings, or that I could ever attract 200 'backs' or reach the top 5. I am eternally grateful, an unusual genre, I am not sure Harper Collins will even be interested, but I am interested in their feedback, it should also be encouragement for you to have faith in your own book, YOU CAN DO IT!
If I owe you a read please let me know, my laptop crashed and I have been busy with another project the past few weeks, I will get to you. :-) I will still check in if I get ranked and will try and return your support if I am able.
Kindest Regards and Best Wishes
Lenny Banks
I have undertaken a couple of edits since your review, If you like the changes, would you be able to throw another star my way? ;-)

Hi Karen,

Sorry for the lateness of my reply - I haven't been on here in what seems like forever due to work commitments. I'm not sure what happened but I remember reading your comments and writing a reply a while ago but it seems the reply didn't make it to you and for that I apologise!

Your comments were absolutely brilliant and I can't thank you enough. I've seen you have a new piece up and after reading the first few pages I know it's going to be brilliant and can't wait to read the rest later on.

Have backed for now if it helps and thanks again.

Steve

Thank you for your good wishes and for your support of Shadow Jumper. I'm glad it's finally got to the desk!
All the best
Julia x

Hi Karen,

Thanks so much for backing Touched and providing such thoughtful and useful feedback. I have a bit of a backlog of reading (but not a mountain) at the moment, but will read your MS as soon as I get through it.

All the best

Simon

Heya

How are you? It's been a while.

I actually looked at Certainty a while ago, saw that it mentioned ghosts, and kinda wrote it off. But I'll give it a chance based on your recommendation :)

I have two new things up at the moment. Last Girl is something I started on a whim and am now a little in love with. It's far from finished and what's posted needs revision but I'd love to hear what you think.

Cars And Girls is only partially mine. It's a collection of short stories that I will be publishing soon. I've only posted the beginning of each story.

I don't know if you'd be interested, but my friends and I at our Pankhearst collective will soon be asking for submissions from writers to take part in one of two or three projects. One would be YA based, another would be a second volume of C&G (More Songs About Cars And Girls), and the third might be a collection of erotica.

If any of those take your fancy, let me know and I'll make sure to get you the details.

Take good care

Evie

Hey Karen,
You totally get this book! That''s the best take on it I've ever heard--thanks so much for taking time to read it! I'd be happy to look at your books!
Eileen

Much appreciated!

Brian Bandell
Famous After Death

Hi Karen,

You previously commented on my novel Mute. I recently posted Famous After Death and I'm looking for feedback.

The story:

Everything else has gone viral, so why not murder? Three Miami teenagers turn victims into web celebrities.

http://authonomy.com/books/50152/famous-after-death/

Let me know if I could help you with something.

Best regards,

Brian Bandell