Haha, I really look forward to your feedback. Listen, I can do feminine. I've just put in some of the changes ... ma'am.
Have you been drinking (white wine I bet). You got yourself in a right 'pluph' over C10. It's five-thirty in the evening, woman. I've changed it to seventeen-thirty. The alcohol bit is called creative writing ...
And Bright has been relegated to second place behind Peters. His role isn't as major as it was before. Sorry. But don't let that stop you reading. :)
Btw, you can't just make words up ... if you use pluff, I'll forgive you.
And pluph ... he was gone too.