Nanty, I used to love fantasy stories and comics when I was younger. I've been thinking about what I read earlier on this afternoon, making a delayed connection I guess you could say. Anyway, that doesn't happen often with me, so I'm going to come back to your story and read further if you don't mind and hopefully give some meaningful feedback.

Max

You're more than welcome, I really enjoyed reading it.

All the best,

Daryl.

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I'm sorry I couldn't have been as constructive with my comments for your work as you were with mine. I'm glad to have had the chance to read your work and truly appreciate the sage advice you've given to improve mine. Thank you.

Kathy

No I didn't know that it was a sequel, this makes much more sense as to why the world was already known to the reader. If I had known there was a book before it I would not have been so quick to point out the lack of explanation.

Obviously being a sequel the reader has a great understanding of the world you have created and further information is not needed. Really great read, perhaps it would be good to put the first book up to so people can get to know the story from the start.

Hope my comments were helpful,

Daryl.

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Nanty,
Why not put the first book of your trilogy up, or put it up together with a children's book? Whatever you do, don't let people's comments get you down and don't stop polishing that novel. It's obvious you're doing something ambitious, with a richness of language that doesn't show up so often. So take whatever advice doesn't diminish your vision and ignore the rest. Sorry if I come across the wrong way - I'm an unpublished writer too so what do I know - but I think your story will always be challenging. What I think you've got to do is finesse out the right combination of obscurity and irresistible prose to make people unable to put the book down despite the alien environment.
Anyway, do let me know when you post another book,
Edward

Nanty,
Just letting you know I've got to shuffle my shelf today, but I promise to have your novel back up in a couple weeks. I see you've been doing some updates, so I want to pay it a visit again soon. In the meantime, keep up the good work. Judging from some of the comments, your novel may be a challenge to sell to a few readers (probably like my own will be when the time comes to find representation), but the language and conceptualization is lovely, and there is such a strong sense of otherworldliness you've created. I'm sure if you carry on polishing it you'll have a masterpiece here.

Upon having another glance at your first chapter I'd make a suggestion about its presentation. Why not take the prologue (the letter and journal entry) and actually give it its own separate authonomy 'chapter'? I think that by keeping your prologue attached to the first chapter, which starts with two of its own quotations, there's an unnecessary degree of visual complexity. Just a suggestion - I wish authonomy had an optional Prologue slot we could use, as this would make things easier.
Regards,
Edward

Hey there Nanty, been off for a few days (doing life it seems) The mother was unfortunate line - you're the first to pick that up - that was a very subtle hint about the character of the father (the singing is actually a ruse) - more will be revealed... and the details... Maia's gift is not all that it seems, so you picked that up too. You're good. Or perhaps I've put too much subtle shit in here... LOL.

Thanks for the edits - the solar flares a re not so much hot as full of radiation and electromagnetic pulses, that's why the old records survived (along with other stuff not made public for the greater good... ooops, spoiler.) I'll get bnack to your s soon, busy weel in the real world unfortuantely. Oh, and I cut some playfully's, especially in the prologhue - that's quite edited now and sharper since you read it.

Thanks again, :DJ

THX :)

Hi Nanty,

Hope I wasn't too hard on you. Let me know if you find those punctuation comments useful. If you do then I'll go back and continue them. If not then I'll just go back and read the story and give you a comment on that.

Cheers, Scott Butcher

Hi Nanty, just got back today and working through my return reads list. Just letting you know I haven't forgotten:) Thank you for your comment, If I already did that before my weekend away, then it shows what a relaxing weekend it was...

Max

Hi nanty, sorry for my late reply. Thank you so much for your wonderful and most encouraging comments, they are much appreciated. I will be reading some of your book tomorrow and will leave comments also. Many thanks and best wishes.
Rachael
Dreamscape

Hi Nanty,
I'd love to do a reading swap! I look forward to hearing your thoughts on Beauty's Songbook.

Cheers,
R. Joy

A swop would be good although I am way behind on everything at the moment! It is on my WL and will certainly give it a read. Thanks for the message. Margaret x

Thank you so much! Great catch on all the nits. Extra appreciation for that.

Your kind comments were all too kind. Thank you again.

I have done more on it...so if I get myself motivated, I will update the version here.

Have a great Sunday!

E

Thank you :)

No worries....I didn't think you were fishing. And thanks for having me as a friend. The honor is all mine!

E

Hi Nanty,
thank you very much for your useful comments on Walking Shadow, they are really helpful
Miriam

Nanty,

It was a pleasure reading your book.

I gathered the lights dealt with her power, but thanks for clearing that up. I suppose I need to purchase and read the first. But that wasn't confusing at all.

Once again, I enjoyed reading, and thanks for explaining :)

JCS