Sounds like a good story to check out. My story kicks it up a notch in a city known for romance and excess. Could you sink your teeth into "The Devil Of Black Bayou". But be warned. Some of the characters may bite back.

[QUOTE] Hey Kat, Finally returning the read, sorry it took so long. I'm finding less and less time to get onto this site :'( Anyway, this is really opening up to be an interesting read. I love a good vampire story so naturally I found myself easily enjoying this. In my opinion, it has a strong premise. I like the use of the poem at the start, it had me intrigued straight away. Your opening chapter is strong as well, albeit depressing though--Morgan's past isn't a happy one--but being sadistic I love that in a character >:) I think your book could read better with editing though, just like any book on this site. Maybe go through and just make things snappier, this was and is my main problem when writing. I tend to babble to much, short and sweet reads better. Trust me though, with editing this would be unstoppable! Will put this on my bookshelf gladly! Karlee - Chained [ENDQUOTE] thanks! this is an old one i started with hurt and unknown so it was an on and off battle sadly i dont think im going to finish it, just too much i dont really know to do with myself andas much as id love to do a new age vamp, one that doesnt sparkle, one thats strong has its own world and can transport through walls i forgot the old story line when i was writing it with a friend. and anyway i'm more concentrating on editing hurt and unknown and finishing WHAT HURTS THE MOST my recent one and one i really like would love to pub. check that one out i really want feedback on that more. still gotta read ur but ur first two chapters r awesome! thanks

Hey Kat, Finally returning the read, sorry it took so long. I'm finding less and less time to get onto this site :'( Anyway, this is really opening up to be an interesting read. I love a good vampire story so naturally I found myself easily enjoying this. In my opinion, it has a strong premise. I like the use of the poem at the start, it had me intrigued straight away. Your opening chapter is strong as well, albeit depressing though--Morgan's past isn't a happy one--but being sadistic I love that in a character >:) I think your book could read better with editing though, just like any book on this site. Maybe go through and just make things snappier, this was and is my main problem when writing. I tend to babble to much, short and sweet reads better. Trust me though, with editing this would be unstoppable! Will put this on my bookshelf gladly! Karlee - Chained

[QUOTE] As I said in my last comment on the other book - talent at its best! You have what it takes!! BACKED this one too so now I've got two of your books on my shelf!! Liz The Cheech Room [ENDQUOTE] i added afew more chapters and it will soon be getting to the point where seh finds out the truth. im excited myself!

What an imaginative story! Good characters, good setting, good read. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

i added two more chapters i didnt know that chapter five wasn't on here i thought it was >< well check it and let me know what you think. just so u know i have some hinting bout wat might happen in chapter six. thanks! dont worry im trying to work on editing too i just want to type more of my ideas first u know?

[QUOTE] So far I've read chapter one. It needs a lot of editing, and the poem font is tough to read--even at the largest setting Authonomy will allow, BUT!!! The story is gripping from the very first sentence and pulled me right in. I'll have to see how you handle the vampires because they are waaaaay flooding the market of books (stupid Twilight series) and if it's not original, it won't matter how good the writing is. I'll say this, you can set up a tense scene! Now get to editing :) I'm going to do the same. Remember, this is only my opinion, and i'm absolutely no one. Shelved and best of luck! Dan Demons and other Inconveniences. [ENDQUOTE] dont worry my vamps have more power, no twilight crap either i hate it too. they do not sparkle, yes he cna go in the sun but only becuase when they become a vamp they have a stone or soemthing (really not sure yet) inserted into their hand or they have a ring too. dont worry o and they their own world, and they can go through walls. ill get back to you and the writing.

As I said in my last comment on the other book - talent at its best! You have what it takes!! BACKED this one too so now I've got two of your books on my shelf!! Liz The Cheech Room

So far I've read chapter one. It needs a lot of editing, and the poem font is tough to read--even at the largest setting Authonomy will allow, BUT!!! The story is gripping from the very first sentence and pulled me right in. I'll have to see how you handle the vampires because they are waaaaay flooding the market of books (stupid Twilight series) and if it's not original, it won't matter how good the writing is. I'll say this, you can set up a tense scene! Now get to editing :) I'm going to do the same. Remember, this is only my opinion, and i'm absolutely no one. Shelved and best of luck! Dan Demons and other Inconveniences.

Poor, Morgan she doesn't have it easy! Either losing the ones she loves through accident or to others. Like the bit about the felt cat, I remember having to make such things! You do teen angst very well. THis is shaping into a good read. Jim Darcy The Firelord's Crown