l like very much the whole tone of this story. It has a very good and immediatelY attractive opening. The writing style is straightforward, unembellished and all the more compelling because of it. I like the idea of the ancient spell or curse and the magical feel of the narrative. Backed Rosalind MINETT A RELATIVE INVASION SPEECHLESS

Sammy, my promised read from the I'm Looking...thread. Oh my Goddess, lol, this is truly an amazing book. Your writing is so fluid and effortless, an extremely carefully thought-out storyline and very real, likable characters. I am not generally a reader of YA, however this is one I can easily read. There are so many wonderful phrasings where your words create such vivid imagery that I was actually there with Eliza in the forest. ‘A crisp wind cut through the branches, and thousands of leaves sighed as one.’ The description of the Galgiza forest was perfect, not overdone but just enough to help the reader become quickly engaged in the story setting. ‘Fear smacked me like a cold wave...,’ perfectly described. Chapter two, btw, I love the quotes at the opening of each chapter, and the romantic tension set up in this chapter is particularly enticing for readers of all ages. The easy natural dialogue between Eliza and Ryan is flawless. You show so well and found little or no incidents of telling, there is a seamless balance of narrative and dialogue that moves this along at a perfect pace. I like the reference made to Goddess instead of God; this is a switch that is most original making me want to read on and learn more about this world you have created. I did come across a couple of inconsistencies that took me out of the read though, twice you refer to a wolf in the second chapter, ...and you couldn’t fell an alpha wolf with a ...’. I thought it was a bear that had attacked her and had to go back to chapter one to re-read as I thought I had read it wrong. Then when she said something about her wolf scars on her wrist, in the first chapter, you had said a fox? I am going to keep this on my WL and continue to read all that is posted. High stars, very well done and a wonderful read. Thank you for inviting me to look at your work, being YA I would have missed it.

Sam, I enjoyed reading The Binding very much. Your writing style is fluid and accomplished and I am giving you high stars. I don't normally read romance and was drawn to read by the fantasy element. Your story seems to be more of a romance than a fantasy, but still held my interest, so well done. If I have one minor quibble it is that the plot and the imaginative fantasy elements sometimes got lost in the emotional rollercoaster of the constant romantic tension. An emotional break now and then to enjoy the scenery and see where the plot is headed would be nice. Best of luck.

I really enjoyed the writing of your story, but I ended the first chapter feeling like too much information was being withheld until later. Not necessarily a bad thing -- I know -- but because I felt no connection to the protagonist, I'm stopping here for the time being. That being said, I wish I were as talented as you are at crafting sentences, and will likely come back to read more later. This will be the first book I place on my "watch list." Good luck!

Sam, This is an awesome book and some of the best writing I have seen for a long time. You use your characters well and describe them in a way to get your readers hooked into the book. You raise the pace of the book very well and again by using your narrative in a way to keep the reader interested you have an ability to know when to slow it again. I am so impressed with this book and wish you luck. Well done. Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R) Please consider me for a read or watch list wont you??? Many thanks. Sean

Fantastic read and I'm going to keep this on my WL so i can leisurely read it when i have some more time. The premise of the Binding is enough to hook anyone, but more so - the unbinding. Maybe being bound wouldn't be so bad for everybody, but being unbound would be the most awful thing in the world. No wonder Eliza wants to avoid it all... will be back for more Jaclyn x It Never Happened

Ye Gods I'm enjoying this so much. Well done you. I've just finished chapter four and I'm having a break to tell you that this is great. Well written, an excellent premise (made me think of the 'imprinting' that werewolves do to life partners in Twilight) and a very likeable heroine. The lustiness is funny and her teenage reaction to it very entertaining. I'd actually use the word lust at some point if I were you, just because 'emotions' starts sounding a bit twee after a while. I want to read all of this. Will you send me the remaining chapters please? I quite fancy Ryan. I'm 38 so that's a bit shameful really isn't it. Ah well. I hope you get published, you're without question a marvellous writer and a very competent story teller. with respect, Alethea

Ye Gods I'm enjoying this so much. Well done you. I've just finished chapter four and I'm having a break to tell you that this is great. Well written, an excellent premise (made me think of the 'imprinting' that werewolves do to life partners in Twilight) and a very likeable heroine. The lustiness is funny and her teenage reaction to it very entertaining. I'd actually use the word lust at some point if I were you, just because 'emotions' starts sounding a bit twee after a while. I want to read all of this. Will you send me the remaining chapters please? I quite fancy Ryan. I'm 38 so that's a bit shameful really isn't it. Ah well. I hope you get published, you're without question a marvellous writer and a very competent story teller. with respect, Alethea

Although I don't normally like romantic novels at all, I was impressed with this gently written work. It is delicate and sensitive. Backed Lara A RELATIVE INVASION

A really compelling story, very well told! Excellent. Andrea

I have to agree with other comments below, this book is outstanding and un-put-down-able! I cannot wait for the next installment - and I will keep hoping there will be one soon! Can't wait to delve into the mystery of the binding, Aisha

I have only read chapter 1 so far, but you definitely caught my interest! You choice of words and description help me place myself in Eliza's place. The emotion and suspense that is evoked at the end of the chapter draws me in to read more! I'm really looking forward to continuing! Great job! -Bella Fallen from the Stars

I have only read chapter 1 so far, but you definitely caught my interest! You choice of words and description help me place myself in Eliza's place. The emotion and suspense that is evoked at the end of the chapter draws me in to read more! I'm really looking forward to continuing! Great job! -Bella Fallen from the Stars

The Binding - well written, expressive and definitely I'm hooked. I just had to keep reading. Good job... CADreilling - The Line - Beginnings

Wow. This is amazing; simply amazing. You packed a punch with your first chapter, brightening everything with intricate detail and bringing your story to life through the vibrant emotions of your character. That bear fight was spectacular; I swear I felt my heart sprint. And the ending, when she knows she's been caught . . . I'd like to give you critiques; things to fix, things to change. I find that I cannot. Your beginning was just too good. This will be WL'd so I can return to read more (I'd do so now, but I have things I must get done). Very high stars. Michele Starfire

Hi Sam! The Binding is the kind of book I normally read so right away it drew me into reading your chapters. I like the pitches. I thought they were written really well. The title is very good and matches the subject of the book. The events in Ryan and Eliza's lives are just something to watch for, not to be missed. I loved Eliza's character. She's strong-willed and she knows what she wants and she doesn't stop no matter what. I loved that about female protagonists. I also enjoyed the minor obstacles she has to go through every now and then. It shows her kind of personality even more, a great way to get to know her better. This is great and so I give you 5 stars. I wish you all the best and I hope you get to the ED real soon because you deserve it. Congratulations! May I invite you to read and rate my book as well? Thank you in advance for your help! D LEO & ROVER: THE PURPLE MARBLE ADVENTURES

First chapter sounds great, I can't wait to continue with this story as soon as I have some more time! Christina Fated Dreams

Very good book so far. I will read more soon, along with the other books on my shelf, and try to give you my opinion. Backed and rated high.

This is a very interesting story idea. I like it very much. The story itself is drawn out and at times vague as opposed to mysterious. Editing would take care of that problem. Good start. Abby

Wow... your voice, your characters, your story; they are flawless. Every chapter that ends begs that you start just one more. Truly your work is entrancing and the tempo is astounding. I honestly can think of nothing to fault this with. I only wish I could keep reading all night long.

Hey Sam, Great long summary! I think we had a read swap, so I’m here for my side of the bargain. Unfortunately when I went to read your first chapter… it said that an unexpected error had occurred. I think you may have to re upload it again. Anyway, I moved on to read your second chapter instead. I absolutely adore how you write! You have such a way with words. Usually I have plenty of things to comment on, but your writing is flawless. Your story is creative and captivating. The characters are endearing. The Binding is such a unique and thoughtful idea. I love it already. One thing that kind of threw me was your use of the word “Argh” it reminded me of a pirate, so maybe if that’s not the direction you want to go, you should consider taking that out. “I [didn’t] even know his name and I [was] swooning like those village bimbos…” – needs to be changed to past tense. “didn’t” instead of “don’t” and “I was” instead of “I’m” “I had to clench my teeth to stop my jaw [from] hitting the ground.” – from needs to be added One other thing I would like to mention is your use of the word “Goddess” it gets a little repetitive “I couldn’t give any hint [that] the only reason I needed to be close…” – “that” should be added Besides those few minor problems, your writing is flawless. I really enjoyed watching the meeting between Eliza and Ryan. It was cute and believable. I’m not sure how you described the scenery in the first chapter, but I would have liked to have a better idea of what their surroundings were like as I read the second chapter. Don’t get me wrong , I know they’re in a forest, but maybe give details. Was there dirt all over her hands because the ground was moist from recent rainfall? How did the air smell? Was it humid? Just a few details would really help the reader to get a better idea. Honestly, I thought the chapter I read was brilliant, easy to read, and interesting. I love green eyes, so I’m also glad Ryan has them (Damen in Spark has green eyes as well) Anyway, you get six stars from me. I look forward to hearing your thoughts on Spark! Christine Rees Spark

...blinded by shrapnel of my own making' is MY favorite line* Of all the fun, okay, let's just say that I can't stop reading. The first chapter is just enough to engage readers' mood to read more and more. It rushes the adrenaline that I forget everything around me. Your premise is good, nice surroundings, nice mind of the first-person... You have a good flow of sentence structure, making everybody to feel comfortable reading 'em. Keep up the good work FC

Hi Sam, Thanks to the Alliance of World Builders, I found your gem. I see Lady Midnight has done a very good job of picking nits, so I will go for the overview. I think what I need is more clarity, therefore more narrative in the extract that you have here and I did read all of it. The Binding is a wonderful concept and Eliza is a great character. I love that she is strong and she does try to fight against fate. Eliza also has a great amount of courage and this is making her stand out. Ryan seems to be something more than he pretends. He comes from wealth, this is obvious, both from his horse and from his necklace with the flawless ruby. At this point I am thinking back to the vanished royal houses and wondering about both him and Eliza, given that she can see the runes. I also find it interesting that Ryan nearly busts a gut to get away from guardsmen when he is in town, and yet waves them down when he needs to save Eliza at the Sanctuary. Are they his honor guards? Getting back to the Binding, how can Bound people function if they can't move more than a mile apart? Doesn't Eliza's father go off healing without his Bound wife? Also, her sister gets caught in the Binding of a noble stranger aganst her will. How do men manage to function if they are subjected to this curse? A farmer will be more than a mile away from his farmhouse during the course of a day. A guardsman will need to ride out with his company, or is this restriction just in effect untill the Bound couple have mated? I get the sense Ryan knows very well that Eliza is Bound to him. He is being kind, but he is not pursuing her. What else is going on here? This is so intriguing. The setting details are splendid. I particularly like the fire mountains where they found the boy. The sulphur caven was very clear. Nicely done.

CHAPTER TWENTY-ONE So I’ve reached the end (sigh). Just one thing, when they return to the foyer, Adam doesn’t appear to notice the change in Eliza’s eyes. Is this deliberate, or an oversight? I‘d also add something about the perils of the journey ahead, just to make it clear this is the final chapter. [He was sporting a serious expression.] The word “sporting” is rather too jolly and clashes with “serious”. Suggest: His expression was serious. [Quickly he crept…] Quickly and crept contradict each other. Have either: He left quickly, or He crept out… [... running a finger on its back.] …running a finger along its back. Ryan [groaned,] gripping the mark on his cheek. I don’t think you should have him groan, it makes him sound weak. [… Navinka could keep her gaze.] …Navinka could hold his gaze. […Ryan said, though it wasn’t like he could say anything else.] …Ryan said, though it wasn’t as if he could say anything else. Ryan turned to me, looking as if [he’s] escaped a thrashing. …he’d… [My doubts had resurged again.] My doubts had resurfaced again. [I sighed, glancing to my lap.] …glancing at my lap. [Perhaps the lady could provide her uses for the trip.] This is a bit clunky, suggest something like: Perhaps the noble lady had her uses after all. My giddiness had [resolved,]… This seems a little too fancy, perhaps just: My giddiness had gone…

Another great, descriptive chapter. Just a few little tweaks needed, IMO. Chapter Twenty Navinka encircled her arm around Ryan’s,] This a bit clunky, suggest, Navinka linked her arm through Ryan’s… My heart leapt [to] my throat. My heart leapt into my throat. [With a scholar to guide us, we’d find what we needed in no time. Since asking the library staff would result in bothersome questions regarding the entrance fee.] This should be one sentence. With a scholar to guide us, we’d find what we needed in no time, since asking the library staff…etc. “Thank you.” [That must’ve saved several days of searching.] The word “that” mars the flow. Suggest: He’d saved us days of searching. He glanced [to] the clock at the end of the passage. “You?” He glanced at the clock… “I’m good thanks.” Ryan glanced [to] me…Ryan glanced at me…

CHAPTER NINETEEN A little more of the mystery revealed. The characterisation is spot on. I can picture Navinka. Proud, haughty, possessive. I can feel Adam's jealousy and Eliza's intolerable position, caught between him and Ryan, is perfectly illustrated. There's the feeling that if she's cured of The Binding, which man will she go for? Will she find herself genuinely in love with Ryan? The relationship between her and Adam seems to be that of brother and sister, at least on her part. [I glanced to the gardens.] I glanced at the gardens. [I’m betting your father won’t be thrilled to let you out of his sight again…] This is a bit clunky, suggest: I’m betting your father won’t let you out of his sight again…] […I’m stuck with you and there’s nothing we can change.”] Either: I’m stuck with you and we can’t change that. Or, I’m stuck with you and there’s nothing we can do. [Someone cleared their throat from the shadows.] This sounds as if they’re actually clearing shadows from their throat. Suggest rejigging along the lines of: From the shadows came the sound of someone clearing their throat. [Eventually the warmth and darkness overtook]… Missing the word ”me.”Eventually the warmth and darkness over took me. [That was on my eleventh birthday, where Fiona treated me…] …when Fiona treated me. [Bemused, I looked to my arms.] …I looked at my arms. Never mind he wasn’t more than a few metres away, [anyway.] Don’t need the bracketed word. [“I didn’t know what happened.] I don’t know what happened. […would be a great dishonor…] …a great discourtesy… [Her eyes fell to me.] Her eyes fell on me. […no matter your excuse.”] …no matter what your excuse. [And with a flick to Sandy’s reins…] And with a flick of Sandy’s reins… “What else could I say?” [he uttered back.]… he muttered back.

CHAPTER EIGHTEEN Blimey – yet another bombshell at the end of this chapter. You keep up the tension so well. Is Eliza Bound, or is something else happening? How’s Adam going to react to Ryan’s declaration of love. It just gets better and better. […ushering] me to do the same. I think “gesturing” would be better. […bushes towered to Adam’s forehead…] “reached “to Adam’s forehead… [I hissed, clipping my arm on the thorns.] …”catching” my arm… [ “You’ve been giving me nothing than one word answers] Needs the word “other” You’ve been giving me nothing other than one word answers. […had left me stuporous,… ] Do you mean stupefied? [Ryan was disappointed…] How does she know he’s disappointed. Suggest: Ryan looked disappointed…

This story gets more mysterious as it goes on and I absolutely hated Ryan's father. The mystery of Ryan's ability to avoid becoming Unbound is a perfect ploy to keep the reader absorbed. CHAPTER SEVENTEEN I glanced [to] the bar… at the bar Ryan looked back [to] his mug… at his mug [… and sighed. He pushed his drink aside,] “sighed” and “aside” mar the flow, suggest changing aside to away. [The lamp lights were already lit…] Either the lamps were already lit, or the lights were already lit. I sighed, [averting his gaze,] …averting my gaze?

Here we go Sam. So Ryan's already Bound, to the mysterious Elle, perhaps? But that still begs the question as to why he occasionally displays affection towards Eliza and sometimes calls her Elle. It's also clear that Adam is in love with Eliza, but not Bound, as he went away to be a soldier. The more I read, the more intrigued I become. Great, great storytelling. CHAPTER SIXTEEN It was screened by scaffolding and netting-[ why I hadn’t seen it earlier.] Should be a question mark here, however she answers her own question at the beginning of the sentence: it was screened by scaffolding and netting, so suggest changing to: - which is why I hadn’t seen it earlier. [Must’ve been about ten or twelve paces.] “Must’ve been…” doesn’t work for me, perhaps change to: Maybe ten or twelve paces?. ** I was already unfastening [my] laces before the thought fully formed. The man’s strides resonated, and I counted them out as I slipped [my] shoes off. Pins and needles shot into [my] feet as they touched the freezing tiles, but I bit back [my] hiss and knotted the laces together. Finally, I draped [my] boots around my neck…** Too many “mys” – five altogether. Suggest rejigging along the lines of: I was already unfastening my bootlaces…and I counted them out as I slipped the boots off…Pins and needles shot into my feet…but I bit back a hiss… Finally I draped the boots around my neck… Reduces the “mys” to 3. [Fortunately the man’s footfalls drowned out my own,] Suggest replacing “my own” with “mine. [Crouched on my knees…] Either: I crouched down, or I knelt down… […only allowed a thin sliver of light inside. That played over the hole in the ground…] Should this be one sentence? …only allow a thin sliver of light inside that played over the hole in the ground… My hands clenched [to fists.] Don’t need the bracketed words. If her hands clenched, then it goes without saying they formed fists. I took a particular interest [to] the mud on my boots. I took a particular interest in the mud on my boots.

CHAPTER FIFTEEN Another chapter down, Sam. The story continues to grip. The pace is consistent and the plot ever more intriguing. The icy blackness pierced my skin, and bubbles escaped my mouth as the cold tore into my bones. However, it wasn’t only the chill that [had] Don’t need this. [With dexterity] Would flow better by inserting “a”: With a dexterity… […the pressure around my chest and neck fell limp.] Fell limp doesn’t work. Suggest: went limp or fell away. […and I’d seen first hand] Should be firsthand. [He gazed to the hole in the lake,] This is a bit clunky, suggest: He gazed over at the hole in the lake… but they held [firm.] Don’t need this. They can’t be shaky and yet firm at the same time. Just stating they held is enough. […the Grand Councillor’s hall] Councilors’ hall. [ “Can you find a vet anywhere?”] Can you see a vet anywhere?

What a cliffhanger at the end of this chapter - superb! CHAPTER FOURTEEN [To rub salt into the wound, my scarf didn’t protect me from his musky scent, either, even though it was wrapped around my mouth and nose.] This might flow better as: To rub salt into the wound my scarf, even though it was wrapped around my mouth and nose, didn’t protect me from his musky scent. […my hand around Ryan’s cheek and bring his lips to…] Can one curl your hand around a cheek. Suggest: …cup his cheek in my hand. “You just need a good teacher,” Ryan said,[oblivious to my blunder.] She can’t be certain he’s oblivious. Suggest adding: seemingly oblivious… [Couldn’t say I missed the thing,] This would flow better by changing the “I” to “I’d”. Couldn’t say I’d missed the thing. [Caught in his green eyes, my cheeks flushed.] This sounds as if her cheek’s actually caught in his eyes. Suggest: My gaze caught by his green eyes, I felt my cheeks flush – something along those lines. Ryan snatched at my cloak [sleeve,]… Does a cloak have sleeves? He grasped [for] the wound… don’t need the bracketed word. [Get him into the lake!] […and my knife cut into the frozen lake.] You’ve used the word “lake” as above. Suggest changing the latter to frozen water.

CHAPTER THIRTEEN Only one nitpick, Sam. The chapter flowed smoothly. Eliza’s increasing agitation as to what she should do was well illustrated. The descriptions, as usual, were superb. As I returned to the inn, I was greeted by [chatting voices.] Chattering?

CHAPTER TWELVE Hi Sam, here’s my feedback on Chapter 12. Could you email me the rest? I’d love to see how this is going to turn out. [I ambled to the window.] Would flow better as: I ambled over to the window. [The Councillor’s Hall] This threw me a bit. Are you talking about a single councilor, in which case the apostrophe is correct, or a place where councilors meet, in which case it should be: The Councilors’ Hall… It also has only one L, according to my spellcheck. […came out of no-where.] Should be nowhere. […couldn’t help but glimpse inside.] Glimpse as you know, means to catch sight of something. It doesn’t sound right here. If the sentence had been: …as I passed a door left slightly ajar, I caught a glimpse of… As it stands I think “glimpse should be replaced by “peek”. …couldn’t help but peek inside. My eyes fell [to the building]… onto. [“Please, let me delay you no longer. Follow me.”] This would flow better as: “Please don’t let me delay you any longer...” […and missed companionship of one their own age.] This is a bit clunky. Suggest: and missed the companionship of people their own age. […give clues to combat it,] Would flow better as: …give clues as to how to combat it. “The honour was all mine,” Bergundy [smirked.] Why smirked? This word’s usually used to indicate a sly sense of humour or finding fun at someone else’s expense.

CHAPTER ELEVEN The intrigue heightens. It seems as if Eliza and Ryan are falling for each other, without the help of the Binding. But what about Adam and the as yet unseen Elle? You’ve woven an intricate plot that’s both intriguing and beguiling. […the rough stone gnashing at my cloak.] This conjures up the wrong image, for me. The word “gnashing” makes it sound as if the wall’s actually got teeth. Suggest replacing with “dragging.” […gradually the ache faded.] “Ache” seems a bit mild, given the nature of the wound. Perhaps something like “throbbing agony?” […I squinted through the darkness to the staircase.] …towards the staircase. [No time to ooh and ahh;]… Do you mean Umm and ahh?

CHAPTER TEN Here we go, Sam, just a few very minor nitpicks. I loved this chapter. It was a great mixture of action and suspense, plus the extremely clever way you gave the reader some back story in the form of Ryan’s “history lesson”. I usually find beta reading a bit onerous, but I’m really enjoying this. [The streets were more lively,] A bit clunky, suggest: The streets were even livelier… Two were broad-shouldered and sported red and [blonde hair] blonde with an e is feminine, should be “blond” if referring to a male. He laid me [onto] on…

CHAPTER NINE Only one nitpick this time, Sam. Other than that this chapter is excellent as usual. The narrative is cohesive, dialogue spot on and the characterisation excellent. Before my gaze [would]… should be “could”.

This book is amazing.... can't wait to read the rest of the chapters

CHAPTER EIGHT Here’s my feedback on Chapter 8. There might seem to be a lot of nitpicks, but they’re only minor things – very minor. I’m really getting curious now. What’s Ryan up to? He seems to be almost returning Eliza’s “affections”, but I think he’s not yet come under the Binding’s spell. The intrigue is driving me mad, I’m dying to find out what he’s up to. As always your worldbuilding skills are magnificent, with the little touches here and there such as the Flametar and the fact it smells of almonds. It’s little details such as this that helps the reader become immersed in the story. “Oh, it’s alright,” I said, trying not to pay attention to his thumb stroking the back of my hand. Or [to] Don’t need this. Ryan said nothing, [but his eyes gave away I’d rattled him.] This’s a bit clunky, maybe rejig as: …but the expression in his eyes told me I’d rattled him. He ran his hand over my scarf. [I swallowed, pleasant tingles racing down my neck.] This would perhaps flow better as: Pleasant tingles ran down my neck, making me swallow hard.] And with that he stood up and [strode to Cielo.] …strode over to Cielo. […the board was used to advertise criminals for the freelance hunters.] Should be: …the board also advertised criminals for the freelance hunters. […and the road ahead was packed with wagons, carts, riders, and pedestrians. I tucked my scarf around my face and pulled the cloak hood over, the banter strange to my ears after riding in near-silence for so long.] This doesn’t flow as well as it might. Suggest: and the road ahead was packed with wagons, carts, riders, and pedestrians. The banter sounded strange to my ears after riding in near-silence for so long and I tucked my scarf around my face and pulled the cloak hood tight over my head – something along those lines. “Ruthwall is about four miles that way.” Ryan pointed south-west, [taking his bearings from the aqueduct.] How do we know this? Does he glance back at the aqueduct? If so, you need to indicate this. “The paper said they happened last week,”] What happened last week? I know it’s the fires, but Eliza’s comment is a bit abrupt. Suggest: “The paper said the fires happened last week…” [Ryan didn't hear me.] How does she know he didn’t hear her? He may have chosen to ignore her remark. Suggest: Ryan either didn’t hear, or chose to ignore me. [He burnt down one of my husband’s barns and lost a whole month of winter stores!”] Either: He burnt down one of my husband’s barns and we lost a whole winter’s store… or …he destroyed a whole winter’s stores. “He lives here?” I asked, [hunching in my cloak so my shoulders didn’t rub against Ryan’s arms.] Would perhaps flow better as something like: …hunching my shoulders, so they didn’t rub against Ryan’s arms. Ryan’s brow [narrowed.] Furrowed?

CHAPTER SEVEN Again only nitpicks Sam and few and far between at that. This book is proving to be a work of art, so far. The professionalism of your prose is wonderful. When it’s published, I must have a copy. By the way, I’m green with envy. [At last Cielo’s ears flopped back]… I’d say it was more likely they’d swivel back, rather than flop. …and soon I had the light [I wanted, too.] This seems a bit tame, given their dire situation. Suggest something like: I had the light I so badly needed. Cielo had retreated from the entrance as far as he [would dare] This would scan better as: …as far as he dared. With a final glance [to Cielo]… at Cielo

CHAPTER SIX Another great chapter, Sam. The pathos of Eliza’s farewell to Adam, her taking of the scarf worked really well. The intrigue deepens, with Ryan’s unexplained panic and his continuing to address Eliza as “Elle.” The narrative and dialogue flow. This is definitely my kind of read. He’d lost to the man [who’d gone to win outright,] Missing “on”: …who’d gone on to… [He took it to heart, as every day after he pushed himself with physical exercise.] This is a bit clunky. Suggest rejigging along the lines of: He took it so much to heart that every single day after that he pushed himself with physical exercise. [The Major raised his hand in surprise.] I don’t know why, but this didn’t work for me. Maybe: Surprised, the Major withdrew his hand. All this lying…[it was going to catch up to me, one day.] The syntax seems a little off here. Suggest: …it would catch me up one day. […the quill and papers on the desk were in an organized pile…] “organized” and “pile” seem to contradict each other. Suggest: …the quill and papers on the desk were laid out neatly – something like that. It was my scarf; the one I’d [leant] Should be “lent.” Before it [would] Should be “could”…

CHAPTER FIVE I couldn’t find a single thing to criticize in this chapter. The relationship between Eliza and Ryan is totally believable and I get the impression Ryan knows more than he’s letting on. And who’s Elle, his true love? Does Eliza remind him of her? Questions arise with every chapter, drawing the reader on, eager to learn more. I have to say you excel at worldbuilding. Your descriptions are excellent, not too much, not too little. I feel as if I’m there.

Hi Sam, as always, not much to nitpick. The developing relationship between Ryan and Eliza – albeit reluctant and contrived by the Binding – is really well illustrated. The struggle Eliza undergoes, each time she comes close to him is 3 dimensional, I could feel it. CHAPTER FOUR [Ryan crawled over, inspecting it.] A bit clunky, suggest: Ryan crawled over to inspect it. […before he removed something from his belt. With his hunting knife he hacked at the bark, until a straight piece broke away. ] A bit wordy, suggest: …before he removed his hunting knife from his belt. He hacked at the bark, until a straight piece broke away. [“Well?” He took his hands away- Goddess, it was like releasing a pressure valve in my chest- and stood back. ] This doesn’t flow as well as it might. Suggest: “Well?” He took his hands away and stood back. Goddess, it was like releasing a pressure valve in my chest. [Cielo lifted his head from grazing, curious to what was going on.] Should be either: Cielo lifted his head, curious as to what was going on. Or: Cielo lifted his head, curious to know what was going on. This time he laid the cloth out on the log. [“There,] all yours.” This should be the abbreviation of “they are”, so should be: “they’re”. [I watched the white horse trot to his master]… would scan better as: I watched the white horse trot over to his master…] With [my] awkward steps… Don’t need the bracketed word.

CHAPTER THREE As You can see Sam, only had two nitpicks for this chapter. It flowed well, with naturalistic dialogue, tight descriptions and the story continues to intrigue. I couldn’t detect his [own one.] Don’t need this. [“I’ll cope,” Ryan shrugged. “You need your strength to help your ankle heal. We’ll get another one later.”] This is a bit clunky. Suggest restructuring as: Ryan shrugged. “I’ll cope. You need your strength to help your ankle heal. We’ll get another one later.”

So far, not finding much to nitpick Sam. This was an extremely well written chapter. Eliza's personality continues to reveal itself in little snatches. The physical description of Ryan was smooth and seamless, without going over the top, as so many writers do. I found myself liking him, without quite knowing why, which is great. This can happen in real life too, so I feel your skill at characterisation is excellent. You tend to use the word "to" where it's not appropriate and there were a couple of typos, all of which I've highlighted. CHAPTER TWO '...his touch renewed her senses, spreading warmth and life where there had been cold and darkness.' --Tale of the Binding Either he was painfully honest, or he was [more simple]… This is a bit clunky, perhaps replace with “Simpler”. I was pretty certain my acting skills [led]… this should be “left.” “You don’t need to be so formal, Eliza,” he said. He glanced up [to] the moon. Should be “at”.

Sam, I’ve read the 1st chapter and can find very little to nitpick. It flows well and considering it’s mostly exposition, because it’s first person narrative, it works. The relationship between Eliza and the absent Adam is well drawn. It’s clear they share the same sense of humor and beliefs. This opening chapter gives the reader a clear insight into Eliza’s character. She’s young and strong willed. The tension during her flight from the bear’s great and the cliffhanger at the end works very well indeed. I’ll get back to you asap about chapter 2. CHAPTER ONE ‘She hid her heart deep within, while the world begged to see its light once more...’ --Tale of the Binding …he was due to home tomorrow. Either he was due home tomorrow, or he was due to come home tomorrow.... . …I climbed back into the forest depths. A few feet away lay the familiar criss-crossing trail. I ambled to... should be "towards" it. I almost slapped myself. Get a hold of yourself, Eliza! You’re seventeen... "myself" and "Yourself" jar a little, suggest changing the 2nd to "get a grip". ...was going on this particular night- and I had nothing to defend myself. Missing "with". I had nothing to defend myself with.

a great fantasy read. this is hard to do with so many on the market...greatly developed characters and chemistry...good read... j what every woman should know

Sam, I found your book on the lending library. I really like the flow of the prose. Eliza has a little spunk, which I like and she also shows a bit of the fear she is feeling leaving everything she knows. I like the mystery surrounding Ryan, although I am not always convinced by Eliza being able to figure out he's lying. For example, his first excuse of being a traveller rather than a hunter: why did she think a hunter is a more realistic excuse? Why does she think he's lying? Perhaps she sees it in the way he casts his eys down, or an off note in his voice. I don't really get to see what Eliza is seeing and therefore why she detects he's lying. Same at the end of chapter 3. I also don't understand why Eliza is so scared to tell him until chapter 3. I would prefer to have her sister's story earlier to better understand why she is where she is. Just a suggestion. Other than a couple of editing notes, which are more choice than anything else I couldn't come up with anything else to say. Overall I enjoyed it, it's well structured and the characters are believable (it is just the description around their dialogue that I think could be worked on). I enjoyed it! Danielle

Your very good at painting pictures for the reader to view. I think I read this before but I'm not sure. it sounds familiar. It appears to develop very well. Your characters and plot are thought out well. The title is different. Good job! Shelby Z./Driving Winds P.S. Please take a look at my pirate adventure Driving Winds, when you have time.

I found this wonderfully written. I loved the descriptions, the characterization, the narration. I found no fault in any of it. The storyline is great. The sense of mystery in this is enticing. I wish I had more to say, but all I can muster is "wow". I wish you the best of luck with this. Jennifer Killby - The Legend of the Travelers: Willow's Journey

An amusing, descriptive and well written book. Your writing style is very impressive, dialogue are realistic with vivid charachters and narrative is at great pace. Highly rated.

Just scan read the 12 chapters (I love fantasy) and this isn't a bad story. It's a bit predictable in the sense we've got a sassy, "strong", argumentative female MC - the lovesick best friend and the awkward yet attractive love interest, but it's got potential! The curse is interesting. It brings in questions of free will, manipulation and desire, I like. First person is really hard to pull off - there were far too many paragraphs that start with the word "I" ... "I slouched" "I watched" and so on - this is all the way through but really really obvious in chapter 12. Also, it's a little ... flabby(?) In places, the imagery could be tightened and more succinct. The MC has an appealing voice, indeed, the cast are quite well developed and the world building isn't bad at all. At the moment it's a 4 star story - but I really think this could be a 5! Good luck with it. DH

Okay... I just wanted to let you know... Originally, I backed The Binding based upon the first few chapters, with the intention of returning to read more... Well, once I got started I couldn't stop! ...And now I feel I must have more... So, more please?! I love your characters, your cities... and think you've done a great job developing the mythology/history behind it all. Overall, wonderful read! Thanks for it! Heather

OMG!!!! Just finished chapter sixteen and I'm about to pee my pants! Great writing, by the way. SW DEVIL WENT DOWN

I'm in the middle of chapter four and LOVING it! There are several typos, word omissions or substitutions, but none so disctracting to slow down the reading. The pace is excellent and characters engaging. The enigma presented and the whole concept of a binding has me intrigued and flipping pages. I suppose if I had one critique, it would be the relative casualness of the narrative voice. For some reason (and only at certain times) it doesn't jive with the setting/world created. Other than that, the writing is brilliant and quite addictive. ;-) SW

Crap! I was hoping this would be awful and no competition whatsoever, but looks like I'm having a bad day. Of course, I'm not being chased by hungry bears. Excellent writing, gripping and as comical as one can be in a dark, scary forest. Well done!

Your pitch is great, the idea of being bound to someone that you desire that then turns out to be a curse has drama written all over it, and I can tell by the comments below that the more the reader gets into this book, the better it becomes. You create a good flow in your first chapter, lots of drama without dialogue is hard to achieve. I only have one critisism: you seem to be setting up another world, loosely based on Medieval times, but then Eliza wants to look at a clock. The clock seems out of place. This is a very enjoyable novel.

I really like your new cover art- much better than the other two.

Besides for the problems you had mentioned in the description, this is a wonderful story. You use words that fit, there's flow in your words, a nice balance between dialogue and description, and youre characters are quite delightful. I wasn't using a fine comb, but your grammar and spelling seemed correct.

This story didn't drag me in quite as quick as I hoped it would after reading the pitch. It was a pretty start, but lacked something vital. That came later and as this is a wip, forgiveable. The concept is a good one. Loved the way you kept me in her pov by calling a human “it”. The way you concluded the chapter was very well done. The chase and then those all important words. I just had to click on to read chapter two. The characters are very likeable and it is a nice easy read. Ideal for the young adult romance genre you've slotted it under.

Review on Chapters 1 through 10 of ‘The Binding’ At this point, I am loving the story and cannot wait to see how Eliza’s curse keeps interfering and causing chaos. It’s a great concept and you display it very well throughout these Chapters. This is going to be sort of a mixed review, I will state things I loved, spots where I tripped while reading and how the Chapter and story was making me feel at that point. Hope this serves as some aid to your work with this story! ***Warning some Spoilers written below*** Chapter One ~ A few sentences caught me. Second Paragraph down “…me up [to] no end.” ((But keep in mind I am in US and you are UK so I do not know how much is different and this stuff could just be me ^_~ )) “And bogs tended [to] not move around.” I also want to suggest that possibly making her thoughts Italicized? Or perhaps to help make the “~Damn~ it was a person” be more expressive. Awesome Chapter, great start. Chapter Two ~ Love how you put plenty of the characters thoughts into this Chapter and the previous. It really helps connect me to the character at this point. Chapter Three ~ “…hosting tropical wildlife…” Love it! Loved how you kept showing how Ryan perceived her Binding influenced behavior. Falling back and placing the Ankle incident really added to this. “…I had to stop myself [from] snorting…” Chapter Four ~ Her nervousness about the situation was very clear in this Chapter. Well done! Chapter Five ~ Love how she is struggling with even her thoughts and more panicked in this Chapter. It follows Chapter Four perfectly in stages of emotion. The button excuse was great! Chapter Six ~ The scarf was a nice touch! And I love how you lead us in with the Ink and paper and then shy away from the assumption the reader would expect. Chapter Seven ~ The phrase “Toy taken away and then given back” gave a great visual and tangible feel to the reader on the elbow scene. Great universal reference here! Spooked horse incident was a nice touch with the Binding still in play at that! In the bandaging section “Then I placed…” I think this would read more stout if you got rid of “Then” or “I”. Check how often you used “Once”. For some reason I felt like I was reading that word a lot in this section. ((I have been fighting repetitiveness in my own writing ~ My WordCount program has helped a ton~ High recommend the program!)) “…candlelight it[s] edges…” Love how subtle the “sweet prince” was added in this. Chapter Eight ~ I was excited and pleased with the Bounty hunter concept. It was a good way of explaining many aspects already wondered about in the story as well as giving the reader a guarantee for excitement and extreme circumstances to come. Chapter Nine ~ Love how in this Chapter that Eliza is struggling to have irrelevant thoughts and is clearly struggling with the Binding. Chapter Ten ~ Love the Tantrum statement after becoming paralyzed~! The one sleeping bag dilemma still not resolved is awesome. Brought a smile and giggle out of me. The arrow hitting Eliza and ‘tasting’ was a great, sinister feel~! STILL READING! I will post 11 thru 20 once I am finished reading 19 and 20 >,< As long as the Husband and Toddler leave me be to do so! Wonderful story Sam! Keep up the good work! Valerie ^_~

Love the new Cover! ~ I will be sending you a review for Chapter 1 thru 10 in a moment... I found the notebook with that I was writing tidbits in finally LOL~!

This is very well written. I've only read two chapters so far, but this is going on my shelf and I will definitely be reading more. I will come back later and leave a proper review. Great job so far. Kate Fade

backed- very enthusiastically!! Please post more when you can!

I really enjoyed reading the first couple chapters! The story pulled me in right away and I can't wait to keep reading. I think you have a very nice story line and I can't wait to see what will happen next. I gave it a great rating and backed it :)

'The Binding' is a simply outstanding read! I found myself on the edge of my seat as I anxiously flipped the page to see what would happen next with Ryan and Eliza. I have no negative comments other than that it ended entirely too quickly. Looking forward to more, -Andrea A Perception of Dreams

'The Binding' is a simply outstanding read! I found myself on the edge of my seat as I anxiously flipped the page to see what would happen next with Ryan and Eliza. I have no negative comments other than that it ended entirely too quickly. Looking forward to more, -Andrea A Perception of Dreams

Yay! Another chapter! Can't wait for 24! I am well and truly hooked. I hope you write many, many more stories with such passion. This is so much fun to read! Amy F. Virgin ~First Taste of Love

Thanks for telling me about chapter 22. another cliff hanger! Augh! Please let me know when 23 is up. Can't wait for more!

I just finished Chapter 1 and am enjoying it immensely! You do a great job of showing her emotions and using sounds and feelings to bring them to the forefront. That said, I would suggest maybe you find a stronger opening? Your first sentence didn't really grab me. Just a suggestion, though. I am enjoying it and cannot wait to read further! Especially liked the cliffhanger!

Wow, Sam! Chapter 1: Great initial setup: a concrete setting, glimpses into the MC’s spunky nature, an early hook to want to discover what she is running/hiding from. The action and visuals of the chase scene in the forest are tight. Great page-turning hook at the end of the chapter. Chapter 2: Izla’s disconnection from the experience of the inevitable binding works well. Her thoughts & resistance to it feel real, lifelike. You express the stakes very succinctly in just a few beautiful words. Excellent intro to the first sign of the curse with the involuntary touching & especially the “…leather and pine…” line. Love the “…male hellersbird in the mating season…” reference—very fitting to the scene! Great analogy with Ryan “binding” her ankle. Perfect. Once again, a page-turning ending to the chapter. Chapter 3: You handle the recurring temptations that the Binding brings like an expert. Each instance shows us Eliza’s involuntary reaction—and her struggle with it—without becoming repetitious. Great story device: using Eliza’s close, personal experience with Fiona’s unintended Binding to further show why Eliza detests the idea. With the elements of the moon, the Goddess, and the monthly threat of the binding, I see a possible analogy to the fertility cycle? If so, good thinking. If unintentional, good job for letting the unconscious concept play out. ;) Sam~ Your narrative is taut, your pacing is perfect, your descriptions are spot-on, and you have done an outstanding job of fleshing out Eliza. Honestly, I have no recommendations on how to improve the story through Chapter three. I am posting these initial thoughts for now. I will be back to read more & will add to this comment as I go. Outstanding job! [Seriously.] ~Lucas http://www.authonomy.com/books/41102/capritare-the-cycles-begin/

My computer ate my comment, so let me just say how much I loved this story. Not only did I keep on reading, but I am going to back this FOREVER. There are no criticisms that I can offer, as the story is just that good for me. The characters were well thought out and the dialogue was good, and you had me flipping through the chapters like a beast to find out what a Binding was. So please consider me your number one fan. Never has a story on this site caused me such heartache when I came to chapter 21, because I want more. Cheers. Marisa Tower of Paradise

My computer ate my comment, so let me just say how much I loved this story. Not only did I keep on reading, but I am going to back this FOREVER. There are no criticisms that I can offer, as the story is just that good for me. The characters were well thought out and the dialogue was good, and you had me flipping through the chapters like a beast to find out what a Binding was. So please consider me your number one fan. Never has a story on this site caused me such heartache when I came to chapter 21, because I want more. Cheers. Marisa Tower of Paradise

I just read the first three chapters and this book is fantastic. If I hadn’t had so many books to review, I would have read on and on. You pitch is great, the first chapter is enthralling, and each chapter ends in such a way that it makes it irresistible to go on to the next. This should in my opinion be rated even higher on the charts that it is. A book as good as this deserves to be published. Thanks for the great read. I wish I had something more constructive to say but I just couldn’t find anything wrong!

I read the 1st chapter and as soon as i have more time i am coming back to read every last chapter you have available to read.. This story is amazing and i have no doubt it will work its way up and end on the editors desk. It is captivating, full of description and lingering moments that suck you right in. The story has a refreshing flow with a vivid storyline and fascinating characters. i want to keep reading but my husband is demanding i get off the computer. great job and i look forward to reading more :) Amanda

I read the 1st chapter and as soon as i have more time i am coming back to read every last chapter you have available to read.. This story is amazing and i have no doubt it will work its way up and end on the editors desk. It is captivating, full of description and lingering moments that suck you right in. The story has a refreshing flow with a vivid storyline and fascinating characters. i want to keep reading but my husband is demanding i get off the computer. great job and i look forward to reading more :) Amanda

Ungh. Chapter 21. Poor Ryan! Why can't Eliza just give in already? Seriously, how awful would it be to fall in love with him? I feel bad for Adam but it's obvious she's meant to be with Ryan. Silly, silly girl! Looking forward to the next chapter with baited breath. :)

i only read to chapter three but I loved the mention of the flowers and plants. It reminded me of my own story. I also liked that the one of the main character's is a teenage girl. I was a little confused by the title, but after reading the first chapter I discovered it's more of a romance story it made more sense. You used the five senses very nicely along with your descriptions. Overall a great story.

Good chapter. I like how things are coming together in Chapter 20. Interested to see how Eliza is connected to all this. I'm eager for chapter 21. :D Keep up the amazing writing!

I don't have anything constructive to say, Sam. This is superb, and I think you should publish it. I'm on chapter four and about to continue. Bravo! :)

Great characters, excellent plot and well-written. Backed and highly rated

Loved chapter 19. I'm starting to really like Ryan and getting annoyed with Eliza. I always suspected Adam was in love with Eliza. Too bad he didn't tell her before she got Bound. Looking forward to chapter 20. Keep up the fantastic story telling! Amy F. Virgin ~First Taste of Love

i really like the storyline, it's unique, and interesting, vivid imagery. and fast-paced. this is exactly the type of novel i kept looking for but never actually find. i hope my eyes will be able to stand the strain i just can't stop reading this!

What an enchanting story. Your writing flows and is fresh and easy to read. Your characters stand out as different, yet they fit into the plot very well. Your main idea is good too, a new slant in the romance section. I found that I wanted to carry on reading as I got to the end of each chapter, as you left a nice hook to temp the reading into reading more. A good read. You have my backing. Well done.

Ok, I've finally caught up, and I'm actually glad I had so much to read in one sitting! Sam, this is a wonderful read - there are a couple of typos, but nothing that won't be picked up in a final edit, so I've not listed them. The last couple of chapters have reverted back to using the expletive "Goddess" a lot - while it fits in some places, especially with Eliza's frustrations, it still jars me a little - but that could just be me. I'm intrigued by the Adam thing, I get the impression taht he has feelings for Eliza too, and perhaps even wanted to be the one that she became bound to, but I could be jumping the gun there. I'm afraid, other than the Goddess thing, I've got no criticisms, so not sure this will count as a crit... :p Please don't leave me hanging here - when is Chapter 19 going to be up:

Read Chapter 18- Wow, Sam this keeps getting better and better! One possible editorial issue: "He raked my (his?) fingers though my hair..."- if not an editorial issues it just didn't make sense to me. Can't wait for more. Thanks Desi.

Whoo hoo! Definitely can't wait for the next chapter. Didn't actually see this coming. I can sleep well tonight. :) Thanks for chapter 18, Sam. Looking forward to what happens next. :D

Wow, I couldn't stop reading. You have great writing skills. Your words are liquid silver running across the page. it flowed so smoothly! I am giving you 6 stars, and putting you on my watchlist. Great job! Sincerely, D. S. Hale Jessup and the Teleporter

I just finished chapter one and had to comment! Wonderful, if you had any doubts of your 1st person talents, wipe them away! Right from the start, you drew me in! I am definitely adding to my library! I just love your writing style and your character Eliza is my new best friend! A fellow daydreamer and entertaining gal, you have my vote! The "Binding" I cannot wait to find out what that is all about..... A fellow author, A.D. "The Key- #1 of Anna Kippling Series"

Yay! Read chapter 17 and very excited to read more. I hope there's more soon. Love this book! ~A.F. Virgin ~ First Taste of Love

Loved chapter 16- I am glad that I finally got the time to read it. Can't wait for more. Desi.

Just finished the first chapter, and I must say I'm impressed! I'm usually not a fan of first-person, but the way this has been put together has intrigued me! I can't wait to read more. I love Eliza as a character, she seems flawed (in the good way, of course!) and realistic, so she's a very relatable character. I was a tad confused at first as to the gender of the speaker, so perhaps mention her name a little earlier on, but that may just be personal preference. In all, a very entertaining read! RK Summers

Oh my GOSH!!!! Chapter 16 left me breathless! I cannot believe this! Wow. Just... Wow!

Dang! Chapter 16. Okay...can't wait to see how Chapter 17 turns out. And if she's not bound to him...then what on earth is going on with her? ~L~ Hooked and eager for more.

Wow, great read! Backed and starred, can't wait to read more. Coraline

Thanks for continuing to add chapters- like the new cover art too. Desi.

Ahh! More cliffhangers! Can't wait for chapter 16. :)

Hello, Sam! I finally managed to read through the first three chapters and wanted to leave my thoughts. Take or leave them at will. Ch. 1 “I used to bring a small knife to protect myself, but once I’d seen it was impossible to get attacked here, I now didn’t bother.” – This reads funny to me, kind of stilted. Perhaps, “I used to bring a small knife to protect myself, but once I’d seen it was impossible to be attacked here, I quit bothering.” “Reducing to crawling…” – should be “Reduced to crawling…” Ch. 2 “I’d never hugged someone this tight since I was a little girl and wanted my mother’s comfort.” – I don’t feel like “never” is the right word here. If she’d never hugged someone that tightly before, then that’s what you should say. Otherwise, I think “hadn’t” would work well, as in, “I hadn’t hugged someone this tight since I was a little girl…” “Giddy schoolgirl is not how I like to present myself, believe me.” I loved that bit! :) Ch. 3 “If my cheeks got any hotter, I could start hosting tropical wildlife.” Funny! :) “Ryan snatched my arm, drawing me against his torso before I would fall.” – I think “could” makes more sense here than “would.” “The plot was thickening.” – I’m not sure you really need this line. It doesn’t really add anything to the story; the only purpose I can think of for the line is to illustrate Eliza’s deepening curiosity, but then you do that quite well two paragraphs later. One thing I wondered about, and maybe you go into it more in later chapters, but Eliza seems to be strongly affected by the Binding almost immediately - wouldn't Ryan be feeling similar effects? Is this something that only one party feels or is it something they would both feel? It seems to me that both of them would be affected by it at the same time - if one is Bound to someone, then that person should feel it, too. If the original purpose of the spell was to ensure that people found their true loves, then wouldn't both people be affected? I really enjoyed what I've read so far and I can't wait to get back to the rest of it...right after I manage to lose these darn shackles I seem to have stumbled into! :)

Hi Sam, I finally got a chance to check out your book. Below are my findings. They are, of course, my humblest opinions. Regarding your short pitch, I’m of the opinion that direct questions to readers is a bit hackneyed in pitches. It would be much more powerful to lead the reader to those questions with active, strong verbs. That might just be me, though. In your long pitch: There should be a comma after “For centuries” Replace the semicolon with “a magic called the Binding…” Curse shouldn’t be capitalized Bound shouldn’t be capitalized There’s a lot of excessive wordiness, such as “on one such night…” On what such night? Why not, “One night,” Great premise, but I think this pitch could be scrubbed a little better. Chapter one In your first line,…”that night”…what night? So far we don’t know the context so this loses a lot of impact when we’re in the dark on what the narrator knows. This opening paragraph, while great for the voice, isn’t an impactful opening” paragraph. We know nothing, so why do we care about what the moon was like on some random night? It’s too early for this. “Cheered me up no end” should be to no end “round my index finger” should be “around” Great pacing and a great voice. You do a good job of establishing mood in this first chapter. My biggest suggestion is to give the reader some context earlier on, even if it’s a nibble. If you get the chance, I’d love to hear your thoughts on my story, Deshay of the Woods. Please consider checking it out if you get the chance. All the best, Phil (Deshay of the Woods

Ack! Don't leave me here! I HAVE to know what happens next! Good chapter. Looking forward to chapter 15. I'm completely hooked. I love how Eliza is learning to really take care of herself and Ryan is also turning out to really seem to care about her.

Oh my God wow! I love this story and seriously could not stop reading! Please post more soon!! Happily backed. Gemmat The Protectors of Ealinga

Sam, I started reading this book yesterday (while I was supposed to be studying, I’ll admit), and I finished reading all you have up so far today (while I was supposed to be writing a paper). It was a lovely distraction. The fact that I read it so quickly means I thoroughly enjoyed it. I don’t know how you do it, but I’m pretty sure I didn’t see and typos, which was awesome. They can be very distracting, but your writing is flawless and thoroughly captivating. The characters are interesting and have personality, and there always seems to be something happening, so I was never bored or tired of reading. I like how you talk about the binding almost like it’s a person, since it seems to be able to plot things out on its own. There are only two things I am going to complain about. One is that you wrote a lot about feelings in the beginning, but you didn’t really say what they were. I had no idea what Eliza was really feeling because her actions only spoke of lust, and she seemed to be in control of her emotions because she was able to think about how she didn’t want to be bound. The other thing I’m going to complain about is that there isn’t more! I’ll be putting this on my shelf for sure, but not until October comes because I’ll have the space then. Thanks for the read! Cora

Definitely a better tone. It makes the reader feel sad for Eliza and yet eager to see how things turn out for her good. Looking forward to the next chapter. :)

Good chapter. I do think Eliza needs to stop fighting though. She might discover she truly loves Ryan after all. And no question he's starting to get feelings for her too. Can't wait for chapter 13! :)

I've just read through up to chapter twelve and I'm really enjoying this. Ryan's voice is perfect, I really like the tone you have for him, and the world you've built here is certainly interesting - right from the first chapter I found myself wanting to know more! The only criticism I have is that Eliza occasionally sounds very 'modern'. I like her very much as a character - at first I was worried she'd be a mindless Bella-like clone, obsessed with her man and nothing else, but as the chapters go on I came to appreciate her - there were just some phrases that seemed off to me, like where she says 'nice job on ditching those creeps'. This sounded a little out of place to me. But that's about my only critical point to make, I'm really enjoying the story and will look forward to you uploading more!

This is a very interesting read. The narrative flows simply and gives a good sense of her personality. It's easy to read and I didn't find myself tripping over any of the sentences. Will be back later to finish reading!

The Binding -- Sam Dogra--(I read your excerpt placed upon the "Romantic Tidbits" thread. It was so very good that I wanted to add to your "Comment" section. Hope you don't mind? Anything to draw attention to such great writing is important!) --Wow, Sam! This is really, really good! (The Binding) I'm very curious about the "Binding" now. But, I have to say, you take exquisite time to build your scene, transfixing your reader right to this time and place. Your first person explanations feel right at home, in sync with her actions taking place. Really great descriptions of everything: Ryan and his wounds, his looks, her apparent appreciation for him, which I like how subtly you describe those nervous feelings--great job; the horse, Cielo, and the need to wipe him down, supplies at hand; and I really like her feelings that show through the descriptions. Her nervousness, and yet, duty to care for him war with each other. I like it! Very well done! I'm going to have to look into this story of yours for the whole thing! Nicely done! Happy writing! Ellise ~ The Governess ~

More! I just finished chapter 11 and I'm dying to read more. My biggest question is, will she ever let the Binding take over and accept that maybe it's more than the curse? Will she discover that she's actually in love with Ryan and will he ever discover he's been bound to her? Will he love her back when she finally stops fighting her feelings? Okay, so a lot of big questions. Looking forward to more. This is a really great story. :)

Looking forward to chapter four. I really like Eliza's sense of humour. :) I really the line, "If my cheeks got any hotter, I could host tropical wildlife" I also like how she mentions her ankle was swollen like a male hellersbird in mating season. Even though I've never seen a hellersbird, the joke is still pretty funny. Loving this and it's going on my shelf.

Just finished chapter one and I'm super excited to read more. This is a really good story. I hope you'll be uploading more. I already love the premise and the idea that she's afraid to be bound to anyone, to the point where she actually risks her life. I am dying to know more. Thanks for letting me know about this story. Just one quick thing I noticed. At one point you say she felt the rumblings through the floor. (Paraphrasing here) Maybe you should call it the earthen floor or the dirt or something like that. Floor makes me think indoors. Anywho, reading on. :)

I saw this on the forum and decided to come take a peek. I'd like to take a writing course from you! Wow has been said multiple times and I have to agree with that sentiment. You are master at hooking the reader. I could go on and on, but instead I'm just going to continue on to Chapter 2. Best of luck with this! 6 stars and I love the cover! Hope you get a chance to check out my MG Fantasy too. :) Best, Ashley 'Maddy Hatfield and the Magic Locket

Well Sam, you've done it again, are you deliberately trying to instilll the curse in your readers by drip-feeding us? :p Just finished Chapter 11, and am still loving the flow, characterisation (Eliza just feels so familiar somehow) and the twists and turns. Waiting anxiously for Chapter 12...

My goodness this is amazing! I can't believe it's taken me so long to get to. Your writing is so well crafted and effortless to read. Eliza is a charming character and the little personal touches you've given her - like when she mentions tying up her hair - make her all the more real to me. And Ryan seems so sweet and gentle. I'll definately be back to read more. For now I shall rate you six stars, and as soon as there is a space on my shelf, it will be yours. Well done :) Luciana House 'Burning Angel'

Review//The Binding//Sam Dogra I read through the first chapter For what it’s worth, I enjoyed this. It has a considerable amount of polish and you seem to take pride in creating your varied world. The problems I took away from it weren’t on a grammatical level. Errors were in few. The issues I had were the tendencies to feel like “I’ve been here before.” Saying phrases like “Thank the gods” and the like, the strong-willed female character that needs to lead the pack (Maximum Ride, Katniss Everdeen, and ect comes to mind) and I could go on. This, of course, doesn’t have to be a bad thing. A lot of readers prefer the familiar, user-friendly novel for their everyday reading needs. I just kind of needed it to stand up and rise out of the pack. It is, however, one of the most heavily polished works on this fair site of ours. I see this being published very soon. It just might need a little something more to stand out on that shelf. Three Stars

I've read six chapters after coming to have a look from the forum, and I've really enjoyed it. Unusual idea, well told, and paced. I shall finish it tomorrow. :) Cariad.

I've added your book to my WL, it will be on my shelve soon!!! I loved the first three chapters, and can't wait to read more! If you'd like, check out my urban fantasy novel, Everlasting: Love has no limits (Heavy focus on romance) I think you'll like it. Great minds think alike (Our plots are very much similar, in some ways). It's strange actually, they are kind of similar, but in totally different ways,,lol,,you'll understand once you've had a peek.

I'm on chapter 9 and I don't know what to say. I absolutely love this story! This story world you've built is phenominal I can almost see it as i read about it. If you post any more chapters let me know if it weren't for the time i'd keep reading right now. The only issue I really had was what Eliza kept calling her "emotions" sounded to me more like unrelenting lust. Eliza is witty and a joy to read about. Can't wait to find out ryan's secrets. :D J.L.McMahon "Order and Chaos"

I'm on chapter 9 and I don't know what to say. I absolutely love this story! This story world you've built is phenominal I can almost see it as i read about it. If you post any more chapters let me know if it weren't for the time i'd keep reading right now. The only issue I really had was what Eliza kept calling her "emotions" sounded to me more like unrelenting lust. Eliza is witty and a joy to read about. Can't wait to find out ryan's secrets. :D J.L.McMahon "Order and Chaos"

Having just read Chapter ten Sam, I thought I'd add some comments. for me the action came a little from the blindside, in that when I read it I didn't think they were that close to the Shrine, but other than that it was well written, and got my heart racing with Eliza's flight. I would have liked to see a little more resistance from Ciero on leaving his master, maybe with Ryan having to force him to leave, as the nature of the horse that is coming over makes him seem a loyal servant. Other than that, very much approved - I think you need to still weave a little romance in there (sorry), but I get the feeling that perhaps she isn't Bound to him as she thought.... so perhaps that's why it has cooled off a lot? Maybe my cyncism?

What can I say but "wow". Once again as a writer you show a talent in telling a tale with wit and witty comments that bring a smile to my face. I love Eliza's sassy attitude at her situation and yet the realization of what is taking place and how she choses to fight through it with determination and courage. You created a MC's voice that is strong and lovable and the characters around her only add to the depth of the story. I love it, will continue to love it and will demand more!

hi sam, just finished ch9. it's great i can't wait to find out what happens next! i know your busy but i hope you post more soon. i'm eagerly anticipating it!

My interest in where this story is leading has been awakened by your easy to read style of writing. Eliza has a definitive voice that will appeal to a readership of all ages and you can't help but cheer her on as she struggles with her emotions. I wixh you success with this novel and look forward to reading more of your intriguing tale.

Hi Sam, I read on to the end of chapter nine. The adventure and intrigue has been increased in these next chapters. I enjoyed it. I like these plots when events lead to inescapable moments, keeps the romance element at the forefront. The tussle Eliza feels between the magic and her rational mind is well balanced and makes the reader empathize with her plight but also crave for her to give into it. Great stuff, will read on if you upload more, just let me know, Cheers Jacoba

Sam, I've read through the first couple of chapters of your work, and as is my wont I have compiled some feedback to offer. Hopefully it will be of use. Your opening is good, setting a scene nicely without overdoing the description. You create a framework from which the reader can build using their own imagination; the key to good writing. You avoid big chunks of exposition in preference of occasional touches as and where necessary, while hinting at questions that will eventually have interesting answers. Your presentation of Eliza in the way that you familiarise the reader with her is cleverly done, as it's a challenge given the first-person perspective. All this serves to create an interesting and promising opening to your story, and I'd read on further if it weren't for the style. This is completely my personal preference rather than a criticism, but I really am not a fan of this kind of casual, informal writing. I understand that it's intended to be a representation of the character, which it has to be given the first-person nature of it, but the character must also be the narrator and there has to be a line - a very thin line - between the two, which is why the POV is so very difficult. The casual way in which Eliza thinks, and therefore narrates, is very friendly with incorrect syntax and leads to fragments such as "lucky for me..." and "let's just say..." which aren't very pretty at all. Of course, as I say, this is all just my personal preference, and for all I know your style could well be perfectly representative of a lot of YA, as it's not something I tend to read (and therefore I'm unlikely to be your target audience). I hope in future you write something with a more...mature...style, as I really think you have the potential to create epic work. D M Sharples.

The new chapters are just as good as the first few....... Only one thing from me, the name of the village, doesn't quite sit right, but it may be that it is too close to another r wall that I know.... :) Sam, this is an excellent story, please try to finish a bit more before the shackles tighten... Rose

Thank You for the additional chapter. Still 6 stars and now backed. I hope you keep posting! Desi.

Every chapter you post just leaves me wanting more! Eliza's struggle against the binding is so realistic. And to see them growing closer... I cannot wait to read what comes next. Every chapter gets better and better!!

good writing; good descriptions that take us right there...scary and exciting... on my watchlist... 6 stars******

Dear Sam, I realized that my praise is a good indicator that your work is being enjoyed, but I felt that it would help you more if I actually analyzed it a bit more. So, here I go! I really enjoyed how you began “Binding” by not jumping into any kind of history or information dump. I personally find it hard not to do this when I am writing first person POV. By refraining from dumping the info and instead gradually piecing it in, I, as the reader, was able to grasp Elisa’s character and personality; creating a firm foundation in the character first and letting the details embellish her story. This also kept the pace of the story at such variability that the intense, suspenseful scenes were fast and gripping, while the relaxed scenes are pleasant and a gave the reader a break from the action. I think of it as a rollercoaster effect, giving one the exhilaration from the g-forces, then a break to recover and be pumped for the next dive. Besides all the great things I can continue to say, I just wanted to point out the two typos I found. Now, as a disclaimer, I am pointing these out to aid in your polishing, not to be nit-picky. As well, if they aren’t typos please disregard my comments. :) The first was in Ch 4 near the end were Eliza thought “Those greens eyes…” I am guessing you meant “green” not “greens”. The second was in the second sentence of Ch 6 were Eliza was explain her decision “…it actually had a lot factors…”, I do this constantly and forget the small things which I assume would be the “of” between “a lot factors”. I digress now. At the beginning of the story, the use of “goddess” instead of “god” or “gods” was bothering me, that is, until I realized there actually was a “goddess” so it then made sense and I felt ignorant for questioning your motives. I am quite excited to find out who Ryan is. You do a very good job of implanting questions into the readers mind by making Eliza question Ryan, as well as everything else. It definitely aids in making “Binding” a page-turner worthy of any shelf, whether that be on authonomy or in tangible form. I hope this is of help to you! Keep up the great writing. Best wishes, PJ Daley – Birth of the Warrior

I would say I am speechless about your work but that would be a shame not to share my praise. This story is absolutely gripping. I meant to leave a comment earlier but I was swept into the story so swiftly that I hadn't gotten the chance to. I just wanted to continue. The tone, pacing, style, all of it is just superb. As what has been said before I was too concentrated on the plot to find any mistakes to help point out, that is if there are any! This will be on my shelf very soon. Best Wishes, PJ Daley - Birth of the Warrior

I like this story. I'm a sucker for romance and fantasy, so when you combine the two, you have a winner in my eyes. The story moves along at a got good pace-- it was easy to read all seven chapters in one shot. You do a good job explaining the Binding curse and all its implications. Love the way Eliza is struggling to fight the urges of the Binding while they are fleeing danger. You've certainly built up a good sense of mystery surrounding Ryan. I'd like to see more to-die-for qualities so I can watch Eliza fall in love with him above and beyond the Binding. The story of Fiona is heartbreaking, so I can understand why Eliza tried to avoid the Binding for so long and why she sees it as a near death sentence. I would like to read more of this as you post additional chapters.

Thank you for posting more of this wonderful story! The writing is good- have no nitpicks. I can't wait to read more. Bumped up to 6 stars in appreciation of the added chapter. Thanks again. Desi.

Initial thoughts are great, I really enjoyed reading it, and it almost felt as though the Binding had worked on me with the story, because it took a lot of self control to wait until now to read the latest Chapter when I read that it was posted.... so, it has a great hook, and keeps you interested. I love the tail of Eliza's struggle - I personally would like to feel a little more "with" her when she is in the clearing, and facing the bear, understand a little more of the panic that ensued, perhaps more scents and sounds? You describe the effects of the Binding really well, and as a reader I can sense her urge to be closer to Ryan than she should be. Struggle with the name a little, but that maybe personal because I know a Ryan, that is nothing like this character, so.... There are a couple of typos in there but nothing that wouldn't get spotted in an editing run, so I don't intend to detail those. Finally, the only thing that really jarred for me is the constant "by the Goddess" "goddess" etc. Now I will openly admit that I was raised in a very strict household where language and blasphemy were not allowed, and even now at my old age (;)) it is not something that I personally do, so it is probably just me. I completely understand what is happening with it, but the use seems a little bit too much. For example, the internal conversation with the Goddess is fine, but to me I'm not sure that Eliza would always use the term Goddess during that conversation. Having said that I really appreciate that it is difficult to portray who she is talking to without using the name, and again it could well just be me and my old fashioned ways. It is a lovely story - even the gory bit about being shot;) Hope this helps - but as I say personal opinion only and feel free to burn on the rubble.

Hi Sam, just read the opening of The Binding and really loved it. The opening chapter has all the elements of intrigue, terror and it’s very easy to emphasise with the narrator. I’ve left some thoughts, which I hope prove useful. Backed. Pitches. Well written, as always, and intriguing. Chapter One. The opening description is evocative and it’s easy to place oneself beside the narrator, gazing up at the moon. 2nd paragraph: ....cheered me up (to) no end. You don’t need the bracketed word. Syntax: I glanced (to) the scars...bracketed word should be “at”. Syntax: (...and had come inches to where I was lying...) and had come within inches of where I was lying... Get hold of yourself, Eliza! You’re seventeen... A neat way to give the MC’S name, sex and age, without reams of exposition. Syntax: (Reducing) to crawling... bracketed word should be “Reduced”. ...and I had nothing to defend myself (with). Missing the bracketed word. ...slumped over (on) its side...missing the bracketed word.

Wow. This is a really good story! This is very original- I don't think that I have read anything quite like it. It is polished and well written- free from many of the editorial mistakes I often find. I am puzzled why she didn't want to tell Ryan or her parents what happened to her- Ryan might be angry but will find out anyway and her parents are part of a binding relationship and that would make me think that they would understand. Good hooks at the end of chapters keeps the reader's attention. I would love to read more- are you going to continue to keep posting more chapters? 5 stars. Thanks for sharing your story.

Hi Sam, Here are my thoughts on The Binding please use or ignore as you see fit. Your pitch had me interested straight away, it promises the sort of story i like to read and after having read the 5 chapters you’ve uploaded i wasn’t disappointed. Eliza comes across as a strong character who’s so determined not to fall victim to the binding that she hides out in a dangerous, wolf and bear infested forest. As such i find it hard to believe that she didn’t carry some kind of weapon with her or have them stashed in the clearing to protect herself, even if it was just a homemade spear. Wouldn’t her friend Adam who is obviously in on her hiding have helped her acquire some kind of protection? I wondered whether her family knew she had fallen victim to the curse, i don’t think that was made clear. If they didn’t know, why had she not told them? If they did know, why was she hiding? Could they have not helped her by locking her away for the night? Also she tells Ryan she’s running away from home, but she doesn’t have a bag or any possessions and he doesn’t ask if she has or think it’s strange she hasn’t. Lastly i felt perhaps Eliza cursed the goddess a little bit too much. I would be inclined to cut a few of the goddesses out or maybe give her a bigger repertoire of curses. These were the few small niggles i could think of in an exciting and compelling story. I’m looking forward to reading some more and have placed this on my shelf. Best wishes Lindsey

Great read . . .

Hi , Well I read all four chapters. It certainly picks up the pace when Ryan enters the scene. You have captured Eliza's feelings really well, as the reader I wanted her to rip his shirt off and kiss him. She is one tough cookie to fight those kind of feelings particularly when the magic of the curse is enhancing them. You have certainly set the scene to keep the reader engaged, who wouldn't want to find out how this all pans out. Definitely caught me, hook, line and sinker. My reader observations inclued thoughts on the beginning, I think it could do with some polishing and cropping to get into the story quicker. I also wondered about the dialogue. Eliza is a strong independent character, but I wondered about the time you have set this in. I picked up on a Medieval type vibe, but some of Eliza's words sounded almost modern day, don't know if this is what you are aiming for, and in this world they live in basic conditions but speak differently... not sure??? Also I wonder if you could tone down the inner dialogue just a smidge. At times it seemed a bit repetitive, I got how she was feeling about the unfairness of the curse and how it made her feel despite her trying to fight it, but her rantings got on my nerves a little. Despite these small nitpicks it didn't deteriorate from my enjoyment. I am a sucker for a good romantic plot and you have certainly got one here. I would read on, and would like to read on if you post more. Please let me know. I have a full bookshelf for the month, but I will watchlist this, and would like to put it on my shelf in the months to come and watch your progress. I think many after me, as those before me have obviously enjoyed your lovely tale. A job well done. Cheers Jacoba

Wow Sam! After reading chapter 1 (finally), I can see your first person is quite detailed. The part where you first mention the curse of the Binding and Adam was so sudden that I was intrigued. You actually do a great job at introducing Eliza's universe from what I've read, so no minus there imo. I think the pace, of course because it reads as some kind of diary in the first part, was a tad slow--I craved for action! Then the part where Eliza wonders about the thing lurking in the forest, which was a bear, all extremely well described. You have a knack for building up suspense and there's definitely good insight on Eliza and Adam's friendship in some moments. I'll be reading more to see if it Will Mac's thoughts coincide with mine. Hold on! :).

Oh my word! I sat down to read the first chapter and lost track of everything! I am demanding you put more up! You truly truly have a gift! Eliza's struggle is fascinating! This is staying on my shelf! Please let me know when you upload more so I can loose myself again. If there were any issues with the writing, I was too lost in the story to notice! Darlene

Sam, "The Binding" with its fascinating premise, was a spellbinder right from the start. I entered your dark woods slowly on furtive feet but got ensnared anyway, your lyrical writing style enveloping, mesmeric. Certainly getting into Eliza's POV Your long, undulating narrative and sparse dialogue contributed greatly to the dreamlike quality of your work. Thank you so much for the compelling read. Kenneth Edward Lim The North Korean