Joy, What a fantastic story this is. I know there are a couple of little glitches that I am sure you will amend, but I loved this. What a brilliant marriage between the characters of this book and the delivery of the narrative. The icing on the cake being the cool flow. Such an intelligent piece of writing. Loved it and good luck. I will be scoring this high. Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R) Please consider me for a read or watch list wont you?? Many thanks. Sean

You are a good writer -clear and concise, you draw people in. My book -Led by the Holy Spirit- is similar in some ways -I think you'd like it. I'm giving you some time on my shelf. Hope it helps. Olivia

Hi Joy, I am impressed by your writing and I have given you stars. Excellent and heart felt story. I cannot fault this facinating work. Your book is straight forward and very easy to read and follow, you should do well. It is worth publishing. God bless and continue tho hang on to God's love. Don't forget to drop by my page to support me. Blessing to you. Catherine If Only You Could Tell.

What a marvelous testimony of God's enduring love. Don't give up on having this published. God had you write it for his purpose. Best of luck and God's continued blessings. Thank you for your support of December Gold.

Joy I did read some earlkier chapters quite a while ago but thought I'd dip into your story a little further on so I have read chapters ten and eleven. This is such an open account of some traumatic events in your life. I admire your ability to be able to write about your experiences in such an honest and engaging voice. The phrase 'I ached to see my children' is so powerful and emotive. The scene when the doctor administers the tube to drain your lungs was quite horrific and brutal. Shocking to know that someone has had to suffer like that. And yet there is your faith that gives thanks for the positives like the brain tumour that proved to be a collection of calcium. Although there is immense sadness in this, your strength of character shines through. There is a definite market for this kind of story and many will draw on your faith and positivity. I wish you all the very best Debbie

very good book- honest and true; and tell it using the perfect narrative voice... ...backed... read SEASONS...

Joy, this story is so moving, being raised in poverty, a fathers love lost, a family home lost, a doctor that butchered you, that was really hard to read, as if we don't all dread those kind of things. I don't know how you sustained all this but I know the Lord does sustain us. Then a husband who like your father ignored his family and yet you are still positive and have been able to see the good side of life. This book will speak to others suffering any kind of personal suffering who need hope in their circumstances. Blessing s with your book Roslyn Scribe-Lings, for your child like heart "I Am" Through the Ages, for your seekingheart

Hi Joy I have read some of your book and love what I have read. It is very true that God works all things for the good of those who love him and are called according to his purpose. If a Christian reaches the stage where they can indeed believe that, thery are most blessed indeed A pleasure to back your book. Thank you for having the courage to write it

Joy I have read to the end of chapter four and I have loved every word of it. This is a book that I'd love to sit by the fire with on a cold winters night and read it cover to cover. It is a beautiful, if sad. story and I love it. I think you will do really well with this one. A truly remarkable, well written, true story that I am sure would be a joy for anyone to read. It is a pity that one can only put five books on their shelf, because yours definately belongs there. I have it on my WL for just now but it will be going on my shelf in the future. Thank you for sharing this great story. I'm sure it will do well for you. Thank you for your support of Tales for Children. Your friend Brian.

Joy...what a gift you've shared in this tale. I have always been aware of God's hand in my life when reflecting on events later, rarely--until lately--at the time. You have put into words the journey you traveled, touching so many that stumble along the way that will find strength in reading this book. I've given you high stars and have you on my watchlist. God bless...Linda

Joy: Thank you for letting me know about the new opening to your book. This is just what I'd hoped you'd do when I left my first review. You've nailed it, lady. This is much, much better. I enjoyed every word of it and have absolutely no corrections nor further suggestions for your opening chapter. Good work!

Hi Joy, I am a firm believer of destiny being the culprit of every vicissitude in our life. This fact, anybody would have known, if they care a little about introspection. I read couple of chapters and I felt I understood every word in it's true sense. But I concentrated on the content and so did not notice any mistakes, because I did not focused in that angle. Starred and backed. Get back to you after some more read with 'oh I found it' attitude. venkatarama dandibhotla

Dearest Joy, this book is beautiful, a gift to the reader, it is in the knowing having faith is just enough. You have sincerely proven that, this is my type of book. I will be reading the whole of the book, it is with greatest intention we share our inner sunbeam and spread be the human sunshine. For when we love God our hearts, minds, bidy and soul become the plentiful. It is with hopeyou read and comment on be the human sunshine a very small pocket book of sunshine blessings Clare.

Dearest Joy, this book is beautiful, a gift to the reader, it is in the knowing having faith is just enough. You have sincerely proven that, this is my type of book. I will be reading the whole of the book, it is with greatest intention we share our inner sunbeam and spread be the human sunshine. For when we love God our hearts, minds, bidy and soul become the plentiful. It is with hopeyou read and comment on be the human sunshine a very small pocket book of sunshine blessings Clare.

Joy, This is a beautiful and well-written story. We all have struggles and through our faith we can endure. High stars, Joy. Sara Stinson Finger Bones

Sorry it took me so long to start reading your story, but it was meant to be. My sister, who lives in Holland went through what you described in your first chapter, the pain, the vomiting, it looked like she was not going to make it. She is just now getting better, three months later. I hope to read the same in your case. You write very well, look forward to reading on. Christine

CLF Review - Hi Joy, I have read through chapter thirteen of your book now and I am struggling to put it down, but it is very late. Your story is touching me in such a deep way. You have conveyed “faith” very tangibly. I am amazed by the strength God has given you to forgive -- to see the good in very difficult and unfair circumstances. Your attitude puts heart and soul into your faith and it is, I’m sure, an encouragement to all your readers (as it is to me.) Your writing is easy to read and even though the circumstances are horrific, I found myself glued to your story. There is an amazing balance between anger and acceptance with what happened to you. Neither is there a pity party or a sugary view of providence. Your story is told with absolute honesty. You definitely have a story to tell… I hope God will be pleased to open the door wide so more than just Authonomites can read your book. Here’s a few notes I made along the way. Dianna Lanser Chapter five - I loved the humor in Edna and Sid’s driving partnership. Chapter six - Paragraph starting “During these teenage years…” is kind of long. Perhaps splitting it up into two or three would make it easier to read and separate the different thoughts. Your honest about your relationship with Jeff is refreshing. Chapter seven - Hearing how you came to trust Jesus at such a young age made me smile. I wonder if you could tell your readers the difference between giving your life to Jesus and dedicating your life. I understand the Lordship part of walking with God, but others may not. “Slowly, as I grew in the Lord and studied the scriptures I accepted my faith but took it rather for granted.” This seems a little obscure or undefined. And then the next sentence sounds a bit awkward and the two sentences together are somewhat redundant. “It became a part of me so natural it became ordinary or unexpected. “Mama has (had) been right all along. I had married (a) man just like Daddy.” Chapter ten - “…because the pain in my chest was worsening as they (the) day progressed.”

Simply written this is a good story. Seems like someone is very sick and it keeps you turning the page to see what happens, because you think, this could happen to me. A ggod dose of God and hope, I found myself cheering her on. Good job. Abby

Christian Lit review: “God’s Gracious Gift” In chap 4, you bring up very powerful stories of Kaja and her children in a simple and concise manner that’s quite effective. The only part of this chapter that was difficult was so many names, especially your father’s family. It was a bit much. But the story continued just as poignantly after that. In chap 6, Jeff never learned to eat pizza is weird. Maybe say, Jeff never ate pizza before. Still a very good story. N. LaRonda Johnson http://www.authonomy.com/books/45790/anticipation-of-the-penitent/

Joy...this is my CLF review. First, I was touched and moved by your beautiful story. It is well written, easy to follow, and your voice comes through clearly with honesty, strength, and genuineness. There are some remaining typo's and a few missing words, but I see that other commentors have pointed these out already with their usual precision and grace. As I was reading your story, especially through the last 5 or 6 chapters, I thought about how God is so incredibly capable of creating the same lessons of faith in people's lives through entirely different circumstances. I thought about Joseph, Moses, David being chased by King Saul, and others throughout the Bible. What is so inspirational about your story, is that no matter how difficult the road, it ended in a personal faith and trust in Jesus Christ that will endure for you for an eternity. I think that is what all Christians deep down want to discover in this life...not faith in our church, in our theology, in our pastor, in our prayer group, our Bible study group, our family and our friends (all otherwise good). We want to discover through a journey of faith that God is trustworthy. Your life-story and your book makes this argument in a powerful way that only God could compose and orchestrate...far above the realm of coincidence. And God was able to weave all of this into a story having recovery, reconciliation, forgiveness, redemption, and most of all love amongst an expanding group of family, loyal friends, and two priceless granddaughters. Jesus comes to seek and to save that which is lost in our present broken world. I do agree with Patricia Laster's comment of 16 days ago, that it might be useful to consider moving some of the very positive ending, maybe some of chapter 21, for example, up to the front of the book to give the reader the clear sense that this early struggle is headed toward an incredibly positive outcome. I know movies sometimes start out with a glimpse of the positive ending, then fade back into the beginning of the story through a flashback. Without changing your Authonomy version, you might experiment and then try out these changes with your reading critique focus group outside of Authonomy, for their reactions before making any changes in this current version. For me, the book really started to pick up steam around chapters 13-15, to where I wanted to keep reading to find out what would happen next. The literary device of giving the reader some of this impetus upfront to spur them on at the beginning of the book is something to consider at this fine-tuning phase of the book. Just a thought. I think you have a very fine piece of writing here, that absolutely grabbed me and pulled me into the story. With a little further tweeking, and another pass or two to correct misspellings and missing words, I think you have a God-inspired book that will bless, encourage, and uplift a number of people who may or may not be facing a life-threatening illness. One final note of encouragement. I suspect that many of the authors on Authonomy (including myself) are vulnerable to the notion that our ranking on Authonomy is an accurate barometer or validation of our book. I see that this book is in the 600's. With some thoughtful and prayerful changes, I think this book merits landing in the low double digits at some point. But whether or not it reaches the ED, you have a very good product based upon a genuine move of God in your life, which would help large numbers of people facing the beginning stages of a similar experience. The fact that this is a real-life autobiography, and that Jesus Christ saw you through to a beautiful resolution against very discouraging circumstances, speaks volumes about the God we follow. I pray that God would see you safely through the publishing challenge, and that the fruit of your life would reach the biblical hundred-fold level of blessing and helping other people. It certainly touched me. God bless you. Bart Jahn

Joy...this is my CLF review. First, I was touched and moved by your beautiful story. It is well written, easy to follow, and your voice comes through clearly with honesty, strength, and genuineness. There are some remaining typo's and a few missing words, but I see that other commentors have pointed these out already with their usual precision and grace. As I was reading your story, especially through the last 5 or 6 chapters, I thought about how God is so incredibly capable of creating the same lessons of faith in people's lives through entirely different circumstances. I thought about Joseph, Moses, David being chased by King Saul, and others throughout the Bible. What is so inspirational about your story, is that no matter how difficult the road, it ended in a personal faith and trust in Jesus Christ that will endure for you for an eternity. I think that is what all Christians deep down want to discover in this life...not faith in our church, in our theology, in our pastor, in our prayer group, our Bible study group, our family and our friends (all otherwise good). We want to discover through a journey of faith that God is trustworthy. Your life-story and your book makes this argument in a powerful way that only God could compose and orchestrate...far above the realm of coincidence. And God was able to weave all of this into a story having recovery, reconciliation, forgiveness, redemption, and most of all love amongst an expanding group of family, loyal friends, and two priceless granddaughters. Jesus comes to seek and to save that which is lost in our present broken world. I do agree with Patricia Laster's comment of 16 days ago, that it might be useful to consider moving some of the very positive ending, maybe some of chapter 21, for example, up to the front of the book to give the reader the clear sense that this early struggle is headed toward an incredibly positive outcome. I know movies sometimes start out with a glimpse of the positive ending, then fade back into the beginning of the story through a flashback. Without changing your Authonomy version, you might experiment and then try out these changes with your reading critique focus group outside of Authonomy, for their reactions before making any changes in this current version. For me, the book really started to pick up steam around chapters 13-15, to where I wanted to keep reading to find out what would happen next. The literary device of giving the reader some of this impetus upfront to spur them on at the beginning of the book is something to consider at this fine-tuning phase of the book. Just a thought. I think you have a very fine piece of writing here, that absolutely grabbed me and pulled me into the story. With a little further tweeking, and another pass or two to correct misspellings and missing words, I think you have a God-inspired book that will bless, encourage, and uplift a number of people who may or may not be facing a life-threatening illness. One final note of encouragement. I suspect that many of the authors on Authonomy (including myself) are vulnerable to the notion that our ranking on Authonomy is an accurate barometer or validation of our book. I see that this book is in the 600's. With some thoughtful and prayerful changes, I think this book merits landing in the low double digits at some point. But whether or not it reaches the ED, you have a very good product based upon a genuine move of God in your life, which would help large numbers of people facing the beginning stages of a similar experience. The fact that this is a real-life autobiography, and that Jesus Christ saw you through to a beautiful resolution against very discouraging circumstances, speaks volumes about the God we follow. I pray that God would see you safely through the publishing challenge, and that the fruit of your life would reach the biblical hundred-fold level of blessing and helping other people. It certainly touched me. God bless you. Bart Jahn

CLF Review Hi Joy, Great work. Your book is well written and mostly well edited. After the gripping prologue, I found myself deep in a real-life horror story. Well, they do say truth is stranger than fiction! I am so pleased it has a happy ending! :) The beauty of it is the way your Christian faith shines through it all. Thank the Lord for a Godly pastor, who was such a blessing, and for Dr Marklund, who won and deserved your trust. I came across a few minor corrections needed, so I thought this was probably the place to mention them. Ch. 4 little Martha "was scared on her arms and legs for life." Ch. 9 "I was starring down at them." Ch. 13 "...but was ever legally adopted by him." Ch. 18 "...they nurse shaved..." "...only through exploratory surgery can we for sure." Ch. 20 "...a tube down by throat." "...white surgical gaze." Ch. 21 "If that's true then way didn't..." Isn't it amazing how many times you can read through, yet miss those little typos? I wish you every success with your book. I heard a quote somewhere that goes something like this - "For the Christian, all the bad experiences you have here on earth, are all the hell you'll ever know." (Sorry, I don't know who said it). http://www.authonomy.com/books/38568/god-s-gracious-gift-why-coincidence-does-not-exist/

I read through chapter three and can't wait to read on. Your story is very interesting, and touching. I enjoyed every minute. I will say you had me near tears at the end of the third chapter but only because you were able to draw me into the characters so I cared about them. Great writing job.

Hi, Joy – I am going to get a reputation for rolling in last with my CLF reviews. As you know, I am often accompanied on my reviews by my English teacher alter-ego, The Grammar Hag. If I say anything you don’t like, it was probably her idea. Is this a new SP: People often believe life is a book filled with luck or coincidence. Read the book to discover how each chapter is written by God. I love it! I can imagine many people picking up a book with this on the cover. Life does seem random—until we consider it in the light of faith and God’s purpose for us. I think I saw that someone else had commented on the remark “it was the nineties…” I think you might want to be more specific about what’s different in the nineties. For example, I’m thinking, “Medical costs spiraling out of control so hospitals aren’t as caring as they might have been in another decade.” But I don’t know if that was your purpose or not. After reading again about your medical woes as a young woman, I’d say that being clearer about the changes would also offer some interesting foreshadowing if you compare the experience of the 90’s with your experience in the early 70’s. In fact, as you had horrific experiences in the 70’s despite receiving more nursing, you might want to expand a little on that because it’s a nice juxtaposition for your story. It also frames this experience well because we ultimately know how frightened you had to have been when you arrived and found they didn’t have you in the system. I have also heard ER nurses make unbelievable unprofessional remarks. I’m a teacher. I go home and tell amusing stories about my students to my husband. But I avoid staff-room talk because it’s just too much of a bad habit. Telling you your ‘behavior’ was intolerable is, in my opinion, a firable offense. I hope you reported this to your doctor. (When I had a bad experience after having my first child, my OB listened to my remarks & reported them to the hospital.) I remember from reading this before that your life story is simply enthralling. Your illness makes a strong frame from which to hang a life story and keeps the reader guessing and engaged. One thing that I think gets in the way is that you habitually make remarks like, “This was awful but the worst was yet to come.” It’s a bit distracting when you do it so often. Once would be better. Maybe twice. At the end of chapter 17, you say you were shocked when the nurse handed you the card of Dr. Gregg Marklund. Why were you shocked? You hadn’t met him yet. Your story is quite timely. It’s the Christian counterpart to the television drama “House,” in which a thoroughly unpleasant doctor diagnoses the most perplexing of conditions in very sick patients. I’ve still got this on my WL for future backing. ~AudreyB Forgiveness Fits

Hi, Joy – I am going to get a reputation for rolling in last with my CLF reviews. As you know, I am often accompanied on my reviews by my English teacher alter-ego, The Grammar Hag. If I say anything you don’t like, it was probably her idea. Is this a new SP: People often believe life is a book filled with luck or coincidence. Read the book to discover how each chapter is written by God. I love it! I can imagine many people picking up a book with this on the cover. Life does seem random—until we consider it in the light of faith and God’s purpose for us. I think I saw that someone else had commented on the remark “it was the nineties…” I think you might want to be more specific about what’s different in the nineties. For example, I’m thinking, “Medical costs spiraling out of control so hospitals aren’t as caring as they might have been in another decade.” But I don’t know if that was your purpose or not. After reading again about your medical woes as a young woman, I’d say that being clearer about the changes would also offer some interesting foreshadowing if you compare the experience of the 90’s with your experience in the early 70’s. In fact, as you had horrific experiences in the 70’s despite receiving more nursing, you might want to expand a little on that because it’s a nice juxtaposition for your story. It also frames this experience well because we ultimately know how frightened you had to have been when you arrived and found they didn’t have you in the system. I have also heard ER nurses make unbelievable unprofessional remarks. I’m a teacher. I go home and tell amusing stories about my students to my husband. But I avoid staff-room talk because it’s just too much of a bad habit. Telling you your ‘behavior’ was intolerable is, in my opinion, a firable offense. I hope you reported this to your doctor. (When I had a bad experience after having my first child, my OB listened to my remarks & reported them to the hospital.) I remember from reading this before that your life story is simply enthralling. Your illness makes a strong frame from which to hang a life story and keeps the reader guessing and engaged. One thing that I think gets in the way is that you habitually make remarks like, “This was awful but the worst was yet to come.” It’s a bit distracting when you do it so often. Once would be better. Maybe twice. At the end of chapter 17, you say you were shocked when the nurse handed you the card of Dr. Gregg Marklund. Why were you shocked? You hadn’t met him yet. Your story is quite timely. It’s the Christian counterpart to the television drama “House,” in which a thoroughly unpleasant doctor diagnoses the most perplexing of conditions in very sick patients. I’ve still got this on my WL for future backing. ~AudreyB Forgiveness Fits

CLF review Hi Joy, Your book really struck home for me as I have recently been experiencing stomach problems and for the first time in my life am seriously concerned about my health. In spite of the “gory details,” I much enjoyed the read, and my heart went out to you with every chapter. That aside, I want to say that you have a very good command of the English language, which, in my opinion, automatically puts you in the top 25 percent of Authonomy submissions. I did, however, notice some problems that I think need to be addressed, and I hope that my comments will be seen as beneficial and constructive. First, use a semi-colon instead of a hyphen between your title and subtitle (God’s Gracious Gift: Why Coincidence Does Not Exist.) Second, I think you are using two, three, or sometimes even four spaces between sentences; two having been the standard in the typewriter days. Nowadays, however, editors want you to use only one space, I think because using two messes up typesetting directly from the manuscript’s computer file. Also, word processors automatically justify (make larger or smaller) the letters to make sentence spacing even out. Thus, in the computer age, it has become customary to use only one space, and forcing a modern reader jump over that extra space (or spaces) tends to throw off their timing and enjoyment. For the overwhelming opinion on this you can google “one space or two.” It will be tedious, but my suggestion is that you turn on the “Show all symbols” tab —it looks like a Paragraph symbol (¶)—and get rid of those extra spaces, or else you may have a “find and delete” function that will do the job. Next, as good as it is, I don’t think you have gone back to edit your work sufficiently. I noticed a lot of errors of the kind that tend to creep into word-processed documents. These can include missing words, words that are spelled correctly but happen to be the wrong word, missing or incorrect punctuation, and just plain oversights that you can read over and over without noticing. I will list some of these to give you an idea what to look for. Ch 2: “Mama ran for phone.” “the” is missing. Your ellipses ( . . . ) are inconsistent, mid-page in this chapter you have 5 dots at the end of the sentence. Use three dots in mid-sentence and four at the end of a sentence. Also, those asterisks that you use to break up sections of text are fine, but you will want to center them instead of having them in different places as you have. To make it come out right in authonomy, make the asterisks, copy and paste one set on top of the other, center the top set (center function,) and use the space bar to line up the bottom set with the top set. Then delete the top (center-functioned) set and keep the bottom set with its space-bar spaces lining it out to center. Ch 3: Italicized “Leave it to Beaver” carries over into the next word, “world,” which has been mistakenly italicized also. Ch 21: Missing question mark at end of “What made you so sure of your diagnosis?” Also, I would use “I asked” there instead of “I said.” Two sentences later you mistakenly have the word “way” when you meant to put “why.” Missing word “a” before “second granddaughter.” So you can see, Joy, that you need to go back over this a few times. The more the merrier, as these little devils are extremely hard to spot, especially in one’s own work. You might try reading it to yourself out loud, or at least very slowly, focusing on each word and point of punctuation. Also, of course, you can have other people read it, giving them a pen and asking them to mark down anything they see. Best of luck with this, and you have my sincere prayers for your health and well-being. Oh! And no rush, but scratch Tippy behind the ears for me. Eric The Second Symbol

Christian Lit review: I’ve read the 1st 3 chapters so far. Your voice comes out very well, and it is a hear-felt story that gets us thinking of our own histories. The stories are told in the oral history tone that brings to life the characters, including your siblings, Uncle Ed and the pets. I’ll return to read more soon. Below are some additional comments. The first paragraph is a bit confusing, because you say “It was the 90s and everything was different.” Different from what? Before that you say “gone were the days,” but your timeline is unknown. By the end of the Prologue, you get a better understanding what’s going on, but still your comparing two different time experiences are confusing when you don’t know when the other time period was. In chapter 1, do you mean, “Only my screams echoed...” Saying “My screams only echoed…” sounds like the screams should have done more. I like your description of your early life. Very descriptive. Instead of mummified, I think you mean petrified body. N. LaRonda Johnson http://authonomy.com/books/45790/anticipation-of-the-penitent/

CLF Review: Thanks very much for the offering, Joy. I recalled I had commented on your book sometime ago. I wanted to cheat and use that former comment for CLF but could not find it, and so I had to take another look, and I think it’s just good for you. You obviously have a strong story to tell and you go about it with gusto. Moreover, you write quite well, have a strong voice, and your tone is apt. The primary issues I have noticed, however, are diction (word choice) and the need to tighten your prose. Oh yes, I am presently undergoing orientation for my new job as a freelance technical editor and my senses are being sharpened to these things. You might think otherwise, but here are instances. In your pitch, you write: “My previous siblings had been beautiful…” That sings some, but to an editorial eye, it might be better put as: “My OLDER siblings had been beautiful…” On the other score, you write in the prologue: “My 6 a.m. arrival at the clinic proved to be unsettling. “ For an opening line, why not tighten it and enhance impact with: “My 6 a.m. arrival at the clinic was unsettling. “ Guess you get my line of thought, which you can apply along the way. I would also suggest that you strengthen your pitch and build it around the core of your story. At the moment, it is a bit disjointed and seems to be going different ways, and falling back in the process. All said, you have a worthy story and write well, and I wish you all the best with this. Would look out for an opportunity and incentive to give it a push. Thanks again and many blessings. David Would appreciate your thoughts on THE EVOLUTION OF ETERNITY http://www.authonomy.com/books/41044/the-evolution-of-eternity/

Wow Joy - just finished up. What a testimony you have of God's grace and love! Bless you for your unbelievable attitude in spite of enduring more trials than most of us can begin to imagine. I pray all the best for you and hope your story brings hope and life to all who need to hear it. Patti Ch. 15 - it says you were 6 years his senior. But that you were 36 when you met and he was 28 when he died, so that's at least 8 years difference. Ch. 19 - just checking that you wanted the same paragraph in this chapter as at the beginning of the book or if that was also a result of rewriting? I kind of like the repetitiveness as it felt like I had come full circle with you and was now ready to hear the end of the story.

Hi Joy , I read chapter 5. I was hooked by your pitch and wanted to know more. You have written a fantastic account of your childhood and the voice that speaks is one with passion and conviction. I felt sorry for the smelly girl, I am sure there was also such a character in my school. This is a very interesting piece of work, I would like to come back and read more if I get a chance. Kind Regards Lenny Banks - Tide and Time: At The Rock

Joy, Just couldn't stop reading your book this evening. Your story is so compelling I couldn't wait to find out more. A few thoughts as I finished ch. 14. When you say, "eventually I married and my husband was sent to Vietnam" it's written as though it's the first time we're hearing it, yet we already knew that from earlier in the book. So that seemed kind of odd. The other thing I found confusing is that you're referred to as Stacey throughout the book but have your name as Joy. Since your story is so unbelievable to begin with, it seems like it could lead more to the reader wondering whether or not the story is really yours. But all in all, it's an incredible testimony of your perseverance and God's grace throughout your life. Just amazing!! Blessings! Patti

Joy, Just couldn't stop reading your book this evening. Your story is so compelling I couldn't wait to find out more. A few thoughts as I finished ch. 14. When you say, "eventually I married and my husband was sent to Vietnam" it's written as though it's the first time we're hearing it, yet we already knew that from earlier in the book. So that seemed kind of odd. The other thing I found confusing is that you're referred to as Stacey throughout the book but have your name as Joy. Since your story is so unbelievable to begin with, it seems like it could lead more to the reader wondering whether or not the story is really yours. But all in all, it's an incredible testimony of your perseverance and God's grace throughout your life. Just amazing!! Blessings! Patti

Joy, I just read the next 3 chapters. This time I didn't focus on finding typos but just let myself enjoy your wonderful story. Your descriptions are so vivid and I like the way you use flashbacks. Very effective! Anxious to keep reading. :-) Patti

CLF Review I started reading this earlier today and kept reading late into the night! What an inspiring story! I'm shocked at the doctor's treatment of you and all you had to endure in both the hospital and in your childhood, but am so glad that you found God was there for you in your trials, and that he used these difficult times to draw you close to him. I saw nothing in the story that needed to be changed, as it was heartfelt and emotional. Only a few typos can be looked at. Ch. 1, "You'll have to wait...(period missing) Ch. 9 I was starring down... (staring) Ch. 13 I just want to make them right with all of you (.") and She had married daddy under her step-father's name, but was (n)ever legally adopted. Other than a couple than that, I loved your story and the peace in God it conveyed. High stars! Kara A Gate Called Beautiful

CLF Review I started reading this earlier today and kept reading late into the night! What an inspiring story! I'm shocked at the doctor's treatment of you and all you had to endure in both the hospital and in your childhood, but am so glad that you found God was there for you in your trials, and that he used these difficult times to draw you close to him. I saw nothing in the story that needed to be changed, as it was heartfelt and emotional. Only a few typos can be looked at. Ch. 1, "You'll have to wait...(period missing) Ch. 9 I was starring down... (staring) Ch. 13 I just want to make them right with all of you (.") and She had married daddy under her step-father's name, but was (n)ever legally adopted. Other than a couple than that, I loved your story and the peace in God it conveyed. High stars! Kara A Gate Called Beautiful

Joy, I read some of your story quite awhile ago and am glad to be back for a more thorough read. I've gotten through 3 chapters. I have some typos included and would suggest that if you know someone who could help you do some editing to clean up the punctuation errors, etc., it would give your story a more polished look. Most importantly, you have an incredible story, enduring things I can't even begin to imagine. Thank you for your bravery and openness in sharing such personal experiences. I look forward to reading more to see how God brought you through unbelievable circumstances. Many blessings to you!! Patti Ch.2 - gorilla-size hands, (I'd use a dash in there and a comma after hands rather than a semi-colon) The next few weeks I spent in agony, (again I think there should be a comma rather than a semi-colon) Mama ran for phone. (missing the?) Ch. 3 - I think you need a comma after Jack. You don't need commas before or after Katherine. claw-footed tub (need a dash) soda fountain, setting up (use a comma rather than a semi-colon) I wasn't understanding who the Bambi Man was.

***Review for the CLF*** What a way to start a book! The prologue reminded me exactly of what I felt the time last year when I was to go in for surgery, was prepped, had even been stuck in the hand by the anaesthesiologist and then was told it was cancelled! And The Beginning brought back a lot of memories! Needless to say, you had my attention right from the start. Okay, about the actual story, I have to say that I enjoyed the matter-of-fact tone and style of the writing. It didn’t feel over-embellished. You drum up quite a bit of empathy for the MC, as the hospital experience was utterly atrocious. We feel the MC’s pain and despair. The only thing I noticed in the Prologue was that there is a question mark missing at the end of the last question. Chapter 1: I am not sure about the punctuation in the last two sentences. The semi-colons seem misplaced or to add some confusion about the pacing and meaning of the sentences. That may be one of the reasons I had a little difficulty understanding the imagery used to describe the scream cutting through the silence and emptiness, for example. Chapter 2-Days of Innocence: I love the description of the early, ’simpler’ life of the 50’s and the relationship between the sisters. Well done. One thing that wasn’t clear to me was how she was able to protect the MC even when she was home from school? The section when the MC talks about being fearful seems to come out of nowhere and then ends and is not mentioned again. This seems to be important, so perhaps there is a way it can be rewritten to that it is better highlighted or better connected to the over all story. I think it would be nice to know how many years after the father left that he died. Is it supposed to read ‘packaged fryER chicken’? There’s a question mark missing after ‘What’s wrong?’ Maybe ‘…before it got him!’ instead of ‘…before it accomplished its goal’? It sounds a little less formal. I like the way you end this chapter, sort of setting the tone for what is to come. This is turning into a touching story, one where the reader pulls for the success and well being of the MC right from the start. I am very glad to have come across your book and hope that it continues to do well. Best, Dyane The Purple Morrow

For CLR forum: Wow! Joy! I've read 1-4 looking for a break. I'll keep reading. I had to check to make sure this wasn't fiction. I can't wait to get to the resolution with God.

Joy, your book has a lot of depth of feeling to it. The opener is really an eye catcher. I can't imaging having something like that happening. The flow of your book is easy making it a paced read. For me I don't really read Biographies. However you write very well as your word out your story into this book. Grand work. Shelby Z./Driving Winds P.S. Please take a look at my Christian pirate adventure Driving Winds.

Oh I forget to tell you. I'm rating this six stars. I thought I had early but I didn't... :-)

CLF Review Hi Joy, I have read the first four chapters of your book so far. I’d like to echo what Faith said about your book. Your heart and strong, indomitable spirit came through as I read the difficult circumstances of your childhood, your heritage, and your more contemporary situation. Despite the tragedies I get a sense of hope which is portrayed through the fact that the writer realizes everything is broken - life is not quite right. You are doing a wonderful job bringing the reader through the “pit” in order to make them ready for the hope you have found in Christ. I love these kind of stories. Unfortunately, someone has to live them in order to tell them. I’m sorry you were the one who had to experience such difficulties, but God has given you the gift of writing to bring Him glory. In our weakness He is strong. And God’s strength comes shining through in your writing. Like Faith, I too loved the authenticity of your voice and how you made the “everyday” incidences of your childhood to tug at the heart of your audience. Everybody loves to read about the Cinderella child who is able to find joy amidst the ashes of life. You do this so well in relating the stories of your sister and your pets. Oh, I wanted to tell you that I liked the chapter titles too. I especially liked chapter four, reading about the grandparents and parents. It certainly brings out the effects of living life without the One who is able to keep us all from falling. Incidentally, my maiden name is Bailey. My grandfather was a preacher, but our family tree is not without its stories as well… I will happily read on! Dianna Lanser Chapter three - “It was tough to use the bathroom without water to flush to (the) toilet…”

Dear Joy, I am so happy to be back visiting your book for the CLF! I started at the beginning again and read up through chapter 4 today. There are so many things to love about your book. I hope I will be able to put into words how much I adore your story. FIrst of all, I love your tone...your honest voice. There are so many times when authenticity simply shines. For example, "yah, right, the only thing I need is a new body." Also, when Dr. McGeorge sent you home "with a bottle of Milk of Magnesia in hand." Your honesty shows humor and heart throughout. I love it! I also really like your descriptions.You have wonderful word choice, but it is not overly flowery (just for the purpose of choosing big words!). Some of my favorites were: "surrounded me like a death shroud," "scratchy nylon sofa," and "pressed their wrinkled jowls tightly..." Great stuff! The family dynamics also deeply connect the reader on an emotional level. From the bond with Katherine and Edna, to the struggles of Mama, and the abandonment of Dad. Even the beloved dog really pulls at the hearstrings and gives the reader a very moving image. I think my favorite aspect of your writing is your use of flashbacks. You cycle in and out, giving the reader bits and pieces, then zooming out for a broader view. I love this! It is particularly poignant at the end of chapter four, with the line: "I knew his legacy had followed me. Mama's past was my future..." Wow. This is a wonderfully-written book, beautifully brimming with heart and soul. I'd give you more stars if I could, but you already have 6 from me! An amazing piece. All the very best, Faith Rose Now To Him

CLF Review Hi Joy. This was an amazing memoir. You filled it with personal details and emotions from the beginning through to the end. The story jumped right into a huge hook with the surgery and mix-up of the schedule. So many bad things happened, but there was so much love and gold to fill in. Nice repeat of the start in chapter 19 and a very fulfilling finish. This type book isn’t my normal preference, but when I started reading I was hooked. I read it entirely through without stopping. This is an excellent story and knowing it is a memoir makes it so much more poignant. I am reminded of a quote from one of my favorite authors. C.J. Cherryh, “Coincidence is how God makes physics work.” (FYI - Cherryh is a famous science fiction and fantasy writer.) A full 6 stars and I hope you’ll be moving to the Editors Desk rapidly.

I'm going to take a real risk here and be bluntly honest about something, Joy. Forgive me and try to understand that I'm taking this risk because I think you have the makings of a great book here and I want to help you reach its potential if I can. You know I really wish you would change the order of your book and start the book immediately with your final diagnosis by Dr. Marklund. Follow this by a backflash to your childhood and tell your story in chronological order from there. I know this is a major overhall, but I feel really strongly that it will give a lot of credibility to your story, Joy,and for the following reason: Here's where I stick my neck out (go ahead, chop it off...smile) as a person and a psychologist, I was wondering more and more, as I read your book in the order in which you have written it, if you were suffering from hypochondria rather than a real illness and blaming your early doctors and nurses for your problems, especially since your descriptions of the earlier medical personnel made them sound more like monsters than real nurses and doctors. If I had known, from your prologue, of the final diagnosis, I would have followed your story with much more seriousness and more readily accepted the truth of the early medical personnel's incompetence. A second suggestion I have for increasing the credibility of the things that happened to you is actually twofold: 1. During those earlier times in the hospital when the nurses and doctors were monsters, were there any staff who were kind to you? If so, bring them into the story. Otherwise I wonder if readers will be dubious, as I was, of your perspective? 2. I am a passionate animal lover - I have had pets all my life and now have two cats and two dogs...so I empathize with your love for animals completely. But two things again bothered me a bit in relationship to the animals in your story - the horrible endings for the pets of your early life...could you talk more about the good times - perhaps humorous events - that you had with your pets and give their horrible demise a little less emphasis? and ... perhaps as an adult, give less time to describing your pets - just mention them occasionally and, if there has been any humor at all in their time with you, it would be a good thing to tell about that. This is the second time I've read your book, Joy, and I have been captivated by it and, in the end, inspired by it both times...once I found out the true diagnosis of what was happening to you. I admire you awesomely and do believe in your writing, do believe you have talent, and definitely believe you have a story to tell. I would like to see you tell it in a different order, however, and with a few changes as I've mentioned above. Your Christian testimony is marvelous - so real and so passionate - and I would leave it exactly as you have expressed it. God has certainly touched and been a part of your life and it shows, actually, it shines. The scripture verses you have quoted touched me to my core. Thank you. Thank you. Beautiful story, Joy, by a beautiful Christian lady.

Hi Joy, This is so full of raw feeling and truth. You take the reader right in and introduce them to a strong dose of reality. '.......a number to be randomly tossed into a raffle bowl'. That is the best description I have ever heard describing the terrible nameless feeling that so many people struggle with in these situations. Your pain and suffering is strongly felt. The early years are sad, but there is beauty in the love of your mother for her children and all God's creatures. This is a story of endurance, courage and Faith. At each turn a gentle figure appears as if placed there by God to lend just enough assistance at just the right time. Your Faith is a miracle! People can learn from your strength and devotion. I'm inspired by you and your heartfelt story. Thank you for sharing this. This book will be a wonderful healing tool for all you read it. We take so much for granted. High praise and stars! God Bless, Chris/ A SPICY HURRICANE

Hi Joy, This is so full of raw feeling and truth. You take the reader right in and introduce them to a strong dose of reality. '.......a number to be randomly tossed into a raffle bowl'. That is the best description I have ever heard describing the terrible nameless feeling that so many people struggle with in these situations. Your pain and suffering is strongly felt. The early years are sad, but there is beauty in the love of your mother for her children and all God's creatures. This is a story of endurance, courage and Faith. At each turn a gentle figure appears as if placed there by God to lend just enough assistance at just the right time. Your Faith is a miracle! People can learn from your strength and devotion. I'm inspired by you and your heartfelt story. Thank you for sharing this. This book will be a wonderful healing tool for all you read it. We take so much for granted. High praise and stars! God Bless, Chris/ A SPICY HURRICANE

It always takes courage for us to put the most personal issues of our lives in writing and hang it out there for all to read. But, as you said, every chapter of our lives are written by Him, including that in which He might have appointed us to share our stories for the benefit of others. “In thy book all my members were written, which in continuance were fashioned out, while as yet there was none of them,” says the Psalmist. For this courage, you must first be commended. Having said that, I must also say that you write well and your voice is apt for your genre. Your starting idea in the prologue is brilliant and pulls in the reader, especially the closing line – although I believe you can tweak it some to intensify it. Consider strengthening the imagery by describing the atmosphere in the room and elaborating on the emotions and inner turmoil of the principal characters of the scene, especially yours. While sparse writing can indeed be a plus, I am noticing that you might be getting too sparse and somewhat jumpy, especially considering that this isn't fiction. Indeed that's what quickened my attention, because it was beginning to read like fiction. I suppose true-life stories 'sell' better on arousing the emotion, which takes us back to my initial note and suggestion. You might also want to keep an eye on your sentence structure, including looking out for where they could be broken up to improve readability, where you can tighten things, and on issues of punctuation. Take for instance in Chapter 1 “I was so sick after the bath of my second child, I didn’t even have enough milk to nurse her, and beyond that I wasn’t even strong enough to even care for her.” Consider: “I was so sick after the bath of my second child, I didn’t have enough milk to nurse her. Beyond that, I wasn’t strong enough to care for her.” Notice the sentence break, the inserted comma, and the two occurrences of “even” taken out. The purposes of the two “even” are already well served by “so” and “beyond that.” I will conclude by suggesting that you strengthen your pitch to reflect the uniqueness and depth of your story, as that is often the make or mar feature for potential backers and peeping editors/agents. I can imagine you greatly tightening your prologue to include some of its information in your pitch, especially the latter part of the prologue. Indeed, there is a little thing I also noticed in the pitch: “My previous siblings had been beautiful." "Previous" and "had been" sound like a tautology. All said, this is a very good and worthy work and I will be looking out to make room for it on my shelf soonest. Thanks for offering this. Best wishes and blessings always.

Dear Joy, I started reading your wonderful memoir God's Gracious Gift ... and actually couldn't put it down. Your description of your experiences in hospital, the crudeness and carelessness of nursing staff and administrators are so shocking and yet we all call ourselves Christian - what a shame. Your story is an encouragement to anyone who has faced adversities in life, whether as children, facing a family breakup, poverty. You write matter of factly, without making us feel overwhelmed by sadness, rather your account is written in such a way that it serves and an encouragement and upliftment of one's soul. Thank you again and keep turning out books like this. :-) All the best on Authonomy Maretha/African Adventures of Flame, Family, Furry and Feathered Friends

What a wonderful story. Very engaging and so well-written, the pages just flow. Your memoirs are rich with characters both good and not so good, and you have really caught the times and places of your childhood and adult life so well. I was so engrossed that I barely made any notes - but I did write down one sentence that stuck with me 'It was the happiest time of my life, and yet I didn't know it.' These are very wise words. I havee read to the end of chapter 6 but will definitely return and read more. This is the type of book I would buy and treasure. Thank you for sharing your memoirs - they are truly inspiring. Lots of stars and wishing you lots of luck with this book. Debbie Speedy McCready

Hello Joy What a joy to read, literally! Your opening was the hook, you delved right in to the pain, suffering and emotion and then you built your story-line of showing not telling perfectly. I couldn't click the pages fast enough, each chapter grabbed me, not only with the story and intensity, but with your heartfelt emotions. Growing up without was difficult enough but dealing with deeper sorrow was distressing, all the while you maintained your integrity. Your descriptive tone was fantastic, describing each character and location, creating perfect visuals... Thank you for sharing your life in this powerful memoir, it is truly inspiring... I will back this book today.. Good Luck with the rest of its journey FC

I LOVE this pitch. It is so real. I am willing to bet that this book cannot be put down, once started.

Dear Joy, This is truly one of the best memoirs I have read! You write with such heart, such deep emotion. I was immediately drawn to your story, and the richness of your writing has kept me turnng page after page. I love the little details such as Edna taking you to church "whether or not you wanted to go," and the description of the "shack" gave a authentic, genuine view of life itself. An amazing piece, Joy. I wish much well-deserved success. Highest stars! All the very best, Faith Rose Now To Him

I'm enjoying your engaging book very much. The way you've written it leads the reader into the scenes and the world of the characters. Each chapter has a great hook. I'm giving it six stars. I have a teen sports mystery, Stopped Cold. I hope you'll come by to read some and feel you can support it with a comment, stars, watch list or backing.

I'm glad to put this on my shelf. My sister Faith Rose highly recommends it.

Hi Joy A very well written piece, much of which resonated with myself. I have respectively watch listed and 6 stared your work. I can't help agree so much with you that there are no coincidences, just our inability to see things the way God sees them. I touch on this specific issue in my own book:- IS ISRAEL REAL? Adam De-Thurstman

Dear Joy: This is a marvelous book! I read the whole thing (well, ch. 22 wouldn't load) - couldn't put it down! Thank God, literally, for Dr. Marklund! Your writing is excellent. I like the way, in the first few chapters,that you pulled us back to the time you were in the hospital and then gave us flashbacks to your early life. (I cried about Tippy, though). Oh my, I am so angry at that Dr. McGeorge! He should be behind bars! Of course, for your sake, I'm glad you were able to let the anger go - but, wow, there are too many in the medical profession like him.typo: you left the very out in Ch 4 "It day 5" ... I think you meant "It was day 5"? Full stars for this great book! and prayers for continued health for you. Your faith is a marvelous testimony :-)

What a wonderful declaration of faith! Your book is a tribute to your faith by showing us that in spite of all you have had to endure your faith in God remains strong. When you have suffered – as you have – and yet can still praise God, that is a wonderful witness to a doubting world. I loved the detail in your stories within the story – especially the bird on the top of the refrigerator – showing how God is over every detail in our lives. No coincidences indeed – but perhaps God-incidences! Thank you for sharing your story. Margaret How do I know I know God?

Joy: I have read 9 chapters of your work! Wow, you have been through a great deal. Some of it reminded me of when I was a child and I could really feel for what you went through. It is well done and a good read. You should be very proud of the fact that you were able to put it down in words. I know from experience that one can never put it all down or share all the torment and pain. we can only try. High stars and I do plan to read it all. Well done, Shirley Grace

Sharing my inner sunbeam with you and spreading too what God intended...Be The Human Sunshine, your book is thoroughly enjoyable, a page turner. Intriguing, I intend to read more on my watchlist for now. Rainbows a plenty Clare Be The Human Sunshine x

The emotion trauma waiting on operation is immense. In such situation one need as much support and encouragement. Sorry about your pain. However, there were aspects of chapter one that made me doubt the experience. You said you were left for hours then the nurse arrived and jammed you in your bottom. Surely you were lying on your bottom. How did the nurse get to it? It would be more believeable if you said your arm or leg.

I'm on chapter 9 and will continue reading. This is marvelous! You write your story well, braiding the story of your early life with your terrible hospital stay. I think your story will appeal to many women, as you explore the universal themes of the fragility and strength of both good health and love. These early chapters show us your most desperate moments. I'm eager to read on to learn about your strong and happy moments. I have one tiny peeve, a pet peeve unique to me. You are right to describe your own childhood in glowing terms, and I'm pleased your childhood was filled with joy and love despite--or perhaps because of--your family's poverty. But the sins of today took place in those years. People suffered. Whenever I read anything that suggests that those years were simple, heavenly times for everyone, I get cranky. So if I were to recommend any change at all, it would be to alter those passages to make clear that your description of life as peachy-keen applies to your experience. Otherwise, I wouldn't change a word. Also--Are you in any crit groups? There are two Christian groups and either/both would love for you to join. The Christian Lit forum reviews one book each month: http://www.authonomy.com/forums/threads/90961/christian-lit-forum/ The Christian Critique and Review Group requires that you review one book in the group every month: http://www.authonomy.com/forums/threads/84425/christian-critique-and-review-group/ ~AudreyB Forgiveness Fits

Joy, God's Gracious Gift is an absolute treasure. I intended to read a couple of chapters (as I'm short of time this morning) but couldn't tear myself away until end of chapter nine! Your writing is so engaging and easy to read but also deeply moving. I love the way you hint at further troubles to come - it kept me reading on and on. I get a real feeling of the faith that has carried you through all of these hardships and I do hope the book does well. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it and am intrigued to read more when I can. Lots of stars! Best, Melissa

I have just read 2 chapters beautifully written really sad. on my watchlist.

Ch. 13 para starting, "Dell and Jack, his sons ..." you write: "...another son, younger than he, had his namesake." Should just be "name". "Namesake" is a person. You would introduce someone who was named after you as "my namesake, Joy." You also write in that same para: "...it was obviously Jack was in a ..." change "obviously" to "obvious". Ssame para: drop the comma between "little while trying his..."

Ch. 13 para starting, "Dell and Jack, his sons ..." you write: "...another son, younger than he, had his namesake." Should just be "name". "Namesake" is a person. You would introduce someone who was named after you as "my namesake, Joy." You also write in that same para: "...it was obviously Jack was in a ..." change "obviously" to "obvious". Ssame para: drop the comma between "little while trying his..."

Ch. 12 first para: you write: "... mama came to stay with again as ..." need a "me" or an "us" "Mama just shook her head and proceeded to continue to ..." either proceeded or continued ... not both. I've been thinking about this issue for some time now and want to make sure you've covered your bases. If you are using the real names of people, you need to make sure you are legally in the clear. If you publish the name of someone and accuse them of something bad (even if they are guilty) they can sue you for libel and slander. The same for institutions such as hospitals, etc. Be very careful, because you can find yourself in a pickle that will wreck your life. Joyce

Ch. 11 Para: "Pain shot through neck ..." dropped "my" Next to last para is a little confusing ... I'm going to retype from "when I asked" with my suggestions in capitals: "When I asked why it hadn't caused a seizure before this time in my life, I was told that the traumatic life and death experience I had suffered WEAKENED MY DEFENSES SO MUCH THAT IT could no longer cope ..." I've noticed that some of your paragraphs are indented and some are not ... I know that this seems like a minor point, but publishers are looking for books that are "ready to publish" (meaning that the "nit-picky" things have already been taken care of). Just a mention for you to think about.

Ch. 10: "I stared AT him ..." Para starting, "Mama and Katherine ..." you write: "I confronted about" (THEM?) Para starting, "The following day ..." you dropped a word: "...thinking was bleeding..." "Sweat poured from MY face..." Para starting, "I don't rememberING ..." gotta drop the ing. lol

Ch. 9 opening para: typo: "...two weekS..."

Ch. 7 para starting, "I saw the first change ..." you dropped a word: "...wept bitter tears as I placed my HEAD on his shoulder..."

Ch. 6 para starting, "Our first fight was over ..." typo: "...that to me was AN unthinkable as ..." First para second section you write: "...nurse poked in her head in the door." Best grammar would be to drop the first "in". Last line "I nodded AND fell back on my pillow ..."

Ch. 5 first para: last sentence needs a "be" "...it would BE off to ..." Para starting: "Even though we suffered in our poverty ..." you have a sentence: "At eight years old it didn't seem to me to be a very fair world, but then I would soon learn that the world itself is anything but fair." Couple of problems with that sentence: 1. The phrase "At eight years old ..." should be followed by the object or person that is eight years old, in this case, "I", so it would read, "At eight years old, I already realized that the world didn't seem to be very fair." Also, the second half of the sentence is redundant to the first half since you've already stated that the world didn't SEEM fair, you needn't repeat, "the world itself is anything but fair." Kind of like saying, "Cotton candy seems very sweet, and I soon realized that cotton candy was sweet."

Dear Joy, your writing is very touching and easy to read. I especially liked the Prelude, which helps the reader jump right in to the story. I wish you well with your book.

Ch. 4 You start out with the sentence, "The following day after Edna's visit ..." this refers back to chapter 2, I believe, but you need to clarify this. You have a complete chapter in between and it's hard to recall these things. Maybe you could add, "The following day after Edna's visit to my hospitalized self, ..." "She sat ON EDGE of the bed ..." you've got to continue to be aware of verbal articles: "sat on THE edge of the..." Para starting, "Suddenly Shep ..." you dropped a T from startling.

Ch. 3 para 3 ... tell us about your ruse. It leaves the reader wondering what it was the way you have it now. Para starting: "I've never quite determined ..." typo: "...only to pee on floor ..." need a "the"? Para: "My sister and I spent most of day ..." dropped another "the" Para starting: "Today it's hard to imagine" ... near the bottom of the para you say "...raspy voice enhanced his mystic ..." I think you mean "mystique" (means air of mystery) Para starting: "Mama took Katherine ..." typo again: "...must have trying several times ..." Also, two paras before this you say, "Mama put her arms around Katherine ..." One of these para openers needs to be dropped. Para starting, "Tippy was such a happy ..." you write, "despite the calamity ..." do you mean calamity (disaster) or do you mean chaos (confusion)?

Ch. 2 para starting, "The next few weeks ..." typo: I AS unable..."

Dear Joy, GOD’S GRACIOUS GIFT is one of the best-written memoirs I’ve ever read. Normally when I read about others’ lives, I refrain from commenting. Because after all, the joys they felt, the sorrows they endured, the memories they cherish and the trials and tribulations they overcame are theirs and theirs alone. What observation can I possibly make that will further enrich or glorify their chronicle? I just read them quietly. Sometimes I laugh, and sometimes I grieve. But most of the time, I learn. In your case, it was an enlightening experience from beginning to end. What made the journey memorable is the manner in which you’ve written it. 6 stars for you, my friend, and I wish you all the very best in life. Sincere regards, AGC

Hello Joy: I read through Chapter Eight of God's Gracious Gift, but only seemed to find tragedy after tragedy. What a difficult life! Nonetheless, your writing is very accessible and your accounts of your years of suffering are captivating. Bless you. James

Dear Joy, You write fluently and beautifully. I found 'God's Gracious Gift' both gripping, and very moving - a wonderful memoir. I've really enjoyed it so far, (I'm up to chapter 3, and hope to to read more of it soon.) One minor point - I found Chapter 2, 'The Beginning', a little confusing, as it jumps from your birth back to the hospital, and then moves through several days in the hospital. Would it be possible to put that first paragraph at the beginning of Chapter 3? And I tend to agree with Wussyboy about the pitch - when I first read it (and the title) I thought 'God's Gracious Gift' was all about religious guidance. I'd no idea it was also a very compelling memoir. Otherwise, I loved it, and have highly starred and watchlisted it, regards, Rosemary The Girl who was Canada

Joy, What a beautiful story you told in your book! My faith in God is increased by reading it. You are quite an example of leaning on God. I will remember your book. God bless you and your grandchildren. "But showing mercy and steadfast love to a thousand generations of those who love Me and keep My commandments." Exodus 20:6 MaryBe

You have a fine book. I wonder if my backing will convince you to take a look at Yagin's book, "Not unto death, but unto Life"

Joy, Thank you for sharing your life experiences so poignantly and thoughtfully. I was deeply moved by the stories of your childhood and early married life. (I read through chapter five) Despite the heartache and pain that you have suffered, it seems that God was there to lift you up even though maybe in your heart, you couldn’t see Him there. Obviously, your difficult circumstances has made you strong so that you could become the vibrant and positive person you seem to be today. Your book really lifted my spirits and helped me look beyond my own problems and have an attitude of gratefulness for all the good things that God has placed in my life. Your writing is very honest and the story is one that most people can identify with. Although their problems may not be as extreme as yours, you give us all some hope that God does indeed see and He care. I will definitely be back to read the rest soon. Six stars! Dianna Lanser Nothing But The Blood

Joy, I finished your book today. I got to experience your faith growing and growing! Life certainly threw you a lot of curves, but you looked UP and the Lord brought you through all your heartaches. I'm so glad life has turned out well for you. You surely deserve it. In Chapter 4 you need to add a word in the sentence,...'she (?) dead on the sofa' and in Chapter 10 you need to change the wording 'how closed' closed to how close. Also in Chapter 10, you have a sentence that says to floor, so you need to insert 'the' in that sentence. Great story, Joy. Blessings to you. Elsie

Joy, You write beautifully, and with great integrity. Your story so far (I've read the first 3 chapters) is very touching and, at times, very sad. But because you tell it so well, I look forward to continuing on the journey. Highly rated. David 'Master Act: A Memoir'

Wow - that's quite a start to a novel. The writing flows easily with a natural confidence, and your courageous story is well told. I'll be putting this on my shelf as soon as there's room. Diana Pascual's Birthday

Joy, your story is beautiful. Your rewrites were definitely worth your time! Great job! sorry it took so long to get back to you. I no longer have internet connection at home, and from Friday to Monday can be the longest days of the week!!! I will be back to read more, and leave comments as I progress. I am looking forward to finishing your story! Sincerely, D. S. Hale Jessup and the Teleporter

Wow Joy! That sounds horrible - bless you for persevering through all that pain. I can't begin to imagine... I like that at the beginning. It definitely leaves the reader wondering what's going to come next and encourages them to keep reading. Well done!! Blessings! Patti

Dear Joy Your book is a joy to read! You said you had been doing some work on it, and it shows. I have finished it now - I so wanted to come back and find out what happened! And what an amazing story you tell - I can hardly believe you made it out alive. Some of your experiences are heartrending. I am amazed at your courage, in telling us what happened to you. I hope your book does well. It certainly deserves to. High stars and a place on my WL. Fran Macilvey, "Trapped" :-))

Hi Joy, I want to commend you on your honesty in sharing your memories, whether happy or painful. This is certainly not easy to do emotionally. I'm always excited to hear how faith in God brought people through even the hardest times. One suggestion I had was in the very beginning the first conversation you have with your sister about dressing Chris up like a girl doesn't seem to fit completely. One second you're talking about one of your dogs dying, and the next you're talking about Chris playing dress-up. The reader has no idea where this conversation takes place or what the context of it is. Just a suggestion. Overall I think this is a very moving and brave account, and I'm happy to give it full stars. God bless, Nathan Maki

GOD’S GRACIOUS GIFT Here is my portion of our first chapter read swap. I skimmed over your prologue and just jumped right into the Chapter titled, “About Innocence.” Although, I thought that last line was great in the prologue. A nice hook. It does make me think this might be a book about a near death experience, but as I began the next chapter and after reading the brief intro, I don’t think this is going to be the case. You do a nice job of introducing us to your early life in this chapter, but I did find it a little slow and at one point found myself asking, “Where is this going to go?” and “How is this connected to the prologue?” I didn’t really receive my answer until your very last line. But, your last line serves as a great hook that makes me want to read on, so it serves its purpose. In general, I think this is full of potential but could use some tightening up of the language and a serious look at any scenes that could be considered “filler.” Try asking yourself, “Is this moment important to the advancement of the plot of the story?” If not, it should be cut to make the read smoother. Good luck with this! You get 5 stars from me! Best, Ashley

Joy, you have a wonderful, beautiful piece of work here! Your editing has done wonders! I love it, and I'm putting you in my WL, and will get to shelf as soon as possible. GREAT JOB!!! Side note: not sure if you need the prologue where you are dying....and they bring you back to life.....It's up to you, but it is good. Great job!!! Sincerely, Donna Jessup and the Teleporter

What a beautiful story, Joy. I've enjoyed your first two chapters. They are inspiring and trying. We can grow stronger from our trials! I'm a firm believer in that. Thank you for sharing your story. When I'm not so swamped (after January), I'd enjoy completing it. Would you care to remind me? I'll star rate for now and make sure you're on my list of reads, okay. :) All my best, ~Ellise

[QUOTE] Dear Joy I have read the prologue and first three chapters of your story. it is a genuinely engaging, and at times extremely moving tale of growing up in the 1950's. I am taken back to earlier times when you write, and your descriptions flare with colour and imagination. You have a feel for your fellow passengers on the journey, that helps greatly to lift the tone of this memoir. Rated. All the best Fran Macilvey, "Trapped" [ENDQUOTE] Fran, I've changed my prologue and some of first chapter. Do you think it's a better lead in to the story? Appreciate your thoughts, Bless you, joy

Hi Joy Will definitively have a nose through this as I have a few spaces on my book shelf and WL. Would you be so kind as to have a quick look at my book - The List. Feel free to leave a comment. ta very much. David J Baron

Your book is one of those thought provoking manuscripts, which makes the reader debate your words in their head as they read it. For me I can identify with several scenarios which transported me back to my childhood. Thank you for sharing your life, this is a really brave move and I’m sure several people of there will be able to relate to this book directly or indirectly.

Yay! Your first chapter is 100% better, more concise and more enjoyable. Great job at cutting. I know cutting is one of the hardest parts of writing, but you did it, and very well, too! I only found 2 small errors and they are: 2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence needs a comma after "earth" 3rd sentence needs a comma before "or" Great job....as you edit, let me know and I will help you get it ready for an agent, editor, publisher! Sincerely, Donna Jessup and the Teleporter

Joy, I just read your first 2 chapters and I definitely want to come back for more. I'm putting you on my watchlist. Thanks for being so vulnerable with sharing the details of your difficult childhood. It sounds like there's much more to come! Aren't you glad that we have a God who carries us through it all? All the best to you! Patti

You had me entranced from the get go. This is a wonderful story. Much of it, you tell, instead of show. I would love for you to paint the scenes.... such as make an entire chapter about Old Ed. Maybe a chapter about dad, and a chapter about the parakeet and Tippy. I really like it! I like your writing style, too. I saw one error, and that was toward the end, about the rat climbing up the coils. You have the word "up" in the wrong place. Other than that, it was great! I am going to make room in my WL, and come back and read more. I give you 6 stars, and hope you flesh it out! Even if you don't, I love what you've done. Sincerely, D. S. Hale Jessup and the Teleporter (I am a christian, too. I would love for you to check out my YA christian novel)

I also grew up in the 50's and really enjoyed your story. You were able to tell the hardships without boggin your reader down with emotional heaviness. You could always sense there seemed to be a light at the end of the darkness because of your strong character and faith. I love the way you share your unshakable faith. There is no doubt through the theme of your story, it was your faith that got you through. I believe it is a great testamony for those who are looking for an answer to make it through life. In Chapter four there is missing a word - "She is one of ( ) most realiable people" "The" is missing. I uploaded a book you may be very interested in because of the question you asked in Chapter 2 of your teacher - "Do you think dogs go to heaven? My book is titled "The Chair". It is the story of my nine-year-old grandson's out of body vision of heaven. I would love your comments. Good luck on your book and stay Blessed Lynn

Dear Joy I have read the prologue and first three chapters of your story. it is a genuinely engaging, and at times extremely moving tale of growing up in the 1950's. I am taken back to earlier times when you write, and your descriptions flare with colour and imagination. You have a feel for your fellow passengers on the journey, that helps greatly to lift the tone of this memoir. Rated. All the best Fran Macilvey, "Trapped"

This is genuinely touching and extremely well-written memoir, Joy. Thank you so much for sharing it with me. As a child of the 50s myself, and born into similar poverty (as you've read in mine), I was deeply moved by your family's struggle to survive and find happiness against the backround of such incredible obstacles. Poor Pal, poor Denny, poor Tippy - I felt like crying, you describe their loss so well. And your poor Mama, what a great and brave soul. I'm giving you the maximum 6 stars* for your book, Joy - this is a rare treat! Blessings, Joe Kovacs Rupee Millionaires (it'll show up as 4.03 in a minute. For some reason, the first 6 star does that!)