Hi Maria, I love your realistic and lively characters. Have read all 7 chapters and want more! Looking forward to reading the rest. Your writing is refreshing, positive, perceptive and a delight. Thank you!! Tina

Thank you for taking the time to comment on 'Georgina's Family'; I value all feedback. It has been a challenge starting the book with a family party because it invariably means introducing 'the family'. I have contemplated not starting the book with a Greek family party so as to ease the reader into the story - but I have remained with the party and worked with a professional editor to tighten the manuscript. There have been countless edits of the manuscript, with particular focus on the first two chapters - but I do appreciate the fact that while some readers will love the family dynamics, others will not. I will also like to say a massive thank you for adding 'Georgina's Family' to your bookshelf. [QUOTE] Opening pitch....the word 'change' and 'changes' sounds repetitive I would replace one. I would delete the line 'professionals they are both doing well' because you then go on to tell me what their professions are. Either tell me that they are professionals and leave it at that, or tell me what they do. I'm going to be brutally honest. Your first chapter didn't work for me at all. I've totally lost the plot. You have Dimitri, Georgina, Mr Marconi, Cousin Peter, Christina, Sophia, Mum, Roulla, Mrs Bernly, Uncle Kyriaco, Katharina, Uncle Theo and Aunt Thelma . . .And as if that's not confusing enough you've done little to nothing to help me visualise any of these characters. If a characters presence is not meaningful in the initial stages then introduce them later, for example Mr Marconi, do I really need a rundown on his vegetable patch in the middle of the main characters telephone call ? I want the dialogue between the characters to bounce off each other, to keep me interested. I don't care about the neighbours garden at this point. And if cousin Peter is not coming to the birthday party, then why mention him. Introduce him to me when he enters the story and I need to get to know him. The premise and plot is good, and I'm interested to know what happens to the girls on holiday. But I think the opening is too slack. A reader assumes that identifying with a named character is important to help them understand the plot as it develops, and so I found myself reading this three times to help me slot everyone into some sort of family tree. Subsequently I haven't really profiled or related to anyone. I personally think you need to re-think your opening. Maybe shave it to feature just the three girls, the mother and brother. Keep it tight. This is just my personal view, I'm no expert I'm just telling you what I think. Good luck with this. [ENDQUOTE]

Opening pitch....the word 'change' and 'changes' sounds repetitive I would replace one. I would delete the line 'professionals they are both doing well' because you then go on to tell me what their professions are. Either tell me that they are professionals and leave it at that, or tell me what they do. I'm going to be brutally honest. Your first chapter didn't work for me at all. I've totally lost the plot. You have Dimitri, Georgina, Mr Marconi, Cousin Peter, Christina, Sophia, Mum, Roulla, Mrs Bernly, Uncle Kyriaco, Katharina, Uncle Theo and Aunt Thelma . . .And as if that's not confusing enough you've done little to nothing to help me visualise any of these characters. If a characters presence is not meaningful in the initial stages then introduce them later, for example Mr Marconi, do I really need a rundown on his vegetable patch in the middle of the main characters telephone call ? I want the dialogue between the characters to bounce off each other, to keep me interested. I don't care about the neighbours garden at this point. And if cousin Peter is not coming to the birthday party, then why mention him. Introduce him to me when he enters the story and I need to get to know him. The premise and plot is good, and I'm interested to know what happens to the girls on holiday. But I think the opening is too slack. A reader assumes that identifying with a named character is important to help them understand the plot as it develops, and so I found myself reading this three times to help me slot everyone into some sort of family tree. Subsequently I haven't really profiled or related to anyone. I personally think you need to re-think your opening. Maybe shave it to feature just the three girls, the mother and brother. Keep it tight. This is just my personal view, I'm no expert I'm just telling you what I think. Good luck with this.

Happy to shed some light. :-) [QUOTE] It's a strange feeling when you read through a book and remember conversations you've had with your female cousins that never really made sense. Well, now they do! Thanks! [ENDQUOTE]

It's a strange feeling when you read through a book and remember conversations you've had with your female cousins that never really made sense. Well, now they do! Thanks!

Maria, I have read two of your chapters. Delightful! The party, the food, the family, how things used to be. How things still should be, and hopefully will be again. That is real living. You have a great talent for pulling the reader into the life af a Greek family. Look forward to reading more. Christine

although I've only read 2 chapters i thoroughly enjoyed it. The battle over the washroom brings back fond memories when a house had but one bathroom. I also picked up how mother treats the differently than she does with the girls. All in all well done! MC Exposed

Maria. what a nice read for my last book for the day to review. Its a strong read and one I found really really buried in. I struggle with books that arent my genre as a rule, but this was no problem. I have sussed out why,,,,A brilliant story, a great descriptive voice that not only rolls of your tongue and onto the page, but also the flow that matches it. You balance the two so well. Mix that with the correct pace of the book and you have a brilliant MS. I loved it and so well done. You are nearly there now like me so I am going to be watching this all the way. It gets big stars from me. Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R) Please consider me for a read or watch list wont you?? Many thanks. Sean

Hi Maria, After only having read the first three chapters of Georgina's family, I can easily say that you have a personal style when it comes to tell a story. I liked the dialogue parts and you have balanced your manuscript with sufficient description without being wordy. I haven't noticed any glaring issues with grammar, punctuation or syntax so far, and I believe this story will be a favorite read among the genre's enthusiasts. Highly starred for character development and personal writing style, Best wishes, Lucette- Ten Deep Footprints

I love the three unmarried sisters---and they're greek! all the better! It makes me think of that popular greek movie that came out a couple of years ago. Your writing is smooth and carefree, and without any errors that I saw---great editing! I love the ladies, and am hoping they find the love they deserve! Great job creating well rounded characters. Gave you high stars and put you on my WL! I'm going to watch you climb the charts, girl! sincerely, Donna Jessup and the Teleporter

Maria, Memories of one of one of my favourite movies echoed in my mind, as I read the first two chapters of this fabulous story. I could picture Gina's birth day as she walked through the house dealing with her sisters and brother while trying to come to terms with the fact that she was turning thirty. Amusingly enough, that's the one birthday that left me with similar feelings, as if my youth was over and middle age was setting in. I've grown much older since then, but turning thirty will always be one of my now fondest birthdays. A pleasure to read, high starred and WLed. Maria ThePath to Survival

Maria, Memories of one of one of my favourite movies echoed in my mind, as I read the first two chapters of this fabulous story. I could picture Gina's birth day as she walked through the house dealing with her sisters and brother while trying to come to terms with the fact that she was turning thirty. Amusingly enough, that's the one birthday that left me with similar feelings, as if my youth was over and middle age was setting in. I've grown much older since then, but turning thirty will always be one of my now fondest birthdays. A pleasure to read, high starred and WLed. Maria A Path to Survival

I should say " There is a Georgina in every household in every country, adjusting, accommodating..." . I felt as if I am rewinding life's experiences, rather than reading a book. Highly starred and backed with pleasure. padmavathi

I am at a point where I am basically looking at books that my friends are reading on my news feed, because so many pop up that I would otherwise, probably miss. Some are not my cup of tea, but your story is remarkable. I love the feel of family and of course there is hardly a family without a tale, a tryst or a secret. Childhood, adolescence and growing in general is imperative to what shapes us, which I have become aware of in more recent years. This is an amazing example, in your story of what influences youngsters and I give your book the highest stars.

Smooth as silk writing. The characters are very well developed with their own quirks. The story isn't completely my thing, but the skill of writing is so easy that I was lost in it's depth. There were no flaws as far as I could see, but then I was enjoying your story. I think in the Christian book market this would do very well. It is a bit like Karen Kingsbury, but yours is more uplifting. :) Toni

in a very scary way, this could be my life... this could be my story... i have the same siblings... though mine are far different and the age ranges are quite stretched... but ya... i could be your MC... same age... same troubles... same tears... well done! Jaclyn x It Never Happened

CLF Review Hi Maria, I am enjoying your book so much. You have done a wonderful job bringing your characters to life. Through natural sounding conversations and authentic inward thoughts I’ve picked up interesting details about the Andreou family, some of which include their clothing preferences, the size of heirloom potted plants, and telling childhood memories. They all combine to show the peculiar family dynamics and expectations that the Andreaou siblings know as loving and normal. You’ve built your story upon believable events and that’s what makes this so enjoyable and addicting. I can easily place myself within each scene and I find myself hoping along with Katherina and Georgina that one of these days, life is going to be surprisingly different. I love how you introduce the male counterparts, leading the reader along with optimistic expectation. And then Petra conveniently gets food poisoning. How perfect! And Marcus seems jealous at the mention of Dimitri’s name. Very telling -- I mean showing. :-) Maria, I’m so impress with your writing. You use great humor as well as some wonderfully creative figurative language. You also have done well to fix up the head-hopping. I did notice at the end of chapter five you bordered on jumping into Marcus’ thoughts when you were describing Georgina’s hair. But other than that, I think you’ve got it! I’ll be back to read more and I’ve bumped my five stars to six. :-) Dianna

Christian Lit Forum Review: An interesting and inviting concept. There’s an aura about the title that rouses the curiosity of the reader. Coming to the book itself, the writing is top shelf – good work. Evidently, a lot of painstaking work has gone into it. It shows promise and I can imagine it going places. From how much I’ve read, there’s not much to pick on, save to say that you could make the book even better by watching out for and tweaking those spots that sound academic rather than literary. I hope you understand what I mean. Take for instance where you write “unlike her sisters, perceptiveness was not Dimitri’s strong point.” To me, that sounds a bit like a high school teacher. Think I would rather write “it was unlike Dimitiri to be perceptive, as her sisters were.” I mean, let the book sing some more. Having said that, I would add that the pitch can do with some honing to strengthen the impact. I suggest that you tighten the prose and focus on the core of the book. At the moment, it seems to be going too many ways and the prose is a bit loose. Remember, the pitch is not so much about giving away the plot of the story, but highlighting the concept and direction, rousing curiosity, and drawing in the reader. Here, too, remember to sing some more. All said: nice work and wishing you God’s blessings.

CLF Review. A wonderful, richly descriptive glimpse into the life of a Greek family. The hop of finding out who Georgina will marry keeps the reader turning pages, and the relationships of her siblings add interest. Beautifully written, with well-defined characters. The conversational tone and pace make it a comfortable read. Just one correction needed, which I found in ch.6. "You never phoned in the morning, usually you phone in the morning, she accused."

CLF and CCRG Review for Georgina’s Family This is a warm, rich story of family traditions and values colliding with the modern world. Georgina wishes to respect her mother and father, and yet feels trapped by their duty to find her a husband through ‘arranged marriages’. Her mother seeks to find husbands for her ‘aging’ daughters, and can be a bit aggressive for the girl’s tastes. I get the feeling that this is a very close-knit family, yet there is some strain in the relationships most families deal with. The plot is well developed with multiple story lines. Not only is Georgina feeling smothered by well-meaning relatives and their unsuccessful attempts to marry her off, Katherina is also uncomfortable in love due to some past experience where she was hurt, and Dimitri is playing the field with women, unable to settle down. The mother in this story is an absolutely precious character, looking at the prospective men’s hand size and how much hair they have on their heads as reason for their suitability, sewing up the holes in the jeans without asking, etc. She is the consummate loving, yet meddling mother, with high hopes for her children. This is the second time I’ve read through this story and enjoyed it just as much or more this time through. This family feels very comfortable and real. The plot is fun with bits of romantic tension in the mix. I gave this story high stars the first time I read it, and still feel the same. I enjoyed the read very much. Kara A Gate Called Beautiful A couple edits: Ch. 4 ‘What they find important…and what I regard as important are not usually the same… and the older (I) get, they less they look into it. ‘I don’t want him to feel I’m (pressuring) him into anything.’

Maria...this is my CLF review. I read this book 5 months ago, and did a CLF and CCRG critique then...way ahead of time...but the book caught my interest, I read it, and liked it very much. Georgina's Family has been on my watchlist and bookshelf ever since. Since then you have added two more chapters, and did some "point-of-view" revisions. I wish I had an English-studies background, and could offer some helpful writing suggestions and comments. For a book of this type my perspective is only as an avid reader and as a Christian on the two Christian writers forums. As such I can say that I enjoyed this book very much...my only complaint is that I would like to read the entire book and see how all of this potential romance and Greek culture works itself out. I think Maria has done a wonderful job of painting an interesting, true, and insightful portrait of life. The characters are very real...these are people we know or would like to know in real life. The cultural influences are eye-opening in that they reveal one particular social approach to the age-old female problem of trying to find a "good man," following the Greek model of arranged introductions. This creates the conflict of the story between the imperitive to maintain the purity of Greek culture through intermarriage between Greeks, and the very practical reality that there are very suitable men out there as potential candidates for marriage who are not Greek! Maria writes with humor, depth, and a high quality of literary art that makes the book a fascinating read. I like the fact that this is a dedicated Christian author writing about the real-life issues of family, romance, and culture. The notion from our modern skeptical society that Christians use God as a crutch is way off-base. If we will faithfully follow Jesus, if anything God will lead us right into the middle of the most honest and clear-sighted evaluation of ourselves and of life. What I admire so much about Maria's book is that it takes us into Georgina's world in a clean-cut, elevated, yet deeply insightful and honest way. This is good storytelling, good writing, and in my opinion a good worldview to bring to writing fiction. God bless you. Bart Jahn.

CLF review: Maria, I've read the first three chapters and think this is definitely a woman's book, very much based on the relations between the sisters and the mother in Georgina's family. It is obvious that the women commentators like your work. I prefer action, so I am not really qualified to comment. I did make some notes: see below. Generally your style is good, and did not intrude on the story. Not true of all the books I have read! Your main fault is to over-state things: too many unneeded adjectives, labouring the emotional states, when a hint will do, explaining everything, when the reader could see it for him or herself, or did not even need to know. Chap 1: 1. Change from "Wrapped in...she rushed past" to "She rushed past, wrapped..." The rushing follows from the previous sentence. 2. Over-use of adjectives breaks the action: Do we need to know that the carpet was floral patterned? Or that the bulb had a mint-green shade? General rule: Add adjectives when they contribute to the main point of the sentence, otherwise leave out. 3. "fully booked me" add comma. 4. The conversation between the 3 sisters seemed a little forced to me. They were telling each other things they already knew. Can it be trimmed a bit, while still letting the reader know what is going on? 5. K. with he mother in the bathroom: K had said she was going to tidy it without any sign of annoyance or resignation, then gets exasperated. Bring in the annoyance earlier. 6. Generally the family seem to overreact to situations they would be used to by now. "Resentment rushed up G's chest.."; "The colour seeped through every vessel and artery...". I think you are over-doing it. It is less dramatic, but in reality the family would have settled down to a more dull resentment. In chap 2 "Mario's eyes narrowed into slits": again slightly over-doing the reaction. "Narrowed slightly" would have been better. (N.B. I am not Greek, but an Englishman, and we don't behave like that. Make allowances.) 7. "penetrating as a laser" is enough; no need to add "boring...surgery". Chap 2: No further comments. Chap 3: 1. Again conversations seem to be going on too long with not much being said. E.g. Between G and Bill, and G and Darsham. Not quite realistic. 2. If D's hair is too short, why does it fall in his face? Too long surely?

CLF and CCRG review: Maria, I just read the first 3 chapters of your wondertful book. I'm sorry that I can't offer much in the way of critique or suggestions. Your character descriptions are great and it's easy for the reader to visualize the scenes with this delightful family. Love the humor! Also, great job with showing the accents through the spelling and word choices. That would seem to be very difficult to do but it's very effective - well done! Every blessing to you! Patti

Maria--For CLF--I enjoyed chapter 1, but now my dog is insisting on a walk. Georgina's big Greek birthday party is looking eventful--judging by the characters who are taking shape. A couple of thoughts. I feel that the sentence: "It was time to get ready for her thirtieth birthday party...." should be broken into two. And the word "benefit" doesn't seem quite right here unless you mean that her mother made this plan for some special good purpose. Maybe I will discover that as I read on. "The cloak of I'm doing just fine..." is great. With the uneven English of the mother, I would love to read some Greek word of exclamation. And surely we will hear some of that at the party. I'll be back. Jim

Maria...There are books one reads and soon forgets...or wishes they hadn't wasted the time reading it. Yours is definitely not one of those. I loved the way you opened with a family scene that is so realistic. I felt for Dimitri, having three sisters to battle for a chance in the bathroom...and the natural banter between siblings is dead on. I found myself thinking of them long after I finished reading...you have such an easy flow as you share their lives. If they lived next door to me, I'd be among them often. You've come up with a rich tale of family...the ups and downs and the things kept to themselves until the time comes for sharing. I'd already given you six stars for I'd started this book earlier....and I knew I'd be back. I'm back to say I hope you write a sequel. Beautiful...really. God bless... Linda

Hi Maria, I read all the chapters and enjoyed this delightful story about a Greek family with three daughters and a son. Being a Greek, I felt the story was written in an authentic manner and displayed the family environment accurately. The character descriptions were superb and several funny moments were priceless. The pace is quick and the story flows well, focusing primarily on Georgina and Katherine, the two eldest daughters. The story begins with Georgina celebrating her thirtieth birthday with family. There is lots of gaiety and activity in the background, reminding me of a Frank Capra style movie. The emphasis on Georgina getting married has made her tense on the subject yet she is tired of her mundane life as a teacher. When she meets Jake, an old friend while swimming, her feelings for him change subtly. She is now seeing him in a different light and he appears interested in her. I sense a love interest forming here. Katherine works in the insurance industry and her job requires her to travel. She meets a handsome colleague Markus and it appears he is interested in her. He joins her on the trip and they bond during the airplane ride when she becomes ill and rests her head on his shoulder. She hesitates with him because her family is arranging for her to meet a Greek man and she does not want to lead him on. It is apparent that both girls are meeting non-Greeks who seem to be interested in them, while their parents are busy with parties and dinners trying to match them with Greek men. I sense that there will be conflict if the two women continue seeing their love interests, and eventually make their feelings known to their family. Suggestion/Nitpicks: One that stood out in my mind was the pacing. At times I felt you had packed too much material into one chapter. I had been told that it is not necessary to write every little detail that a person does, as if we are watching a movie. Also, by starting the first chapter with a birthday party at times felt overwhelming as I tried to keep track of all the characters in it. I gave it six stars and deserves to make the Editor's Desk! Will back also. Best, Patty The Greek Maiden and the English Lord

Maria, This is a wonderful book and I can see your characters come to life. I lived in Toronto in a Greek neighborhood for a few years and the people are wonderful, like your story, very full of life and celebrate it that way. The way you described family meetings, food and people in general really made you story come to life. the only suggestion i might have is that you narrate the quirks of speaking English for Greek families so readers don't think they are errors. I did catch on to that after the first page or so but it might lend to an easier read? Good Work, high stars Blessings Roslyn "I Am" Through the Ages, for your seeking heart Scribe-Lings, for your child like heart

I gave myself the gift of an afternoon of pleasure reading. Even though this is the second time I've read your book, I enjoyed it even more than the first time. There was no confusion about characters during this reading - either they stuck in my mind from the first reading or you've done some polishing and identified them better. This is unusually good work - well written, full of life, wonderful characters. I love character-driven stories and this one is perfect for me. This will eventually go on my bookshelf. Just hang in there because, as good as this book is, it's bound to climb the ranks again. Be sure to keep reviewing other's works and they will, hopefully, return the read (in most cases) and anyone who reads this book is going to rate it highly.

Georgina's Family by Maria Constantine Such a well designed book and story. Everything about the plot and characters will draw you through the book. The writing is smooth and the plot is captivating. You will find few errors in such a wonderful book. I enjoyed this book and Maria's skill at writing so much. I hope you will too. Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Hi! I liked chapter one a lot. The writing is very smooth and easy to read, and the characters are well described so that I could picture every one of them. Gina's emotional state is clear and it carries through the entire chapter, eventhough we meet many different people and situations as we wind our way through to its end. There is also a good mix of dialogue to text. Great start! Will star and back when I get a chance to shuffle my shelf. :) Dyane The Purple Morrow

Great descriptive writing at its best. You have the ability to craft your words to life which brings with it a reality that draws the reader into the story. The characters I suspect must have been modelled on people you have met in some way as they are so perfectly moulded and spring to life as I read more and more. I wish you all the luck you deserve with this fantastic read. Andy

Maria, A lovely story. Soft, gentle - looking forward to reading some more over the coming week. keith Peppermint

This is a charming and intriguing story. Your characters are warm and realistic and you give lots of insight into the mind of your MC. I look forward to reading on and maybe commenting further. Lilian.

Dear Maria, I just wanted to stop by and let you know how much I love the line in your long pitch that encompasses Georgina's thoughts... "I am alive, but not living." Wow. You have the ability to say so much in very few words. I love that. :) ~Faith

Dear Maria, Just stopped by for another peek at chapter two. Your writing is beautiful! I love your sensory images and rich characterization. With Uncle Theo and his "prickly kiss" to Aunt Thelma's sweet "envelope padded with crisp notes," you have given the reader so much to adore in these deeply authentic people. I'm loving it....still! All the very best, Faith Rose Now To Him

Maria, What a delightful story about a Greek family coming together for a party. The description of the characters and names you have given them were perfect for your story. What drama you twined into the story to build the plot. The reading was easy and flowed nicely. I loved the mother in the story and her authentic voice. I am glad I had the chance to read this enjoyable book! Excellent! Best wishes, Sara Stinson Finger Bones

This is totally delightful! It reminded me of my family. Wonderful flow, you went right into the story, the characters came to life one by one. You made me smile and shake my head how mom treats the son differently just because he's a son. Great paragraph that starts with "Katherine remembered the months leading to . . ." I almost wanted that to be the intro para, because it pulled me right to the character's mind -- it's where you connected me to your character. And then I laughed aloud at not 30 candles, but 30 guys. The descriptions were great. When she sees her father in the garden balancing on wood planks, I saw my own dad in that image. Absolutely a delightful read, easy flowing, interesting insight into the family. It resonated with me, including some of the expressions, like "your words in God's ear." Beautiful! I loved it, it was such an enjoyable read. I wish I had time for more, but I will return, Maria. Excellent! Donna No Kiss Good-bye

This is totally delightful! It reminded me of my family. Wonderful flow, you went right into the story, the characters came to life one by one. You made me smile and shake my head how mom treats the son differently just because he's a son. Great paragraph that starts with "Katherine remembered the months leading to . . ." I almost wanted that to be the intro para, because it pulled me right to the character's mind -- it's where you connected me to your character. And then I laughed aloud at not 30 candles, but 30 guys. The descriptions were great. When she sees her father in the garden balancing on wood planks, I saw my own dad in that image. Absolutely a delightful read, easy flowing, interesting insight into the family. It resonated with me, including some of the expressions, like "your words in God's ear." Beautiful! I loved it, it was such an enjoyable read. I wish I had time for more, but I will return, Maria. Excellent! Donna No Kiss Good-bye

I've read the first couple chapters, and am truly enjoying this story and the type of genre. I am interested to find out what the secret is that Georgina is carrying around with her and why it is so painful to her that she doesn't want to reveal it to anyone. I think the characters are realistic. For some odd reason, I love the name 'Mr. Macaroni', the neighbor next door. The mother is adorable with her Greek accent and the things she keeps telling everyone. I'm not seeing errors in your text and think this is very well-written! Kara A Gate Called Beautiful

This is such an engaging read. I found it very difficult to put down once I was started. The characters are all very warm and I love the ease of your writing when describing the family setup. Your writing is superb and thoroughly absorbing. The pace of the story is just right and I love your front cover picture. Well done and good luck with this. Regards Maya "Away With The Mountains"

Dear Maria...this is my CCRG and CLF reviews (way ahead of time but I will look again at your book when it comes time in CLF...hopefully more will be uploaded then...or better yet published). I won't post this in the CLF thread because it is so out ahead of time, but I will mention it in the CCRG thread. First of all, I absolutely love this book. The quality of writing on Authonomy is so incredibly high. I read chapters 1 and 2, then read chapters 3 through 6 in one sitting because I could not put it down. Had to read the next chapter to see what would happen next. Wish the whole book was here on Authonomy. I do not think this book falls within a women's literature category. It has broad universal appeal that I think would be of interest to adult men and women of all ages. I did not previously know anything about Greek family culture. I can see some wonderful positives to it but some negative restrictions as well. That is part of the appeal of the book...you take me into an interesting world that is foreign to my Southern California diluted German/Scottish/English/Norwegian/American roots. Your characters, dialogue, and plot are first-rate, and the story has a very wholesome feel to it but with a lot of depth to consider in the issues covered. I like the title and the book cover. It reminded me of books I see in the "recent fiction" display at my local Barnes & Noble bookstore showing current New York Times bestsellers. I have no idea why this book is at 310 on Authonomy...sometimes this system is hard to figure. Should be in the single-digit teens heading for the ED. I don't know the ending to the story, but based upon the smoothness of your writing and the way it pulled me into the story, I can see this book becoming very successful with a word-of-mouth popular support among general readers. Georgina's Family is currently on my watchlist, and on my bookshelf in the near future, as books now on my bookshelf make it to the ED. Congratulations on an excellent book, thanks for the very pleasant read, and God bless you. Bart Jahn.

Dear Maria...this is my CCRG and CLF reviews (way ahead of time but I will look again at your book when it comes time in CLF...hopefully more will be uploaded then...or better yet published). I won't post this in the CLF thread because it is so out ahead of time, but I will mention it in the CCRG thread. First of all, I absolutely love this book. The quality of writing on Authonomy is so incredibly high. I read chapters 1 and 2, then read chapters 3 through 6 in one sitting because I could not put it down. Had to read the next chapter to see what would happen next. Wish the whole book was here on Authonomy. I do not think this book falls within a women's literature category. It has broad universal appeal that I think would be of interest to adult men and women of all ages. I did not previously know anything about Greek family culture. I can see some wonderful positives to it but some negative restrictions as well. That is part of the appeal of the book...you take me into an interesting world that is foreign to my Southern California diluted German/Scottish/English/Norwegian/American roots. Your characters, dialogue, and plot are first-rate, and the story has a very wholesome feel to it but with a lot of depth to consider in the issues covered. I like the title and the book cover. It reminded me of books I see in the "recent fiction" display at my local Barnes & Noble bookstore showing current New York Times bestsellers. I have no idea why this book is at 310 on Authonomy...sometimes this system is hard to figure. Should be in the single-digit teens heading for the ED. I don't know the ending to the story, but based upon the smoothness of your writing and the way it pulled me into the story, I can see this book becoming very successful with a word-of-mouth popular support among general readers. Georgina's Family is currently on my watchlist, and on my bookshelf in the near future, as books now on my bookshelf make it to the ED. Congratulations on an excellent book, thanks for the very pleasant read, and God bless you. Bart Jahn.

Hi Maria, I read chapter 4. This is not my usual kind of read, I walways wondered what young ladies were talking about when they were socialising, thanks for sharing it with everyone. I found the flow of the story was very smooth and relaxing, the characters were believable and your descriptiosn of the flowers wonderful. I found myself aware you used 'had' a lot in the narator voice. Someone told me sometimes you don't even need the word, but 'she had' easily moves to 'she'd' and doesn't devalue the work. Hope you are not offended. An excellent story and window into someone's life. Kindest Regards and Best Wishes Lenny Banks - Tide and Time: At The Rock. I would appreciate a return read, if you are able to find the time.

Hello Maria...I have read the first two chapters of your book and really like it. The writing is so smooth and effortless that I feel like I am part of the family and mixing-in at the birthday party. The food sounds great. One of the nice things about Authonomy is that it has allowed me to become exposed to genres I might not come in contact with. Your book pulled me into the story and the characters immediately. Even though I have no space on my bookshelf right now, I would like to add yours in the future after some of my current choices make it to the ED. Looking forward to reading some more tomorrow. Bart Jahn

Maria I'm glad I got to read this. You've done a great job of making your characters real. You've woven a wonderful story as well! I enjoyed it. Thank you for using the skills God blessed you with to entertain those who will read it. God bless you!!! Elizableth Kathleen "If Children Are Cheaper by the Dozen, Can I Get a Discount on Six?"

I am perfectly awful at spamming. I stopped by to ask you to have a look at my book, but when I saw some of the comments on yours I couldn’t resist. Is it possible that all the Old World moms are alike? My mom picked up after my brother exactly the same way Christina picks up after Dimitri! I also chuckled at the way the vacuum had been fixed; for about twenty years the toilet in my mother’s bathroom was flushed with the pull from some old drapes after he’d repaired the broken handle. And my mother cares more for her plants than for me. The way you’ve written this first chapter gives the reader a feel for the chaos of living with a large family in small quarters. I love they way they tease one another. As the party begins the sense of chaos or ‘busy-ness’ continues. It helps to emphasize Georgina’s feeling of dissatisfaction. I finished two chapters and found the whole story to be a delight. You present the numerous characters well, each with a small vignette, so I wasn’t once confused by the many players. I like the way you did that. I am often accompanied by my English-teacher alter-ego, The Grammar Hag. She sometimes finds things she doesn’t like. For example, she wonders about the wording “…her aging singleness was not something her parents had bargained on.” It’s awkward. What about, “…her aging singleness gave her parents hives.” OK, that’s dumb, but structurally better: her aging singleness, a verb, a description. Other than that, she just mumbled and went away. Hope you see this continue to rise! ~AudreyB Forgiveness Fits

This is a lovely family story made up of a strong plot, interesting characters, and good food. The imagery of the food is so good that I broke my reading up into two settings in order to go to a local Greek restaurant - wow, was that good! smile. Seriously, you do an awesome job of describing a family party: all the anticipation, tension, good times, and great food that were a part of it. Wonderful characters in Sophia, youngest sister; Georgina, middle sister; Katherine, eldest sister; Dimitri, brother spoiled by all the women in the family, and the mother, Christina. Great imagery of many aspects of the life of this family: shared meals, "broxenia" or "the Greek version of a blind date with marriage being the expectation." (I laughed out loud at that). Beyond the family, I enjoyed the description of Georgina's day at school - as the teacher. It reminded me a lot of my own public school teaching days. I have no suggestions for your story. I was going to make some grammatical suggestions until I realized that you were keeping the dialogue authentic and natural for a second-language speaker which only makes the story more charming. As a reader, the only suggestion I have is that you identify your characters a bit more as you introduce them. I was a little confused about one or two of them - but it soon became clear who they were, so really there's no problem. Vivid story of the glorious, colorful, full-of-life, participants in a Greek family drama. This is a delightful, charming look at a warm, loving domestic culture and customs with which most of us are unfamiliar. Best wishes for the success of your lovely book. :-) Pat Many stars

This is a really fun, easy to read book! I love the family dynamics, it felt so real. Your interactions and dialogue certainly bring this story to life. The pacing is nice, it kept me interested and reading. There wasn't anything to stumble on. I try to find something to critique or at least give advice on in the first couple chapters but nothing jumped out at me. I'm certainly going to keep this close to my shelf and back it when I have a chance. I felt this story, it wasn't just a read. Thanks for that. Missy

So sorry it has taken me so long to get to this read swap! I instantly warmed to Georgina, she's a very likeable main character. I could relate to being nearly thirty something and single, I dodged questions about the 'b' word for years. You have an easy way with words, and your story flows effortlessly, with fabulous descriptive writing, and great dialogue. I love the line ' her mind was like an enormous rug with lots of things swept under it and now was not the time for spring cleaning.' Really enjoyed reading Georgina's family. I will definitely be back to read the last few chapters. On my watch list and highly starred. Stephanie - Feathers

women will identify with this. great cover. exceptional chick lit.... j what every woman should know

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment on 'Georgina's Family'. There will appear to be grammatical errors when Christina (the mother) speaks; this reflects the fact that it is not her first language and she does not have an accurate command of the english language. It did feel strange when I was writing it and I had to stop myself from correcting her![QUOTE] Interesting storyline and very well written. I haven't read many on here with so few mistakes. good writing. good premise. Reminds me of Big Fat Greek Wedding in a way... Any girl who have Demitri will be very lucky; I suggest changing to any girl who'll have.... [ENDQUOTE]

Interesting storyline and very well written. I haven't read many on here with so few mistakes. good writing. good premise. Reminds me of Big Fat Greek Wedding in a way... Any girl who have Demitri will be very lucky; I suggest changing to any girl who'll have....

Thank you so much, Dianna for your comments; I greatly appreciate the feedback. I started a week ago revising the manuscript again - primarily to tighthen and simplify the point of view. I hope you have time to revisit 'Georgina's Family' once I have completed the revision. [QUOTE] Hi Maria, I have enjoyed revisiting Georgina’s Family. It is one of those stories that effortlessly draws the reader into the lives of your characters. Starting with the family dynamics at Georgina’s birthday party and then moving to her and Katherina’s workplace broadens the reader’s perspective as to what these girls experience on a daily basis. Their worlds are shaded by a set of mores unique to Greek families. You have done a wonderful job presenting Georgina and her sisters in a way that makes the reader care what happens to them. By chapter two I was already hoping that at least one of them would find love, and it seems that Katherina just might have experienced the first inklings of it in chapter three. I breathed a sigh of satisfaction when I read at the end of chapter three that Georgina is resolved to spice up her careful, mundane life. That revelation serves as a very effective page turner. Your writing is filled with some creative word pictures that adds a dimension of deeper understanding to your scenes. Here are a couple of my favorites: “Her mind was like an enormous rug with lots of things swept under it and now was not the time to spring clean.” “lines like a railway track ran across her forehead.” Dialogue is very natural and I appreciate how you use action instead of “he said, she said” to let the reader know who is speaking. It makes the characters so much more interesting and imaginable. As I noted in my first review many, many days ago, the point of view does shift around a bit even to some of the insignificant characters. It will give the reader a deeper experience if you strive to keep the story within the mind of just a couple of your main players. However, you have done a wonderful job enlightening your audience to the inner workings of Georgina’s close-knit family. I’m bumping up the stars! Dianna Lanser Nothing But The Blood Chapter two - “Sophia did not particular(ly) enjoy large family gatherings; she often found herself under the spotlight…” Chapter three - “Georgina took out a plastic carrier bag from her leather shoulder bag, which had the capacity to expand (and expand) depending on how much she wanted to fit in.” [ENDQUOTE]

Hi Maria, I have enjoyed revisiting Georgina’s Family. It is one of those stories that effortlessly draws the reader into the lives of your characters. Starting with the family dynamics at Georgina’s birthday party and then moving to her and Katherina’s workplace broadens the reader’s perspective as to what these girls experience on a daily basis. Their worlds are shaded by a set of mores unique to Greek families. You have done a wonderful job presenting Georgina and her sisters in a way that makes the reader care what happens to them. By chapter two I was already hoping that at least one of them would find love, and it seems that Katherina just might have experienced the first inklings of it in chapter three. I breathed a sigh of satisfaction when I read at the end of chapter three that Georgina is resolved to spice up her careful, mundane life. That revelation serves as a very effective page turner. Your writing is filled with some creative word pictures that adds a dimension of deeper understanding to your scenes. Here are a couple of my favorites: “Her mind was like an enormous rug with lots of things swept under it and now was not the time to spring clean.” “lines like a railway track ran across her forehead.” Dialogue is very natural and I appreciate how you use action instead of “he said, she said” to let the reader know who is speaking. It makes the characters so much more interesting and imaginable. As I noted in my first review many, many days ago, the point of view does shift around a bit even to some of the insignificant characters. It will give the reader a deeper experience if you strive to keep the story within the mind of just a couple of your main players. However, you have done a wonderful job enlightening your audience to the inner workings of Georgina’s close-knit family. I’m bumping up the stars! Dianna Lanser Nothing But The Blood Chapter two - “Sophia did not particular(ly) enjoy large family gatherings; she often found herself under the spotlight…” Chapter three - “Georgina took out a plastic carrier bag from her leather shoulder bag, which had the capacity to expand (and expand) depending on how much she wanted to fit in.”

Good story, i have added your book on my watchlist. six stars Isoje David Animals in Paradise

Maria, "Georgian's Family" is doing so well! I'm very proud for you!!

Hi Maria An easy read, well written. Have starred you highly and you're on my bookshelf. Sam Rivers - The Balance of Your Life

Beautiful. You are on my bookshelf. Sam Rivers - The Balance of Your Life

I really enjoyed reading this book. The characters are well developed and easy to relate to. I was hooked from the very beginning. Thanks Ashleigh Blanchard Love lies and pregnancy

I really enjoyed reading this book. The characters are well developed and easy to relate to. I was hooked from the very beginning. Thanks Ashleigh Blanchard Love lies and pregnancy

Georgina's Family. Great book. Well Written and an interesting story. Extremely good character developement. A very smooth lighthearted read. Highly starred. Ruby Middleton 'Will Ryan'

Beautifully created. The story weaves the beauty of a culture throughout the pages. There is a lot of depth and feeling all through this. The story is different and written in a new stylish way that the readers can't help but be pulled in. A six star book. Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Maria, your first chapter got me hooked. It's easy to see the family moving around the house with each one of them being different while joined together by their culture. I loved it and look forward to reading more. 5 stars so far and a place on my watch list and on my shelf. Back soon. Brigitte You will dance again!

I love what I have read so far! It moves quickly, and the characters are easy to relate to, no matter what kind of family you are from. This is one of my favorite stories thus far since joining this site. You are a very talented writer and your style is really refreshing. I was caught up in the emotions of the characters, without it being too heavy. I could sympathize with your characters and feel their feelings and still be laughing. It's really well written and deserves to be printed in hard copy for the general public to enjoy. Very highly backed and starred.

I love what I have read so far! It moves quickly, and the characters are easy to relate to, no matter what kind of family you are from. This is one of my favorite stories thus far since joining this site. You are a very talented writer and your style is really refreshing. I was caught up in the emotions of the characters, without it being too heavy. I could sympathize with your characters and feel their feelings and still be laughing. It's really well written and deserves to be printed in hard copy for the general public to enjoy. Very highly backed and starred.

Hi, Maria! I've come back to read chapter three, and enjoyed it greatly. It was very interesting to learn about Georgina's work life, and I loved the rich description of the May morning that began the chapter. I could just see the flowers! (incidentally, we just planted another Yoshino cherry in our yard this past week.) I also liked the glimpse into Katharina's work life, and am interested in seeing how her relationship with Markus builds. ~Hannah

I really enjoyed this, Maria, such a smooth, lighthearted read. Your characters are very believable and the dialogue in particular is good; I especially liked Christina. As we are all here to help one another, I'll point out a few minor points that could do with a polish: ...on the floral patterned ...adrenalin she had felt was after a ...chiffon fabric of her skirt and her... The three lines above cut off in the middle of their paragraphs, which stops the flow. ...looked down at the changed switch,' The apostrophe at the end needs removing. She had learned to be alert and not let her guard down, like a soldier protecting the crown jewels. This line made me smile. You have a knack of slipping in witty lines like this and it really gives your story a quirky edge that is a pleasure to read. Great job with this and I wish you all the best with it. Highly rated, well done.

This is an interesting story enhanced by the details of the family dynamics. The scenes are well done. I visualize the house with its one bathroom and the problems that can cause and the nearby neighbor. It's going to be fun to find out how things progress. I'm giving it lots of stars.

I'm here for my reading swap. Sorry it has taken me a little longer to get here than anticipated. This is a well-written piece with some strong turns of phrase and is very easy to read. The characters are developing well in this first part and I am enjoying getting immersed in Greek family life! If there was one thing I think would make it even stronger, it would be if you looked at the number of points of view you are using in the first chapter. You have a tendency to bounce around from one character to another which can be confusing for the reader and can dilute the emotion of the writing. It may be better to limit the viewpoint to say, Georgina, as she appears to be the main character. If you want to tell parts of the story from one of the other's point of view you could have separate sections or chapters for their thoughts. Anyway, that is just my opinion and you can take it or ignore it as you see fit. I enjoyed reading this and it will remain on my WL for now so that I can continue. I will leave further comments as I read. All the best Julia Shadow Jumper

Maria, I got caught up in Georgina's family right from the start, the hustle and bustle of their daily routine strangely captivating. Not since "My Big Fat Greek Wedding" have I seen activity like you described under one roof, centered on a woman getting older and everyone trying to get her hitched. Your writing is straightforward and easy to follow, the dialogue sparkling with interesting and comedic asides. Thank you so much for sharing. Kenneth Edward Lim The North Korean

You had me at, "there must be more to life". That very phrase ran through my mind one day while I was still in the club. I thought I had evertything I could want. A sweet and awesome chopped Harley,plenty of girls, alcohol, drugs and money. I lived in a beautiful place Santa Barbara. One morning that phrase popped into my mind word for word. After that everything changed,my world started to fall apart. God was setting the stage. I loved the characters, I had a Greek friend in the army and his dad adopted me like a son. You have a smooth, sweet and flowing style of writing. I read the first three chapters, but will keep it on my list to read more. God Bless. 6-stars from me

Maria, Thank you so much for the encouragement. As you already know I am behind "Georgina's family"! I am so glad to see it ranking high! I am so very happy for you. Once again, your support means alot to me.

Dearest Maria Thank you for your beautiful comment on Be The Human Sunshine, I am so very glad that it touched you and the intention of the book ful-filled. I am so very grateful, I shall return the read this evening. Sending much kindness, brightness. Rainbows a plenty Clare :)

HI Georgina, this is a beautiful written descriptive work which draws you in and leaves you with a warm feeling that you know these Characters. Excellent and highly stared, Karen Bates Faking it in France.

Dear Maria, I look forward to reading more of 'Georgina's family when it comes up for review in the CLF, but I wanted to pop in for a little visit today. First of all, (on a bit of a superficial note) I LOVE your cover, title, and both pitches. These simple aspects are so much harder to do well than one would think, and you have done them all very well. I was immediately drawn into the first chapter. You have done a marvelous job showing the interpersonal relationships of a large family...poor Dimitri with all those sisters! :) You provided excellent characterization of the whole family in the opening, yet skillfully managed to keep the focus on Georgina. It is no easy task to introduce a variety of people, yet you do it in such a way that does not cause confusion for the reader. Excellent. You had some great imagery as well. I loved: "chocolate-brown skirt," "frayed bathrobe," and "pedicure pads between her toes." :) I look forward to seeing where you go with this well-written, engaging story. Wishing you every success. All the very best, Faith Rose Now To Him

Maria-Your pitch is unbelievable. I want to read this book already. I identify with the age of your main character so I am already enthralled. I plan to come back and read more. I also added you to my watchlist. Best of Success and blessings to you!

Not the type of novel I’d normally read, Maria but I really enjoyed this. There’s a freshness to much of the prose which makes for a very involving, energetic read. Some of the phrasing (eg. ‘while tan shoes stood to attention at the foot of her bed,’ ‘Sophia hobbled in with pedicure pads between her toes,’ ‘lines like a railway track ran across her forehead’) is superb. It's quirky and original and extremely visual and lends the novel an appealingly vivid, almost filmic quality. I did, however, find much of the word choice/sentence structure (eg. ‘the bathroom door flung [was flung?? swung??] open,’ ‘organised by her mother for the benefit,’ ‘cousin Peter alone,’ ‘conceivably see more than Georgina dared exposed’) a little clunky/confusing and quite a few times in the opening chapter I had to re-read a sentence a couple of times before I could work out what you meant. Personally, I think the novel would have a much smoother feel (and the reader would be able to identify more readily with your lead characters) if you simplified the sentence structure and kept tone of the prose more conversational, almost chatty. Just a thought. The dialogue is particularly good. It feels real and purposeful and helps both to energise the scenes and subtly flesh out the novel’s various characters. The interplay between the sisters seems especially convincing. It’s snappy and punchy and often very funny and cleverly hints at the underlying family dynamics. I did think, once or twice, some of the exchanges could be abridged slightly to lend the dialogue a more natural, informal feel (eg. ‘Just drying myself. Out in a sec.’ instead of ‘I’m just drying myself. I’ll be out in a sec.’??) but that’s an easy fix should you choose to do so. I’m afraid I also had a bit of a problem with the phonetic representation of Christina’s dialogue. I’m sure your ear for first generation Greek immigrant word choice/sentence structure etc is much better than mine but, even so, phrases like ‘You canno wear jeans’ and ‘I donno who you take affa’ do have a slightly stereotypical, almost cartoonishly clichéd feel about them (I'm afraid I was instantly reminded of Harry Enfield’s 'Stavros' character??) which does rather undermine the realism of the scene and the integrity of Christina’s character. Maybe think about toning down the stylised phrasing slightly?? Georgina comes across as an extremely likeable, kind hearted, appealingly flawed main character, someone the reader can immediately empathise with and root for. I wasn’t one hundred percent sure precisely why she was so disillusioned with her life (your evocation of her general feeling of lifelessness, emptiness etc is very convincing but I would have liked a few more specifics as to why she’s feeling this way??) but maybe this becomes clearer as the novel progresses. The subsidiary characters are also well drawn. They’re clear and distinct and work well off each other. I did get slightly confused in the middle of chapter one when the point of view appeared to flit from character to character before returning to Georgina. Clearly POVs don’t have to remain fixed but, given how intensely the POV is focussed on Georgina for most of the chapter, the constant narrative shifts mid way thru the chapter did feel slightly disorientating. Maybe keep the POV with Georgina but have her observing the interplay between her family?? The only other observation I’d make about ‘character’ is that, for an opening chapter, there are an awful lot of names/personalities (both in the house and mentioned in passing) to come to grips with. Could you maybe limit the cast list to the immediate family and introduce the other characters later in the novel?? Also, maybe think about referring to Christina as ‘Georgina’s mother’ or perhaps even a particularly distinctive Greek diminutive for ‘mother’ so the list of names the reader is expected to come to grips with is trimmed slightly and the Georgina-centred POV of the novel is further reinforced?? Up to you, of course. The chapters themselves feel very well structured with a good blend of action/dialogue/character introspection etc and nicely underplayed climactic plot hooks to encourage the reader to read on. The plot as a whole sounds well thought out and multi-layered and, with its mix of drama/pathos/romance/comedy/social commentary etc, should appeal to a broad cross-section of readers. In short, a vibrant, vivid, terrifically real depiction of modern family dynamics. Highly starred and kept on my watchlist for further reading. Thanks and best of luck with this. P

Hi Maria, here for our reading swap! This is a rich seam to furrow. A Greek family living in Britain and the conflict between tradition and modernity as well as personal quests for happiness. These issues will chime with many female readers. Your short pitch is OK, but your long pitch is a little too descriptive. You need to entice and intrigue more, don't just describe the story. Also break it up more, it looks like one big lump of text which makes it seem difficult to read. I liked the start of chp 1 with the brother waiting at the bathroom door, lots of nice description here and I could really imagine the scene clearly. But then there were a few paragraphs with back story so the overall pace slackened off. Stick with action - you are so good at helping us see pictures. I also felt there was a bit too much about clothes etc. Only include it if it helps us to understand a character or to further the plot, otherwise take it out or cut it down. There is a lot of good in here, but it probably needs a good edit (don't we all!!) Keep up the good work but be sure to tough on yourself when you go editing. Take out anything that is not essential to plot or character. 5 stars from me! All the best, Sharda. http://www.authonomy.com/books/42835/mr-unusually-s-circus-of-dreams/

Hi, Maria. I'm stopping back by to read another chapter. I wish it hadn't taken me so long to get back; I remember all over again why I loke the characters, and did not see much that needed fixing in chapter two. The party is well-written; with a group of characters so large in one place, it's easy to lose track, but you handled them all well. I'll be back again... ~Hannah

I haven't critiqued many books before (at least not on this site). I don't know what to say except that I stumbled onto your book, started reading, and was hooked. I'm about a quarter through the chapters posted on here.This is really good! I'll probably finish reading in a few days.

I'm captivated...and so very glad that I am not the daughter of an old fashioned Greek couple. Your writing is fresh. Your dialogue is appropriate. You have that thing...that knack for words...that even some writers with the largest vocabularies and funniest turns of phrase can't capture. Your prose is so subtle that I forgot I was reading. I'm backing this.

I like the opening chapter, with all the bustle and chatter as the family prepare for the party. I also liked the early insight into Georgina's mental state, which acted as a hook to make me want to read on. There were so many characters introduced so early that at times I had to look back to remind myself who they all were, although overall I think this really helped build the sense of a large family darting around getting ready for the party, so was effective in setting the scene. By the end of chapter two I felt much more comfortable with Georgina, Katherina and Sophia in particular, and could easily pick their voices out of the ever growing family throng! Overall I thought this was interesting and well written, and I look forward to reading more. Best of luck with it! Oktober

Maria, Here's my half of our reading swap. First of all, I love the way you instantly introduce emotion the the story. It sets the scene brilliantly and I'm glad that you didn't feel the need for a long introduction. The relationships between the siblings are realistic - mild bickering with the brother, casual conversation among the sisters. Smoothly written with some humorous comebacks. You've got a light and easy way with words and I love some of your little phrases. One example is in paragraph 10 - "the cloak of I'm-doing-just-fine was a challenge to wear." I also liked the way you portrayed Christina's accent - her voice is practically audible as I read. Of course, I am going to back this book as soon as possible. Have some stars for now until I put you on my bookshelf. Best wishes, Isabel.

Great character development on your story. The characters so remind me of many misadventures I had hanging out with my Greek friends in New Orleans. Or was that "Zorba The Greek"? Georgina, Katherina, and Sophia are complex and entertaining.

I loved the first chapter, great style of writing. Your characters are also very interesting on my watchlist will read more.

I began reading Georgina's Family and I really enjoyed it. Very interesting, can't wait to have a minute and read more .

Hi Maria, I just stopped by to acquaint myself with Georgina’s Family. They sound like they all live with some semblance of respect and harmony. I love the family dynamics, and I have a feeling Georgina’s age and singleness is going to be big factor in this story. You have a wonderful way of letting the reader see your characters without giving too much deliberate description. Thank you for letting me use my imagination. I love that. Your writing is really put together well and you use some very creative similes to form descriptive word pictures. One thing I noticed -- you seem to jump from one point of view to the other as the characters are introduced. First we are in Dimitri’s point of view and then it jumps to Georgina’s, Sophia’s, and later Katherina’s and Christina’s and then back and throughout the first chapter at least. Since the book is entitled Georgina’s family, I take it she is the star of the show. So things should probably be seen through her eyes. It’s okay to change the view point, but usually that is separated by chapter breaks or section breaks. Also, the first time Christina speaks in chapter one, I thought you were leaving out words, but then I realized her English is broken. It might help to have Sophia address that in her thoughts. (If hers is the view point you want to write in) I see Dimitri addresses his mom’s accent, but that is after Christina has already spoken. All in all, you have a really great story going and I’m sure it will prove to be a winner! I ‘ll be back to read more soon. Highly starred! Dianna Lanser Nothing But The Blood

I know what you mean about the break in lines - I had trouble when I uploaded the chapters and it has not come up the way it is on my computer; I tried to rectify the line break, but haven't been able to do so. Apologies for the way it looks. Thanks for your feedback - I really do appreciate it. [QUOTE] I have just read the first chapter of your book. I really enjoyed it! The characters are strongly drawn and I relate to them at once. There were only a few editorial things I noticed: “floral patterned carpet”: don’t begin a new line here. When you introduce Christina, it took me awhile to figure out that she was the mother and not some sort of hired help. Try inserting a sentence like “The girls’ mother still spoke in broken, accented English, despite her __ years in England.” “the last rush of adrenaline she had felt was a…”: don’t begin a new line here. Next paragraph: “walking into…with”: Technically, it sounds like the music goes with her into the bedroom. Although I can figure out what you mean, it’s always best to be as clear as possible! :) “chiffon fabric of her skirt and her…”: don’t begin a new line here. You have a very interesting story begun here. I feel drawn right into the family as I read. It was especially funny to think of the uncle putting a temperature control on a vacuum cleaner!! Wishing you all the best, Hannah ("Carolina and Hubert") [ENDQUOTE]

I have just read the first chapter of your book. I really enjoyed it! The characters are strongly drawn and I relate to them at once. There were only a few editorial things I noticed: “floral patterned carpet”: don’t begin a new line here. When you introduce Christina, it took me awhile to figure out that she was the mother and not some sort of hired help. Try inserting a sentence like “The girls’ mother still spoke in broken, accented English, despite her __ years in England.” “the last rush of adrenaline she had felt was a…”: don’t begin a new line here. Next paragraph: “walking into…with”: Technically, it sounds like the music goes with her into the bedroom. Although I can figure out what you mean, it’s always best to be as clear as possible! :) “chiffon fabric of her skirt and her…”: don’t begin a new line here. You have a very interesting story begun here. I feel drawn right into the family as I read. It was especially funny to think of the uncle putting a temperature control on a vacuum cleaner!! Wishing you all the best, Hannah ("Carolina and Hubert")

You use your adjectives quite simply yet they paint such vivid pictures. I found your story easy and flowing. It captured my attention and painted vivid pictures of all the different personalities. A terrific read! Mega stars and backed! And thanx for really great comment for me...wish you all the luck in the world! michelle Dummies for Dating: a book about character defects

I very much enjoyed this story. I admit I wasn't too sure after reading the pitch but the writing itself is delightful. I like how you unravel the complex family situation without ever forcing an information over load on your reader. My favourite aspect of your writing is your unique phrasing. It's very tempting in this genre to slip in the odd tired cliché but you avoid this wonderfully by adding your own unique description. Looking forward to reading on.... Janny

i took a look at another chapter and i really do think this is nicely paced. you give us more hints as to why georgina is upset with her life and im curious enough to read on. her family is enjoyable to read about. reminds me of a bit of mine sometimes and all your characters being so fresh and unique, are fun to read. one thing i did think of while reading is maybe you could offer us a few more hints as to where the story is going. oh and p.s. love the new cover! overall, i really enjoyed what i read. best of luck with this ! :)

There is certainly a lot going on in this first Chapter. Your characters are very well developed and the mystery of why Georgina is so upset builds beautifully.

Georgina's family. I like your bright cover, and your pitches tell me what to expect. However, take care not to repeat words close together - change. The long pitch reads a little clumsily. That sentence about Sophia seems out of place. Perhaps you could mention earlier on that the household is full of family love, conflict and laughter, and leave out Sophia who is not a main character? But it's your book... Ch.1. You are in two viewpoints at the same time in that opening scene, which doesnt allow the reader to identify with a character. I'd advise deciding one one Point of View for the whole chapter - Georgina. But the scene is naturally portrayed, and already gives a life-like snapshot of the family. Be careful not to split your infinities: 'I help her not to think...' is correct. There are some unnecessary words to avoid: abruptly, already, just. You'll find your work flows better without them. Again, you've drifted away from the main VP where Sophia decides to drop the subject. But your dialogue is crisp, and flows well. To solve the VP problem, you could have Christina saying she was too busy to have a look at the vacuum cleaner, instead of thinking it. I love that bit: "'Any girl who have Dmitri will be very lucky,' Christina said, increasing a few inches in height as she spoke.' (You dont need the 'proudly'. You show it very well without. Your dialogue flows much better than the narrative pieces, but there are some real gems there too: 'The finality in her mother's tone fuelled Sophia's sense of injustice and she gnawed her lower lip.' (except you've changed the VP yet again!) You have 'time' three times in the short paragraph where it was approaching four o'clock. Despite all the editorial nits, yours is a comfortable tale, which flows well and paints a pleasing natural picture of their family life. When you have sorted the viewpoint problems, and ironed out the glitches, this will turn into a charming story, I'm sure. Hope you dont mind me pointing out all the nits - your book is worth presevering with. We all have to edit and re-edit our work. Jane (Breath of Africa)

Georgina’s family These are just my thoughts as I read through your work...Please use, enjoy, or disregard as you wish, mine is just another opinion in a sea of plenty... Cover & Title – Cover is lovely, I assume u are drawing on their Greek back grounds and it works. The title, well from the pitches it seems to work. Short Pitch – Yep good, but I would make it 2 sentences rather than 1 Long Pitch – I get what you are trying to do but you repeat yourself too much, not repeating words but repeating what the novel is about. You tell us she has to take stock of her life and challenge her Greek values then in the next block down, tell us she needs to resolve inner conflicts. You need to give this a rewrite just to clean it up. Sometime less is more Chapter 1 – I started reading and was instantly drawn to how alike the family are like the Greek family in My big fat Greek wedding. Not with that I don’t mean its the same story but just how instantly their Greekness comes across and thats down to the way you use dialogue which some will say is spelt wrong but is exactly as a greek person speaking English would say. (I lived in Cyprus for years and it brought a smile to my face as I read the line “There you go “ one of my friends fav saying lol) I’m not sure about the switching POV, unless you keep a tight reign on it, your readers are going to get lost. For instance, in the middle of the chapter when talking about the hoover, characters appear and disappear and I had to read that part a few times to understand who was who. But the chapter doesn’t get too bogged down by lots of characters and the build up is good. Chapter 2 – Again we are introduced to a large number of peripheral characters and see their interactions with the girls. There’s no real drama at the party which was a little disappointing with that many people. But is filled with the conversations that we all have with our relatives. I really do like the way this flows along so far and although there are a few miss placed commas and the odd run on sentence, you really don’t notice as you read. Im putting this on my list of books that I want to give a deeper read. Ive highly starred it and I will give it some shelf time as soon as I possibly can

I just had a quick scan through but it is definitely the type of book that I would buy... Reminds me of some of the lovely Greek families I know! Thanks for sharing it on here, Liz

Like the new cover! Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Comfortable writing and story-telling makes this very easy to fall into. It reminds me of My Big Fat Greek Wedding with the old v new attitudes battle that we all understand. There's a large market for this kind of story. I think with a little editing (as highlighted by other far better at advising than me!) this could do very well. Wishing you lots of luck! Diana Pascual's Birthday

I have read to chapter seven so far and feel this family story flows very well. It develops very naturally as we learn more about all the family members. The party was a perfect opening to get a sense of everyone's place within the family. I think Gina and her sister Katherina are the characters we will learn most about as we follow them in work and socially. I already like these characters and want to know how things pan out for them. Especially with their love interests with the pressure they are under from their mom Christina. I was very distracted reading chapter 2 as I read it before dinner and my mouth was watering when I was reading your descriptions of all the wonderful food. The chicken comment made me laugh. This is a lovely insight into a family and their culture. High stars, on my list for backing. Olive.

Hi Maria, good start to your story. The easy conversational way of telling your story works very well. The way you have presented the various characters works well too. we can relate to Georgina, her sisters and Dimitry. A setting of family is created. Just a pointer, in chapter one, there are two areas where sentences are disjointed and appear in the next paragraph. A small mater. Your story telling is good Maria. All the best to you. I will keep on reading and as i go along i will add comments...So far ...Great. I enjoyed your story! Mohan

Hi Maria I just had this LOONG comment typed for you, but I pushed something and now it's gone. AAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHH!! Ok, the short version: I love your style and the easy way you tell the story. It plays as a movie in my head, painting a picture of a crazy family which happens to be Greek (it could also apply to any family.) Tips: I think you can add more drama to the party, the build up was there and the gossiping and nosiness of the family members. I expected something to happen to Gina, something embarrassing to make her resolution at the end of two (her secret bday wish) more explicit to the reader. It could also add some humour which I'm sure can be found aplenty in such a big family. I think your POV shifts can be jarring, especially when we're still in Gina's head and then jump to Sophia's. I suggest adding two lines to separate par.'s. The reader is a lazy thing ;) and needs visual typographical clues to show the shifts. This is a good read and gets high stars from me. If anything is a bit unclear, just ask. I typed this at lightning speed, so mistakes are to be expected ;) Michelle The Gypsy's Daughter

I have read your opening three chapters, and you certainly have a large cast of characters. A sprawling complicated greek family - and the sisters are very different from each other. I'm not keen on the shifting POV as it is difficult to know who to root for. I also think it decreases tension if we know what everybody is thinking, but I didn't find it disorientating or diffuclt to follow. I found the chapters I read a little quiet - something needs to happen at the party to make the reader want to continue - maybe Georgina is humiliated infront of everyone or does something daft. There is I imagine a lot of humour in such a large and close knit family, maybe you should play on this more in these scenes, where nothing much is happening in terms of plot. Chapter 3 at the school again suffers from being a little too quiet. Driving to work and the task of her day are not hugely interesting to the reader, focus on the key scenes, like when she meets what I assume is going to be the 'love interest'. Family sagas are very popular and I wish you success in shaping this and getting it read. Juliet

I just finished the first two chapters and so far I’m really enjoying your story. I was sucked in right away and wanted to read on. You imagery is fantastic and you’re dialogue is smooth and natural. I could definitely feel the family dynamic in the first chapter. Your pitch is great but I would sure like to see some good cover art as well. Thanks for the read. I will be giving this one high stars.

Well written story. The pitch and title are good. The story line is new and creative. The characters are well developed as is the story. I like the pacing of your book. It's really a good speed! No flaws as far as I read. Keep up the good work and good luck with your book. Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Maria, Short pitch-is good Long pitch-I didn't care for and believe you can use your creative writing skill to draw the reader and add a bit of mystery. Think of being in a bookstore reading the back of a book...you need to capture the reader's attention enough for them to purchase the book...so intrigue, mystery, something to make them curious enough to want to keep reading. Right from the crying in the bathroom scene, the reader is instantly drawn into this intimately told story of family and tradition. You show the connection between and develop the characters well. The mother with high traditional expectations, the rebellious daughter who wears what she likes, the son who can do no wrong...etc. I would have preferred to see less narrative and more dialogue to show not tell the reader, but that is just my preference. There is a bit of confusion with having characters with the same name...two dimitri's and one dimitra, I assume this is true to life tweaked to fit fiction. It would really happen in a family based on tradition. I also wonder if all the narrative is needed...there were places that I stopped and wondered, do i need to know this? So you might want to trim by asking does this move the story forward. Also a bit of mystery at the end of each chapter, something that leaves the reader wondering what comes next might be a suggestion. All in all the writing, sentence structure and flow is good. The sentences weave from one to the next. You have a talent to portray a large family and the different personalities well. I highly starred based on the story. All my best, Wendy And When

i actually really like the way you write. each sentence flowed nicely and was easy to follow. i also really like certain points in your pitches. they were intriguing and easily relatable. i also really enjoyed the dialogue. its realistic and natural. one thing i do think you could work on is your long pitch. at times, it felt like you were rambling almost. not a big deal because you do have some great points hidden in there but just something i thought i would point out. highly rated and i wish you the best of luck with this! melissa :) Gut Instincts

A fascinating window on life in modern multicultural England. The characters are very strong here and they are described with a warm humour. I know families like this living in London - they seemed so real. The traditional attitudes to the sexes comes over really well. Some great one-liners here. I enjoyed this and will read more. Candy.

Just read two chapters, ans thought it was very well written. It had the feel of a large family saga developing. These sagas can prove either to be gripping or, if the family annoys, something of a turn off. From what i read though, the family dynamic you establish fairly quickly means your book is more likely to be the former than the latter. I read the chapters without reading you tags or pitches, so i'm not sure what your genre or target audience is, but it at time had the feel of a YA book. If that's your audience, then you hit it very well, if you're aiming for a more adult readership, then you might want to have a thing about that and the dialogue. Otherwise, no real criticisms, and high stars.

I read the first four chapters of your book and got instantly drawn in. You develop your characters very nicely and I felt Georgina's unhappiness with her life, forced by culture and family traditions. Highly starred from me and will remain on my WL until I can get back to it. You have done an outstanding job! Best of luck; Elke

This is not the usual genre I read but very pleased I read it - I thoroughly enjoyed getting to know the characters. Great character development and loads of humour in your writing. Have given it top rating and can see it doing really well. Looking forward to reading more chapters. Mark

Laura, thank you so much for your encouraging and positive comments. I really do value the feedback, particularly after reading 'They Call Me Blanca' and know first hand what a gifted writer you are! God Bless, Maria :) [QUOTE] I really enjoyed reading what you have uploaded here. You are most certainly a very talented writer who will be going places for sure!:) What a story! Even your pitch had me! "Alive but not living..." Wow! Just wow! That is only a sample of the MANY unique and well turned phrases that just flow throughout your work! I only WISH I had HALF the talent that flows from your pen! Highly starred. Blessings and best wishes, Laura A. Diaz "They Call Me Blanca" [ENDQUOTE]

I was particularly interested in your comment regarding the focus on relationships between the various family members; you are quite right in that this is central to Georgina's Family. It is heartening as a writer when the reader follows the writer's intentions. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on Georgina's Family. Maria :) [QUOTE] Hello Maria: I began reading Georgina's Family and was impressed by your attention to character development. You do a thorough job of describing the interpersonal idiosyncrasies and complexities which exist, often unspoken, between the family members. Given the subject matter of the Greek family, I think this is crucial for this sort of novel. Bless you as you communicate this family saga. No doubt it will strike many chords with many of your readers. James [ENDQUOTE]

I really enjoyed reading what you have uploaded here. You are most certainly a very talented writer who will be going places for sure!:) What a story! Even your pitch had me! "Alive but not living..." Wow! Just wow! That is only a sample of the MANY unique and well turned phrases that just flow throughout your work! I only WISH I had HALF the talent that flows from your pen! Highly starred. Blessings and best wishes, Laura A. Diaz "They Call Me Blanca"

I really enjoyed reading what you have uploaded here. You are most certainly a very talented writer who will be going places for sure!:) What a story! Even your pitch had me! "Alive but not living..." Wow! Just wow! That is only a sample of the MANY unique and well turned phrases that just flow throughout your work! I only WISH I had HALF the talent that flows from your pen! Highly starred. Blessings and best wishes, Laura A. Diaz "They Call Me Blanca"

I've only read a few chapters but a lovely read so far... Something I can relate too coming from a Turkish background! This is what makes the story realistic... I can't wait to read more (have added you to my watchlist and given you a rating) :-)

Hello Maria: I began reading Georgina's Family and was impressed by your attention to character development. You do a thorough job of describing the interpersonal idiosyncrasies and complexities which exist, often unspoken, between the family members. Given the subject matter of the Greek family, I think this is crucial for this sort of novel. Bless you as you communicate this family saga. No doubt it will strike many chords with many of your readers. James

Hi Maria Lovely read which flows naturally while cleverly tackling a number of deep subjects such as challenging cultural norms. Realistic and true to life - you have very successfully managed to reveal what it is like to be part of a family where the rules for girls and boys are poles apart. I can't wait to read more chapters and see how characters develop. As I scan through the books in bookshops under the chick lit genre - it is surprising how many are dark and negative so what a delight it is to read your writing and find something positive and hope-filled which will bring light into our minds. Thank you.

Very gripping and exciting plot! I can't wait to read more so i'm going to add it to my watch list! Thanks, Scott

Hi Maria I actually read your first few chapters a couple of weeks ago but don't seem to have commented for some reason so apologies for that. I really enjoyed Georgina's family and the insight it gives to Greek family life. You write very well and draw the reader into the story. I know people have differing ideas about writing using different POVs but I think it works well here. All the best with it. I've highly starred it and backed it and will put it on my watchlist reading for promotion to my bookshelf when I have a reshuffle. Melanie La Vie en Rosé

I really like this! It reminds me of the Greek family in My Greek wedding. I love the peek you give us into this family. I didn't find any typos or errors in your writing. Your style was easy to read, and easily pulled me into the story. Great job! And good luck with it here on Authonomy. I'm giving you high stars! Sincerely, D. S. Hale Jessup and the Teleporter

Her mind was like an enormous rug with lots of things swept under. You have a fantastic way with words, Maria. Critical green eyes looked back at her, perfect. When I was in Australia, I stayed with a Greek family for quite some time. I find myself relating to their ways as I read this novel. ;) Beautifully written. 6 stars from me ;)

I have thoroughly enjoyed reading this story so far and can't wait to be able to finish the novel. You make it very easy to relate to the characters and many people, particularly with siblings, will enjoy this book too! Wishing you lots of luck Maria I 100% back this book.

In chapter one of Georgina's Family, we get an insight into Greek family life. The contrast in the way sons and daughters are treated is very strong. The daughters must be very careful to protect their virtue, while it's ok for the son to stay out till 6am. 'Even Dimitri will be roped in to help - very telling. Your description of the house and its inhabitants, is clear and realistic. I think I saw a comment where someone thought there was too much about Georgina getting ready. But she would take a long time, as would the other women. I wonder if she is not married, as she would not like to end up with someone who expects to be waited on, like her brother. I've read the next two chapters. The strong sense of tradition and family continues. It seems as the women get older, they lose some 'sparkle' if still un-wed. But I guess it is like that for many. I think 'Georgina's Family', has the making of a soap opera. Gillian Bergh I spotted one typo, where a paragraph has got broken up. .......floral patterned carpet. ......... This happens in a few books, perhaps when the author makes a change. It might be an idea to see if it happens anywhere else. Gillian Bergh

Claire, thank you for your comment; it may seem 'odd' that so many family members live at home when they have grown up, but it is culturally quite common. I hope that the book will provide an insight into a different culture and even though in some ways it is a 'nice easy read' in other ways it is challenging. Maria :) [QUOTE] I'm not an expert on chick lit, but this seems like a nice easy read - albeit one that deals with plenty of complex emotions.I found it a little odd that the whole family seem to be living together when they are all grown up and I'm also not sure about spending so long describing getting ready, but then I don't read much chick lit and maybe that's just not something I'm used to so feel free to ignore that! [ENDQUOTE]

Lesa, as you have pointed out Georgina's Family is not written from one POV. As I was editing the book and seeking direction from a freelance editor I know, we discussed the advantages and disadvantages of using multiple points of view in the story. It will take the reader longer to get to know the characters, as you experienced in the first few chapters, but in the long run they will know them on a deeper level and from their unique point of view as opposed to Georgina's. I am very conscious of when I change point of view and will bear your comments in mind to see if I can make it easier for the reader in the opening chapters. The first two chapters are the most challenging ones, both for me as the writer starting off with a party - and for the reader thrown into the hectic, bustling scene of a Greek family party. Georgina's Family is a story about Georgina, Katherina and importantly - their family; the sequel will focus on other members of the family. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on Georgina's Family as all views are considered and assessed. Maria :) [QUOTE] Maria I really like the concept of this story against the backdrop of the big Greek family and culture. I liked the way you showed the differences in how the young men could act compared to the young women. Some of the family conversations had lovely touches and insights and I can see the way you are setting up how different the three sisters are yet they all have the same goal of wanting to find their own direction in life and not having a marriage found for them. I found your narrative and dialogue easy to follow. My only issue is the POV. I thought from the pitch that Georgina would be the main character but events in Katherina's life would also be central to the plot. The opening was told in third person from Georgina's point of view and I was quite happy to settle into that but then there was lots of POV switching. There are a lot of people introduced in the first two chapters and whilst I appreciate how that illustrates the large family I started to get distracted thinking too much about all the connections and trying to remember them. The POV changes occur in quick succession and within a paragraph or conversation they have the ability to interrupt the flow of the story, pulling the reader out of the character they are getting to know, so constant switching can distance a reader from the character. In the initial chapters I found it difficult to figure out who the main character was. For example, in chapter one you begin with Georgina's POV, Dimitri interjects thinking that he has spent half his life waiting outside bathrooms, then it continues with Georgina but then in mid conversation the POV switches to Sophia, who you then continue with, leaving Georgina but then we hear the thoughts of other family members in the next conversation. I've read plenty of books here and published where the POV switches but to do it successfully it tends to be within separate and clearly defined sections of a chapter or within it's own chapter. Even then you'll still find some readers who just don't like POV switching in any form. I particularly enjoyed the interaction between Katherina and Markus at the airport and on the plane. There was still some POV switching towards the end of that chapter - to Markus and the two attendants - but for the most part you stayed with Katherina and I really started to settle into her personality and that section flowed well. Overall, this is a story I would pick up and contains hooks in the culture, family and conflicting desires of the different family members. [ENDQUOTE]

Maria I really like the concept of this story against the backdrop of the big Greek family and culture. I liked the way you showed the differences in how the young men could act compared to the young women. Some of the family conversations had lovely touches and insights and I can see the way you are setting up how different the three sisters are yet they all have the same goal of wanting to find their own direction in life and not having a marriage found for them. I found your narrative and dialogue easy to follow. My only issue is the POV. I thought from the pitch that Georgina would be the main character but events in Katherina's life would also be central to the plot. The opening was told in third person from Georgina's point of view and I was quite happy to settle into that but then there was lots of POV switching. There are a lot of people introduced in the first two chapters and whilst I appreciate how that illustrates the large family I started to get distracted thinking too much about all the connections and trying to remember them. The POV changes occur in quick succession and within a paragraph or conversation they have the ability to interrupt the flow of the story, pulling the reader out of the character they are getting to know, so constant switching can distance a reader from the character. In the initial chapters I found it difficult to figure out who the main character was. For example, in chapter one you begin with Georgina's POV, Dimitri interjects thinking that he has spent half his life waiting outside bathrooms, then it continues with Georgina but then in mid conversation the POV switches to Sophia, who you then continue with, leaving Georgina but then we hear the thoughts of other family members in the next conversation. I've read plenty of books here and published where the POV switches but to do it successfully it tends to be within separate and clearly defined sections of a chapter or within it's own chapter. Even then you'll still find some readers who just don't like POV switching in any form. I particularly enjoyed the interaction between Katherina and Markus at the airport and on the plane. There was still some POV switching towards the end of that chapter - to Markus and the two attendants - but for the most part you stayed with Katherina and I really started to settle into her personality and that section flowed well. Overall, this is a story I would pick up and contains hooks in the culture, family and conflicting desires of the different family members.

your narrative is very good: descriptive and original...this helps this book a great deal, adding to the brilliant idea... l will back...

Thank you so much Eileen, for your comments; I am reflecting on the points you have raised. I am of Greek origin, so I have insight into the culture, but it is not autobiographical. Georgina's Family is a 'light-read' and even though I have placed it in the chick-lit genre, it is not typical of the genre because of the perspective and strong cultural influence. Some readers will find certain values and traditions surprising, but then again it might be thought-provoking. I appreciate that Georgina may seem too okay at work in chapter 3, but that is how she has been leading her life; sweeping things under the carpet - pretending she is fine. As the story progresses it is clear that she can't carry on doing this. The relationship between the sisters is central to the themes raised and even though the focus in this book is not on Sophia, she is an important character. As for the wish and Katherina's secret, the reader does find out - or guesses as they continue to read. I really do value your comments because I am learning that what one reader likes eg change in pace in chapter 3, another reader may not. I'll take your advice: all food for thought ... :) [QUOTE] I am immediately sympathetic to a weepy girl trying to avoid her brother banging on the bathroom door, so I like the start. (“Floral-patterned … carpet” has some kind of formatting problem, which is a small thing but thought I’d say.) Also good is the heavy feeling of family obligation and being a good reputable girl, despite what is clearly a warm and supportive family too. This sets the tone well. It makes me hope she finds whatever it is she seems to be yearning for. Some kind of liberation maybe, or some new direction for sure. I personally am a bit idiotic when meeting a family of characters, and often cannot keep them straight. I assumed all the pressure was on Gina because she was the oldest, and that was also why she was so dutiful, as well as why they were determined to find her a husband. She didn’t seem at first like a middle child, the ones who are usually in the background as Katherina is in the first chapter. So I got mixed up trying to sort out the age order. It may just be me. This is very warm and sweet. I feel swept in in the party. I feel like it will be interesting to get to know them, as the book goes on. That’s a fine thing to establish this early on. There might have been too many people at the party for me to remember, but it gives the idea of being overwhelmed, which is what she feels. If some of them are not needed later in the story, maybe concentrate on the ones who are? Oh agony, she makes a wish, an outrageous wish beyond anything she has ever dreamed before – and in the next chapter you don’t tell me??? You go into workplace stuff? Please tell me sooner than this. I realise we need to see her at work, and meet her workmates and key pupils, and yet somehow something slows down, here. The emotional tension of the party is gone, and the Big Wish has disappeared. I think I need to have those things hovering more. I do not think she would put it all out of her mind – or at least not in a novel’s structure. She seems just fine at work, but we know she is not perfectly fine. I need some rumblings of discontent or tension, an even see-sawing back and forth, between her outer, ordered life and her growing inner doubts and questions – the things that made her cry. Ah, now in chapter three Katerina is a more important character. In that case, I guess I’d have wanted more between her and Gina in chapter one, perhaps, and a bit less of the baby, the rebel, Sophia. Even though there is loads of detail, I wish all the details could be less about every day realism, and more about her emotional state. When I met her, she was in tears. Her life really needed something, and she didn’t even know what. That grabs me. I care about that. I am happy to meet her family and her workmates and students, but I don’t need everything. I need the stuff that pushes her buttons, the stuff she’d react against, in terms of this secret she now has inside of her. I need the theme to dictate which details she notices. I hope that makes sense. Her world now seems OK. For me it needs to seem increasingly not OK, and that needs to escalate, because I know she will be increasingly not OK, as she needs a break from being so very good and respectable and middle class Greek with all the constrictions that brings. Now as I re-read the pitch, I wonder – if all three sisters go away together, is the balance equal amongst all three in the overall story? On the other hand, if you want the story too be about the older two only, maybe the title sent me in the wrong direction. And if the youngest girl isn’t a key player in the story – does she need to go on the big trip with them? This is pure speculation on my part, but I am guessing that a lot of this is drawn from autobiographical material. If so, that would explain the very realistic detail that is not related to theme. It is really hard to make that leap, and I can relate. If you could do that more so, it would put this story onto a much deeper level of writing. You establish touchingly that one of the sisters is in torment. Everything I read after that needs to somehow have to do with her torment. Of course I do not mean soap opera style. This is sweetly light-hearted. However, once you start a theme that important, it needs to lead all that follows. In the end, literature is all metaphor. And if the other sister, Katherina, has her torment, I need to see that sooner. I really like these people, that’s the thing. Well if some of this is food for thought, good. Whatever isn’t - chuck it out – honest. One gets so many comments here, and such different ones. One’s instincts are the bottom line. I do wish you luck. From Eileen Kardos The Noodle Trail [ENDQUOTE]

I'm not an expert on chick lit, but this seems like a nice easy read - albeit one that deals with plenty of complex emotions.I found it a little odd that the whole family seem to be living together when they are all grown up and I'm also not sure about spending so long describing getting ready, but then I don't read much chick lit and maybe that's just not something I'm used to so feel free to ignore that!

I am immediately sympathetic to a weepy girl trying to avoid her brother banging on the bathroom door, so I like the start. (“Floral-patterned … carpet” has some kind of formatting problem, which is a small thing but thought I’d say.) Also good is the heavy feeling of family obligation and being a good reputable girl, despite what is clearly a warm and supportive family too. This sets the tone well. It makes me hope she finds whatever it is she seems to be yearning for. Some kind of liberation maybe, or some new direction for sure. I personally am a bit idiotic when meeting a family of characters, and often cannot keep them straight. I assumed all the pressure was on Gina because she was the oldest, and that was also why she was so dutiful, as well as why they were determined to find her a husband. She didn’t seem at first like a middle child, the ones who are usually in the background as Katherina is in the first chapter. So I got mixed up trying to sort out the age order. It may just be me. This is very warm and sweet. I feel swept in in the party. I feel like it will be interesting to get to know them, as the book goes on. That’s a fine thing to establish this early on. There might have been too many people at the party for me to remember, but it gives the idea of being overwhelmed, which is what she feels. If some of them are not needed later in the story, maybe concentrate on the ones who are? Oh agony, she makes a wish, an outrageous wish beyond anything she has ever dreamed before – and in the next chapter you don’t tell me??? You go into workplace stuff? Please tell me sooner than this. I realise we need to see her at work, and meet her workmates and key pupils, and yet somehow something slows down, here. The emotional tension of the party is gone, and the Big Wish has disappeared. I think I need to have those things hovering more. I do not think she would put it all out of her mind – or at least not in a novel’s structure. She seems just fine at work, but we know she is not perfectly fine. I need some rumblings of discontent or tension, an even see-sawing back and forth, between her outer, ordered life and her growing inner doubts and questions – the things that made her cry. Ah, now in chapter three Katerina is a more important character. In that case, I guess I’d have wanted more between her and Gina in chapter one, perhaps, and a bit less of the baby, the rebel, Sophia. Even though there is loads of detail, I wish all the details could be less about every day realism, and more about her emotional state. When I met her, she was in tears. Her life really needed something, and she didn’t even know what. That grabs me. I care about that. I am happy to meet her family and her workmates and students, but I don’t need everything. I need the stuff that pushes her buttons, the stuff she’d react against, in terms of this secret she now has inside of her. I need the theme to dictate which details she notices. I hope that makes sense. Her world now seems OK. For me it needs to seem increasingly not OK, and that needs to escalate, because I know she will be increasingly not OK, as she needs a break from being so very good and respectable and middle class Greek with all the constrictions that brings. Now as I re-read the pitch, I wonder – if all three sisters go away together, is the balance equal amongst all three in the overall story? On the other hand, if you want the story too be about the older two only, maybe the title sent me in the wrong direction. And if the youngest girl isn’t a key player in the story – does she need to go on the big trip with them? This is pure speculation on my part, but I am guessing that a lot of this is drawn from autobiographical material. If so, that would explain the very realistic detail that is not related to theme. It is really hard to make that leap, and I can relate. If you could do that more so, it would put this story onto a much deeper level of writing. You establish touchingly that one of the sisters is in torment. Everything I read after that needs to somehow have to do with her torment. Of course I do not mean soap opera style. This is sweetly light-hearted. However, once you start a theme that important, it needs to lead all that follows. In the end, literature is all metaphor. And if the other sister, Katherina, has her torment, I need to see that sooner. I really like these people, that’s the thing. Well if some of this is food for thought, good. Whatever isn’t - chuck it out – honest. One gets so many comments here, and such different ones. One’s instincts are the bottom line. I do wish you luck. From Eileen Kardos The Noodle Trail

What delightful dialogue! It sounds like a real family. Just like home, lol.

I love your characters and the way they interact. Your sentences flow well and the story is easy to read. You were definitely born to write. Since my sister is my best friend I related well to the sister focus. Well done.

A delicious read, with a very strong opening. You’re writing flows well and you seem at ease with your writing style. Our characters are first rate and add colour and dimension to your scenes. A colourful dialogue with a staccato feel, that draws the writing on. Good ending on your chapters lead you on to reading the next chapter I enjoyed reading and would recommend. Well done.

Just finished reading, so far the suspense builds up well. In fact I've read this real fast to find out what happened to Katerina. It would be nice if the reason was that epic. In fact since this is so much more about Katerina, I'm wondering why the name of the book is Georgina's family. The party scene has way too many characters, that need a bit more of detail. I only caught the grandma and Paul's parents, I was kind of lost with whose the godmother of whom, Nichllas, Mario, just ran past and I didnt know what age, who they were nothing. Alot of the insurance conversation can be interspersed with what they are really talking about, because not every reader understands finance and I actually wanted to skip reading those parts, even though it kind of shows how Katerina and Markus are of similar wavelengths and suitable for each other. Like the accents of the mother, very nicely done. Also the tongue in cheek for example- 'Poor Petra,' and poor me..... love that. The book is a nice warm read, will back as soon as the editors picks are done for this month. Oh and one more thing, I think its 'chatted with at the gym' instead of chatted too. Great read.... all the best.

i thoroughly enjoyed what i read and i can't wait to see how the characters and the story line develops

I've really enjoyed reading this book so far. Would like to read more....

This is a nice slice of family life. I too, come from a family of three girls. It gets interesting. There were a couple of spots where the lines no longer match up like they should. You might want to take a look. Good luck with this! Blessings... Georgia The Woman From E.A.R.L.

Hi Maria, being 30 myself and from a largish family, your book immediately appealed to me. You've obviously got a lot going on in terms of plot which is great, and I'm keen to see how it develops. There are also some really nice touches in your opening chapter, however I am having trouble keeping track of everybody! You seem to be switiching from one character to the next without warning, I'm not sure if this is because you want to introduce everybody in the opening scene? i would say there's no harm in keeping a couple of them back until the following chapters, although of course this in only my opinion.

I'm enjoying reading your book. I've read the first three chapters and so far I like the third chapter best because I'm getting to know Georgina better. In the first chapters, there were so many people to keep track of, which is good because it shows how chaotic big Greek families can be. But what I like even more, is that in the third chapter, things slow down and focus on Georgina. I also like the great descriptions and interesting settings. Will keep reading to find out what happens to Georgina and her sisters.

An interesting and lively tale. The characters are very believable. I enjoyed it very much.

A great insight into the life of a family. I feel sorry for Dimitri having to put uo with 3 sisters - one was bad enough for me! Your story telling style flows very well for me and you seem to include every single little thing in your descriptions. From what I have read, I'm really impressed! Great!

Your writing style reminds me a lot of mine (hope you don't take that as an insult!!) Firstly you use a lot of !, I used even more, and since everyone moaned about them I have cropped them so much. Some people say you don't need any - can't bring myself to gid rid of all of mine yet! Secondly the dialogue - in places - 'there is a telephone call' maybe would flow better as' there's...' This improves throughout your uploaded chapters so it might be worth editing your first chapter to death, after all that is what everyone on here reads really. I like your characters lots - good luck with this! Jo Lexi's Place

this is a great read so far and i can't wait to have access to the rest of the book. - hopefully it'll be some tome soon.

Georgina’s Family. By Maria Constantine. Your book gets off to a cracking start with the typical problems of a family household. It’s always the bathroom that causes conflict when many live together. I felt sorry for Dimitri, sisters can spend hours in there…no consideration…ah well. Lots of friendliness within your story, it comes over very clear and I like it. Hope to read more soon but for now I’ve starred it well. Best wishes, Neville. The Secrets of the Forest – The Time Zone.

I have just started reading the book and I'm really enjoying it. I'm interested to read how Georgina is going to change her life.

Great opening, packed full of lively greek characters, a family under one roof and bursting at the scenes. I could feel the bustle and hear the noise while reading. I am instantly attracted to Georginas character and her sense of 'there's got to be more to life than this'. I think it's a point we all reach at some stage, some of us more than once! Enjoyed and starred :-) Tammy Robinson

GEORGINA’S FAMILY This is an interesting story. You have good characters in Georgina and Katherina. I think exploring the relationship between two sisters is always a good topic as few relationships in life can be as intense so you’ve picked a good subject for this. I’m adding it to my shelf. Wannabeawriter. Who Killed the President?

I love it, want to read more! Realistic characters, humorous and descriptive. Want to know what happens to them all. I think many people will be able to relate to this family as many of us have been born in the UK, but our parents are immigrants and we have had to balance two very different cultures. Thank you for adding more chapters, I love the bit about how difficult it is to find the right man, so true, so very true! I really enjoy your writing style Maria. Your voice is compassionate and understanding. You are also very perceptive and I like the way we get to feel what the characters are really thinking and feeling. I think you have achieved something unique and different as you are able to write from different points of view with confidence. I also like the positivity and hope, which seem to be themes. I really do wish you all the best with Georgina's family Maria. It's a great read!