I REALLY like this! This is very much something I would like to have on a shelf at some bookstore, and available for all to read! Your turn of phrases are breathtaking and precise. The characters are fully fleshed out and occupy their own space being memorable and distinct. Congratulations on writing such such a wonderful novel. Highly starred and watchlisted for future shelf space when space comes available. Blessings and best wishes, Laura A. Diaz

nosleep, Read first chapter, but will comment anyway. Wonderful, I'm actually depressed after reading about Rose. Your descriptions are vivid, pacing great, characterization marvelous. I'm in love with Eddie. Found no errors in spelling or grammar. I can only give you high stars and step back to watch this book rise. Seriously, it's fine writing. I love a good romance. Can't wait for Rose and Eddie to discover each other and fall in love. Ginny is the perfect girlfiriend to leave behind. Good luck in your writing, Hope you like one of mine. Janet The Milche Bride Clarissa's Kitchen

Hi! So, your first paragraph is not the most enticing. You don't need to make so much out of moving boxes back and forth. Get to why it's a problem as fast as you can. The next couple of paragraphs are very confusing. Are you sure this is young adult? Part of the massive appeal of young adult is that it deals with universal themes that all of us experience as teenagers: discovering our identities, social anxieties, loneliness, moral choices. Most teenagers don't think so far ahead as to babies. This is interesting so far, but it's certainly not young adult. This may have a teenager in it, but it's adult, without a doubt. Hope this helps! Georgia