Wow, dexter, what a story and so well written too. I like the way you sell this to the reader in that you have managed to use to flow and pace of the book to do whatever you want to keep us wherever you want us. If you speed the pace up its because its dropping off and the story is at risk of dropping so you raise the pace. I like this as it keeps me interested. I love the premise and the way you develop your characters. I loved it. Well done and this scores high for me. Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R) Please consider me for a rear or watch list wont you?? Many thanks. Sean

Hi dexter, Read the first two chapters and thoroughly enjoyed it. There are typos here and there, but we all have those in our stories, they didn't detract from the plot. Surprised it is not higher ranked. I have placed on my watchlist and will put on my shelf over the next week. Keep up the good work Graham Lench The Eighth Day

Dexter: Excellent story. I read all 10 chapters. I look forward to more. Very well written. Just a very few typos. No big deal. If you can keep the quality up, your book should do very well. I am curious as to how you decide to deal with the meeting between Penny, Grace and the others with those from the crashed spaceship. In any case, very well done. Congratulations! Six stars and a place on my WL. I’d appreciate a return read with stars and comment. If you judge my book worthy, a place on your WL, even better a place on your shelf. Best Wishes Daniel The Makers

Hi This book so far is very enjoyable and i will back it once i have space on my shelf. For now it is on my watch list and i have given you a full six stars. If you have a spare few minutes to take a look at my offering, Derilium, i would be grateful. Cheers, John stearn Author of Derilium

Hi Dexter, Having a look at your book, I've read through the first two chapters. You've described a post nuclear war scenario quite well. The loss of knowledge; the run down shanty buildings; the walled town; armed soldiers. Also I think you've built an interesting plot. I want to know what they're going to discover on their expedition to the fire. Was this a nuclear strike, or something else? I didn't understand the last line of the first chapter. I was interested in these Golden ones, but I'm not sure what I was supposed to be making my own mind up about. You may need to clarify that a bit. It sounds a bit too vague at the moment. I would have liked a bit more description of the fire ball in the first chapter too. I think you have to hint a bit more about what it could be, and what's potentially going on. Obviously the people in this era don't know what a nuclear missile is exactly - they've lost the knowledge. But you could say something like "If the three had known what the plume of the nuclear missiles of more ancient times had been like, they might have shown greater concern." Not that it is a nuclear missile (well maybe it is) but I felt a bit lost as to what was going on in that first chapter. I think a bit more description was needed to help the reader. I noticed a few points in the book where its hard to know exactly who is speaking. You tend to separate the speakers words into separate paragraphs without any hint as to who is speaking the new paragraph. For instance, towards the end of the second chapter you have He smiled, scrutinising her from his chair. "So we fear the second coming." "No, someone that can create that much fire," "Could destroy the world again," she said. In this example, I have no idea who was saying "No, someone that can create that much fire," was it the father or the daughter? Either way it didn't need to be separated from the speech of whoever was saying it. So, for example, if it was the father that said this, it could have been "He smiled, scrutinising her from his chair. "So we fear the second coming. Someone who can create that much fire," "Could destroy the world again, she finished the sentence for him. There were a few minor typos, I'll send you a separate message about those. All in all, an interesting post-nuclear war read. Well done! Regards Scott Butcher (The Merlin Falcon)

Not my normal read, but the writing is good and cogent.

Dexter, I read everything that you have posted here. I think you have a great start to your story. It really held my interest and I really like the characters. I also like the flow. I hate those stories where you are wondering what the heck is going on. Also your style of writing is very vivid. I do have comments: * It looks like you uploaded Chapter 1 twice. Chapter 2 is the same as chapter 1 * There are numerous spelling and grammar errors. I don't usually go through and pick them out, because it isn't my forte. I don't think it is anything that a good edit or five won't help. Trust me I'm on my 10th rewrite. * Some of the dialog seems a little stilted. One peice of advice that someone gave me and it helped is take as many of the tags out (he said, she said) out as possible this will help it flow better. Also, be mindful if your characters would say certain words. I'm thinking in a post apocolyptic world the vocabulary wouldn't be that great. * Chapter one in the first sentence you use the word streak twice. I would change it up. It will flow better. * You don't describe how the characters look very much. One of your strong suits is description. Use that to your advantage when describing the characters. * One thing that confused me is the relationship between Dexter and Liz. It the begining it seems as though they knew each other out in space, but then when he tells Liz about how he got there it seems like they were all just put into stasis, which wouldn't really give them time to get to know each other. This might be something that works itself out further in the book. Just kind of keep it in mind. That is all. Hope you don't think I'm being harsh. I really liked. I feel like you have a great story and good writing style all the grammar spelling junk will work itself out if you keep at it. I am highly starring and backing on my next rotation.

'... through frosted stars." might work better. Regards, RianTorr New London Masquerade

Hi Dexter, I've read a few chapters. It shows promise. On the whole its well written, and interesting. A few minor mistakes here and there that should be flushed out with an edit. I'm interested to know about the world in this story. I can tell its planned out well. The Golden Ones for example - I've never seen a sort of mystical legend into a post-apocalyptic world before. Very interested to find out who they are and what other cultures may have developed. I'll be back to read more! I hope it gets some more attention, it would be well deserved. Cheers, Adam

reread your short pitch. a couple of typos here... creative premise. enjoy your journey with this book j what every woman should know