Authonomy - Comments for Smoulder - By S.F Jameshttp://www.authonomy.com/books/43783/smoulder/Authonomy - Comments for Smoulder - By S.F Jameshttp://authonomy.com/images/jacket/Authonomy_Jacket_2904201245429511.jpgSmoulderhttp://www.authonomy.com/books/43783/smoulder/Comment from tennishorts - 03/05/2012 01:19:45
I read your first chapter... I think you might wanna fix the perspective. It's kind of hard to follow. Also, I dunno if you have edited this yet, but some periods are definitely in order. I enjoyed your descriptions, but I think if you Hemingway it up, it'll flow a whole lot easier :) Becky
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