Hello Chris, I have just skimmed over your first page and found it delightful to read! I will be reading on and rating! Roslyn Scribe-Lings, for your child like heart "I Am" Through the Ages for your seeking heart

This is a really nice quick read. I read the whole thing in my lunch hour and was really drawn in to it. I hope it does well for you, I loved all the little New Orlean (is that the adjective??) touches! Mia

What a great novel Chris. I love the way you give your characters depth. This should appeal to children easily and was a great read for me. Good luck and best wishes on your writing! Eric

CHIRG review Hello Chris, I've finally made it to my part of our book swap! I loved your story. It's truly original, and stands out from a lot of other books on this site. Your writing is clear,and flows really well. I'm not sure you need to use italics for your similies (or what ever they're called) though. Well done! Jessica

Chris, I've finally managed to get areound to read your delightful story! It is such an uplifting and heartwarming work of friendship, courage and having an open mind. I appreciate the sentiment and moral of your story, which I think adults and children will both enjoy and understand. There are some really lovely descriptions and images of their family life, but I especially liked the little snippets of Cajun flare thrown into the imagery - it only added to this gem. For something written so beautifully and uniquely flavoured (pardon the pun) I give this six stars and a place on my shelf. Best of luck, Gilly

CHIRG Hi Chris, I thought I’d have a look at ‘A Spicy Hurricane’ but had problems getting on initially. I have to assume that there is no Chapter One, as Chapter Two came up with a synopsis and I found the story in Chapter Three. I don’t feel at all qualified to comment on the synopsis, so I’ve moved on to Chapter Three and read some of that. Below are a few notes I made as I read. These are just suggestions and I’m no expert, so feel free to use what works for you and toss the rest. Ch 1 1) ‘wet lands’ one word 2) ‘bright skinned’ hyphenate, otherwise it can be read as, ‘the small, bright, skinned child’ 3) ‘smooth, pieces’ remove comma 4) ‘mineral rich’ hyphenate 5) ‘This still routine’ I’m not sure about the use of ‘still’ here. ‘Still’ has many meanings and as none of them fit the context exactly, it’s difficult to see which you’re meaning. I’m assuming you mean ‘still’ as in ‘unmoving’ yet even then, do you mean the routine is unvarying or do you mean Salty and his parents don’t move while they’re hidden? If you mean the first, I’d be inclined to replace ‘still’ with ‘unvarying’. If you mean the latter, I’d be inclined to remove it completely, as it isn’t necessary, or replace it with ‘secret’, maybe. 6) ‘salt fertile’ hyphenate 7) ‘Though salt is a mineral it is used everywhere like a spice to season food.’ Wrong tense here, as you’re narrative is in the past. This should be, ‘Though salt is a mineral, it was used…’ I’d be inclined to remove ‘everywhere’ as it makes the sentence awkward and kids know it’s used everywhere. (Plus, in the next sentence you say, the bottling companies would sell the salt all over the world’, which is a repetition of ‘everywhere’.) 8) ‘crush your spirit’ full stop after ‘spirit’ 9) ‘help ‘da starving’ folks’ is this meant to be, ‘help ‘da starvin’ folks’? 10) ‘tomorrows breakfast’ should be ‘tomorrow’s breakfast’ 11) ‘good night’ one word 12) ‘he finally realised’ I’d be inclined to remove ‘finally’ here. 13) ‘Never the less’ one word Ch 2 1) ‘one of a kind’ hyphenate 2) ‘petite, little girl’ ‘petite’ and ‘little’ mean the same. I’d be inclined to say, ‘petite, young girl’ 3) ‘enchanting young girl’ you could change ‘young’ to ‘little’ here, if you use ‘young’ in the sentence above. 4) ‘dark skinned’ hyphenate 5) ‘ “What an incredible gift’ This is a new paragraph, as it’s Pep thinking, not Aunt Karma. 6) ‘Pep demanded fretfully’ ‘demanded’ isn’t quite right here. What about ‘stated’, or ‘announced’ 7) ‘When I am ever free’ I’m not sure about the use of ‘ever’ in this sentence. I can’t quite work out what you mean by it. But the sentence works fine without it, so I’d be inclined to remove it. 8) ‘Wearily, Pep was shipped’ Why was she shipped wearily? This sounds as though the shipping company, or the pepper mill owners were weary. Maybe say, ‘Weary little Pep was shipped’ Ch 3 1) ‘grinding Peps mill’ should be ‘grinding Pep’s mill’ 2) ‘cook off’ hyphenate This is a highly imaginative, beautifully written story. And it’s full of some lovely, witty wordplay to make it as enjoyable for adults reading to children, as for the children hearing the tale. Well done. Sue

Hey Chris - as promised I've read the first couple of chapters. I always enjoy stories of lone weaker characters fighting to survive in a cruel hard world and overcoming and I think you've got a gem of a story here. I was looking forward to the time when Salty and Pep will meet up and start their adventure together. I wasn't quite sure whether the guardians are also made of salt and pepper and if they live in their respective 'domes' as a community of like salt/pepper people or if everyone else are human? If they are the only two then I would love to understand how they became that way, how they were discovered - which would only add to the beauty of the story. Very well written, the descriptions and location settings are superb. Really enjoyable read and on my WL for future backing. All the best - Jac :)

This is such a sweet tale. It evokes many different emotions and I loved the characters of Salty and Pep. It had a slow start with the exposition of the setting but it started to pick up and the story took off at a good pace. I think you have a wonderful imagination. I couldn’t help but think of Pinocchio at times. I think your target readers would really enjoy this story. A good blend of cultural diversity. I like your writing style, though I would advise you to watch how you italicise your words as the implications aren’t always clear. He was miraculously made of thousands of smooth, pieces of the white rock salt from the mineral rich dome. The above sentence structure is a little awkward, and it disrupts the flow. I would rephrase it. “Salt aint’ worth what it used to be, ya’ know.” I believe aint’ should ain’t. A good story that should be popular among your target audience. Alecia :)

Chris, So glad to finally be able to read your book! I have only gotten through chapter 3, what with the boys running circles around me. I promise to read more, because I can't wait to see how this story ends. I was struck immediately by how easily you portray the settings and families with pointed description. The clarity of the backgrounds of each child, the vision of Avery Island, the French Quarter... Your rich language and carefully chosen words give exactly the right amount of feeling to appeal to a young to middle grade child, all while being concise. Each description is given one paragraph, and at the end of each paragraph from chapter 1 to the end of 3, I felt the purpose of every word. Salty is loveable. Clearly unique, carefree, running the tunnels, and content to be secret, happy with his salvaged things. He is my favorite character, though I like Pep as well. I think you did a great job of creating loving, supportive homes, but not sheltered ones. Salty and Pep know of the dangers of the world, and know that they are prone to them. They also know that love and spirit will help them through anything. The spirit theme will be clear to children, while not being contrived. It doesn't underestimate a child's intelligence. It is realistic and relateable. This is an extraordinary piece of work, that I would be proud to share with my family, and my school. I will get you a commentary that answers your questions posed to me soon, but wanted to give you immediate feedback. This is a smashing success, Chris. Sincerely, Julie

Chris, So glad to finally be able to read your book! I have only gotten through chapter 3, what with the boys running circles around me. I promise to read more, because I can't wait to see how this story ends. I was struck immediately by how easily you portray the settings and families with pointed description. The clarity of the backgrounds of each child, the vision of Avery Island, the French Quarter... Your rich language and carefully chosen words give exactly the right amount of feeling to appeal to a young to middle grade child, all while being concise. Each description is given one paragraph, and at the end of each paragraph from chapter 1 to the end of 3, I felt the purpose of every word. Salty is loveable. Clearly unique, carefree, running the tunnels, and content to be secret, happy with his salvaged things. He is my favorite character, though I like Pep as well. I think you did a great job of creating loving, supportive homes, but not sheltered ones. Salty and Pep know of the dangers of the world, and know that they are prone to them. They also know that love and spirit will help them through anything. The spirit theme will be clear to children, while not being contrived. It doesn't underestimate a child's intelligence. It is realistic and relateable. This is an extraordinary piece of work, that I would be proud to share with my family, and my school. I will get you a commentary that answers your questions posed to me soon, but wanted to give you immediate feedback. This is a smashing success, Chris. Sincerely, Julie

CHIRG I love a children's book with different cultures and lessons and this one had both. Salty and Pep are great imaginative characters that I enjoyed getting to know. My only criticism is that maybe in a few spots more show and less tell would make your story flow better. Overall, a very good creative read! I highly rated it. Jenny Hailey Graham and the Secrets of the Cobalt Eye

As soon as I read your pitch, I thought damn this is going to be an interesting story and I'm pleased to tell you that it did not disappoint. I'm never going to look at my salt and pepper shakers the same again. Your characters were highly intriguing and I have to compliment your voice. As a reader I felt compelled to read on. I loved how you brought in the different cultures and at times I felt like I was in the kitchen of Nandos! I gave this six stars and I wish you luck in publishing it soon if that is what you intend to do. I'm glad I had the chance to read your story. Anoosha The Keepers

Lol! Your title is indeed...not sure the word to use. But, I mean, it's great and fitting. Talk about a "spicy hurricane"! And your premise is just so, so. You have a great book here, an offspring of great idea and great writing. Yes, you write well, have a strong voice, craft good prose, and create effective imagery. But watch out for your use of italics. In your very first paragraph, I am not sure what the italics that closes it is supposed to convey. It's certainly not a thought, not something to empathize, but apparently what people call Salty. So, if you must set if off somehow, I suppose quotes will do. Thanks for the offering. David Would appreciate your thoughts on THE EVOLUTION OF ETERNITY http://www.authonomy.com/books/41044/the-evolution-of-eternity/

CHIRG/Swap Chris, I read the first four chapters and think you've got an inspiring story here. The idea of the salt and pepper children is very creative and works well. I do have a few nit-picks. Obviously you can take them or leave them as some are purely my opinion. - There were times when I felt the story fell a little flat, and I think it's because of two reasons: 1) There were areas that lacked emotion. 2) There were areas that I felt would be better shown, not told. - I love the whole idea behind the story. You definitely have a purpose behind your writing, but in stories for children, I think actions speak louder than words. For example, in the first chapter, you have Salty wondering what better things he might be meant for, but are also saying that he'd like to fight hunger. I'm wondering if it might be better to have him discover his higher purpose later on as the story progresses. - Just a thought. - Chapter 1, paragraph 2: "Wet lands" is one word. - Chapter 1, paragraph 2: The final sentence, "Avery Island was also home... salt" seems almost anti-climatic, though it should be the most important sentence in the paragraph. - Chapter 1, paragraph 24: This paragraph seems redundant. You've already told/shown us everything in this paragraph except the last sentence. - In chapter 2, I don't know that I'd bring up the subject of hurricanes in the description of New Orleans. It's a little too much information too soon. I think I'd just wait until the actual hurricane happens. - Chapter 2, paragraph 18: Be calm," needs quotation marks in front of it. - Chapter 2: "You crack me up further," is a little awkward. I don't know if kids would get the pun. Overall, I think the story is great. High stars. Lynn Surviving Sunset

There's much to enjoy in this wonderful children's story about a 'mystical marvel' boy named Salty, appropriately made up of thousands of tiny granules of salt. And of course his little spice girl chums, Pep and Parsley. The writing is simple and visual (just right for reading aloud to little kiddywinks) and the way-down-South Creole dialogue chuckle-worthy. I LOVED the 'salty' humour ('A good man is worth his salt', lol!) and 'I'm as fat as a cat in da back of a crab shack' made me think of Ginger! This deserves to do very well here, and I'm awarding it six golden stars. Joe Kovacs Ginger the Buddha Cat A couple of suggests: I know you're using italics to emphasise things - this is a read-aloud book, isn't it? - but on the printed page they sometimes distract. I wouldn't, for instance, use them for 'lil' Cajun fella' or 'as antsy as a gator..' or 'as a tourist at Mardi Gras' etc. I would save your italics for "thought speech" instead, for instance, Salty often wondered (no "aloud" cos he's thinking!) Why am I different from other people? (itals, no apostrophes) and Perhaps being made of salt ain't so bad (ditto). Secondly, I had trouble imagining Salty's size - one minute he's hunting fish and having a net thrown at him, suggesting he's quite big, and the next, he's being carted off the bottlers in a small salt shaker. How tiny are his tiny briny toes?

Clever little salt and pepper analagy. Great pace, flow - i got to the eureka moment and the morality of tale. A great spicy tale. AJB

Hi Chris! What a delightful tale! I absolutely loved it! It is such a charming story and I bet it would be a hit in a classroom, especially if the class made the recipe after reading it! My favorite line: "It didn't matter that they couldn't see what each other looked like. To them looks were not important." The story has a beautiful ending and a wonderful moral to tell! Love love love!! High stars from me! =D ~Lina Dying Hearts http://www.authonomy.com/books/46120/the-hearts-of-archirind-book-one-dying-hearts/

CHIRG Review Hi Chris I have just read through all you have uploaded. I really loved your imaginative tale and the ideas of Salty and Pep getting bottled and ending up in New Orleans with Cayenne and Parsley. It is a very 'sage' tale, with a lot of 'chive' talking' and great sayings and snippets of Southern wisdom and style. I loved Salty's shrimping' boots and Peps gold slip ons, aunty Karma was a nice Hindu Buddhist touch in a story with a 'faith' message. The chapter about cooking up the beans and rice and everybody adding an ingredient reminded me of the tale of the monk making soup with a stone to feed a starving village. There was certainly lots in here to keep young uns entertained with a great dose of eduction mixed up in the pot too. The dialogue was wonderful and the story ran along smoothly, like salt in an hour glass. Congratulations on a unique plot line to spice up the day. D.J The Ghost Shirt

A Spicy Hurricane is a delightful tale told from the point of view of children made of different spices. They come from all over the world, but end up in New Orleans, a place that knows how to make the most of spices. There are many great lessons that this book teaches. In just the chapters posted so far, we learn not to judge someone by the way they look, the value of friendship, how teamwork can make a complex job easier and to believe in one’s self. I could easily see a first or second grade teacher reading A Spicy Hurricane to their class, and having tjat become a memorable moment for the kids. The lessons taught by the book could influence children in a positive way for the rest of their lives. There is also a lot of local flavor, no pun intended, in the story which helps to spice it up beyond a standard read (really not trying to add more puns here). Little local phrases from New Orleans are sprinkled throughout the book, so nobody forgets the setting. They are called out by italics here, but I think that is probably unnecessary. Readers will catch on quite fast at what is being done. Dialog is also well-written, with the children talking pretty much as kids do, despite the fact that they are made from seasonings and not flesh and blood. It helped to make the sample chapters posted here just whiz on by. The one area I was a bit confused about that I think needs to be developed or explained a bit more is the actual size of the children. They seem to change size and shape at will. In one chapter they are living, trapped really, inside a tiny salt and pepper shaker, so I thought they were tiny, but then they are able to scoop up similar sized bottles for the pockets of their clothes. Later on, people greet them as if they are human sized. And salt wears old shrimping boots, which I would assume are quite large. Perhaps a note about how sometimes Salt was big and sometimes Salt was tiny, or something to help explain this discrepancy (or magic or whatever) without making it a major plot point. But kids are curious by nature so it’s something I know they will wonder about. Author Chris Whitson has taken a terrible event, Hurricane Katrina, and turned it into something good that could benefit all children and help them not only learn life lessons but also teach them how to deal with adversity. And it is all done in a highly readable format that deserves to be published. I believe that A Spicy Hurricane can change and influence young lives in a positive way, and hope it is given that chance. John Breeden Old Number Seven

Chris, I finished all the chapters and found it absolutely delightful. You've masterfully brought inanimate objects to life, and not just life, but spicy life and that is pure talent. I started reading wondering where you're going with it, and before long Salty and Pep and Aunt Karma and Cayenne and Parsley, each with its own personality and quirks, took shape in my mind and became breathing and living things. You had me smiling throughout the story with the "southern" twist on the voices, and the Italian infusion. Grazie! You've some great descriptions, too, like "saucer-sized nose holes and a hairline that had receded to his spine." I chuckled many times, too, but the vegetarian line with "...so you're a critter doc..." was great. Your story came to life . . . with a recipe included! I'm going to try that, by the way, since I love to cook, and I'll remember to use the New Orleans Holy Trinity :)) The writing is beautiful, easy to read, great flow and pace, sprinkled with humorous lines and yet, a reader will not miss its message. But you've succeeded to add "not too much salt" so that you've got just the right balance. Excellent, truly excellent! Donna No Kiss Good-bye (My story about escaping from communist Romania, at fourteen, along switchbacks that months later led to America. I look forward to your thoughts on it :))

CHIRG Hi Chris, I finally managed to get a read! I got up to chapter 5 and think it's a great scenario for a children's story. You have made it a very moral story and at times it reminded me a bit of Aesop's fables. I love your use of comparative phrases, which I guess are sayings from the southern states? The similes you have used are humorous and enlightening. I found a couple of typos for you: Chapter 3 - "...its lively French Quarter area lays nestled..." (lay) "...placed both Salty and Pep on the same (exact) tabletop..." Not sure you really need exact. Chapter 4 - "...pleased to have there (their) cut and shredded garments..." (wrong word) Really enjoyed what I've read. Good luck with this! Cheers, Mike.

Hi Chris, I read chapter 1 and 2. At first I struggled to see the story, but then the eureka moment and I got it. I am truely amazed at how creative some people are who post work on this site. You have a unique, special piece of work here and I loved reading it. I am sure many children will enjoy hearing the stories. Isn't Pep's aunt actually called Korma? Thank you for deciding to post this. Kindest Regards and Best Wishes Lenny Banks - Tide and Time: At The Rock I would appreciate a return read, if you are able to find time.

This certainly is an imaginative story. I was confused at the beginning regarding who the characters were, but they came into their own by chapter 2. I read through your book presented and find it has some interesting dialogue and character not found in a lot of books. I will get you on my bookshelf when I have room. Thanks again for your support. Best of luck with this project.

part of CHIRG REVIEW CHRIS WHITSON - A SPICY HURRICANE I remembered that in my comments which didn't take, I also mentioned that I would like to read the story to my grandchild, so I'm keeping you on my watchlist and will give you some shelf space soon. I have a few obligations along the way, but I do believe that A Spicy Hurricane will go far. I'm not commenting on the layout or use of different language in italics etc as I don't feel qualified to do that, but from a Librarian's point of view and having read so many good stories to children, willing to sit and listen, I can imagine this one being a real clincher - there are 10 - 11year old girls who would often ask for recipe books, so having a two in one in any library can only be a bonus :-) Maretha/African Adventures of Flame, Family, Furry and Feathered Friends

CHIRG REVIEW Chris Whitson - A Spicy Hurricane This will now be the third time I'm trying to upload a comment, because my connection is so slow that the webpage expires... I read the first six chapters and they were lovely, full of imagination and fun. Mere saying about the bottlers: Don't worry..."they can't crush your spirit." or Pere's "Cajun accent" or Salty's "tiny, briny toes" kept warm and dry - wonderful play on words, also teaching hope and faith, strong spirit, come what may. Then Little Pep in India - a vegatarian and "distressed spice ..." also with a dear mom, teaching sound morals When they land in New Orleans and face the hurricane, true friendships are really forged. I believe this to be a wonderful book for children - imaginative dialogue - with all this in mind, even though I haven't finished all the chapters I gladly give you SIX STARS and wish you all the best on authonomy Maretha/African Adventures of Flame, Family, Furry and Feathered Friends

[QUOTE] CHIRG Review, Hi Chris This is nice. I like the message, the characters were original (or is that oregano - sorry, very bad pun), but I wanted the recipes. I'm hungry for Cajun! I probably need to road test this on my middle reader son to see whether he understands the references - probably he won't understand them all - but that's okay, he can always ask. Well done for producing a very warm and heartfelt book. [ENDQUOTE] Hi Jeff, Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. 'Oregano'.....I thought I was the king of bad puns. Wish I would have thought of it first! The book is intended to be taught so that kids have the opportunity to learn about new cultures. If you can tie your son up and force feed him my story, I would love his thoughts. If not, make him eat broccoli! Haha! Enjoyed your book very much! Thanks and best wishes. Chris

Hi Chris What a sweet way of enduring your special characters to this wonderful story. Your analogy of the Salt and Pepper is wonderful and the concept of being free even more exciting. I have given this high stars and will keep you in mind for my shelf. Blessings, Joy

CHIRG Review, Hi Chris This is nice. I like the message, the characters were original (or is that oregano - sorry, very bad pun), but I wanted the recipes. I'm hungry for Cajun! I probably need to road test this on my middle reader son to see whether he understands the references - probably he won't understand them all - but that's okay, he can always ask. Well done for producing a very warm and heartfelt book.

I just loved this story! The idea is very original, probably the most original story on autho. You combine an adventure story, with an educational one. I liked it when Salty's parents were telling him how 'real people' value salt. Salt of the Earth,/worth his salt/ salary etc. I think most comments here say what I think, about the story. I would also like to add, that your book makes home cooking exciting, and might be good to help wean kids away from junk food. I disagree with the person who says your literary style and vocabulary are too high for children. The story is good enough to make children want to read, and will help stretch their reading skills.

Your premise is quite unique and attention grabbing, and you do a quite good work of the book, although it looks like the pitch is a bit too long and sort of gives away too much of the story line. You also write well and demonstrate the confidence of someone in control of his act. I must say, however, that your vocabulary and literary style are a too high for a children's book and you may want to drop that from the genres. Thanks for the opportunity to look at this.

CHIRG Review This is a great idea, the New Orleans disaster retold in a way accessible and comforting for kids. I like the happy ending and the generosity of everyone helping each other. And the recipe idea is genius! Possible suggestions - only my thoughts so feel free to ignore - I don't think you need to put the dialect phrases in italics, just go for it, the dialect works well and helps create the individualistic background. I liked the humour like 'tiny, briny toes' and the characters were very sweet. A really novel idea (no pun intended!)

Chris, This is just a wonderful story. What an elevated sense of imagination you employ! And this is also a great teaching tool for children in several ways. It teaches lessons about God's love for them and searching for purpose in life that God has for them. It gives a good perspective regarding handling change and fear. I love the emphasis on love for others and faith. You've used the illustration of salt or any grain really that could be crushed and seemingly destroyed, and that brings to mind the understanding that we are "dust" and the body can be destroyed, but the spirit lives. You are a creative writer, and I admire what you've done. I wish you every success.

Enchanting and delicious! I truly loved the story. I think children would gobble up the story with relish. (sigh, I couldn't resist). Truly, this is a winner and children of all ages, and those with young hearts, will read this and take so much away from the goodness and blessing of this wonderful tale. The recipes will be an added plus. By the way, I loved the quips and saying, even recognized a few, and they added flavor to the mix. ( darn another one slipped out) Bless of luck and serious stars my friend.

What an imaginative gift you have! Rare is the person who could look at a spice cabinet and come up with a story of a hurricaine blending them all together! You've displayed the culture of New Orleans very well. I'm impressed. I think I liked the line that said, "I'm as full as a cat in 'da back of a crab shack." I love the culture of Louisiana and enjoyed reading your story! God bless you!! Elizabeth Kathleen "If Children are Cheaper by the Dozen, Can I Get a Discount on Six?"

Chirg Hi Chris sorry it's taken so long to get back to you. I read your story a few weeks ago , but my computer was playing up again at the time and I couldn't send my comment. I liked it very much and have given you many stars. I think you have done a good job here with bringing different cultures together, and hopefully teach children do the same. Well done and all the best with it. Brian.

Lovely! You are great at conjuring up the feel for a place, and I love the fact that we are introduced to two different locations and stories from the beginning. Your characters have depth and interest and the messages that they can pass on to every reader are inspiring, a real feel good story. Well done and best of luck with Salty and Pep, Kate

A colourful and imaginative story. I could easily sense the Cajun flavours of Louisiana even though I live in another country altogether. The characters are so real which is a truly amazing gift that few writers are able to conjure. Very well done. High stars and on my watchlist. Penny (Walter's Wonderful Wings)

As an elementary teacher, your story immediately caught my eye, and after reading it, I found your lively characters, Salty and Pep so very unique in their telltale adventures would be so much fun to introduce to a classroom of kids. The feeling of warmth and quirky fun comes across in your rich descriptive setting and cajun dialogue. I love the diversity theme and the friendships forged between children of different cultures and the line, "...like a jazzy Creole seasoning' they were blending together just like the varied families that make New Orleans special.' I gave you six stars for this and hope you go far! Kara A Gate Called Beautiful

As an elementary teacher, your story immediately caught my eye, and after reading it, I found your lively characters, Salty and Pep so very unique in their telltale adventures would be so much fun to introduce to a classroom of kids. The feeling of warmth and quirky fun comes across in your rich descriptive setting and cajun dialogue. I love the diversity theme and the friendships forged between children of different cultures and the line, "...like a jazzy Creole seasoning' they were blending together just like the varied families that make New Orleans special.' I gave you six stars for this and hope you go far! Kara A Gate Called Beautiful

What a great piece of cajun culture you've created! This is whimsical, folklorical and required reading for Cajun cookery. Nicely done! Tod http://authonomy.com/books/40646/the-lost-wink/

CHIRG Hi Chris... "How y'all are?" Reading your charming book reminds me of the Cajun Cookin' man from 'Loosiana,' who, many years ago had a cooking show on TV. He had grey hair and red suspenders and could cook up some down home food like crazy! I loved his cajun accent, and lo and behold, it pops up again in your stories! It's wonderful to see some of these comical colloquialisms in your children's stories, become more widely understood to other cultures. I love your stories. You write with so much spirit and wit in lively language which would be a joy to read to younger children, and which will make older children chuckle. Your characters are imaginative, instilled with moral inspiration and hope who inspire the multitudes with the simple comfort of food in the wake of a tragic hurricane. I hope to read more of your wonderful tale soon. In the meantime I'm starring this highly and placing on my bookshelf. Thanks for a truly one-of-a-kind read. Dyana

Hey Chris, This story is insanely cute! The names are so great. Kids will latch onto this story because of your easy writing style. I just love it. In the first chapter, there is a small yellow highlight after the line, “Just a pinch of salt will give the best flavour. Don’t overdo it or the food won’t be healthy.” That’s said by Mere. I know, I’m being nit-picky, but I thought I’d point it out. The girl, Pep, is so adorable. I love that she sneezes when she gets nervous or scared, like what happens if you accidentally sniff a bit of pepper. And now a sneezing frenzy! Aww… You do an amazing job of incorporating good lessons for kids who read this. Example, “A little love goes a long way.” Or even the idea that if children are separated from their parents they can still achieve great things, helping others, etc. Very influential. The “spicy kids” haha that’s so great. I noticed right before chapter 4 that one of the last line’s Salty says doesn’t end with an “ but with a ‘ Just something you might want to go back and touch up. Also, during chapter 4… “Well, what do you know? Here comes our boat, Salty,” Pep said in her own sweet sarcastic way. You end this sentence with “ but I don’t think it’s supposed to be there. I really liked this story. It’s cute, fun, and makes you want to read more. The characters are so well done. Pep is my favorite. Highly starred! Christine Rees Spark

CHIRG Hi Chris, I enjoyed how you incorporated real settings into this fable-like story. And the concept works, especially because of the description of Salty and Pep in their original homes. I wondered what age group you were targeting. Only because when you do describe some of the adult settings and situations, the sentences might be too much for the grade school reader. Once you're telling about Salty and Pep, it seems more for that age. I also wondered why you italized those colorful phrases that already stand out with the flavor of the gulf. I thought they certainly added. I can imagine illustration with this and think you've done well in giving these two spicy kids personhood in this tale. Will shelve in the next few days when space opens - Katherine

You must be a real treasure for your kids and grandkids because you have such a lively happy way of telling stories! I love this story! You added a lot of spice to it! I think your own personal story is inspiring too. You should write a children's book about you! Another nice touch was adding the recipes. By the end of the story I was inspired to cook but I think I am going to check my salt and pepper shakers first.

Hi Chris, What a beautifully written tale! Your story is full of warmth, friendship and caring. They say what is in the well of the heart comes out of the bucket of the mouth,( or keyboard in our case) so God bless your heart for this wonderful and creative story. BTW..I don't think I shall look at my salt and pepper shakers the same ever again! lol Thank you!! Blessings, Lyn

Hello Chris: I read A Spicy Hurricane and found it to be a charming, heartwarming story. My only disappointment was that there were not more stories to whet my appetite. I am sure you have other stories that are just as creative and would love to see you compile them into a collection. I think that so many parents would be delighted to read your stories to their children, while all the while loving the stories themselves. Blessings for all success. James

This is very creative! Your characters really stick out to the reader. They have very distinctive characteristics. You make them very vivid.The names are also very creative. I love names! The story itself is good. The pace starts off easy to develop into things. Grand work with this. Shelby Z./Driving Winds P.S. Please take a look at my pirate adventure Driving Winds.

Dear Chris, I love this! Charming characters and delightful language...and a wonderful messages, too! I'm so glad your story caught my eye. The little things in this story truly sparkle; your word choice and dialogue is brilliant (ie: "who dat?" and "holy horseradish?"). There is so much charm in each line. I look forward to reading more of this. Kids and parents alike will love it! Wonderful work. Highest stars and holding on my WL. All the very best, Faith Rose Now To Him

I may be mistaken but is this story for Australian children? Personally I love how Salty and Pep talk, using cliches. The problem with agents is, they hate them and especially ones that won't travel well. This will hinder the success of this delightful and insightful story. All I'd change is the double quotation on "real" people, to single 'real' people. It was also frustrating to read the chapter 1 uploaded, then go to 2 but no chapter then 3 and a repeat of what was on 1. I wanted to read more and be inspired by the lessons. I'll keep it on my watchlist and have another look if you upload a bit more. It is definitly original and entertaining. Jesamine. Northampton, Lime and Time Alone.

Such a cute story with social messages weaved throughout. Very original story and characters; truly enjoyable read for all ages. Highly rated six stars. I wish I had more time today but will watch list for now :) Well done! Sandy Appleyard 'Just When I Needed to Laugh'

CHIRG Review: Now you've done it Chris! Bloomin' gone and distracted me with yer brilliantly inventive pitch, when I should be finishing off another Chapter. Let me just say that I love the idea. For the benefit of readers (on site) you might consider dividing up your Chapters. It doesn't matter if they're short. I'd also lose any contact info and post it on your profile instead. Nice start, ' . . . a mystical marvel' is really intriguing. New Orleans has really come up as a popular film location, so I love the setting. Good rhyme of 'unusually slight and a few shades too white . . . ' You have a really nice description of Avery Island. I found this sentence a little clunky - He was miraculously made of thousands of smooth, pieces of the white rock salt from the mineral rich dome. Love the inclusion of the white, rubber shrimpin boots. That's a fabulous touch. Really good dialogue with Mere and Pere, it's very original and you've nailed the accent of Cajun speech perfectly. I love the references to gumbo, crawfish and red beans, but keep in mind these are very specific. Not all children will necessarily understand what you mean. I think perhaps the Salty kidnap (if you can call it that), might require a bit more build up. Consider giving character to one of the truckers so it seems real. What would their reaction be to finding a boy made of salt? A semi-sad ending to Chapter One. I have sympathy for his character. I think the contrast between Pep and Salty is absolutely inspired. I'd lose the word 'guardedly' as it doesn't sit right, try constantly or always or something similar. Chapter Two is very strong and Pep's internal fears and worries come across very well. Aunt Karma is also a strong character with a different philosophy. I was impressed by the reference to not using meat in her recipes. Another solid Chapter which makes me want to keep reading. I'm a little pressed for time today Chris, but I've watch-listed and would certainly enjoy coming back to this. It's highly original, beautifully written, and certainly worthy of five or six stars. I'll also be shelving as soon as I can clear a space. It's one of the most original ideas/concepts I've come across, and feels very fresh as a result. I think you'll find many admirers for your work. All the best, Ben - Franky Frog's Worldwide Travelogue

Pep, Salty, Aunt Karma, and Chef Burns are a menagerie or better a gumbo of delightful characters that add the bouillon in the court bouillon. Chris what more can I say than great job! With the danger of funding being cut by an idiot to Cajun French literature, my heart soars seeing this. I can't help getting sentimental and thinking of my grandpa and uncle's tales of misadventure or fantastic mystical stories. Highly backed already and it will be on shelf shortly!--JL "The Devil Of Black Bayou"

You certainly have a great story here for kids. You write well and your style is engaging. You will get some people telling you that there are too many adverbs and adjectives - but in children's books that's absolutely required! It's going on my shelf now for a while. Good luck with it. (I would happily use it as a class reader with primary school children) Lilian.

What an unusual and great story, I will never look at the salt and pepper mill the same way, you have a great imagination and know so many clever sayings. Best of all there is this moral message,adults and children could learn from. Highly starred. Christine

CHIRG HI Chris just returning the read Loved the humour, and play on words 'you crack me up' from a peppercorn girl. What fun. Ch 5 flakey should be Flaky ... don't tell the whole story in the pitch. would have liked more recipes to get children in to cooking. best of luck with this cas The Wind Maker

For the most part good writing and editing. Didn't really care for the story much as there wasn't any suspense or danger. Uninspired. Inconsistencies in structure: indents and italics. Suitable for small children only. Good luck.

CHIRG Review Salty and Pep work to feed the people of New Orleans after the hurricane. Together the spicy misfits give us an unusual, yet remarkable adventure. Chris, your story will be a hit with children. With good editing, you will have a story people can keep as a reminder of how we should bond and work together at any time. Benedict hit most of the errors. At the beginning, (beside) should have an 's'. besides - means in addition to or apart from. Good luck! Sara Stinson Finger Bones

I really like your storyline here. I can see this thing being turned into a Disney movie. Your writing is really good and I enjoyed your use of the Cajun language... Many stars and Wlisted. I would suggest this one correction: In the 3rd paragraph of chapter 4 you used there instead of their...minor stuff.

Like your long pitch already...interesting premise.

Chris, What a concept, giving life and human traits to condiments and letting them loose on the earth to find adventure and fulfillment. Certainly Salty and Pep make good pointers for young readers to follow, as the two traverse the globe and eventually team up in New Orleans to address some very pressing concerns. This is a wonderful exercise in getting youthful hearts drawn to helping those in need, following the example of animated condiments. Your simple, easy to follow sentences make delightful reading. Thank you so much. Kenneth Edward Lim The North Korean

A SPICY HURRICANE What a clever children’s story. Salty and Pep are immediately likable because they’re carted off from their homes; then admirable because of the way they’re able to adjust to any situation. I like all the comparisons such as, “a cat in da back of a crab shack”, gives the story a special flavor. The idea of including a recipe with it is very original. I can see school age children becoming very interested in cooking after reading this. Highly starred and added to my shelf. Wanttobeawriter: Who Killed the President?

A Spicy Hurricane Chris, I love the voice. The Southern music of it is hypnotic, the sound of a master storyteller. When I read this I feel like I’m sitting around a campfire, listening to a tall tale. I wonder about the phrases in italics. By italicizing them it’s like you’re making an editorial comment on the language, inserting yourself between the reader and the voice. I am ignorant about this genre, but this piece seems very different and original. I wish you all the best with it! ~Gail SECRETS WE KEEP

After read the title I wanted to know how this story unfold. I chapter one thus far. Its fabulous. Salty is an appropriate character name in light of the book title and rocks for dwelling echo further. I must read on but next time.

CHIRG review: This is a truly original story which has a unique voice. I like the innovative use of language; a fun, quirky style that young readers will love. You have great underlying messages about friendship and I enjoyed the simple, but effective, storyline. This is really well-written with some vivid descriptions; you have great skill as a storyteller, and it shows. A unique children's book which I'm sure will be successful - highly starred! Emma, 'The Puppet Spell'

CHIRG review Chris, this is a unique idea - both with the idea of characters made from salt and pepper, and the recipes. You really get across the sense of 'family' and 'friendship' in the story. A nice theme to run through a children's book. I felt I knew a lot more about Salty than Pep, a little more of her back story would balance it nicely. I thought the fact that Pep sneezed a lot addded some humour that children could relate to. The use of dialect was a nice touch; it made the characters more believeable and gave a sense of place. The fact that Salty and Pep wanted to feed the hungry built on the general feel of food and the preparation of food bringing people together (Pep added a touch of love). I really like the idea of Salty and Pep coming out of their shaker and mill 'like butterflies from a coccoon'. Great imagery. Your use of New Orleans as a setting with a strong sense of community worked well - you even remembered that some members of the community don't eat meat. The story is rounded off very appropriately by some recipes. A nice idea for children as the story would undoubtedly have got them thinking and talking about food and herbs and spices. I really enjoyed reading this. High stars and keeping on my watchlist. Debbie

A Spicy Hurricane My favourite children’s books are imaginative, quirky and characterful. There is no doubt that you have all these things in abundance. You also have a strong message of the importance of family and being good to each other. Although the more overtly religious parts are a little lost on me, I can see the goodness and the caring all through the story. Ch 1 “Besides being unusually slight and a few shades too white…” I really like this. The rhyme is great and it’s got a lovely rhythm too. “Fishermen and hunters could be seen coming in empty…” This bit made me pause. In what way are they empty? You could say “empty-handed” or similar. “tiny, briny toes..” This is lovely! Again, it’s the rhythm of it I like. “along with all ya potential.” This is a great thing for a father to say. Somehow you’ve got me picturing a salt family and the way they talk to each other and live in just a few hundred words. Nevertheless can be one word, like this. Ch2 Pep’s sneezing is very cute and you’ve made Aunt Karma easy to like very quickly. “wittingly” means “consciously”. I wondered if you meant “wittily.” I wasn’t sure though. The bodies of Pep and Salt are split up and stored in little pieces. It’s hard to picture it exactly. What would happen if part of Pep were shipped far away from another part? Like one of your other reviewers, I think illustrations would go a long way to showing how this would be possible. Ch 3 The description of New Orleans here is atmospheric. It’d be impossible for a child not to learn something from this story, even if all they took away was a bit more knowledge of other countries. I like the detail of the “wrinkled, yellowing tablecloth.” Also “curious as a possum sniffin’ seafood” is brilliant. Ch 4 There’s nothing to comment on in this neat chapter, except that I think children would enjoy the pace and the peril. The inclusion of a hurricane is nice too, and something that not all children would be familiar with. Ch 5 I was hoping there would be more spice kids coming out of those bottles! Parsley and Cayenne are great additions to the crew. Ch 6 “Cayenne gagged”. The “gagged” bit makes it sound as though he was choking, which isn’t at all what you want young readers to think! I think “Cayenne joked” would be clearer. I enjoyed all the unusual and culturally-appropriate similes a great deal. I wasn’t familiar with most of them but that’s all the better - and they add humour and colour to the writing. Thank you for reviewing my work, and I’m glad I had the opportunity to read yours - it’s imaginative and interesting and never veers from its core message. Well done! Lucy

CHIRG review, Hi there, Chris, this is very sweet and nicely written. It's also really quite original with your strange half-human, spicy characters. I did worry that some children might be a little disturbed at the thought of parts of them being eaten, but you handle it pretty well. I liked the writing, the flow of the narrative, the length, the connection with New Orleans works really well and generally it is really polished and well put together. I particularly liked the use of description and it's use for almost magic-realist effect. I did notice a few small things that could be corrected and have listed them below. who stayed secretly out of sight. -I don’t like this phrase, as out of sight is by nature secret Fair-skinned -hyphen Spicy-hot sauces -hyphen He was, miraculously, made of thousands of smooth pieces of the white rock salt from the mineral rich dome. Fittingly, -the rhythm you set up by starting the two sentences wit these adverbs is jarring, I’d move miraculously to within the sentence -also delete the comma after smooth The li’l fella was very eager -your narrator’s voice is very neutral but occasionally slips into Cajun dialect, it’s a little odd He always reminded his young son, "A good man is worth his salt." -I’d put the dialogue first in this sentence, the meaning is clearer people were paid for their work with salt -you probably know this, but that’s why we have the word SALary with sal being the Spanish (and I guess Latin) for salt castaway old kettles -I’d swap the adjectives over lost bread, you have the repetition of bread in this sentence – you couldn’t call it pain perdu? As that’s the original French name of the dish. Don’t OVERDO it Salty knew this PIECE OF ADVICE -repetition of tip but with two meanings can be confusing wave GOODBYE loosely fitTING pair of gold slip-ons, with just A blink of an eye. They both loved spices AND cooking, and wanted to develop their culinary skills. The two spicy KIDS’ -apostrophe after the s as it’s a plural They were also pleased to have THEIR cut and shredded garments incredibly back INTACT. beans into the OVERSIZED iron pot, Spicys -typically would be SPICIES “Nice COMEBACK, Parsley,” Cayenne gagged. This is very good and I will star it highly!! Well done and best of luck, Benedict

I'm here for our reading swap and CHIRG. Sorry it has taken a little longer to read your story than I had intended. I have read all of your book. This is an original and interesting idea which I think is well-suited to children. You have written it very well and although I'm no editor I haven't found any errors! Great stuff. I like the authentic language you use and it is certainly novel to use different condiments as the characters. My only issue is that I did find it difficult to picture what the characters look like, how they live and where. Perhaps with illustrations this would become clearer. I would like to find out more about them and their personalities as well. You have lovely touches like the sneezing, but maybe you could take this even further, make it clear that they are very different from each other. These are only my opinions, so please bear that in mind and not everyone will agree with me! You tell the story well and have engaging writing style. The idea for the recipes is brilliant. Julia Shadow Jumper

A Spicy Hurricane. By Chris Whitson. The very Idea of this story is unique to me—such a brilliant story that children will adore…read to them, or even reading it themselves. But I think that it’s suited to a very young audience...Just my own opinion. You’ve written a most enjoyable book based upon different condiments being in actual fact, real persons. I really do like this Idea, sadness as they become parted from their parents and happiness as they contribute to the food intake of the less well off in the world. The characters that you’ve used are so well thought out—Pep, always sneezing when she has a problem. There’s a bond developing between, Salt and, Pep…really good stuff, this is! Then we have Cayenne, the pepper boy and Parsley from Italy appearing on the scene. I’ll say no more—the book is a credit to you and should make its way to the bookshop shelves. An all-important thing will be the book cover; it needs to be as bright and cheerful as this wonderful story is. Many stars and best wishes for your book! Let me know, Chris when you upload a cover…I intend to shelve it. Kind regards, Neville. The Secrets of the Forest – The Time Zone.

I would have loved to read this to my son as he was growing up; he loved cooking and he loved spice. He'd have adored this book! I picture it illustrated with marvelous drawings that show Salty and Pep and Cayenne and Parsley cooking with the beautiful city of New Orleans in the background. I would have enjoyed more backstory for Pep; she seemed to have far less than Salty. I'd have also liked to know a little more about their journeys toward NO. They probably rode on a dark ship and spent time in a semi-truck or on a train. What did they think of those journeys? I love, love, love how Pep stirred in a little love. Just adorable. Wishing you much success!! ~AudreyB PS--hope you have found the Crit Group for Children's books.

What an amazingly unique, singular idea: a children's story of spices accompanied by New Orleans recipes! This should be an immediate, instant best seller - especially if you will illustrate it with pictures! I loved your book (and will buy it once it becomes published!). Your characters and plotting are extremely well done, but I most like the message of "hope" which runs throughout your story. Wonderful! You are very gifted with words and some phrases that I especially enjoyed are: Ch 1, When Mere and Pere said to Salty: "In fact, ordinary people made him about as antsy as a gator in waders." and "Long as ya' have faith in God, ya' can overcome anything" (small suggestion here, you might want to eliminate the word "still" from "This still routine was vital..." Ch 2, When Aunt Karma told Pep, "You are a beautifully unique creation and are destined to do wonderful things in you life. No matter how others treat you, they can never crack your soul" - what a magnificent truth to teach to children through your book! (suggestion: typo above : "in you life." should be "in your life.") Ch. 3, Your story turns into a real adventure as Pep and Salt travel the world in a bottle, finally landing in new Orleans and being bought by mean Chef Burns, and then set free by the Hurricane. Ch. 4, Lovely quote: "Like butta' flies busted out of cocoons, a spirited Salty and a souful Pep stood whole and free." Your writing sings! It is so lyrical with its colloquialisms and beautiful meanings. (typo: "...pleased to have there cut and shredded garments..." should be: their cut and shredded garments) The plot continues to be well paced and exciting as Pep and Salt almost drown in the flood and whirlpool. Ch. 5 Two new, fun characters: Cayenne and Parsley! and a marvelous conclusion for your adventure: having Salt, Pep, Cayenne, and Parsley cook for all the hungry people after the hurricane! ch. 6: Beautiful: "Then Pep took the lucky old ladle, gave it a quick kiss, and stirred in a little love." Smiled at New Orleans "Holy Trinity" of cooking: bell peppers, onions, and celery And to top it all off, you're adding recipes! Wonderful - because your book made me really hungry for some cajun cooking...smile. Outstanding job, Chris! Send this manuscript to a publisher! This is a jewel and should be a bestseller among children (and women who like to cook!). Blessings, Pat

Thanks for the kind words. Glad you felt some of my writing style! I'm from N.O. now living in Florida. Aint no Mardi Gras without Dr. John. Happy memories but a little homesick. Good tip on the chapters. Everything helps. Hope to read your work soon. Best Wishes, Chris [QUOTE] What a fascinating and unusual concept for a book! I loved the 'other-worldliness' of the place and the dialogue from the very start of the the book. It's quirky and refreshing. I'm UK based, but I've lived abroad and I have always been intrigued by other languages. Dr John's 'Gris Gris' album was one of my favourites in the 70s and this narrative has some of that swampy, sultry quality. I have added the book to my watch list and I've starred it brightly. I will be coming back for a proper read asap. One slight worry; to make for an easier read, please add the chapters individually. It makes moving around very difficult and you don't want to put prospective readers off for any reason at all. Cas [ENDQUOTE]

What a fascinating and unusual concept for a book! I loved the 'other-worldliness' of the place and the dialogue from the very start of the the book. It's quirky and refreshing. I'm UK based, but I've lived abroad and I have always been intrigued by other languages. Dr John's 'Gris Gris' album was one of my favourites in the 70s and this narrative has some of that swampy, sultry quality. I have added the book to my watch list and I've starred it brightly. I will be coming back for a proper read asap. One slight worry; to make for an easier read, please add the chapters individually. It makes moving around very difficult and you don't want to put prospective readers off for any reason at all. Cas