Abigail, you are crafting a very engaging story here that draws the reader into a world of fantasy and suspense. Tisha is a character that people will relate to as someone who reacts and rebels to unquestioned rules and restrictions. You do a great job of creating a medieval world where a tale of this nature could take place. Lots of action, conflict, and drama pull the reader forward and make us want to find out what happens next. This is unique, different, and talented. I'll back this and wish you luck in moving up the ranks! Best! LG. view book
An exhillerating first chapter that sets the tone of suspense and action immediately in this excellent crime thriller. Great characterization as we learn of Lorne's determination and hatred of her menacing nemisis, The Unicorn. This narritive reminds me of watching a good movie about tormented authorities versus an elusive, deadly criminal. Well written, interesting plot - already, compelling characters, suspenseful, and overall, well worth supporting! Best of luck with this great piece of fiction, Mel. LG. view book
Violet, I just read the first four chapters of your work An interesting story developing here with due concern paid to the politics of the medical profession and hospital management. There's some minor punctuation errors that any good editor will pick up, but the storyline seems to be unfolding like listening to a friend explaining her work and life. This is accomplished in part, through the story being told in first person. You obviously have a background in the medical field and it helps lend credibility to the whole story. Nice work, overall! Well worth backing. Good luck! LG. view book
Great characterization here - Gerard's apprehension, Rosie's innocence, Ruth's eccentricity and latent malevolence. There's also a strong sense of suspence, building line by line, that pulls the reader forward. Strong story-telling at work here and well worth reading on to see what develops. Backed, and on my book shelf! LG. view book
This is Battlestar Gallactica meets Star Trek The Movie, meets Independence Day, meets Close Encounters of a Third Kind, meets Lord of the Rings, meets... You get it. Not normally a big fan of science fiction, I find that I am hooked right from the start of this piece. It's descriptive, forboding, technologically violent, and frightening. Well written with good vocabulary, vivid imagery, and great character names: Adras, Logos, Krom, Gaal'ha'rim. Outstanding! Something big is gonna happen here, I can tell, already. Thanks for pulling me out of my comfort zone. I'll back this gladly! LG. view book
Mike, This is a very unique piece of fiction. Living my whole life in Canada, I can hear and recognize a distinct difference in dialect and thinking in your characters. I laughed out loud when Linda vomitted on the pompous old nun, and applauded her for walking away from the school. The scandal of her father carrying on with that young girl and Linda's embarrassment over it is touching as well. Since it's written in first person, it puts us right inside Linda's head where we can participate in her every thought. Moreover, this is a courageous piece, because I always find it interesting when a writer takes on the persona of someone of the opposite sex. Do you really believe you can think, feel and speak like a woman? I'd say this piece proves that you can, and I'm backing it right now. Well done! LG. view book
Richard, Alright, this story is off to a strong start with Jake entering an MRI machine and getting trapped when an earthquake happens - claustrobobia times ten! The tension and suspense builds as he discovers his clairvoyant abilities, however, I find it hard to accept that his life will last only a few more months. Something's going to change all that, I feel. The story is off to a strong start, and the action and premise provides a strong pull to the reader to keep turning pages to find out where this is all going. A real good suspenseful story under way with the potential to develop into a best seller. Well worth a backing. Best of luck here, my friend! view book
Rebecca, The tension and suspense are building nicely in these opening chapters. I love the strained relationship you describe between Sophia and her mother - "wine reminds her of borrowing money?" I laughed right out loud! The letter Sophia finds in her grandfather's chest raises some erie question and the voices in her head are foreshadowing something frightening or weird ahead. Nice flow to this piece as the story is unfolding at a good pace. Well written, overall, and certainly merits my backing. Good luck with it! LG. view book
Okay, first, I love the prologue. It sets the mood and scene perfectly. Your description of a professional athlete's life is engaging and earns our sympathy for how cruel it can be, despite the big salaries and preoccupation with just playing a game for a living. Your descriptive passages are very good as well, such as the discussion around Jack sitting, cocooned in his luxury Jaguar, entranced in his private thoughts and feelings about his situation - Guys, especially, will get that. I feel his anguish about being shipped off to a remote locale such as New Zealand and the uncertainty about what lay ahead. Well written, interesting characters we can relate to, a good storyline with conflict building already, and enough charisma to pull the reader forward right from the outset. Well worth backing. I hope you climb the charts with this one! LG. view book
Great suspense building in the early sections of this book. I like the effect of the story being told in first person but be careful that the voice doesn't come across as narcissistic. This story seems to be heading in a good, exciting direction as a complex thriller with a compelling central character, sort of a James Bond / Indianna Jones hybrid. Lots more right than wrong with this piece in my view, and well worth backing. Well done! view book
I love this! What an interesting, honestly spoken, first person voice this story is written in. The accent comes across nicely (to me, anyways, I'm Canadian), and the artist's deeply perceptive frustration and anguish in the narrative - cloaked sometimes in humorous passages, comes across well. This would be worth a complete read if I were shopping a bookstore. Since I'd be willing to buy it, I'll put it on my bookshelf. Great work! view book
Due to time constraints, I'll be brief... I like it. I'm drawn to it. I want to read on, and I will. This is an interetsing story, gathering momentum. Well worth supporting. It's on my book shelf with wishes for success! LG. view book
One comment - Sidney Morgan... "Sidney" is used almost exclusively as a boy's name (e.g. Sidney Crosby, Sidney Poitier). When referring to a girl, it's normally spelled "Sydney". See http://www.thinkbabynames.com/meaning/0/SydneyYou have a natural talent with dialogue. It flows very naturally and sounds authentic - something I struggle with in my writing. This is a good, romantic story with an interesting twist involving the parents - how awkward for young people to cope! I agree completely with burgio's comments about this finding a market with the adolescent group - a HUGE market, as attested to by the likes of The Vampire books by Stephanie Meyer, Harry Potter, and others. Stick with it and practice, and remember, writing the first draft is hard - editing and embellishing is easier. Nice work - You're on my watchlist, for now. view book
Raymond,I find Chapter one of your novel works as an excellent hook to pull your readers forward. The character Ruth comes across as definitely a bit weird, sinister, and twisted. Gerard seems unable to stop the direction Ruth is manipulating his daughter and to this point, we don't really know either, but the scene has an eerie feel to it - Well done! I'll read on as time permits. Already worth putting on my shelf. Good luck with it! LG. view book
Wow, what an intoxicating start to the story! I love it. This is clearly headed in a direction that will gather momentum page by page. Bojan writes with a natural ease and artistry in unfoding a thriller that is sure to entertain from start to finish. Start working on the sequel - there's sure to be a demand! Backed with pleasure. view book
Extremely well written, without going into 'reviewer' mode. A pleasure to back... Best of luck with this one, Cheryl! view book
Well written, fast moving, convincing characters, love the dialogue... My pleasure to back this one! view book
Extremely well written. Your exchange of dialogue between characters is very realistic and flows from scene to scene quite convincingly. The characters and storyline are interestng and pull you from one chapter to the next. This is a novel that I would purchase if I were thumbing through it in bookstore or reviewing a sample online. I'll back this with no hesitation. view book