Thought your english was generally good considering it's your second language, though watch out for 'chapter 1' (instead of 'chpter 1'). After a quick look that's the only small mistake I noticed. Your command of language is excellent, but the dialogue has to be an area to think about here. It rea... view book

Your research seems to be pretty good though maybe there are a few too many internet sources perhaps. I did think that is places you made some generalisations or sweeping statements - I was thinking about where you might make a judgement or evaluation of something for example. Some practical suggest... view book

I like the opening, and the general style, which I found easy to read. The pace, tone and rhythm are all appropriately synchronised to the content - and saying all that doesn't reflect how hard that is to achieve, certainly it is something I have never managed to do! In my personal and v humble opin... view book

Definitely reminded me of Robert Heinlein, and the classic sci-fi of my parents' generation and before. I thought generally speaking the tone and pace were appropriately used and consistently maintained according to the content. Wasn't sure about the opening, I always feel that an opening requires ... view book

I wasn't sure about the opening, it didn't strike me as particularly original though to be fair what it did remind me of was the famous bestselling author Tom Clancy, so I guess that can only be a good thing! Noticed one or two minor typos but that's not a big deal. One practical suggestion: readi... view book