Very good. Alexander is a likable character, and you're writing in the sort of genre that publishers know will make money. Good luck with this. view book

Good stuff. I've read your pitch and your first three chapters, and it's impressive, funny and I like the characters. I haven't read enough to form a real opinion yet, but I'll read more soon. view book

I like your pitch, and I've read the first two chapters. It's not something I'd read personally, but it's well written and your characters are well-developed. I read a couple of the comments below. I think either 'sitting' or 'sat' works... it reads fine as it is to me. I'll read more when I can. view book

This is excellent. 'Both Chapter 5s'. I hereby declare that all books should have two chapter 5s! Consider yourself backed. If this doesn't get published, the rest of us have no hope... view book

I've read the first two chapters. It's excellent... the idea reminds me a little of 'Beetlejuice'. Your style drew me in immediately. I find the thought of the afterlife as a place of offices both hilarious and depressing. I haven't read enough to judge it properly, but I certainly enjoyed what I've read so far. I'll read more when I can. view book

Excellent idea, indicated by very good pitch. The idea of a world where everything is exposed to everyone is a scary prospect. The style is a little clinical... normally this would be a bad thing, but given the sci-fi context, it actually works to the story's advantage (most sci-fi, to me, seems to be written very cleanly). I like some of the metaphors you use - 'pajama tornado' for example (pyjama? sorry, I'm English...). I've read through it all, and Ben is a brilliant character. However, I'm a little lost about the general plot; it's all a bit disconnected at the moment. I'm unsurprised at this, though, given the short section that's uploaded. I'd definitely read more if it was here... If the rest of the book is written like this, it deserves to be published.

I can't back you yet, my shelf is full of other books I like... Hopefully, this won't matter much to you since I have no TS rating, and the books that ARE there probably aren't benefitting much. In the grand scheme of things my opinion means absolutely nothing, but I have really enjoyed this story. Well done.

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I like your first few chapters. I'm not going to try and critique it or anything; I don't know enough about the story yet to tell how good it is. I'll just say that it's well written enough for me to want to read more, and your pitch was excellent. Bye... view book

Interesting pitch. Got to Chapter 4, and I like the lush environment you've created. Great relationship between the 2 main characters and excellent dialogue, too. I'll read more when I can. view book

Interesting. The non-fiction I usually read is popular science, but this has held my attention so far (I'm only up to Chapter 3, though. I can't read much at the moment). You tell the story in a narrative, story-like way, rather than just repeating facts. General comments, I know, but I'm no critic... Very enjoyable, and I've read much worse published stuff. I'll try to read more soon. Well done; a lot of effort must have gone into this. view book

I like this. The language used is simple but not patronizing, perfect for children's literature. I've read up to Chapter 3; the story is developing nicely, and Tommy is a character that a lot of children could empathize with. I'll read more soon. view book

Hi, again... Just thought I'd say that I'm up to chapter 10, and I am beginning to realize the sheer scope of this piece of work. Brilliant scenery and characters. Compelling stuff... I should have noticed the American spellings sooner though (finalizing instead of finalising etc.). Not that it bothers me. I like the letter Z... I'll read more as soon as I can. I hope you make the ED this month. view book

Very good... I like quasi-religious aspects of it. This rite-of-passage within this imaginary culture is fascinating, and the story is just the right length, too. It would have been so easy to have stretched this out for too long, but it's right. I enjoyed reading this a lot. view book

I know this has already been reviewed, but I thought I'd give it a glance anyway. I've read 2 chapters, and it's excellent so far. Your dialogue in particular flows well, in spite of me reading from a screen (I will always prefer reading from a thinly sliced dead tree, I'm afraid...). The fact that I don't believe in the subject matter doesn't stop me enjoying it, although I am clearly not the target audience... Very good, and worthy of the review, I think. I'll finish reading it another time. I just wanted an example of a book which has actually made the review. view book

I'm a couple of chapters in, and I like it so far. The story is an excellent idea, and your writing is very easy to read. Carly as a character is developing nicely so far. I'll read more when I can. view book

Ha! Silly as fuck, but still... it's very well written. I like it. I've only read the first two chapters, though. I'll read more when I can. view book

I like this... it's a fascinating way of writing. I find it hard to write in present tense, but you've managed it very well. You do swing between past and present tense quite suddenly, but it adds to the uniqueness of the style. I'd like to read more now, to see where it's going... view book

I am impressed by the fact that this is not your first language. You have better English than some English people I know... Anyway, I read the first couple of chapters, and yes, the language would be a problem for a publisher, but the story is a good idea. A bit of advice about the speech. Use words that describe the emotions of the scene, not just 'replied' and 'said'. Use words like 'yelled', 'shouted', 'whispered', 'spluttered', or whatever fits the situation. It just makes the conversation flow better. Well done, though! It must have taken a lot of effort to write this in English, and I am in awe of anyone who can do such things... view book

I can't read full books on here yet, I have too much else to do right now. But I've got a few chapters in, and it's impressive. I won't try and analyze it, I'm not much of a critic unless something is obviously terrible. I've enjoyed it so far and I'll read more when I can. It's very good... view book

I like this. If the rest of the book is this well written, it deserves publishing. Consider yourself backed. view book

I've read a little more, and that's enough for a backing. I can't read a lot of stuff, because I have tons of uni work to do, but I hope this gets published. view book