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I have written screen plays, short stories, and a novel. Some of my pieces are unusual, they don't quite fit into a common category. Any comment would be appreciated, even if it is about the piece being unusual.

I read writers' pieces here and comment, time permitting.

contact me at elmolake@att.net

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works by vonnegut, bukowski, brautigan, other authors too of course

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"Charles Dupree was a Bad Man"....

Elmolake

Charles Dupree was a bad man. Something bad happened to him, that is from Charles' point of view. Plus more short stories and essays.


Charlie Dupree couldn’t be happy with what he had
Charlie Dupree went acting bad
He had to have what he had to have
Or Charlie Dupree would go mad

Elena was a Spanish queen
Who only wanted to be let be
But Charlie wouldn’t let her out the door
Charlie needed all of her and more

Charlie no no no
Don’t you know
You have to be badder than bad
When you start to act so

Mark your territory
With fear and bile
But it’s about territory
Not your style

In the end
The forces that be
Are less about power
And more bout family

Alone on the roadside
With a bullet in his back
No one to blame
But a dying old man

Charlie you have to be badder than bad
Or you will be
Rolled by the sea
The current is strong
And the water is deep
Deeper than your jealousy


 

Crow Diary (Dec. 25, 2007 – A....

Elmolake

I completed with the help of my bike a survey of crows in urban southeast Portland, OR. Why? - you tell me.


The name for this work is “Crow Diary” since crows, even though I wrote much that had little to do with crows, were the impetus for my work On my diary journey I discovered the world crows live in, my neighborhood. It’s not up there with Paris or the Grand Canyon on the list of most desired vacation destinations. It is a land only a few go to visit. Most folks just happen through it. I discovered in my neighborhood not only a present land but a past land, one full of interesting sites and creatures, some of them ghosts. “Site seeing” in my neighborhood became for me much like visiting Paris I think is to an upper middle class person. And it didn’t cost me much at all.

 

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spc wrote 19 days ago

Hey elmo, Just to let you know, I will try and do a return read sh....

TootsieWitch wrote 45 days ago

Doing fine... enjoying your work.

TootsieWitch wrote 49 days ago

"Charlie Dupree" speaks to me. I love its economy of style which yet....

spc wrote 51 days ago

Hi, thanks for clarifying that. You're right, they are essentially a ....

spc wrote 51 days ago

Hi Elmo, many thanks for your comments, much appreciated. One questi....

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I wrote 51 days ago

I like this. Read the firs six chapters. Language is direct and active. It moves the reader along as does the interesting story line. It appears a twist on the 1984 theme, one that the author makes the reader aware of by referencing it. The story too offers a unique take on computer networking,... view book

I wrote 55 days ago

I like this read the first five chapters. Well written. There are questions here after the first chapters and I think that is good, a reader will want to go on for answers. Why are the bonds so strong here between the doctor and penny. It gives you a chance to delve deeper into motivation and wh... view book

I wrote 59 days ago

Read the first five entries Liked this. Mostly I like the nice balance here. Good exposition and nice descriptive phrasing, "Motionless but for their heaving sides they seem resigned to their coming doom." The clatter and the still, fertility and futility of the place and the journey helps creat... view book

I wrote 71 days ago

I read the first five entries here. I enjoyed it. The author doesn't want the reader to know entirely, but wants him to follow along. He does so by hooking the reader with mystery, with a want for a few more details. We have a young boy and a woman in a pastoral setting who have been banished, b... view book

I wrote 73 days ago

I read the first five chapters. I liked it and will rate it well. I saw it as an example of archetypal romance The archetypes: the modern archetypal male, dominant, strong, handsome, but in need of the one and only female partner who can understand and heal him, who can guide him and his innate g... view book

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