Daniel - many thanks for including Slow Poison on your stylish virtual bookshelf.I hope you enjoy reading more...let me know what you think. All the best, Cas
I like your opening chapter. It is dark, and it makes the reader to want to read on. Backed. Good luck.
Darius - many thanks for your comments. The book is, as yet, unpublished...I appreciate your encouragement. All the best, Cas
Excellent.Brilliant introduction and easily followed. All characters (up to CH3) appear as if by magic and slot easily into their allotted space.I am sure you have had lots of success, sales wise, for this bookand thanks for putting it up hereI shall return!Darius
Lucy - many thanks for your comments. The book is dark, and remains so throughout I'm afraid... Just one of those stories that came out. To lighten the mood, have a look at my charity video on YouTube (under my real name of David Ireland) I'm not all bad... http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Pe3T8NC0E-E All the best, Cas
I have just read eleven chapters of your book. It is so dark and most of the characters are so twisted and cruel, it is intriguing but disturbing at the same time. To be honest, i cant bear to read any more. It is really well put together, which cant have been easy as it is such a complex story with so many threads together. Your writing is powerful and i am sure it will stay with me for some time, but it is too dark for me. I wish you all the best with it. Lucy s
Well...that's a great start to my day! I hope you are able to read right through...there is a twist in the last couple of pages that tilts the story off its axis. Enjoy the read and many thanks for backing the book.
This is quite the intrigue, 6 chapters in and I don't have a clue (yet) where this is headed except 'the man' has a plan amongst several parallel threads. Wreaking havoc is the theme, from Fred, the hooligans, and especially the man. It's hooked me and I back it.elleDiary of a Bad Housewife
Hi Sid - thanks for your comments. The capitalisation is definitely one of those automatic spell checker things, the punctuation is me. Thanks for pointing everything out. Hope you enjoy the story if you get the chance to read on.Regards, Cas.
Hi Casimir,Slow Poison is a very intriguing story, lots of well-paced drama, interesting characters and intense situations really draw the reader in and moves the story along at a frantic pace.My only gripe would be the way you close off your speech, for example:this!', said Fredgood!', laughed Beckyyou!' He whispered.well.' Said Janetthis!', Said FredI don't think you need the extra comma after the closing speech mark and the capital letter is not required. Otherwise a great story, one to watch going forward.Regards,Sid
Sped read my way through the available chapters. As a musician, I was curious of course. The book reads effortlessly and the settings and the dialogue feel real. I like what I've read. This should gather some fans along the way. I'll be going back for a more leisurly read later.Backed with pleasure.Cas
Margaret - thank you for you insightful comments. I realise my book is not to everyone's taste - but it was written with heart and passion and I feel I have ended up with writing that has an elegance whilst dealing with ugly subject matter.The 'bulls' phrase you picked up on stems from my poetic side - there are probably more of those phrases dotted throughout the book. Thank you for your continued support. With your help I might even reach the desk so that I can clear the way to add my new book to the lists.All the best, Cas
Very well written even though this is not my kind of book! Nevertheless I still have to admire the standard of writing and the way you build the suspense as the story progresses. Right from the start with the shadowy figure in the background and then the drunkenness of the’six’ followed by the typical behaviour of the ‘four’ the story draws in the reader – in my case, almost against my will!I did not spot any grammar/spelling errors. The only phrase which jarred with me was ‘Bulls they were, looking for china shops.’ I thought this would read better ‘They were like bulls – looking for china shops.’ That’s only a personal view of course.I have been away from authonomy for a long time but your book remained on my watch list throughout that period. It will remain there for the foreseeable future.Great writing and sorry I have taken so long to take a look!God bless youMargaretHow do I know God answers prayer?
Not a genre I would normally choose, I thank you for pointing me in the direction of this interesting story.I feel it has much promise, but there are things standing in the way of an enjoyable read.Although rich with detail, I struggled with your syntax and punctuation throughout. This feels like an early draft that would benefit from reading aloud to hear where things aren't quite working.This is of course, my humble opinion - feel free to ignore or discard any points I've made.Bright stars, though, and a place on my watch list where it will lie in wait for an update.Cas
Frank - many thanks for your input. Slow Poison is not the easiest of reads, but a book of which I'm proud. All the best, Cas
Sorry, it took me a long time to get around to reading this. But well done. Dark overtones, some horrific stuff, but sometimes that is how the world is. Good weaving together of story ideas. Highly starred.Frank
Beautifully written narrative. There is an effortless flow to the words which carries the reader through.This is not a genre I would normally read, but I know good writing when I read it. Good luck with the piece. High stars and a watch list placing.Cashttp://authonomy.com/books/42586/slow-poison/
Sean - thanks for your kind comments - let me know what you think if you read on. Your book is already on my shelf. All the best, Cas
Casimir, Very interesting and so well put together. I wouldnt normally read anything like this but on this occasion I am glad i did. It has a lot going for it in that it can be dark as well as compelling and you have chosen your moments well. This tells me you ave planned this book out well before you started. I can see also that you have done your homework well to. I enjoyed it and am going to see how this does in the future. Well done High score. Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R). Please consider me for a read or watch list wont you? Happy New Year. Sean
Many thanks for your interest. Let me know how you find the story as it unfolds. All the best, Cashttp://casgreenfield.blogspot.co.uk/
I finished reading the beginning of a very intrigueing story. Your writing is tight with no unnecessary words to describe not only the scene but also the characters.The rythm of your prose matches the tone of the story.Great job. I will continue to read.SL
Well done with this project. I began making and marketing eBooks around twelve years ago when the industry was not ready for them. Too soon, too soon!My wife was a wedding and social photographer at the time and we constructed the now familiar page turning digital albums for her clients and developed eBooks from there.You book has humour and clarity - two very important elements.I look forward to reading the entire thing. Cas, Slow Poison.
Beautifully written. I was captivated from the first lines. Your power of description and characterisation are very strong and I love the way you never over-write.I have dipped in and out, and although I rarely back an incomplete book, this will be the exception.I will return for a more thorough read.Cas, Slow Poison
Thanks for pointing me in the direction of your book. Quirkily written, an effortless read. Just not my cup of tea. Despite being embroiled in the art world myself, I couldn't engage. More a reflection on me that your work I suspect.I would imagine there is a world full of readers who will love this. Well done.Cas. Slow Poison.
Andrew - there is much to praise here, but I sense that this is an early draft. The syntax of your work needs a good hard edit. I think that if you read the piece aloud, you will find some convoluted sentences from the offset. The story is strong and needs, in my humble opinion, less florid descriptions and more attention to the core of the story. You can give a sense of place with much less description. I found it distracting.With careful editing, I feel this has great potential.Stars and a WL place.CasSlow Poison
David - a thoughtful and constructive review of your touching story. The story you have to tell deserves the further work to make it a publishable work. I can agree with HC that an autobiography needs to have just the right balance. I think you have all the ingredients here and I hope you don't read the review as a negative. There is much to learn, I feel, and once the dust has settled, I'm sure you'll be tackling the book again.My own review (despite months of re-writing) highlighted the short-comings I had in my work and I am now addressing those points. It's hard work though, but will ultimately be worth it. Good luck with it all.Cas
A remarkable collection of stories and a seamless collaboration it would appear. I have dipped in and out and the only way to do the stories justice is to include them on my bookshelf. So I have backed, starred and will return to comment more fully. Cas