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Thank you very much, I appreciate it.
Thank you for your thoughts. I'm pleased you like the idea, that mean....
Yet another coward hiding behind anonymity.
Hi DSA, would you be interested in taking a look at my book? Its a li....
Hi there - just extending the hand of friendship.
I'm still fairly....
I'm impressed by your opening lines. You are obviously not a novice. You've good story-telling voice, one of the best on here. The text could do with pruning in certain areas but the first chapter reads well.
From the outset this is wildly over-written.
"For two days and nights" this is fine for writers with a poetic quality to their writing but you don't appear to have it. . I'll assume that hanging bodies are not like 'washing' and are not taken in at night - for two days would suffice.
The main ...