Hey Richard. I've read the prologue and part one of your story, and my opinions are as follows: You clearly have a good command over the English language. Your imagery so far has been beautifully executed. One of my favorite parts is the description of the lily floating in the blood. Lily and ... view book

Hey Hannah, You commented on my thread asking for a read, so here goes. Your writing has the punchiness - word? - typically associated with the YA genre. In the first chapter, the MC deals with a lot of the issues teens face, such as high school and crushes and being annoyed with parents. T... view book

Hello Heather. You commented on a thread of mine, asking for feedback, so here I am. I'm not really in the mood to leave a long comment, but I shall give first impressions. Right of the bat, I notice the lack of details in this. As I read on through the first chapter, that was the one thing th... view book

Hey Sarah. I'm here to comment on your story. I've read the first chapter, and I have to say that this is very well executed. I love the plot, and I think this has a ton of potential for the YA market. There's a good balance of backstory - with the rebelions and her mother - and foreshadowing in ... view book

Hey there. I'm here to leave a quick comment on your story. Your writing style is great. Not only is it clear and easy to understand, but it also has a quality about it that really drew me in. I liked your characters. As the first chapter progressed, it was easier to see the distinction between F... view book