Hi AG, sorry my comments came across as unsympathetic. They were intended to be constructive but I should have dumped my midnight deadline for once and given myself more scope in choice of words. Taking a couple of minutes more to look up the ten/thousand reference would have clarified the point. I'... view book

I think you have the bones of a good story here but it feels to me as lacking polish. The prologue introduces a character with plenty of back story (old man, wife three years dead, still carrying a torch for her). Bang! he's dead along with everybody else. The ten thousand thunderbolts is too OTT bu... view book

My first critique so bear with me. I wasn't sure about this in chapter 1 but here I am at chapter four after an easy read. The synopsis promises a humorous element which is there but not at LOL intensity (although I'm in no position to comment on rap-speak. This could be sidesplitting and I wouldn'... view book