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written 2 days ago
cherry

I came to look at your book as you suggested, after you had kindly backed mine.

I am not qualified to say whether or not this is a helpful book for Christians, as my knowledge of the Bible is not deep enough. As I am not a Christian, I don't feel that I can sensibly comment on your book. I hope that you do get some useful feedback from other Christians. I would say, though, that not all 'non believers' live selfish, self centred lives.
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written 3 days ago
cherry

I like the new start to this, Lucy. view book

written 6 days ago
cherry

Yes, I'm the first to comment! I came to read this because I so much enjoyed your last book on here. I've only read chapter 1 so far but can see that you haven't lost your touch. Very funny, very telling (no, not in that sense) and hugely readable. I'll read on.
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written 9 days ago
cherry

I have just read all you've uploaded and hardly know how to comment. Anything I say sounds so inadequate. However, I'll give it a go. I don't usually read these kinds of books, for my own personal reasons, but I came to read this because it was written by you. I'm glad I did. Here we have this ordinary boy suffering hell every, single day ad no one notices. No one sees what is happening to him. One would say it is incredible if one didn't know that this is happening all over the world.
I like the way you have tackled this, writing about it in quite a matter of fact way, which in fact makes everything more horrific, if truth be told. The daily trials are repeated and repeated as they were and the reader (well, this one anyway) had to keep taking breaks in order to carry on. But of course the boy couldn't do that, as he had no control and the treatment continued all the time.
I want to know what happened. I want to know that he somehow found his way through and out. That of course is the mark of good writing. The reader wants to know what happened next.
Thanks for a very good read albeit a painfu one on many levels. Congratulations on actually having been able to write about these awful expériences.Highly starred and on my WL for now.
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written 10 days ago
cherry

I have the greatest admiration for anyone who can write good historical fiction, as I can't imagiine anything I would less want to do. This came alive for me from the first lines. The atmosphere in the Church was quickly established with it's lurking enemies and shadows. The MC was quickly estabilshed as a strong man capable of looking after himself and his squire while surrounded by many enemies.
The next chapter burst into life with the escaped pig and the couple trying to capture it. This was a nice, in fact, stark contrast to the sumptuousness of the first chapter and was well written. I would read on even though I don't like historical fiction as, here, the scenes come alive in ther reader's head very easily.
This must be the latest in the day that I have ever commented on a book and I look foward to seeing the HC review of this.
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written 18 days ago
cherry

This is a fascinating book and many parts of it resonate with me. I have read three chapters, but am not going to read more at present, as I am short of time and this is not a book to be rushed through but to be savoured and pondered over. I wish you every success with this and thank you for an interestiig read.
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written 20 days ago
cherry

Graphic writing in the first chapter, taking the reader right inside the doomed ship. This is not my usual genre, but I enjoyed it. The pace was good, and the tense, but controlled, atmosphere was well described. I liked the way the Captain's words and thoughts were at variance, revealing his humanity beneath his rather severe and formal professional persona. I wasn't going to read on but the ending of this chapter is intriguing, so I will. view book

written 21 days ago
cherry

I came to read a few chapters and read the whole story in on big gulp. I love your writing style. You have the child's voice perfectly and never step outside it. I loved the gentle humour as well. There are far too many good lines for me to quote. The characters are brilliantly drawn and I liked the thought of Grandad shaking his walking stick at the bombers. Very interesting story and, although I suspected the Lady, it was interesting to read the last chapter. I would have liked a chapter where Father came home, finally, if he did. Hightly starred and on my WL.
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written 21 days ago
cherry

After reading most of your first book, it comes as such a relief to discover that you found a safe haven among kind people. I like your writing very much. It is straightforward, yet engaging. It is such an achievement that you came through all that you did and now are able to write about it so well. Highy starred and on my WL. I wish you every success with these books.
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written 21 days ago
cherry

I thought I had commented on your book, before. I certainly have read it and I remembered it as I read. It is so hard to write about sex with any reality in it, but you certainly achieve this. I very much like her open attitude to her nakedness and I like his anxiety, which makes him endearing and very human. I'll read on. I'll put this on my WL and give it very high stars.
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written 21 days ago
cherry

I've read all that you've uploaded here. This is a smooth, well written read with engaging characters.I liked the MC straight off. Your dialogue is especially good and realistic. Then we have the old boyfriend and the possible new one to hold the readers' interest. A story of searching for someone is always a gripping read, but I like the way you have structured this and haven't had people rushing off all over the place. The slower pace allows the anxiety to grow, not just in the protagonists, but in the readers. I hope you post more chapters soon. Highly starred and on my WL.
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written 21 days ago
cherry

I've read your first three chapters. This is an interesting idea for a story and you have some good hooks in there to keep the reader engaged. I do feel that it needs a lot of editing and balancing out a little. The kidnap scene is all tell and no show which makes it alittle flat. This is a pity as it could be a riveting chapter.. It's a very important scene and could be so much more vivid if written differently. It would also make a great first chapter. As it is, the first part isn't very dynamic. I'm not an editor just a reader but please have a rethink about this. The kidnapping would get the story off to a gripping start and you could then follow with the first part. Obviously it is up to you as it is your book and please don't rush to edit every time someone suggests something. Wait until you have some more comments and see what other people say.
My only other point is that the speech is very American. Is this set in the UK? It's something easily fixed.
So, a promising idea for a good story. You have good characters and the MC is very appealling. I did want to read on to find out what happens. Good luck with this and, as I said, don't rush to change anything at present. Just wait and see what feedback you receive. And please think about using the kidnapping as a start.
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written 25 days ago
cherry

This is beautifully written and gives the reader a real sense of place. The characters are very well drawn. Dialogue is good, too.
I liked the way you described the calm life they led and then suddenly it's destroyed by the storm. But like other commentators, I would like a bit more of the storm and her fear. Also her reaction should be much greater than it is. I think she would be disraught.
Having said that, you have a very good writing style, that carries the reader on, effortlessly. Thank you for a lovely read.
Highy starred.
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written 27 days ago
cherry

Lauren, I LOVE this new opening to your book!
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written 29 days ago
cherry

I've read the first three chapters and only stopped because of time restraints. I could easily have carried on as I was enjoying it so much.This is very smooth, accomplished writing, I found no typos or anything to criticise in any way. I liked the MC very much and Nikolai is very intriguing. I have a feeing, though, that there is going to be a lot more to this book than a pure romance. The dialogue is excellently done and the settings are well described. On my WL for backing, when I have a space. Thank you for a good read, this morning. Highly starred.
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written 31 days ago
cherry

Well, I've read two chapters and I've stopped because this is a book to be savoured, to be read properly, not on a screen. I do not understand why this book hasn't been snapped up by now. It's beautifuly written with very believeable and human characters, the dialogue is extremely well done and the setting described to perfection. The pace is good as well, keeping the momentum going.
I have only one suggeston and that is at the end of chapter one, I would change sleepng in her Gramother's bedroom, to sleeping in her bed. For me that would have more impact.
Please, please get this published and if it already is tell me where I can buy it!
I have a fairly static shelf whch I don't change often but I'll watch your progress and back it if needed.
I see you are at 18. I can't wait for your review by HC. Thanks for a wonderful read. Made my Sunday.
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written 36 days ago
cherry

Read all you have posted. The prologue is extremely gripping. I don't usually like prologues but this one was good, I thought. The first chapter introduces the MC more fully and we learn more about him. The scene with the bikers came over well, especially when he told the main guy that he knew his mother and had seen him as a little kid. The workplace setting was also well described, as was his relationship with his boss.
I am not sure what to say about the Spanish. I can see why you want it in there but it didn't add a lot for me. I wonder if you could consider using a sprinkling of Spanish words but not long chunks of it, which need translating. The translation holds up the story, for me. Good hook at the end of the last chapter. I'd like to read more. On my watchlist.
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written 37 days ago
cherry

Very enjoyable read with endearing doggy characters, all great individuals, and hilarious and sometimes hair raising events You write well, the pace is good and holds the reader's attention, easily. I wish you success with this book, which woud be a great read for all dog lovers.
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written 37 days ago
cherry

Hi, Bill. I came to read your book because of it's subject matter. I have changed my life twice now, the second time leaving behind all my possessions, save family photos. I am also interested in Buddhist philosophy. I have read your first two chapters. The technical information about setting up a phone, building an outhouse are interesting, but your book comes alive on the rare occasions when you write about your feelings. I read the Faux Agents comments and agree with them that you have to find a way to grab the reader and make them want to read about your adventure. You have penty of material to work wth, it's just a question of finding an angle and personally, I would like to hear more about the spiritual journey, your feelins, what you learnt about yourself in the process as well as the practicalities. I also felt that there were too many people included in the narrative. I didn't know who they all were so it ldidn't grab me very much to read about all those visits.
However, having said all that, I really don't mean to be negative about this project of writing about your experience. It s just a question of learning how to tailor your wealth of material, so that it grips the reader's interest.
With all best wishes for this book's success,
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written 39 days ago
cherry

Loved your first story, so quirky. It made me smile. Indeed I have often wanted to live a cat's life.

Oh, my gosh! Your second story. Oh, oh oh! 'He could recognise - and envy- decadent youth when he saw it.' Genius! view book