cristy delange recent comments

written 1143 days ago
cherry

Excactely that's misspelled but who cares. Prozac and other drugs is an invention of the parmaceutical companies to fill their pockets. It also keeps the psychiatrists aflood, who otherwise will be out of work and in the ditch. I learned during my research that Kraeplin received $ 575,000 for research in Europe from Rockefeller. They owned the petroleum industry and they recently had discovered that by poducts of petroleum could be used to produce medicine. view book

written 1143 days ago
cherry

OOoh, that picture. You are one of so many people who are not believed. I know from experience that the words you've put down on paper didn't came out as easily as it seems here and that the process of writing have assisted you to become who you are now. view book

written 1143 days ago
cherry

I just commented on your book but I don't know what happened with it. I like your style it's easy to read, I even liked the prologue. Usually I skip prologues, but this one has dialogue in it so that makes all the difference. view book

written 1143 days ago
cherry

I agee with the comment below, the pitch seemed complicated. And at first I thought your style would be hard for me to read. However nothing was less from the truth. I enjoyed the first chapter, your writing flows really well. view book

written 1144 days ago
cherry

An extrodonairy introduction,but I like it. You have a bulk of talent. view book

written 1146 days ago
cherry

I have just finished reading Ch. 2. I knew it, women have always been in second place. This was an invention from men, because they were frightened of the psychological powers women have. We have intuition, empathy a dep sense of compasion for other beings. Women are psychologically stronger than men. We are better equipt to fight the demons called depression. Men get a sort of lost. However we all have female and male treats. view book

written 1148 days ago
cherry

That was great and I wasn't going to read the whole chapter, just a part. I have been reading intensively and arre impressed by your talent. view book

written 1409 days ago
cherry

I like to see more conversation and less naration. view book

written 1418 days ago
cherry

I didn't know that this was an erotic book. Be more clear, this isn't universal. view book

written 1419 days ago
cherry

Hi, I agree with Alan's coment, keep it simple. Ask yurself for which age group you are writing, other people who are older need to adjust themselves. Read lots of book in that age genre and see how they do it. It looks so simple, but it is oh so difficult writing for children is one of the hardest genres. view book

written 1430 days ago
cherry

LOL. I like it that you have given the girl the name Victoria (after one of the former English queens) This is brilliant. view book

written 1430 days ago
cherry

Cristy
I watchlisted this on the pitch alone. I got a little pulled out of the story by a few typos and some details which didn't quite fit, like the Italian music coming from a Greek car, counsel, etc. Needs a bit of work but backed.

Paula L (Rollover)



I don't see where u see the problem with Italian music. Italian music is very popular in Greece. view book

written 1433 days ago
cherry

This is a very skillful written novel. A brilliant introduction of Lynn. view book

written 1433 days ago
cherry

Where is chapter one? What a pitty. view book

written 1437 days ago
cherry

I was just reading the first bit of your book as I wondered if you could read them seperately. YOu have a great way of writing humor which I think is an underestimated style of writing. I'm going to back you. view book

written 1438 days ago
cherry

This reminds me of the book 1988 of George Orwell were history books, articles in magazines and news papers and other books are updated and destroyed according the newest changes. view book

written 1438 days ago
cherry

I have read the sumarising of the chapters with great interest. It's different than the normal non-fiction books. I first didn't realise that this were sumarisers.
I've noticed a few slips of the pen here they are: In chapt. 3, 2e paragraph; (I think it's grammatically better to write); 'To get a job as a teacher candidates back grounds are not checked for prevoius convictions.'
In H4: It would be grammatically better to write; In the Soviet era only people holding a Moscow registration were aloud to live in the city/capital.
So Than, now I'm going to check out chapter 2. view book

written 1438 days ago
cherry

I was eager to read your book after I read the intro, but to me it reads like a play. Things are not really happening, your telling the story as if they are facts, you are summing things up. My suggestion is that you take the protagonist and several other mice that are important in the story and give them names from the begining on. Than you can let them do and say stuff. This way the story becomes more lifely and enjoyable to read for all ages. It's always nice that a child or adult can indentify him/herself with a character.
I hope you don't mind me saying this. Writing a good story isn't as simple as it looks and writing a childrens book is one of the most difficult genres. view book

written 1439 days ago
cherry

Is difficult to write a play and it's always easier to see the play than to read it. I say this might do well before a live audiance. view book

written 1440 days ago
cherry

This chapter reminds me of a chap at work who has Asperger and was also a walking calculator. view book

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