Haven't started reading yet, but before I do, wanted to mention fantastic pitch. If I read this on the back of a book, I would be reading the first chapter while I queued to pay for it. Right, now time to read... view book

Hi, I really like this, I really do, however, I felt there were some issues. In some places, I felt the description was clunky and could do with some pruning. I did have a specific phrase in mind, but I can only remember the first three words now - it was as if... The characterisation is great. ... view book

Right, negatives - Addressing the reader. This really, really aggravates me. I don't want to be told how I should read your text, I don't want a summary of the following chapters. I want to read for myself and make up my own mind. Having read the synopsis and then the opening brief, I was really... view book

This is a lovely, light yet mysterious read. I've only read to chapter 7, but have enjoyed it very much. I like your narrative voice, it's really individual adn clear. I did have a problem occasionally with tenses - i.e. start of chapter 7 "tonight" might be better as "that night". I don't thi... view book

This is a really intriguing bedinning, it really does draw you in. The characterisation is fascinating, definitely a study in show and not tell. I also particularly like the way you have of insinuating events before they happen, very teasing. There are some type-os here and there, but nothing m... view book