The descriptions are really poetic and the dialogue is realistic and well-written. I've been meaning to read this for months, but I kept getting distracted. I guess I'd have to say that was my only problem with this: it was easy to distract me from it, because I don't read an awful lot of sci-fi. I got confused in places, with the gestalt being in particular.

The range of your vocabulary is astonishing; it was worth reading just for that. I'm always simplifiying, trying not to lose the readers. It was refreshing to see these words taking some sun. Maybe I should take a different tack, and let mine out to play more often. view book

Really, really creepy. I read all of this over the past few nights. Your descriptions are a delight. I was too busy reading to write many of them down, but I do have a small list of typos if you'd like them messaged to you. view book

I enjoyed what was up of this. I'll send you a couple of really tiny comments privately if you like.

Now... are you going to post more? view book

I'd message you but it says you won't take messages. So, yes, you were right. I fixed it. Thank you!

Chap 37 Nit-- when Nick and Scott are talking about the porn magazines, I think you switched the boys names. Scott would ask Nick what it had been like to steal from his brother.

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I read all you have up of this, and I hope you put up more to read. Very moving! I am really worried about these people now. You certainly took that advice about putting your characters through the wringer!

I have a few minor things I'll message you about later. view book

I read it all. Really a great story, well written. Very moving on several levels.

But... poor Tar. view book

So, I read all you have posted of this and I enjoyed it. Now what I want to know is... where's the rest of it? I'm very curious to see what Dunbar's hiding. Incomplete, you say...get busy, man. view book

I enjoyed this. It has a very old-fashioned feel to it, slow and steady. Let me know if you post more; I'm curious enough to read on. view book

Well, I read all of this. I worried, because it starts off in such a dark place, I was certain it would go where I didn't want to.

But it startled me, by going back to a much healthier place and winding me in. Of course... that will actually hurt worse in the end, won't it?

I'd like to see more of this; I dread seeing more. Some people have more strength than others, and you've made me feel very, very weak.

I do have a few typo sorts of comments to send privately, if you want them. view book

I'd certainly like more of this. No idea what Callie's choice is about, but I'm ready to follow this boy anywhere. I guess that's no surprise. Very intriguing. view book

Well, I just read all you have posted of this, and I really enjoyed it. Well-written and very funny.
I'll send some minor nitpicks via message.

Are you posting more of this? view book

Well... hell. You posted more and now I'm really, really hooked. The new is even more intriguing than the old was.

This starts off pretty slow, but it takes a wild turn for sure. Now I can hardly bear it - I want more of this... view book

I had read a portion of this before, so I looked forward to reading more when it was up. Now I've read it all.

This is a vivid story, and you have a definite way with words. There are awkward places which could use some smoothing over. The entire thing reads almost like a very long poem. I did very much enjoy it, though. view book

So I sat down to read this, thinking I'd hate it. Now I sort of wish there was more of it loaded. Left us on quite a cliffhanger there...

Good work, easy reading fun. view book

As I loved your other work, I'm not one bit surprised to like this one as well. Will you be posting more of it? view book

I read all you have up of this and I enjoyed it. Are you planning to post more of it?

I have a few comments that I will message privately. view book

I just finished reading all you have up of this. I enjoyed it; it's taken a familiar story line and made it younger, and is set to amp it up somewhat with the different levels of zombies.

I have a few specific comments that I will message separately. view book

Yeah. See, that's why it took me so long to figure out I'm agnostic... and I'm not fully committed to that, still.

I think this is destined to infuriate someone, but it wasn't me, so that's good! view book

Really excellent work. I suspect you're not exactly new to this writing thing. (Though I think this title is not the best choice...)

I read all you have posted, and was sad the last two were repeats. Are you going to post more? Tell me you're going to post more!

I did spot a typo, if you'd like me to message you with it. view book

Well, I read this. Oddly enough, to say anything about it feels wrong, as though I should be silent.

So I will. view book