Jose,

This is tightly written and engaging stuff; I assuem that what is shown as Chapter 1 is actually Chapter 17 as per your comment in your blurb? If so it may be worth making that clear at the start of the text, as I notice a few poeply saying that they weren't understanding twhat was going on, whereas I went into it assuming I was diving into the middle.

I'm not a big fan of present tense, but it seems to work here; I dipped in and out over a few chapters and it's used effectively to heighten the tension levels. Also enjoyed teh general 'what's going on' feeling, where you know that at some point later various mysterious events will be explained (or not?) .

Anyhoo, enjoyed this, good intelligent thrilelr type fare, so backed.

Cheers

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Bora

This is a fascinating true life story, and there's a definit emarket for these sort of eye witness accounts of major world events. My one crit would be that it's clear in your writing that English is you second language, and whilst this lends a certain charm and authenticity to the book it does need polishing. That said, for this kind of book I'd say that's what an editor is for, you buy this book on the story it tells, not on the mechanics of language.

Shelved!

All the best

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Tim

Just read from Chap 20, dippin gin and out. i can'r remember if I backed this before, but i have now; original, gripping and well written, this is a definite for the Eds desk. Backed, of course.

cheers

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Richrd,

Thanks for reminding me you wer eon my WL; this is a riveting, frightening read, wonderfully encapsulating the claustrophobic fear within the scanner and of course the much greater terror of terminal illness. Well deserving of a space on the Eds desk, so duly backed.

Cheers

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This was a very easy crit to write; put simply, if you like horses, you'll probably like this. If you don't, you won't. I'm not a horse man myself (neithe rlove 'em nor hate 'em), so not my bag I'm afraid.

All the Best

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Funny, filthy and fecking worth backing! Not much to add to be honest, he comments below say it all; I've read quite a few comedy efforts on here and this is one of the few that doesn't feel like it's trying too hard.

Kudos to you sir

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Hmmmm. Not my usual genre, as my sci fi forays tend towards the comedic, but this is pretty well written and does engage the reader. However, and this is going to sound daft, I found it a bit too 'sci fi' for my liking; I mean that I find sci fi in general a bit to grandiose, too serious for my slightly off kilter brain hole. Good stuff in its genre, but just not up my street I'm afraid.

Much luck

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D'ya know, I managed to read this before but must have got distracted, as I can't find any comments from me on here; what a tool, 'cos this is excellently written, gripping stuff and duly backed!

Cheers

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Great fun; as a kid I loved books that gave life inanimate objects, and this is a fine example. Imaginative, daft, witty and well pitched at its target audience, I can see this being a winner.

Backed!

All the est

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entertaining, witty and well written; I like a good antihero. and Ger is certainly that; I echo some comemnts below about the slow start, but i quit elike that - too many books rush into things headlong lookign for that instant grab, whereas I like an old fashioned slow burn for a change.

Backed

Cheers

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Bradley

I just can't add to what's already been written; this is gripping, involving and a brilliant portrayal of youth - I can only second what's written below and show my support by backing it.

Superb stuff

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A pacy, intelligent thriller that is up there with the best on the site; I read 'You Can't Live Forever' on here th eother day and calle dit the best thriller on the site, this is right up there with it.

Backed!

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This is a startling original take on the fantasy genre; you manage to evoke the feeling of a fantasy book without the normal grandiose language and over writing that the genre is littered with; this is a tightly written, original and thoroughly enjoyable piece of work.

HAppily BAcked!

Cheers

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This is well written stuff; not my normal genre, but it manages to be filthy without being crude, with an almost detahced view of teh menage a trois, detailing the psychological cost without dtriment to the erotic effect.

Well written, intelligent stuff and duly backed.

Cheers

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Kid-tastic! This is fun, daft stuff that worthy of a shelving, and not just 'cos it's for charity.

Happily Shelved

Cheers

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Tony,

I liked the concept, kind of a mixture of Day of The Triffids and The Fog; however I must be on a slightly different wavelength to Tazumi, who commented on the richness of detail, as I found this offputting. I felt that there was so much direct explanation of what was happening (I'm paraphrasing but it was stuff like 'No one noticed the dissappearance of the ducks. The place grew quieter. The cloud grew larger') that at times it felt almost like stage direction, especially in the opening scene at the recent party.

Maybe it's just a personal preference thing, but I just couldn't get into the stop start nature of the sentence structure; however plenty of folk seem to liek it, so I'm probably in a minority who'll look daft when it gets published!

All the best

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Tim

This is a great concept; the idea of starting the novel with your main protagonist arriving in front of Satan, unaware of how or why he is there, is a cracker, and you drop the reader straight into the action. However I found the amount of direct exposition by Satan too much; you tend to have Satan directly describe who he is and what he does, rather than let the action reveal these things. I also think you could have had more fun by extending the confusion suffered by Michael, rather than having the Devil instantly explaining the situation. I think this is why I didn't find that the opening really grabbed me in the way I had hoped.

If you do make any changes to the opening give me a shout, will be happy to re-read.

Cheers

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James,

This is well written prose, if at times I found it a little too grandiose, and eminently readable. I liked the comic touch of the drunken sentries, and enjoyed the fact that it for some time little explanation was given as to what was going on - it kept me on my toes. However this is not normally a genre I read, and that may be why I didn't get on with it as well as I would have liked; as you can probably tell from 'The Bibble' I like a bit of buffonery, and I find the genre too ripe for lampooning to properly enjoy - perhaps too much youthful Pyhon has stripped me of the ability to read straight fantasy!

Anyhoo, all the best

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Rufus,

This one side stepped me a little; the title and pitch made me assume it had a comic theme, mainly because most things in popular media to do with gingerists are somewhat mocking. Should have read more carefully, as thi sis a chilling and well written horror thriller. There were a couple of points int he first chapter I found a bit off putting (the explanation of stone tablets for example - if most folk won't understand the correct term, perhaps leave it out) but these were minor niggles as his is well written, well paced, and well worth a shelving, which it duly has!

Cheers

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Barbera,

Read the first couple of chaps, dippe dinto a few more. Great concept, well written and flowing; you dump the reader staight into the action, which is a little disconcerting but not in a bad way, and hit them with expositions galore; normally this would be overkill, but it worked well on this occasion.

However I found a few of things that niggled for me; firstly the style of writing just didn't feel like a diary, more like somebody consciously writing a story. Most great diary style books are somewhat disjointed, reflecting the daily moods of the main antagonist, whereas this read much like straight ahead storytelling.

Secondly, having only passing familiarity with the Alice stories, I felt a little disconnected; I wasn't sure when I should be recognising Lewis Carrolls influence in chaacterisations and when I shouldn't.

Finally, in Chapter 1 I don't think you need Alice to explain the real life similaities to CArroll's creations; I think this sort of thing is muchg better left to the reader to identify. I know this somewhat contradicts my previous point, but what I was saying there was that this might limit your readership; on the other hand, I may be th eonly person int he western world without a good working knowledge of the original texts!

Anyhoo, you have got a unique voice even if it didn't chime with me.

All The Best

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