Lovely short pitch - undercutting expectations with that 'gratuitous violence' - and a subtle but very effective hook early on in the book ('obviously they did not know what the ingredients were') that keeps you reading on to the meat of the matter. After that, you’re off and running. One of the bes... view book

Hi Val, I read Escape tonight and throughly enjoyed it. It shows masterful control, as we wonder if she's in on the deception or not, and I loved the way her dreams dovetailed with his. There's also some really deep thought simply expressed, which is personally what I turn to literature for. I'm ... view book

Hi Laura, I read the first chapter tonight. Wow, this is really visceral writing. I liked the word 'killable' and the line about 'supernatural winds and the aroma of death' in the pitch. And I loved the fact they're all in Halloween costumes, then suddenly pitched into their own nightmare. I foun... view book

Firstly, what a great title. It carries a lot of resonance. And I like the whole magic=religion analogy, if that's what you intended. The story and the writing seem fine. Just noticed one typo ('but not expected'). But there were a few things I thought you might be able to change to strengthen the b... view book

I made a start tonight and am mightily impressed. Firstly, the pitch is fantastic, actually doing the job of getting the reader to want to read the book. And Asphodel's lust for power, for godhead, is extremely well realised, with the necessarily expostion deftly woven into the narrative. I also tho... view book