Hi Nathan Just read your first chapter and found it powerful. This is a brave piece of writing but it is also very good writing without self pity and melodrama, just the real effects of mental illness. I loved the line 'I'm tired of feeling like a stranger in my own skin'. Somehow you manage to g... view book

Chapter Seven The erotic section is very erotic - and not at all cringy which was a relief. The senses used make this more than the run of the mill sex scene. The set up is quite odd - with all the women getting her 'ready' for the man, and the impression you give of this being more than a dream ... view book

The Ghost Shirt YALF Review Chapter One Firstly, I think your voice is great. You have a lovely turn of phrase and there are some hilariously funny lines. The opening chapter is not quite what I expected from the title and the pitch, it is funnier than I expected. I think boys (and girls) wil... view book

Hi Chapter One This is a great opening chapter with plenty of action and dialogue mixed in with descriptions that really helped me picture the setting. I like the way you get straight into the action and dialogue between Sam and Tom. The dialogue is believable, especially Sam's London dialect whic... view book

Chapter Six Great opening line with 'the house purred with pleasure' I loved the use of colours in sections such as the description of the piano. Again your descriptions, especially in the use of colour, are incredible. I wondered where they were when Tom asked about the piano. It seemed a bit... view book