You're certainly a product of your influences. You have a strong narrative driven along by a stronger voice (I'm thinking Holden Caulfield & Tyler Durden redux.) It's engaging stuff. If I had to have a gripe with what you have here, I'd have to pick up on your use of Barry Bonds & Brett Favre, to... view book

MAT, There is very little I could say that hasn't been said already in one form of critiquing or another. So, I shall entirely avoid critiquing it. I've read your first two chapters and they drew me in quickly, with understandable problems and easily accessible dilemmas that are conveyed both... view book

I've discovered if you get up at 5am, you get a whole heck of a lot done! I have the first six chapters and, I'm slightly surprised to say I like it, a lot. Please don't take offense to that, it's just, not a genre that I've never given much time to. However, in the opening chapter, you establ... view book

First of all - please bear in mind that my critiquing skills are far below yours and are really rather elementary - I must thank you for writing your work in sensibly-sized paragraphs. So many people write four lines paragraphs, and after ten minutes it's simply infuriating. Moving on from pet-hates... view book

I found myself reading this a lot sooner than I expected. Of what I've read so far, you are clearly invested in the story you're telling. You paint vivid pictures with your words, describing the plight both indirectly with images of persecution, and directly with descriptions of daily life in Um... view book