989 days ago
This Kiwano has decided to split ;-P
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I have decided that you are the "Simon Cowell" of Authonomy, in ....
Empty space on your shelf looks just right for Tybalt & Theo!
This is wonderful.
For the first few thousand words I thought I was in the mind of an autistic child, curiously.
I feel compelled to read the rest of it.
One niggle - I would drop the presentiment / foreshadowing of murder(ing) until slightly later. The main POV is the child, so it feels (...
Heh! Wouldn't we all like Chapter 1 letter like that ;-)
One the bookshelf for a good read when I have some time!
I really liked this!
Lots of interesting concepts etc.
I think the upload may have mangled some of your formatting however. It really needs a bit more spacing and more paragraphs to read easier.
Really good use of dialogue, often lacking around here!
Any chance you will put the whole bo...
Sob ! Damn, where is that crack pipe :-P
I really hope that agent says yes and that you get published. I can already see a film. I suspect Simon Pegg might be in there!
I am starting to get a feel for this site ( and 30 + emails telling me I am evil and that I have no right to be critical. And...