Hi David. Sorry your review is a little late, I had bit of work to finish this weekend. So, on to your story. :) I am loving this still! I love your MC and her new friend Dinah. I thin the bullying and quips are relastic and flow nicely. Dialouge is a strong point for you, as well as descrip... view book

Hey Kata, So, you asked for general punctuation, adverb use. But I would like to say I enjoyed Twell (for a second time). I love your MC's attitude and the premise of your whole book. It's definitely more like some of my Mss. The futuristic world is super unique and fun and while you gave us a wh... view book

Hi Ryanne, YARG review I read the first two chapters so far and this is what I found: I like the premise and plot very much. Fairies are what got me onto reading and I still love them to this day. I was a little hesitant noticing the POV was omniscient. Traditional story telling is wonderfu... view book

Hi David! I finally have a return review for you. I have read your first three chapters. Chapter 1 I felt like this was a perfect opening for your story. What better way to start a story off than with a monster attacking a woman and her baby. I felt sorry for them, especially the mother w... view book

Hey Chris! Here's you return read and YARG review: Chapter 1 I like the characters from the get go. You did a great job making them a diverse group of friends. I love the way you paint the scene for us, very much like you did in FUGITIVES. And I have to wonder, again, if you've been here be... view book