Hi Lisa, Just reread the opening two chapters, and I think your new opening works wonderfully. Comparing it to what you had before, I think the new opening really does a good job of setting the tone for the book. We get the idea that Nickolas is an alien being forced to assimilate into a human soci... view book

Hi Lisa, Sorry for taking forever to read more of Nickolas! I couldn't remember where I left off, or whether you uploaded anything new since, so I started around the middle and reread what you've got posted here. I know I've said it before, but I'll say it again: I really think you have a great s... view book

Hiya Horse! I read what you have uploaded. Obviously, you are a very decent writer, so I won't waste words telling you that your dialogue is natural and your action scene easy to visualize and your character Timmy sympathetic. In response to the giant glaring question at the bottom of your fir... view book

Hello again! I finished reading what you have uploaded here, and I like the direction you're taking the story in. Quinn is an interesting addition to Nickolas' world, although the presence of Nickolas in a high school confused me a bit. He seems like a more mature character, and while it's understan... view book

Hi Lisa, I read the first five chapters and was about to read on, but Autho's being slow, so I guess I'll have to try again later. Anyway, I think what you've got so far is fantastic. The idea of humans being arrogant in their superiority and trying to bend aliens to their will is fascinating, an... view book