YARG I'm enjoying this story. I want to know what PURE is all about. Ch4- Doe(s) he ... typo also the sentence, 'before I can even say a words edge wise...' doesn't read right to me. did you mean, before I can get a word in edge ways? Ch5- ...at least it('s) shaved ... I read chapters 4... view book

YARG Ch4- Pine needles was a neat piece of detail to get the nose twitching. It's one of those smells we all know from Christmas. As we pull(ing) the rain fly... typo. Ch5- Is there a spark between Tom and Mary? This will test his relationship with Haley. Ch6- I'm enjoying how the anim... view book

YALF Ch2- I like the scene where Feyt knocks the knife whilst putting on his coat. These little things add to the feel of the home. So he's gone to the bonfire where the fun is short lived by the attack by the wolves. I like the 'red' symbolism used, maybe to foreshadow the deaths in the huts. ... view book

YARG I keep hearing great things about The Game Changer. I've read chapters 1-3 and I must agree. People often say, write about what you know, and it seems you know your outdoors, and describe it sooooo well. Ch1- At first I was thinking, Tom's going OTT with the weather report, but it's to bu... view book

YALF Intriguing short pitch about an Ice City that turns to flesh. That's creepy. I think the time scale that you'll be dealing with this action - when they turn to flesh - will really keep readers hooked. Ch1- Good first paragraph full of imagery of the hunt, how cold it is and the smell of ... view book