Wow. Your first chapter had me enthralled. Your writing is concise and clear. Your descriptions are vivid but not too long-winded. The tense emotions of the children, the frustration of their father, and the mystery surrounding their mother's disappearance make this an interesting and intriguing ... view book

T.D., I read through chapter 5 and this story has me quite entertained. With that said, I do have some suggestions/comments for you. Your writing is quite swift - maybe too much so. I think more description would make the story even more vivid. I was left wondering what type of dog Basher was, ... view book

Phil, I have read through chapter 3 so far, and have to say that you write extremely well. I could see the tavern and hear the men prattle back and forth. Your description of the woods and the owl were compelling. I would stick to the word "ale" versus any other reference to alcoholic beverages ... view book

I've read through the first two chapters, and I have to say that you have a winner here. You are concise and to the point, yet you draw the reader well with your enticing description. Chapter 2 really pulled me in - it was so macabre, yet I couldn't stop reading. It is so disturbing, yet so infor... view book

Robert, I have read Chapter One, and I do have a few questions. Towards the end of the chapter, the strange woman who was taking Joey away spoke once to him and then, "She never spoke another word to me." I wasn't sure if you meant that day, or ever. Do we learn who she was later? Also, just be... view book