I'm sorry, but this really isn't my kind of genre. I like the style it's written in however, easy to read, flowing and the writing carries the reader along with the story, so I don't think you have any issues with the style although I noticed a grammatical error or two, but that's all in the editing.

The pitch is fine, the story sounds well thought out but since I haven't read it all, I can't tell if you've been successful in that regard.

Good luck and all the best.

Sorcha view book

Fabulous. I've only read the first three chapters, but I love the style, the introduction to players and I hope to set aside the time to finish reading it later. I do have a bit of an issue with your short pitch, I know there's a limit to the number of words but it sounds like a bad translation, or incomplete sentences.

Backed with pleasure.

Sorcha. view book

Okay, I got through chapters 1 and 2, but with a stinking sinal headache I'm not getting any further. Your style reminds me very much of John Saul, and I very much want to keep on reading. I will definitely be coming back to this. The pace is good, steady and keeping the reader interested. I haven't found a flaw. I would love to have this as a paperback in my hands, I'd be able to finish it tonight.

Backed. Of course.

All the best.

Sarah view book

Fantastic. I don't tend to read many books now since I don't have the time, but I have to say, I would make the time for this one. I'd like to see a little more description, although it's hard to see how that would come in without slowing the pace, and it's a good pace to draw your readers in.

Are you planning on putting more chapters online? If not, or you decide to self publish in the incredibly strange event that you don't get published, then let me know, I would love to read the rest. Yes, I know that sounds overdone, but I don't say it if I don't mean it.

Good luck- even the best writers need it. view book