Jeffrey, I an intrigued by the slight twist on the vampire myth by using a pirate character as the vampire, very cool indeed. There are some things I noticed in the first chapter that may warrant your attention, Where you are describing the initial attack on Trevalier, you say "Trevalier heart beat faster.." or something close to that (The computer won't let me cut and past for obvious reasons), I think it should be possessive, i.e., Trevalier's heart beat...

Later on there is a sentence that states "I had prior to the attack planned...," "prior to the attack" should be set off with commas so that it reads better, "I had, prior to the attack, planned..."

In one other paragraph a typo with a double "I".

I really like the concept and the story so far. I have watchlisted it. Four stars for now, with more to most likely come the further I get into the book.

I hope you are doing well and I hope to keep reading your stuff.

Chris view book

Mr. Bailey, I started "Lost Isis" today and I am really enjoying it. I really like the first chapter. I know the second chapter is necesarry to move the story forward, but the action does slow a little. Third chapter is great and I will be back for more.

Chris view book

Derek,

I have just gotten around to reading a few chapters of this book and, man, am I ticked at myself for waiting so long. I love the premise and I can't wait to read more. Good luck this month in the top 5. Backed and highly starred.

Chris view book

I enjoyed the cleverness of the story. The lengthy discriptions are wonderful, but distracted me here and there from the story. I will be back to read further into the story. I am intrigued by the Inspector and his abilities. Great charaterizations and overall a good read. view book

Roy,

I read several chapters over the weekend and really enjoyed the reading. This writing style certainly reminds me of Spillane, and I agree with Brian (below) that a good typo check would be wonderful. I am sure that you will see some in mine, though I'm trying to edit each day.

Highly starred!

Thanks for your support.

Chris view book

I really enjoyed the set up for this story. I was on a break for work and was late getting back because this kept my interest. I don't want to rate it yes because I am only 1 chapter in. C'mon lunch time so that I can read more.

Watchlisted and will most likely back this book.

Chris view book

Kathryn, I have read the first two chapters. I am interested in the story, but there are a few things that distract me from the interaction between George and Jamie. I feel that although you are writing in the third person, the tenses seem to shift in the first chapter. I think that this story is timely, and covers several important social issues, bullying, homophobia and potentially teen suicide. Keep up the good work. I am looking forward to your critique of my work.

Sincerely,

Chris view book

Patio,

At your invitation, I have read several chapters of your story. I agree with most posters here; your story is very powerful and intriguing. The later chapters are definitely more well written than the first. I t hink a review of the first few chapters and some fleshing-out of the details in those chapters would greatly improve the story. I wish you luck in your story and please let me know what you think of "From the Cross."

Chris
(screen name - christiandelacroix) view book

Having read many of the chapters in the development phase, I have to say that, I enjoyed watching the charaters take shape. Daniel's writing is easy to read, witty, and will cause you to evaluate your views on different cultures and how they fit in with the typical North American culture. Excellent story, Daniel. Can't wait to purchase my copy. view book