Really humorous start to the story, loved the names of the places and people you chose.
You have a lyrical flow to your writing, and it comes across in a soft conversational way, which I like a lot.
Your characters are colourful and vibrant. This and the dialogue ass feeling and pace to the text.
‘Best porcelain sunlight’
‘Spider’s gossamer glinting.’
Two very good pieces of description, that add a light almost fairytale effect to narrative.
This is going to be a popular book.
Well done, enjoyed the read.
Have rated 5*.
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Hiya again Angela.
Good beginning, sounds like me at the moment.
Love the sentence
'Very few things are close to my heart and so writing this book is like copying and pasting me onto the paper.’
Written like an author.
Great introduction, leaving the reader with an interesting question to reason upon.
I too wanted to be Zena the warrior princess, so with you there.
Try reader the first few chapters of ‘Cider with Rosie’ Laurie Lee, you have his eye for description.
Like how your writing changes from the innocence of childhood, to the demons of the world around you.
Your writing flows and are excellent with your use of the written word.
Throughout there is an innocence and the waiting for something. This book is your search and you share it with your reader.
I was drawn in and had instant empathy for you.
You use the bible and speech of God and your believes and how you found them, but you are not preachy. This makes your book good as you are letting the readers explore for themselves.
This book is on my wish list and I have rated it high.
Well done, a joy to read.
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Erie start, with some very good description. Like the hammer horrors, that scared me when I was younger.
Excellent use of imagery and it uses all of the reader’s senses. Drawing them in like a fly in a web.
I started to feel dread, knowing death was close, and was wondering what would happen next.
There is tension, atmosphere, and this to your enticing style of writing, a good mixture that works well.
I love the use of the colour red and how you varied it. Like Blood-heat-pain, this shows you have a very good grasp of the written language.
This story has a lot of potential and you know your market and your readers well.
String scenes and devilish characters.
Well done.
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Yarg review.
Excellent start, you set the mood and hook the reader in.

You move the reader on with a mixture of action and suspense.
Dialogue nicely woven in creating dynamic scenes, which introduce the characters.
Love the end of the first chapter, how could a person not carry on reading.
Your style of writing is almost nightmarish; this is said as a compliment.
It’s surreal macabre, all you would expect from this genre.
Then you dive into normality, leaving us with unanswered questions- Great.
Your use of the written word is sharp and impressive, I feel like I have been put on a rollercoaster ride.
This is the kind of story you would read at night, and then sleep with the light on.
This book grows and grows and you give it an interesting voice.
Really enjoyed.
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A strong book, excellently written.
You lead us on a journey that is full of demons and spiritual light.
Your words are strong and fascinating and give a person much to think about. It certainly did me.
You don’t come over as condescending or patronising, even though some of the contents is dark.
The book has a good strong flow and the pitch, pace and power are just right.
I cannot say I am knowledgeable on these things, but I can say I enjoyed what you
You have searched deep into your self and have found a strong voice full of conviction and grace.
You wrote about and understood what you were trying to say. And its proves a convincing read for all.
Well done.
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The first three paragraphs had me hooked. Don’t take this the wrong way (I love Shakespeare.) I felt as though I was in a scene from midsummer night’s dream, ethereal.
I could close my eyes and see the scene, hear the voices, feel the fire.
This is like the tales of old, Arthur and his knights, or Beowulf.
Your writing is soft and flowing. It follows a strong course and is woven with great description.
You have an excellent grasp of language and the written word, a bard. (Sorry Shakespeare again)
You manage to use all your senses and create a believable world.
I didn’t notice and errors or grammar mistakes, which made me, quiet envious.
Really enjoyed your story and will check out some more.
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Yarg review
Great opening chapter, that builds up into a crescendo.

Strong, believable characters, like Brian.
You keep the reader interested with a good fluent plot.
Very colourful descriptions that add dimension to the narrative, you have an interesting imagination.
A natural storyteller and a promising story.
Well done.
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Yarg Review
Loved the prologue as it set the scene well, creating a mystical feel to the piece.
You jump straight into the action, setting a good pace for the story, and getting the reader interested straight away.
I had empathy for your characters immediately; this creates a connection and makes them feel real.
You are a natural storyteller and your writing is soft and fluent, almost poetic.
The hooks you place in the text pulls the reader deeper into the plot and you are compelled to continue.
A good piece of literature, with a lot of promise.
Well done.
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Strong start to story that goes straight into action.
Good use of description in fourth Paragraph.
Language fits genre and the plot, but no so as to over face the text and stop you reading.
Very fluent feel to whole of first chapter.
You have set the scene well, inviting the reader with tempting hooks that pull us into the next chapter.
A soft and sentimental read that flows with a dream like quality, even though it shows the harshness of life in the past.
You have done your homework and researched your chosen market well.
The characters are believable and you instantly empathize with the protagonist.
Will continue reading and will rate high.
WELL DONE XXXX.
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What an amazing story. I loved how you started it off and the atmosphere you created. I felt sorry for the protagonist. Everything said was believable and I had empathy for her situation.
Hers thoughts at school were amusing, but cynical.
I could feel for her, school was a little that for me.
Then the intrigue happened and you spun the text around excellently. I never saw the plot change coming, but with the hook you placed at the end of the chapter, you had me. I had to continue.
I love these kind of stories that can take a normalish story and twist and turn, but still keep the cintinuity of the narrative. You have done really well and I will continue reading and will put on my shelf when I get the space.
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Loved Mama Lorna’s description of making the scones, it made my mouth water.
All the characters are strong and different, yet they fit together well and enhance the text.
I felt empathy for them and the harshness of their lives, you brought this across well in your writing.
I especially liked the paragraph that described her relations village, where nothing grew longer than a year old height and all were married before they were twelve.
You draw a wonderful and sometimes sad picture of this women and her family’s life, but put it across in an almost dream like way. The last bit made me smile, I really wanted the best for Gaudencia and she got it despite the lizard.
A lovely first story that makes me wants to read on and I will.
Well done a fluent and dazzling set of stories.
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Yarg review
Strong start with descriptions that draw a great picture.
Liked the introduction of the girl in Para 2.
Leather flapping swished past.. Good use of onomatopoeia.
Golden orbs, a great description of dragon’s eyes, piercing and evil.
Brilliant use of imagination, you paint a world that is different, yet believable.
Dialogue is just right and aids the progression of the piece, which leads you deeper and deeper into the plot.
I like the protagonist; she is fiery and strong, better for fighting this large menacing dragon. It is David versus goliath, with dragons.
Really enjoyed this and will continue to read.
Well done.
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Yarg
Lila peered around the corner of a tall house, the stone walls damp and coarse under her fingers. To her relief the street was empty. All she could see was an abandoned fish cart with flies buzzing lazily around it and a stray mutt scratching for scraps of food in a heap of rubbish in an alley.
An excellent start that really draws me in. The description is fluent and I like the attack on your senses. The way they humiliated willow by cutting her hair, the clink of metal. I like the character Lila and the Le Fey is an excellent choice as being descended from the fey or fairies add magic to the text.
Your writing is dynamic and you lead well into each chapter, with tempting little hooks and questions, that need to be answered. I feel this would be a good read for all ages, and I have to confess sometimes the books are better.
The voice in this book is strong and the whole language is sharp.
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An excellent piece of writing that pulled me in straight away. You have really researched this peace and it shows in your pace and action packed narrative. The world you create is believable and mylti dimensional. I loved the characters who added collie to the text. Dialogue added a lot of sparkle and I found the plot interesting. Well done, really enjoyed reading your book view book

An excellent piece of writing that pulled me in straight away. You have really researched this peace and it shows in your pace and action packed narrative. The world you create is believable and mylti dimensional. I loved the characters who added collie to the text. Dialogue added a lot of sparkle and I found the plot interesting. Well done, really enjoyed reading your book view book

Yarged
A fast pacy story with a lot of strength. Great characters that add dimension to the text. The plot is well thought put and excellently written. Your writing draws the reader in and you are hungry for the next page. You are a natural story teller who has really thought this story out. I really liked this story. Well done. view book

A great read, with a strong and interesting story.
I think the story is the most important part of the book.
This shows you are a natural storyteller.
Your language is good and the story flows.
Enjoyed what I read and will recommend to others.
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A great piece of fantasy that has a strong start.
Fluent and well thought out.
Dialogue adds colour to the text and you have researched your genre well.
Believable characters blend in well with the narrative.
A good read and will rate well.
Well done.
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A deep and well written story. I was drawn in straight away and felt a lot of empathy for the characters. Your writing is Strong and pacy, and your language adds colour to the narrative. I just had to keep reading as I wanted to know more. An excellent plot and brilliant use of dialogue. I usually don't read this kind of story, but you have converted me and I will definatelt read more. High rated and well done on a fab read. view book

A fast pacy story with a lot of strength. Great characters that add dimension to the text. The plot is well thought put and excellently written. Your writing draws the reader in and you are hungry for the next page. You are a natural story teller who has really thought this story out. I really liked this stor. Well done. view book